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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy Party days! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Balloong*

I enjoy philosophical ponderings and even used to collect wise sayings when I was a kid! It is so cool that you share the reflections here. *Smile* You could make a book!

This gives me something to think about and I had not heard the word "becloud" before so I went to look it up. Cool! It really fits. The idea of probing for a deeper meaning when rumour abounds is valid too. Should any POV be taken at face value? *Think*

In a gentle way you invite the reader to "probe" without telling them what to think..let them discover. It is the only way that works...choice. *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your vision and interesting vocabulary. *Star*

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Review of Lemuria  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Days Angus! I saw this cool story reviewed on the Review pages and could not resist! I am fascinated by the tales around Mt Shasta and other sites. How cool!

*Gemv*Wow! I enjoyed reading your story and the twist at the end. I like Chris's positive outlook about where his uncle might be. It gives his uncle's purpose a closure and without proof he could be right.

*Gemg* I like how your reference the lore about Lemuria and the mystery about it. The descriptions were vivid and the cave scene in the night was creepy. It is interesting that it is assumed the Lemurians would be harmful. You keep me wondering. They could have been trying to heal Jacob and maybe then he wanted to stay as no one believed him anyway...or he stayed as they would not want the word to get out yet. He might even like it there. Maybe only the "knowing" folks are chosen. *Wink*

*Gemy* Your writing kept me engaged to the end with a viable plot, surprises and drama. His fall and the loss of the cell phone heightened the intensity as now we are concerned with the young boy who may not make it back to get help.

I wonder if Chris would recall where the cave was, or if anyone checked out the story, if not the cops, those who are like his uncle. Or maybe by then, they would have moved on. I like how we still do not know what the shadows were though!

*Star*Thanks for the entertaining tale with it's original theme and dark aura..or not! LOL

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Review of I Write In 2020  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Happy party days Carly! I am happy to review your fantasy poem in the "I Write in 2020" forum. *Delight*


*Gemv* Your title intrigued me with its evocative image. My muse likes it as a prompt on its own. *Smile*

*Gemg* Wow! Your poem presents a spooky picture of these dark woods with the unexpected dark ones. The generic word "they" kept me wondering and using my imagination. The repetition of what they are not is effective technique.

*Devilish* The last two lines are creepy and potent and I trembled at the idea of "bowels of the underworld." Made me think of greek myth and the creepy place in Lord of the Rings where they work underground creating creatures. *Shock*

*Fairy2* I like the dramatic effect of repeating the word "wait" in the middle of the poem. The use of repeated vowel sounds as in "vines that wind" and repeated consonants like "collecting and connecting" make a pleasing soundscape to read aloud.

*Quill* I think the word "seem" is weak as I learned that it is better to be direct in your imagery...is it or isn't it? Perhaps something like "dancing and shimmering in the moonlight" in line 3... and it could flow more smoothly from the line before. It gives a more real and present picture than 'seems to". *Wink*

I notice a typo in " toppled tress". *Smile* I like the alliteration here too.

*Think* I also wondered if instead of "they come from the trees" you put a "but they come from.." and then in the next line, drop the word "but" as you are entering now into an explanation or how and when they do this.

*Gemy* I think the free style suits the theme and content. I see you use all capital letters on each line, which is a style or choice. I wondered if you had tried it with natural flow..to see if it changes the flow of the read. I was not thrown out by the lack of punctuation. It was just a matter of style. *Smile*

*Star* Your poem appeals to the imagination and makes me not want to go to those woods! Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. Good luck in the contest. *Fairy2*

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Review of Waiting  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp*Happy Party Days, Mastiff! Yay. I get to review you in the "I Write in 2020!"


*Gemt*This tanka made me thing of workers who cannot do much while waiting for covid to pass due to some criteria as others go workwards. *Wink*

*Gemv* I sensed the feeling of loneliness and feeling left out when he really wants to connect! Good job as expressions of opinions is part of the tanka form. *Thumbsup* The plea with the exclamation mark emphasizes this. The broken line in line 3 is effective too.

*Gemg*I think the form is well composed and your vision is clearly shown. Thanks for sharing your work and participating in Oriental poetry forms. *Star*

Party on!! *Balloonp*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Days ruwth! I get to do another review for you. LOL This time for 'I Write in 2020!" *Delight*

I really enjoyed your story and it is an original response to the prompt. Great idea!! The writing is a reflective look at your own preparations and lessons from past planning. I could feel the panic as you try to get ready on time this time and the unexpected help that showed up. Party fairies, eh? LOL

I admire the creativity of your trinket collection and how you show how you learned along the way. Too bad about the unretired one, but then...all has a purpose. Exclusive fun.

