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 | Random Act Of Kindness  [E] Happened on 11/20/25  |
| (4.0)| A WdC SuperPowers Review Hi Cappy . I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Random Act Of Kindness" . Your offering came across my screen courtest of the site's Read & Review feature located in the Navigation Menu on the left side of your screen. The feature is populated with stories and poems from member who are now or were online recently.I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. First, welcome to Writing.Com. I know you have a lot to learn--WDC has so many features that will help you on your writing journey. Please, never be afraid to ask for help if you get stuck. The members have a great deal of collective knowledge about the site and love to help.May I suggest you provide a little more about yourself in your Bio Block and Biography tab with respect to your writing style and likes. This will help other members with similar likes find you. Interaction with others is a great way to improve your own writing. Two things come to mind as I read your humble offering. First, you take the time to look at things around you. Whether or not this story is true is beside my point. You made it real just in the way it was written--the details you provided. The power of observation is a critical part of one being a writer. Second, I truly enjoy reading essays of this kind that feature the good in man and society. These days are so filled with complacency, sadness, injustice, and a "me first" attitude. Thanks for penning the positive. There are certain conventions you might follow when posting your work here. Presentation is important. Sad to say that some folks won't read some works if the layout is difficult to read. I'll mention a couple points below.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. This piece has a number of carriage returns in the wrong place. What I mean is you hit 'Enter' which began a new line in the middle of a sentence. For example, you wrote: There was a homeless person sitting on the ground with no jacket and looking more than a little haggard. Something you did caused a hard space after the word 'more' adding an additional blank line. I suspect while in your editing window, you selected Double Space Paragraphs, which emphasized that spacing. Double spacing paragraphs IS good and expected. But only at the end of each paragraph, not in the middle of one. I suggest you read your story out loud the next time you edit it. You will hear a problem before you see it. Reading your own work silently, you tend to skip ahead because, after all, you know what's coming, thus missing a potential problem. Reading aloud forces you say every word. For example, you wrote (I removed the extra carriage returns): A young boy, probably in his early teens, walked up to this homeless person and handed him a cup of what I assume was coffee, a bag containing something to eat, and I had been standing close enough to see that the boy gave him a ten dollar bill. This is a run-on sentence. You should break it down into several sentences making it easier to read. Be careful of such long sentences.  My Rating. 4.0. It's a great story that needs some attention to detail with the technical aspect of writing. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.Reviewed by JACE   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 11/21/2025 @ 8:36pm EST