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 | Celtic Curses  [E] Celtic, Curses, warnings, life, self esteem, humor, Irish, threats, pride, strength, fun  |
| (4.0)  "Anniversary Reviews" is celebrating A QUARTER CENTURY of Writing.Com! What a lively, rollicking rhythm! The way you’ve written it serves its warning tone well, and the playful threat of “gentle curses” is a clever contrast to the darker ones. I especially like the strong voice that comes through. It’s commanding yet humorous and keeps the reader engaged throughout. The repetition of “don’t you mess” reinforces the cautionary feel without losing the overall tone. If you were looking to edit, a couple of areas could be refined. Some rhymes feel a bit more forced than a natural near rhyme (“gone/Long”), which disrupts the otherwise smooth cadence. I admit this may just be reader error, and not a problem for anyone else. You could also consider tightening a few word choices (“Our curses they can wreak”) to sharpen the flow. You’ve given it just enough Celtic flavor to keep it accessible to a wide variety of readers. Beyond that, sprinkling in more Celtic imagery (land, lore, or myth) might deepen the flavor for readers who want to feel that cultural grounding more strongly. Overall, it’s a fun, spirited poem that feels fresh and approachable. It’s easy to imagine this being read aloud at a gathering. Great job! Jayne Doe  My approach to reviews: "I'll Explain, but not Disclaim"
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You responded to this review 09/10/2025 @ 11:28pm EDT