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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Hiya Ken! I am popping in to review you as we celebrate WDC's 19th Birthday! *Delight*

*Leafr* The title is evocative and gives an apt name for Nature's magics! I noticed the name of the form you use is one I am unfamiliar with so I was interested to see how the Burn's Stanza worked.

*Tree* The form is well constructed with the proper rhyme scheme and line lengths. I really like how it flows when I read it aloud with the two shorter lines adding to the rhythm. It felt like the notions you chose for the shorter lines gave an emphatic beat. *Thumbsup* Punctuation served the work well too. The 5th line pause with a dash was effective in suggesting a slower pace and hints at the cycle of days. *Smile*

*Flowerb* The personification of nature is effective and consistent throughout as you masterfully paint a picture of her arts revealing that she has her own time to things. The message of no rushing is so clear and made me ponder on how I can get caught up in the rush of things...when going each moment in flow will still achieve the result.

*Moon* The soundscape was pleasing and your vocabulary is thematic with interesting rhymes like "debut", "hue", "cadence" with "commence" etc. I can appreciate the effort it took to get several of the same end rhyme in the verse to create aaabab scheme. *Thumbsup* The poem was coherent in its message and flow. The notion of "counterpoint" was a unique description and the inner rhyme of "shades" and fades" added interest. Lovely. "anew" and " a new debut" is cool too.

*Star*Thanks for sharing your vision and appreciation of Nature in this well crafted poem. I enjoyed playing with the artist. *Smile*

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Review of The Quandary  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Hi Turtle! I am happy to review your poem as I celebrate WDC 19th birthday! *Delight*

*Smile*I enjoy pondering philosophical themes and this puzzle certainly reveals some of the paradigms of life. You hooked me with the first verse with the "ownership" notion and I can attest to the showing up where I need to be....LOL The ideas of polarity, and what control is and the way it seems we have been taught...the ego rules come to mind as I read your words. Fitting the mold is not a happy place once we are aware. *Wink*

The free style verse suits the reflective content of a mind pondering. The two question lines are brilliant to have us ponder. The question of act or react is relevant. I think that if I am aware and can step out of judgement, choice and action can be mine as response rather than reaction. *Smile*

The image of peg and hole and breaking both made me smile! *Thumbsup*

*Puzzle1* Your thoughts are very clear and do present a puzzling picture. It made me think of a precept I read:
"Everything is the opposite of what it appears to be. Nothing is the opposite of what it appears to be."
Say that aloud ten times and watch your mind boggle. Made me laugh. All about letting go of what we think I guess.

Thanks for sharing your vision and evoking some thought. *Star* Keep puzzling on!

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Review of Writers Block  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Welcome to WDC Tmtsaturn! I am happy to review your wonderful poem.

*Sun*Your theme is one I am sure many can relate to and your title is a clear indicator of the main idea of your expression. I enjoyed reading your free style as you lead us into an emotional state of the poet's frustration.
I liked the idea of "sucks up..poetic melody" and the experience of not being able to harmonize the "jumble"! *Thumbsup*

*Moon* The free verse suits the theme and reflective emotional content and your message is clear.

*Quill*One suggestion I have is to keep the voice consistent. For example, you begin with "my" as first person. It is powerful to speak from that point of view. Later you change to third person...eg. your brain, your fingertips, your soul, your mind. I fell out a bit as I thought we were speaking of you. *Wink* It is an easy fix, just change "your" to "my" etc. Keep the integrity and it would have more effect. We can all nod our heads and say I get you! Using the "your" gives the notion that you know what the reader thinks, and it may not be so. LOL I get caught in that when I speak at times...using the you when really it is about me. We may assume others have had the same experience.

Also, I think "somewhere in" would sound better than "among" as Maze is a singular word. I love that image and it is quite a fact that "heart' and "soul" knowing can get lost in the mind traps of thinking too much. *Whistle*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your vision so potently! I hear you! *Laugh* Writing this shows the muse is waking up and getting past the block.

Keep on writing on!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya ReadingReindeer Hibernation ! I see you were writing in 24 syllables challenge! Awesome.