I appreciate how you could Make a story of your own experience and you did include three WDC friends and had an unexpected turn and surprise. It was easy to follow the writing and I do like the new trinket. Shines like bling! *Star*

*Gemt* Thanks for adding your creative flair and fun to the party activities and for leading the way with your contributions and community spirit.

*Balloonp* Party on!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy happy Party Days, Maryann!


*Gemt* How did I not know you had a webpage?? I just saw this folder and found it inside along with a cool collection of work. *Delight* Yay!

*Star* I loved your web page with its bright colourful face, so aesthetically pleasing. It highlights in a fun and organized ways the many types of activities you have participated in and items you have created. The pictures are lovely and reflect the love, light and encouragement that you bring to WDC. *Heart* I especially like the lead picture of you and your dog and the Butterfly sig with your name. Gorgeous.

*Gemg* The 15 for 15 folder has an inviting introduction and I enjoyed the vivid haiku about ice! The idea of writing for 15 minutes...and see what comes from a prompt sounds fun and freeing, as you don't have to worry about completion or perfection. Some of your poems are marvelous. Your muse was on a role! It is so motivating to do these things with others.

*Gemv* The banner in this folder is pleasing and gives the main theme of the contents. I like the cover picture in the Story collection. I can see where other items in your port might fit here too. I guess I did not think of a website as a collection...but it is a directory to your port. Same idea! *Wink*

*Star* I am glad I delved into your port to find stuff I have not reviewed! LOL Thanks for sharing your gift and vision over the years at WDC. Party on! *Cake*

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Review of Fairy Tale Bound  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp*Happy Party Days, celticsea! *Cake2* I could not resist this limerick in the Poetic traditions contest. *Delight*

*Gemt*Brilliant! This is a delightful story written in limerick verses. I loved it and had to keep reading as the princess tries to solve her problem. You lead us on a merry road as she encounters potential solutions that keep failing. She is determined. I like how you give the magical three times as a hope to keep her going.

*Gembl* The limerick tells a complete story with an organized plot line, characters and a twist at the end that we don't expect. It is awesome how you bring the frog prince in and the end was a surprise. *Shock2*

*Gemv* The form is well composed and flows well when I read aloud. It was so fun and filled with humourous content. I so admire how you composed the whole story using this form with its specific syllables and rhyme. Excellent. *Starstruck* I love the old word "forsook"!

You did a wonderful job in seamlessly weaving in a number of well known fairy tales and fairy tale symbols and beliefs that we can recognize.

*Gemt*Punctuation assisted the read and dramatic tone. The use of some assonance, consonance created a pleasing soundscape with the rhyme and flow and interesting vocabulary was chosen. Verbs were active and the pace lively. I think children would like this comical theme too.

*Starstruck* Thank you for sharing your word wizardry and vision. You are a gift! Good l

Party on! *Cake2*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Balloong**Gemv*Happy party Days, Joy! I saw this on the news feed with your beautiful trinket and so here I am! Thanks for sharing the gifts. *Heartv*

*Gemo*I really enjoyed your Secret blog entry and could relate to all the objections or potential feelings about secrets. these would go through my head too. Good job with the italics to show inner thought. The quote by Orwell was cool and suitable too. *Smile*

*Delight*The twist at the end was brilliant and showed how some secrets are best shared! *Heart* The dialogue was well written and advanced the tale. The first person voice was solid too. I like the way you keep the "you" open ended so we could fit anyone into either role.

*Star*Your logical analysis of the second quote is right on! It shows how important words are and how we need to watch that we say what is specific. I laughed out loud at the inability to change into a fish! LOL

*Quill* Your wisdom shines in the rest of the entry. Focus and finishing tasks are troublesome for many. I like the idea of "catalyst" and the "magic touch"! *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your thoughts in a vivid manner. Fun to read. *Starstruck*

Party On! *Balloonp*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy party days Ned! I just saw your post about Shakespeare. What a great topic, one we hear little about these days. *Smile* The author did set a tone for later dramatic artists. LOL

*Gemt*Your appreciation for Shakespeare is vibrant in this short expression. I enjoyed the quote, which suits the time of year. Making it modern with a few emoticons is creative and appealing too.

*Gemg*I wondered about the first phrase...but then I see it referred to an apology for messing with Shakespeare's words by adding bling, in case someone would be offended. LOL In this day in age, it may not...and may attract new readers. *Wink* I related to your commentary about why you like the quote and it was easy to follow. He does have a way with words. *Heart*
Your Hamlet quote with the emoticons was effective too. Good choices! *Bigsmile*

*Gemv* I laughed at the end as I agree that adding all the ML does take up time and effort.

