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 | The Snowflake And The Daffodil  [ASR] Lucy's Anniversary 2nd April. All I remember is the chill, the Snowflake and the Daffodil.  |
| (5.0)  "Anniversary Reviews" is celebrating A QUARTER CENTURY of Writing.Com! I am so sorry for your loss. You've written a tender, heartfelt poem that carries grief with honesty and dignity. The imagery of daffodils against snow is beautifully symbolic. I see it matches the real-life image you’ve provided, which is very moving. The rhyme and rhythm have a gentle cadence, somewhat like a hymn, and that feels very fitting for the poem. What stands out most is how the poem acknowledges that grief doesn’t vanish, but softens into something lived with. This acknowledgement should help those in similar situations, but who may still be in the early stages of grief. The seasonal imagery helps give readers an anchor, making the emotion easier to hold, although ‘easier’ in no way diminishes the poem’s impact. Although there are no flaws I found, if I may offer one gentle suggestion: consider varying a rhyme or two, as “night”/“white” and “best”/“rest” feel slightly familiar compared to the freshness of your imagery. Overall, this is moving, respectful, and deeply personal. It’s a beautiful poem that will resonate with your readers and stay with them long after reading. Jayne Doe  My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim"
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You responded to this review 09/11/2025 @ 11:07am EDT