*Thumbsup*I appreciate how you wove three meanings of the given word into this short free style poem and still only used 24 syllables.*Shock* Given that the word itself has 5 of them to begin with, it was a challenge indeed. I have done a few of these short poems and find it tough.LOL

*Fairy* It was effective to have the repeated "Trans" and the repetitive "t" sounds as they added to a soundscape when I read it out loud. I wondered if the word "being" hooked up with "transform" but then thought it was a separate defining quality. The cover picture is gorgeous too! *Delight*

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft.*Star* Keep on transforming as you write on!

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Review of Sweltering August  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight*Hi Prosperous Snow! This timely piece popped up on the Read and Review page! The title suggests a hot summer and your first verse bears that fact out. I got the point too that often heat can trigger storms.

I was not aware that Las Vegas had trouble with floods and the last line with its question suggests that there is a prediction of "thousand year flood". You really show the concern that people have with this issue in a vivid way. Wow! The idea of the notion "hiding" is evocative.

I was engaged with your description of the skies being decorated in the first verse in contrast with the prediction of floods. *Star*

The free verse suits the theme as it allows for sharing information as well as descriptive verse. I like how you slide in the idea that many preventions against floods have been made over the years...and maybe not always successful. The notion of improvements suggests that experience has been a teacher. *Smile*

I love rain storms myself but then have not been in a flood area, which I would not like! I have driven in bad rain though and yep, it is scary! *Shock*

Thanks for sharing this summer time vision. *Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP*


*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI walkinbird! Popping in here with a review to celebrate you! *Star* I found this tribute to Faramir and as I love Tolkien's world too, here I am! *Wink*

It was a joy to read this wonderfully crafted expression with it's sad theme. I really see how you parallel Faramir to Frodo. What an insight! *Star* I like your title premise of the curse of the last born and it suits the poem content.

*Smile*The details you use are well chosen to make your point and vividly describe his plight and family drama.

The poem has a clear form with rhyme and verse lines. I did notice a few lines not having the same syllable count but I was not thrown out of the read as I read aloud though later noted the off rhymes. {anduin, o'er, horn") *Wink* I enjoyed the old fashioned phrasing that made me think of the poems in Tolkien.

The voice is clear and keeps its point of view to the end with "tis not right"! It has a sad tone and makes us feel for this brother. Well conceived summary of his fate!

*Star*Thanks for sharing your vision of this character. It was fun to be reminded.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Aground  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Star**Fairy2*} HI beholden! I am back here with a review as promised. *Delight*

*Fairy3* I was intrigued by the evocative title and tag line. It made me sad somehow.

*Fairy3*Wow! You really took me into this man's head and his experience in a vivid manner. I could feel the hopelessness and lack of future vision. The first lines drew me in and set the tone of his attitude potently. That last line really hits home too. How sad! A potent summation..that he feels to make a noise or request is futile and emphasizes again the monotony and isolation he feels his life has become. Well done! *Star*

Using sea imagery was brilliant and your descriptions so vivid. eg. "parchment hands", "rheumy eyes". Seeing himself as beached is a unique idea to me. I like how you use the theme image and vocabulary of the sea throughout the poem.

The free verse style suits the emotional content and theme as it leaves room for reflective thought as it occurs. I liked the two line ending verse which encapsulates the feeling he has.

I especially liked the enjambments of line 8 and 13. You used assonance, consonance and alliterative quality to advantage as well. I enjoyed reading the poem aloud. The soundscape, emotional nuances and tight weave was appealing and effective in engaging me in the experience. Your use of mid-line pauses are effective too.

Punctuation served the work and I liked the addition of a quote by the nurse. Should "mr" have a capital or was this to show again how not important he feels? Your use of mid-line pauses are effective.


*Quill*A few suggestions:

In the first verse, you use the word "apart" twice in close proximity. The second instance could be dropped as you use "isolate" which means the same. eg. "bent, isolated and silent" would work as I do not notice a specific syllable count. I assume you had a typo in "isolate". *Wink*

I wanted to put "till" at the beginning of line 10 to give the "waiting hours" a bit of weight and pause.

