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Dreams Open in new Window. [ASR]
This is a diamante poem.
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Review of Dreams  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi Steph!

You've captured the essence of a nightmare and its various aspects pretty well. I like the alliteration in the second-to-last line.

Just as an aside, the form reminded me of my school days when our Principal made us write a diamante!

As your earlier reviewer pointed out, 'dreams' can mean different things to different people. So I must admit it came as a surprise when your entire poem was about nightmares, as I was expecting something else. It therefore took two readings to actually appreciate the poem itself.

May I suggest that in the brief description, you give a hint that the poem might be unexpected ... ?

The only other suggestions I have - please capitalise the 'P' of 'Pulse-quickening', since you've started all the other words with a capital letter, and standardise commas and spaces!

Thanks for sharing!
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