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 | Pick Me While I Am A Rose  [18+] Youth and its fleeting beauty.  |
| (5.0)| Overall Impression This is an elegant way to discuss youth and aging. Repeating “Pick me while” is both romantic and a lament. Form, Rhythm, Cadence, Style Your quatrain structure and rhyme scheme are very fitting. The rhythm is pleasant and smooth, and although the rhyme is at times predictable, it feels like should be that way. The whole thing has a lovely cadence. Content The rose is both sensual and fragile, and embodies your themes of beauty, seduction, and fleeting time. The final stanza turns this on its head, but it isn't jarring (which is a good thing, here). You've handled it very gracefully. Grammar and Mechanics I found no errors in punctuation, capitalization, or grammar. Final Thoughts This poem is poignant and memorable. It has a timeless, lyrical quality with a strong message from start to finish. Thank you for sharing your work with us! Jayne Doe  My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim"
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You responded to this review 09/11/2025 @ 11:05am EDT