I noticed you used a capital letter in the second lines of the verses...I wondered if there was a reason. My understanding is that we use capitals where it makes natural sense or on every line to be consistent. In this case I like the non capitalizing except after periods, of course. Maybe you had a reason though. *Wink*

You seem to be using a natural punctuation, which really works in the tight weave of this free verse. Yet there are a couple of places where the pausing commas are missing.
eg. after "shallows" in line 3, after "apart" in line 4,

*Fairy2*Your expression is captivating and touched emotional cords with its vivid vision of the plight of this elderly man. I am not sure what contest this was for and assume the bolded words were given as prompt. How you used them to get this touching account is amazing!

*Fairy* The title with its theme of being aground totally fits what you write about. Awesome choice!

*Starstruck*Wonderful, insightful, creative and evocative, this poem served its function. What a tribute and commentary! Thanks for sharing your vision and craft.

Keep on Writing!*Smile*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Welcome to WDC FQ! I am here to review to celebrate you! *Delight*

Wow! You make the Dubai Desert inviting and interesting to visit in your article. You highlight key amusements and activities in an organized way with an engaging voice and enthusiasm. I have ridden a camel, not far, but yep it is an experience! *Laugh*

I really enjoyed reading about the amazing trips. I can't imagine Dune Bashing myself but many would love it! I would love to pet a falcon though.

The sections were on topic and easy to read with lots of vivid details to attract interest. *Thumbsup*

*Quill*A few places I thought could be tightened up:

In the section on Camel Trekking--

"even enjoy the cool breeze of the evening as well as exploring the vast empty sky embedded with stars. Also known as star gazing"
As you mention evening in the first part of this sentence you could just say:
"enjoy the cool breeze as you explore the vast...stars. Become a star gazer!"

I don't think you need the word "Furthermore" in that camel section as you do begin with "Also".
You used the word in several other places so it is good to have variety. *Wink*

I think You can leave "furthermore" out of the Campfire section as well. It flows well with just "While you enjoy..." sounds Yummy! *Smile*

*Star* I am so glad I came across this cool article! It really shows the fun that Dubai offers and the appreciation of the author. The title word "ultimate" fits the theme too!

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft at WDC! I enjoyed my visit and will dream... *Wink*
Keep writing on!

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Review of Floods  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Hello Busman Poet! I am happy to review to celebrate you! *Star*

Wow! You really created a vivid picture in so few words. I am not familiar with the Brevee rules so thanks for the author's note. I would put the note at the end though so your craft can get center stage. *Wink*

I loved reading this aloud as it mimicked the water so well. The chosen rhyme words were thematic and the gerund forms suit the flow.

Your poem is effectively composed according to the form rules and I appreciate the "heavy" "levee" rhyme as I am not too sure of many words that rhyme with "heavy". LOL
The present tense makes in dramatic too. *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. I now will put the form on a list of ones for me to try out! *Star*

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Review of Broken Window  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Smile* Hi Dave! Scrolling around while down here on the farm goat and dog sitting and found this awarded item! Kids and ballgames fit the summer. *Delight*

The poem made me laugh as it so often happens that once a relaxing time comes, something happens to mess it up. We are fine creators of not wanting to chill out! *Laugh*

I like the way you describe the kid as Micky Mantle wannabe! *Smile* I can also totally relate to having to shop on a weekend. OUCH!! "enduring...enmasse" is right on!! I avoid it myself.

Your expression was fun to read and I appreciated the rhyme scheme especially with the first and last line having to rhyme. Tough to do and make sense. "drink" and "thinking" was a bit off and did not detract form the message or pleasure of the read.

The opening verse set a calm scene and the mind of the speaker in a positive light. The crash happening at the same time as the ball hitting the back was dramatic and well conceived. *Thumbsup* The description of the day's events are detailed and I smiled at the hopeful ending.

I did not notice a specific rhythm in the lines and wondered if it was a form of more free verse as you have quatrains with a three line last verse. The last verse does sum up the feelings of the character and contrasts his feeling in the first verse.*Wink*

Thanks for sharing this entertaining tale! I had fun and am chillaxing myself until the dogs want attention. *Wink* I hope you are enjoying your summer.