This post was entertaining and a wonderful plug for Shakespeare! Thank you for sharing your vision. *Starstruck*

Party on! *Cake2*

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Review of WDC 20th Birthday  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Days J. L. O'Dell! I am happy to review your party item in the 'I Write in 2020" forum. *Delight*


*Gemv*I love acrostic poems so this was an extra treat! You were able to capture the essence of the WDC community in this short poem! The idea of it being home and welcoming, inclusive to everyone is truly a vital point to make! *Heart*

*Gemg*The form is well composed and it flowed naturally as I read it aloud. Your key words make sense and relate to the theme effectively. The description of the people who comprise the community is inspiring. Good job with the WDC at the end. *Thumbsup*

*Gemp*I like the inclusion of New for new members too. I always find the N letter hard to manage! LOL

*Star* Thanks for sharing your vision and participating in WDC party games! It is really a tribute piece.

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Review of An Unusual Dance  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Days Jeff! I am happy to review your poem from the "I Write in 2020" forum!*Cupcakev*

*Gemg* Your title is evocative and made me curious... a dance in a limerick! Your take on the prompt is certainly original. LOL The notion of sisters dancing there is unique and rather comical even though the story is dark! Good job.

*Gemy*The form of limerick is well composed though I notice line 2 and 5 are one syllable longer. The first one might say "who was neither virtuous or brave" to be on count and yet the way you wrote it packs more of a punch and image of having no quality of a true knight. *Smile* I like the alliterative sound of "which's why" in line 5. I wonder about using "nuns" for sisters to fix the count and flow better, giving the idea of NOW emphasis. Then I thought maybe the word Sisters may have another nuance. *Smile*

*Gemp*I would have liked to see it centered as limericks often are. It was fun to enter into this unusual creative vision. *Starstruck* The image of the knight who was not and nuns who may have not been so holy in the end is a cool twist. *Thumbsup*

*Star* Thanks for sharing your gift! Party on!



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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonb* Happy party days!! I was challenged to enter your contest in the Hunter Games and wow! I am happy to review it too.

*Balloonp* This page is appealing in its beauty and its gentle aura created by the coloured font, elegant scripts and images. Very aesthetically pleasing. *Heartv*

*Gemg* The theme and direction of the contest is clear and I think it fills a need in the community to share their faith and vision. *Angel*

*Balloonb* Your rules and instructions are specific and clear. The deadline is easy to find and the number of days reminder at the end is a helpful touch. Cool trinket too.

*Gemo* I like that you have 4 winners and a highlighted category. Prizes are generous too.
The prompt is vivid and using bold to highlight is effective. Mentioning the main rule twice is a good idea too. I hate disqualifying or being cut for a silly forgetfulness. *Wink*

*Balloonp*Adding items that archive past winners and prompts is a cool idea and will give the contest a historical record.

*Star* Thanks for sharing this relevant and creative contribution to WDC! *Heart*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Sun* Hi Carly! I am happy to review your blog entry in the I Write in 2020 Forum!*Delight*


Wow. You made this visit to Cape Town feel like a wonderful adventure! Your vision of the penguins is brilliant and I liked the comparison to the northern ones and to your self...avoiding tourist traps. *Laugh*. I did not know they came to Cape town shores! *Smile*

Beginning with the natural world in your poem was appealing to me as I would check out the country sides first, rather than the towns. *Smile*

Your description of the lure of the market is so vivid and drew me in to the picture and your last line is evocative. I like the way it rolls of the tongue too in an abrupt sort of way. I felt it was a commentary. *Thumbsup*

Your use of free verse suited the theme, allowing for a meandering flow as you lead us on the adventure. It flowed quite well with minimum punctuation.

*Think*I did wonder about the two instances of "And" in the first lines. I think you can drop the second one.
Also I see you do use a period in the verse where it makes sense and wondered why you did not in the lines "after artisans" and "place" as they seem like complete natural stops. Just to be consistent. *Wink*

*Star*I really enjoyed entering this picture and could imagine the frolicking penguins and music in the air! Sounds fun and then relaxing. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft.



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Review of I Need Coffee  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Smile* Hi River. *Shock* Oh my gosh, I felt for you getting the needle and was right there with you wanting to leave or.... not control yourself. *Laugh* I am healthy but anytime they tried to draw blood in my past, hard to find a vein! I like the way you describe the nurse's attitude and her attempt at being kind. She might well have said, "suck it up" with her demeanour. LOL

The theme of coffee was well shown, even as you surmise that folks in the hospital may be moody because of lack of coffee. I do not like coffee myself but have had a maple glazed donut at Timmy's! LOL Yum. I would have wanted chocolate!

I think you can un italic the last two paragraphs as you are back in narration mode. The first person voice was effective here and well accomplished.

