I'm 26. I'm still in school, studying psychology. I used to write a lot and have picked up a poetry class as one of my electives, which got me writing again. I'd like to get feedback, definately. And give me a 2 if I deserve a 2, I can take it. But please tell me what I did wrong. What specifically about that passage gave you nausea? What was it about my poem that made you roll your eyes five times? Give me the details. Thanks in advance!