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What a lovely elegant expression about these gulls and your vision of how they affect you. I enjoyed reading it aloud and pondering. I used to like watching gulls when I lived near water! 
Keep on writing.
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I loved the play on the word "daze" in the title and it suggests a lover's idealism on Valentine's Day so it is a cool surprise to see that it is Cupid who is also a little "dizzy". Brilliant image!
Your limerick was fun to read with vivid images. I like how the last lines leaves it to our imagination as to what goes on in the bedrooms. The alliteration adds to the flow as well.
Your last line says it all. Perspective can be a real lifesaver.
I was intrigued by the title and sweet picture on the item. The name of the doll type is new to me. 
I wondered if a period would be better after the word "stood" as it does complete a sentence and the next one is also a complete thought. The same with "tears" in verse 3. though I realize punctuation in poetry can be choice depending on the flow the author intends. 
I also wondered why no on thought well of him...maybe because he was blind? Another mystery you set at the end of the first paragraph as well. I can't wait to see the "rare"gift. 
The free style is perfect choice for the emotional content for the personal letter speech. It is cool how you incorporate her other movies and shows like Ed Sullivan into the poem as you move through time. Tying in your own talent as teller of tales is genius too. It is like magic. "Flaming Flapdoodles?"
I will have to look that up!
WOW!
You did well with the Ottava Rima form though I noticed not all lines were even in syllables, some 10, some 11. line 5 only had 9 which threw off the flow a bit. The imperfection did not detract me enjoying the comical situation. Reading " a wholly different" was a bit unwieldy to me.I find form poems to be a challenge myself especially when you have to fit in the ideas you want. You kept me entertained and I had to laugh. 
Thanks for sharing this personal and inspiring vision! It gives hope to others who may not yet be able to deal with loss. I sense that the person is still there, if we hold in memory and heart. 
Wow! I liked your vision based on this glyph. She does look sweet and leave it to you to see the cover up! I do wonder what she did to the unicorn. The last line allows me to come up with my own conclusion and I suppose each reader's vision will depend on how dark their imaginative mind is. LOL
The voice is factual and yet at the end, I felt the poet felt it was too bad. I felt sad for the unicorn too.
Some of the lines are not full sentences and did not pull me out of the flow. However, I did feel that perhaps the word "A charming" might be changed to "this charming" and put a comma at the end of the line before..just to connect the two ideas.
You mention it has no format so it could be classed a free style expression and sometimes the mind needs to let it all out and... a poem appears. Great way to clear the head. 
The first line is a great hook, suggesting a nursery rhyme and then with line too, we see it will be a tirade of heart-felt thoughts. I can relate to the angry voice of the poet as realization of comparison and judgements hits him. I love the authentic voice sharing its point of view on school and performance. It is tough to feel compared to a sibling or other, seemingly, smarter kid!
The questions are heart felt and realistic. The plea of "can it be for me?" is such a relevant and universal desire! We have all felt the sting of comparison and feeling unheard, especially by well meaning parents. 
The last verse involves the reader and the voice seems to come to terms with having aired the grievances and hopes for understanding and yet, will allow judgement too. It feels like the judgement of audience is not as bad as what the poet has gone through earlier. Cool! Like go ahead but I am out of here! 
I burst out laughing at the snowboots and "take a hike"! And that her doing that would be your gift. Brilliant and a twist! 
I enjoyed reading the poem with its unique structure. The verses are balanced with lines of the same syllable count with the short middle line. This was effective for drama and added to the emotional expression. I noticed the lines have the same syllable count Rhyme scheme assisted the flow and coherence and made it fun to read. Minimal punctuation was used well and the quotation marks clarified the wife's words from the poet.
The last line rocked and completed the Christmas whining perfectly! "Good will to me!" 
He was at peace.
Your words flowed pleasingly as I read aloud with a quick pace and effective rhythm. I did not notice a set beat yet I was not thrown out by any glitches. The short free flow was effective and suited the theme and gave a dramatic tone to the piece. I liked the way you used rhyme, assonance and consonance for effect. Punctuation assisted the read as well.
The images that portray Vincenzo's life are vivid so I could visualize how he sat there. I would have thought someone would have wondered about seeing him and why the lights stayed on etc. You paint a clear picture of how he was and also show your viewpoint about the outcome. I felt sorry for him. I used to visit older people and can't imagine not helping out.
It was genius to use the tree in the forest notion and it certainly fits. Super! I know it is a bit of an off rhyme but "forward" and "ignored" work well. 
It is interesting to give the wind a purpose for blowing the trees. Nice bit of personification. I an not sure you really need "relentlessly" as the verb is strong and then you give the added description of "trying to push". 
I entered into the story and was waiting to see what would happen when you ask us a question. It was a surprise to see that well known query and your response makes sense. LOL I wonder if your last phrase..again with no true sentence structure...answers what sound it makes when it hits? It seems to be describing how it hits the ground so maybe a comma after "ground" would tie them together. Yet, I do see it could be a style to add pause. Nice twist of story line.
I have not written a Septilla, though have heard of them. LOL Your example follows the format. The rhyme scheme rocks. The words rhyming with fairy are interesting! 
Sliding in with a review to celebrate you!
I love songs and so your parody of "We Wish you a Merry Christmas" is so appealing! I could sing along though I kept tripping over the word "you" after "bring" in the chorus. Or the word "that". It seems to break the flow with one too many syllables. You could just drop one of the words. 
I had to look up the word Hogmanay! Interesting tradition. Cool. Maybe add a little note about it in a drop note. I like how you incorporated some of the Scottish New Year's traditions, especially "Auld Lang Syne"! 
I had fun singing this cheery song on this Christmas Eve day and learned something! Thanks for your vision and may you have lots of luck and best wishes in the next decade! 
I loved this story as it was entertaining and I had to read right to the end. I liked the characters and how you made Santa all knowing. IT was brilliant to end with a reference to the "snow" in the first line. It seemed like the cat, who thinks he is a bit better than humans, was trying to understand humans and they might have sense after all. He felt like a real cat to me!! 