|It is a beautiful piece with lots of imagery and creative word play. The image is clearly painted into the readers mind. This piece is really quite good, but the reason I gave it a 3.5 is because there are a few mechanicle errors holding it back.
First thing I noticed was in the beginning few lines. "Words stoned me thru a tornado" and, "We release are secrets between lines thru bars,stanzas and melody". "Thru" needs to be spelled "Through".
"Guilt and shame have fallen like a stormy, lightening struck sky that pours rain" This line is a bit wordy as, from your later description, it is clear that it's stormy. It might be better to say, "Guilt and shame have fallen like a lightening struck sky that pours rain".
In the line, "Like a blanket laid over gently to protect and hide" the reader doesn't know if it was the blanket that was laid over gently, or if it was protected and hidden gently. This line might sound better if put, "Like a blanket gently laid over to protect and hide".
Then in the sentence, "Empty souls have 'een' awaken and 'alls' spirits have risen to the occation" "een" should be "been" and "alls" should be "all".
These are just a few notable areas that I would correct, but please remember that these are just my suggestions.
Overall this piece is quite good and will just take a little refining to make it shine.