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Review of Daffodils  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Flowery* Good day Jack! I am back with another review for your winning package in "The Summer Time Auction! Thanks for bidding on our group package! *Heart*

*Delight*Oh I love yellow daffodils and noticed I had item saved in my review tool waiting to be reviewed! I also composed a Lady's slipper for this prompt! LOL

*Flowery*The first line grabbed my attention as I imagined the flowers tall and stately being ripped from their home! It had a quick pace and with the word "torn" evoked a sense of shock or thoughtlessness. *Sad* The ideas of "spaces" is brilliant. The last line evoked sadness as I always think of daffodils catching sunlight on the hills and they soon lose luster in a vase. Wonderful contrast!

*Flowery* The Lady's Slipper format is well composed with effective inner rhyme. It reveals a changing picture for the daffodil's existence. I enjoyed reading it aloud and your use of some conosonance added to the flow and soundscape. Punctuation served the work as well.

*Star*Thank you for sharing your clear vision and model of the Lady's Slipper. I liked the emotional evocation. *Heart* You have a gift.

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Review of At the Root  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Walkinbird! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

I was drawn to this title as it spoke of "roots" and it made me curious. We have roots in ancestry but also can try to get to the root of a psychological problem and both are of interest to me!*Delight*

I am not sure what the exercise that you refer to in the tag line was about and I liked the way you described the place of your ancestors. The images are quite vivid. I noticed you use a series of phrases in the first verse... I wondered at the use of periods, when commas would serve to connect the ideas. Maybe.

I just saw Thor, Ragnarok...and did a bit of reading so I get the reference.*Wink* Cool! I wonder if an author's note might be useful.

I wondered who the two were. and whose musical finale? Excuse my uncertainty here. *Facepalm*

I was thinking of how the end can be the beginning contrasting finale with wedding. A cycle continues. Then again I could be weird.

Thanks for creating this intriguing piece. I will continue to ponder. I like to be engaged. *Star*
Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI fellow Moderator! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star* Happy anniversary!

As a star gazer,I was intrigued by the title so I had to check it out! *Laugh*

*Fire*I really enjoyed the magical element here and how she came to see other world even though she thought she was familiar with the area! I had to laugh at the wisdom of the little man, who may have been a philosopher or jokster. LOL I wanted to know what the hat looked like. *Smile*

*Fire*The setting of the woods and the campfire was an effective one for a tale like this as we often think of campfire stories and strange happenings then. *Thumbsup*

I was curious as to why she threw the hat into the campfire.*Wink*

A few ideas for tweaking if it makes sense to you:*Wink*

*Fire* I think the first two lined could be tightened up as you repeat ideas: like
"carefully" and then later say you still were mindful about where you were going, and you used the word "area" twice in close proximity. I read that it is better in short writings to try and use a variety of words.
*Fire* Maybe put inner thoughts of the speaker in italics as the speaker is the narrator as well. eg. "nest robber" and "was I lost?".

*Fire* I don't think you need the word "suddenly" when the speaker turns head to see the voice. We can imagine that it was not expected. What did you mean by "weird look"? Is there a more vivid way to describe this reaction?

*Star*This piece reveals a whole scene in a flash style. I like how the character is easily distracted and how you take us with her. You reveal her curious nature as she wonders about birds and is familiar with nature. The contrast of waking in the alternate world is a good one and makes a great lead in to more of the story.

*Fairy* Thanks for sharing this magical bit of entertainment. My fairy muse was quite taken with it. *Heart*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Delight* Hiya Prosperous Snow! I am happy to review your piece as a participant in "I Write 2019." *Smile*

*Fire*The title is intriguing and drew my imagination! I liked it. I enjoy how you can create poems relating to your faith, especially this one in only 24 syllables. *Thumbsup* And I always learn new information about the Baha'i faith.

*Fire* Your key word totally fits the theme and set the background of the fortress. Wow! Thanks for the author's note, which is very useful if folks did not know your reference. Even without it, as I know you, I understood it had some historical reference to the Bab. *Wink* I wonder if you changed the 'HE" to "Bab" would clue folks in. Yet ...I see that in your note you used "the Bab" so it may not work. *Wink*

*Star*It was pleasant to read aloud and the image is vivid and tells us some of origin on his wisdom. Punctuation served the work as well. Thanks for continuing to share and honour this wisdom.

