Hello,

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and would like to offer the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I thought you did a good job with the overall emotional resonance of this piece. The wistfulness and longing for a past era really came through, and you managed to tell a compelling, detailed narrative in only one hundred words (which is not easy to do!). Well done!


Suggestions

I found the second sentence ("No one to converse with about a child's imagination") to stand out a bit from the rest. The other detail elements of the story (i.e., someone commenting on the narrator's own hard work to put up decorations, parents showing off the fruits of their labor, empty candy bowls, etc.) are clearly and inextricably connected to the general concept of Halloween, but I found myself trying to connect with that second sentence.

I'm not sure what Halloween tradition "conversing about a child's imagination" is supposed to directly connect with (talking with other parents about creative costumes? communicating to kids an appreciation for the creativity of their costumes?), so some additional revision or fine-tuning there would help get your point across a little cleaner.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading this piece. You fit a lot of information and holiday elements into only a hundred words, which is quite a feat. Nice work!


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Jeff
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