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Part 3 has some minor grammar and punctuation corrections with an added sentence for clarity about the Gnome she meets in the waiting room and what they are doing when her father comes into the room. There are 3 parts written so far in this series. I started with 1000 words in the first and the last couple have been only about 600 words each. I am writing these for my granddaughter and trying to keep on a weekly Tuesday morning schedule with releases. Here are links to all three in order:
 Adventures of Banu and Selena, Part 1  (E)
A young girl and her bear experience their first thunderstorm.

 Adventures of Banu and Selena, Part 2  (E)
Selena and her brave bear, Banu, go the Doctors. Part 1

 Adventures of Banu and Selena, Part 3  (E)
Selena begins waiting for Banu's operation to be over. Part 2
I've added a new episode in the Adventures of Selena and Banu. They are visiting the doctors so Banu can get a new eye. The link is here:
 Adventures of Banu and Selena, Part 2  (E)
Selena and her brave bear, Banu, go the Doctors. Part 1
I've just added a new short story about a girl and her first thunderstorm. It is set in a world of magic but more modern. There are fantasy creatures (elves, dwarves, giants, pixies, etc.) living and working alongside humans. You will find it in the "Tales for Children and YA" folder in my portfolio. Here is a link:
 Adventures of Banu and Selena, Part 1  (E)
A young girl and her bear experience their first thunderstorm.


As always, feedback is welcome and encouraged.

Espinado
I've just edited an item in my portfolio:
 
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The Woman in the Woods  (18+)
Things are not always as they are described.

Simple story for the Weird Tales Contest.
I rewrote "For Contest: Simple Tail Job, doubling the word count.
 PI Rayburn: A Simple Tail Job  (18+)
PI Rayburn finds a simple tail job isn't so simple. WC:2000

As always, if you love it, hate it or something in between I would love to hear about it. I can't improve unless I get feedback. It doesn't have to be an in-depth review, just a note saying what was good/bad would be sufficient.
Espinado
I have taken a previous story that was for a contest (I don't remember if I even submitted it, I couldn't find it here) and embellished it. From this 'prologue' I actually invented a tabletop game about looking for treasure in Grandpa's basement. I haven't published the game, yet. Anyway, please enjoy this story and, as always, I like feedback on my scribblings, you don't even have to be polite about it as long as you point out what you didn't like. For me, negative comments are fine as long as they are constructive. Just telling me to 'Go back to your regular day job.' without telling me why you think so, is a waste of electrons. And at the rate we are using them in 43Trillion years we are going to run out, then you'll be sorry!
Please check out:
 
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The Harold House Mysteries: Prologue  (13+)
A man inherits a cursed house. WC: 2918 words


Espinado
I've just added two new items in my science fiction and fantasy portfolio folder. They are
 iAfterlife - Prologue  (13+)
New technology, quantization, will allow your personality to be uploaded. WC: 1706
and
 iAfterlife - Rayburn PI  (18+)
Dave's first adventure as a Private Investigator. WC: 11792
. You should read them in that order. These are the first parts of a longer novel. All feedback is welcome.
Espinado
This is for the short story contest. It's a take on Roger Zelazny's Amber series. This is a shadow of the "real' Amber where Eric hasn't died but was kept sedated by Flora as Fiona had done to Corwin. The idea here is a bit of a "retcon" of Zelazny's. In my view the nearest shadows to Amber didn't have broken patterns but different patterns. Imagine the universe is a pond and one drops a stone it it. The ripples go in all directions, they aren't broken just different. Same for Dworkin "dropping" a pattern in the Chaos that existed. New patterns were created in all directions. So Dworkin created all the shadows. Then Corwin does it again.
 
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The Return  (E)
If you've read Zelazny's "Nine Princes in Amber" this will be a little familiar. WC: 2000
I've just edited/updated an item in my portfolio:
 A Gathering  (E)
A group comes together every year for a specific purpose. WC: 988
I've just edited an item in my portfolio:
 No Forgiveness  (E)
Will a mother forgive? 694 words.

A contest entry for a no-dialog contest. Only 700 words.
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