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Review of Christmas in July  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Star* Hiya Jack! Congrats on your winning bid in "The Summer Time Auction for the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group package. I am happy to offer another review as part of your package. *Delight*

*Heart* Oh Wow! What a wonderful tribute to your son that expresses vitally your feeling of appreciation for his life, and you feeling of loss. *Sad* It must have been a difficult experience to write about. Thank you for sharing.

*Heartv*The theme was an unexpected one for a Christmas in July poem and it really shows how life and death recognize no special times. My dad died the day after Christmas when I was 20 and it took some time for Christmas not to have that sad overlay. Can't imagine losing a child though.

*Heartg* The poem has a regular rhyme structure in four line verses with short lines that really fit the emotion and theme of the poem. I did not notice a strict syllable count but the only lines that felt out of flow were the second two lines in verse one. The free verse suits the emotional content and allows for the personal ideas you wanted to share.

*Heart* You use some off rhyme as well. "themselves" and "himself" threw me out a bit but the point you make is important to the theme. I wanted to put a comma after "less" as the next line follows to complete the vital last line. I loved the contrast of "shine" of a birthday Christmas month and "dies". Wow! *Thumbsup* A saddening shock. Well done.
It made me curious on how you lost him so it stirred the imagination. *Thumbsup* And not knowing doesn't take away from the potency of the piece, as the point of how loss effects the Christmas experience is well shown.

*Star* Thank you for sharing such a personal piece. And congrats on its third place win! *Smile*

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Review of BUTTERFLIES  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Butterflyo* Congrats Jack on your winning bid in "The Summer Time Auction for our Power group package! Thanks for your generosity. *Heart* I am happy to review this poem as part of the package. *Delight*

*Butterfly2b* Wow! This poem has a vital and positive vibe that expresses joy in nature. I Love watching butterflies and really admire the way you describe their flight and wings so vividly. The qualities they elicit from the poet are well chosen and the bit of personification of the butterflies as having that intent of bringing joy is wonderful. *Smile*

*Butterfly2g* I am not familiar with the Shadorma form so thank you for the hint in your author's note. Your shadorma has teh 6 lines and apt syllable count, revealing a clear scene. It was pleasant to read aloud with some effective use of assonance and alliteration. The use of gerunds reflects to me the constant movement of the butterfly..moment to moment with little still times. *Thumbsup*

*Butterfly2b* I wondered at the use of all capitals in such a short poem yet realize that it is just a choice. Lack of punctuation is a choice as well, though I would have liked to see a comma after "wings" just for a breath separating the scene from direct action as interpreted by the poet. Just a POV. LOL

*Star* I really enjoyed entering into this lovely vision! Thanks for sharing your gift.

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Review of Christmas Cookies  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Hiya Quick-Quill ! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Sun*I am relaxing down at a friend's farm looking after goats and dogs and was looking for entertainment..so it was cool to find this and your anniversary too! *Wink* I love Christmas cookies and we have favourite recipes as well. I never thought to make a puzzle about them...how cool an idea..also yummy!

*Delight*Your introduction is inviting and gives us a background a rationale for the wordsearch! I agree there are bakers out there who can do more magics with cookies. The suggestion to try some new ones is a great idea too.
I wondered if a a bit of colour for the festive theme might add a flair and we have *Cookie* and *Gingerbread* for decor. *Wink*

Your choice of cookie words was awesome and include six types that I had not heard of and inspired me to look them up! "snickerdoodles" and "pfeffernusse" for example! *Laugh* Once I saw a picture I realized that I had eaten them without knowing their names. LOL Yummy!!
I could not find the spelling Pfferneuse.*Wink*

Thanks for creating this bit of cookie fun! *Gingerbread**Choco* And I hope you have many more fun and fulfilling years at WDC! *Heart*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Winnie Kay! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

I was drawn to the title and theme as I like Irish lore and limericks are fun! You really did a stellar job with the form and made me laugh!*Laugh* I like how you capture the energy of the mother's response to her son's inebriation. You caught the essence of the Irish language and flavour with the names, setting and tendencies. I like the magical as well..the gnome could be a leprechaun, who may led the lad astray. LOL

It was fun to read aloud with it effective alliterative quality and flow. The dialogue is well shown with proper punctuation and dramatic edge.

