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 | A Goodbye You Didn't Know Was a Goodbye  [E] The Last Conversation You Had With Someone Who Died Unexpectedly  |
| (4.5)| A WdC SuperPowers Review Hi Hareem . I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "A Goodbye You Didn't Know Was a Goodbye" . Good morning. I found your offering on the site's Read & Review feature. This feature displays members' writings who are online currently or online very recently.I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. First, welcome to Writing.Com. I hope your stay here is long and fruitful. Best of luck in all your writing endeavors.I found your story both poignant and unexpected. It a story about a conversation with a friend that any of us might have. As your title states this conversation was a last one. None of us are promised tomorrow. The conversation is between two friends. You state they were childhood friends but don't tell if they were anything more at the time of the conversation. Yet your character decides to take the call. Honestly, it's a lesson to all of us. Small things acted upon can easily turn into something large, something unexpected and lasting. We should learn to recognize such moments.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. May I offer some points regarding posting stories and items online. The default font and size is Arial 3.0. However, a growing consensus is leaning toward a larger size--at least 3.5. You might consider that. Also, reading from a computer screen or laptop, or even a mobile device, is more difficult without some additional white space. This is easily accomplished by double spacing your paragraphs. Read several stories with both options and I think you'll see the difference. Finally, you've already listed your title and brief description in the header information. You don't need to add it again in your main body. As for your writing style--I found your story easy to read and understand. Apart from the items I mentioned above, good job. My Rating. 4.5.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.Reviewed by JACE   For Best Reviewer  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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