Thanks for sharing this fine model of a limerick, well composed with a vivid image that engages the reader. *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of The Woman in Navy  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Balloonp**Cupcakeb**Tiara**Delight*Happy anniversary!I am happy to review to celebrate you at our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group 12th anniversary party raid! *Delight*

I had a delightful time reading your story with its intriguing title! I was drawn into the story from the start. You give a clue there is tension between the two right in the first line and I loved the description of them. I was in anticipation of what was to come and curious as to why she was just watching him. Good start.

I wanted to read right to the end. Your description of background, movement of characters are well meshed with the dialogue between the couple. The reactions are realistic for the situation and you kept up the tension as you reveal slowly what the problem is. I could envision the woman as she struggled with the past and present, the loss and potential unknown loss. You present his anger and query so vividly through his voice, tone and action. Wow!

The twist was surprising. I figured he would still love her in the end but that he had the information was surprising. His strong reactions earlier felt like he did not know..so that he already had a plan and grinned was interesting. I guess he knew her well enough to believe she would own the truth. I wonder why he waited so long to bring it up as at the beginning it felt like the issue was just then..that day. eg. the air changing, the slammed door, the "scoopful" of words (like that phrase). Wouldn't this mood have been going on longer? I see where he held back to see if she would own it...what if she had not? He already knew what he wanted and changed his mood quick. *Smile* I wonder if he was faking it. It did not seem like it. *Smile*

I liked how the picture prompted this story and it seems feasible that women of the time might do that. I think I saw a movie where a similar thing happened. I liked the dramatic mood of the scene and the happy ending. *Smile*

Thanks for this piece of romantic entertainment! I had fun entering the vision. *Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp**Cupcakeb**Tiara**Delight*Happy Anniversary Max! I am happy to review to celebrate you at our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group 12th anniversary party raid! *Delight*


*Balloonp*The title and theme of this contest is relevant as it emphasizes an important aspect of writing and storytelling. Your inviting introduction gives some valueable points to consider and gives us a rationale for the contest topic. *Thumbsup*

*Confettib*The rules and expectations of the written pieces are clearly defined and adding some drop note titles with more detailed specifics is helpful. I like that you have the basics on the page as returning people do not need to keep seeing all the detail. The drop note is available and saves room on the page..which could get long. *Wink* Very practical.

*Balloono*I can see how new members will want to read the dropnotes as there is vital information. and I think you answer every possible question a person might have. *Star* The prizes are generous and the guidelines to what is accepted are clear. The judging criteria is really helpful to show people what you will be looking for. It adds weight to the seriousness of the contest, as it is really meant to help people improve in this area of writing.

*Confettir* You do a great job of showing specifically how to post as a lot of people still don't get the visual clue. The links to stuff is convenient too and the items can serve the writers here. The writing is coherent and easy to follow without a glitch!

*Cupcakev*The page is aesthetically pleasing to the eye and well organized with effective use of colour font. The banner is appealing and unique. The symbolism rocks as it is easy to get the message!

*Star*Thanks for creating and hosting this useful and awesome contribution to the WDC community!

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Review of Trinity  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Balloonp**Cupcakeb**Tiara**Delight*Happy WDC Anniversary Max! I am happy to review to celebrate you at our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group 12th anniversary party raid! *Delight*

*Cupcakev* I enjoy cinquains and your theme title is intriguing. Good choice.

*Cupcakey*I loved the simile! Wow! Three different essences of relationship and seeking love. This is quite an original idea. I liked the magic of ravens and the word 'abide" suggests the calm careful graceful swan.

*Cupcakeo* The form is well composed with apt syllables and line count. The punctuation suit the flow especially the colon. The use of assonance of long 'i' and 'ai' and consonance of "r" and "s" create a coherence to the flow and make for a pleasing soundscape as I read aloud. *Thumbsup*

*Starstruck* The title suits the theme and the images are vivid. I appreciate the romanticism and idealism. Thanks for sharing this evocative vision.

Thanks for all the wonderful contributions you have made at WDC over the years. Keep on being the *Star* you are.

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Review of A Shattered Mask  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp**Cupcakeb**Tiara**Delight*Happy anniversary Slime-j! I am happy to review to celebrate you at our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group 12th anniversary party raid! *Delight*

Wow. I like the title and concept of this dark poem with its psychological vibe. You really capture the fleeting voices and masks of one fearful to be real, or uncertain of who they are, fearful of the world's judgement, caught in a cycle. Scary!

I like the weaving of the poem's free verse and the awareness that dawns in the end. I feel hope that the speaker does indeed have an inkling of the true soul self and maybe will drop the masks. *Smile*

The free flow suits the theme and emotional content. The imagery is vivid: corridors that scream, cracked mask, seeds flourishing. etc. Wonderful contrasts as mood ebbs and flows. It does reflect what a thought filled mind can do to keep us distracted from who is real. *Facepalm* Thoughts that cause misery.

This dark revery makes an impact and now I am curious about the rest of the story. You ask a question in the end..that seeks a response from the reader...and perhaps the self. What would the higher self say? Might me cool to write the solution.*Smile*

Thanks for sharing such personal and potent expression. Wow!*Starstruck*
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Review of Snowed In!  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp**Cupcakeb**Tiara**Delight*Happy Anniversary Genipher! I am happy to review to celebrate you at our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group 12th anniversary party raid! *Delight*

*snow* I could not resist another winter trek! LOL I have been snowed in, though luckily we had enough to eat and my landlord had a generator so at least I had a little power. It is an experience that certainly has happened to people. I recall when I was in university there was a freak snow storm that socked the town for days!! People had to bring supplies on snowmobiles.

*Cupcakev* I see that this was for a prompt contest and I think it makes a great story starter! It would jar people's creative thinking and maybe spur them to always be prepared. Hopefully the family would know about white pine needle tea. Might not help if you live in the city. *Wink*
Lots of scope here as you do not say whether the power was on or off, which could make a difference to survival. And scary to think that there is NOTHING in the house to eat?

*Cake*The writing is clear with enough information to set the tale. Even the tone is there. Good job! I wonder if anyone picked it to write about. *Smile*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your creativity and for all of your contributions to WDC over the years. Hope to see you at the Power party. If not, have fun fishing! Nicer than freezing. *Laugh*
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Review of Haiku  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp**Cupcakeb**Tiara**Delight*Happy Anniversary Genipher! I am happy to review to celebrate you at our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group 12th anniversary party raid! *Delight* I hope you can join in with a review as well! *Wink*

*Santahat* It is hot here so I thought I would check out your cool haiku! I never saw one with the theme of Santa. (nowadays I guess it would be senryu} LOL I enjoyed the light hearted vibration and clear detail of the vision in this short poem! Wonderful for the topic and season.

*Balloonp* I see you use the traditional 5-7-5 and show your observations of the that moment in time vividly. I would drop capital letters as Haiku rarely uses them but for names. Usually they do not have sentence structures but rather a phrase and turning point in the last phrase. You have that as we hear and see the man and then notice the bag. I wanted to drop the word "and" but as you have a verb in the last line it might not work. I wonder how to make this more concise. *Wink*

*Cupcakev* We now know that haiku do not have to have so many syllables as we cannot really count the same as Japanese form. Less is more to leave the reader intrigued and discover for himself the aha moment. I like that we can guess that the guy is Santa without being told.

*Delight*Still as a picture poem it works to capture that moment and is fun to read. I could see it for sure. What a great Christmas poem especially for kids! *Starstruck*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Balloonp**Cupcakeb**Tiara**Delight*Hi Hooves! Yay I am happy to review your piece at "I Write in 2019"! *Cat*

*Cat2* The title drew my curiosity and it makes it sound the cat has a job! I love cats.

*Dog1* Oh, this poem is so sweet with a vivid portrait of walking dogs and the coming of fall. I could so imagine the bassett hound! *Heart* I like the surprise of the cat and the anticipation in the last line. I had to laugh. What else would be in a dog's mind but treats. LOL

*Cat2* The well composed poem was well composed in quatrains with a pleasing flow and tender tone which made me feel the poet's love for animals. It really captured the friendships.

*Dog2* I appreciated the personification of August and the summer's "mewing call." *Thumbsup*

*Starstruck*This was fun vision to enter into and you wove in idea of an amazon delivery cat in a coherent and believable way. *Smile* Thanks for sharing your critters with us too.

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