The descriptions were vivid and I really got a sense of the narrator's feelings and points of view as she tells the story with a satisfying ending. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your craft. I enjoyed the read as I shuddered at hospital visit! *Laugh*

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Review of The Door  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun* Hi SomaSilver! I absolutely loved reading your poem aloud and its concept reminded me of the poem "The road less travelled". I think the notion of a doorway is a brilliant symbol and one we can all relate too...the opening and closing of doors of opportunity etc. *Thumbsup*

*Sun* The structure of the poem is solid with its steady rhyme and flow and the repetition of the key line is emphatic. I enjoyed the dramatic feel. Line one verse two caught my attention. I like the way you composed it. Words like "perplexed" and "verdant" were effective too.

*Sun* You made good use of assonance and consonance to create a pleasing soundscape and flow. The punctuation assisted the flow though I think I would use a perios after "stands" in the second verse and "chest" in the third. *Wink*

*Sun* I was not thrown out of the read though I did notice that the syllable counts are not always regular... between 8 and 9 syllables per line. YOu do not specify this is a form poem so I was not sure if, ideally, the lines should be even or alternated. *Wink*

*Sun*The dilemma is well shown and I could feel the struggle of the speaker and the last line lifted me so it felt like the speaker may be ready to jump as the image of inspiring, verdant lands has such appeal! *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your vision in this well conceived creation. It was a pleasure to enter.
Keep on writing on as your muse guides....go through the door! *Starstruck*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Delight* Hi whiskerfacebythefireplace . Your blog entry popped up as I scrolled and what a great topic. It must be cool to have teens who can keep you in touch with what is out there. I would not have a clue and some stuff I hear is not to my liking. LOL

I enjoyed your open style and how you add actual quotes of conversations in your daily writing here. I can imagine the irritation calling for a "turn it off!" *Laugh* Thank goodness for headphones. I don't even know what electric-swing is so now I have to go look it up as I am curious. I had to laugh at the reference to the chipmunks. I may have to go have a listen to that one too..just in case.

I like how you personified the songs as having taken up residence on your list. *Thumbsup*Song can echo in your head for sure! Thanks for sharing the video of this song as it was quite fun.

Thanks for sharing your experience! *Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Balloonp*Happy anniversary wishes Winnie Kay! *Cake* I hope 2020 will be a fine one for your muse here.*Fairy*

I love limericks so could not resist a peek into this folder! Green is great for the Irish theme and form too.

The alliterative title rocks and the first line of alliterative syllables rolls off the tongue really fine! *Star* It was so pleasing and fun to read aloud with its creative rhyme and alliteration.

Fine composition of the form with the correct lines, syllable counts, rhyme and comical element. You really did a great job with the the rhymes as they are sometimes hard to get to make sense. The punctuation was helpful to the read too. *Thumbsup*

I had a great laugh so this is a successfully written limerick! *Shamrock**Laugh* Thanks for sharing your gift!

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Review of Morning run  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun* Hiya Sumojo! I am happy to review your story from the "I write In 2020" forum. *Delight* The Taboo words contest is certainly a challenge. I am not sure what the theme or taboo words were for this one.

The title is perfect as it gave me the main focus of the story and I imagined the routine of it. I am not much of a runner or a lover of cold weather so I could identify with the first wake up call of a winter run! *Smile* Of course, I live where there is a ton of snow and ice so I have no desire to run. Being on the beach might be nice..at least for views even in winter.

Your description of the setting, and the effects of running are vivid and I laughed at the dog antics! Ew. I can imagine that eye! My cat used to bring little gifts.

I liked the "Polar Bears" as a name and how amazing folks like to swim all year round! I appreciate the feeling the runner has after the run as it gives the idea that it has positive effects and motivates him to do more. Exercise can lift the spirit. *Heart*

I enjoyed reading the tale out loud as it flowed well with effective phrasings (like "I wonder at the wisdom") and active verbs with thematic vocabulary to paint a clear picture...both of the scene, character's feelings and thoughts. It had a clear beginning and end, staying on topic revealing the runner's changing feelings about the day and I appreciated the bit of dialogue and the relationship with the dog. *Star*

I did notice the word "along" was repeated in this line and felt you only needed it one time.
"I jog along the icy cold wetness along the water’s " Maybe just put "wetness of the water's edge"? *Wink* I like the personification of the wave having an intent. *Smile* Gosh, how cold to run in bare feet!

I noticed a typo in "At lzast" *Wink* I would maybe reread to add commas where you have broken phrases. *Think*

The personal tone and vibrant descriptions made this a delight to read. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. *Starstruck* Run..er..Write on!

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Review of VOICES  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya J.L. O'Dell! I am happy to review your marvellous poem from the "i Write in 2020" forum. *Star*

*Star* Wow. The "I" voice in this poem is potent and effective. You reveal the personal struggle with a depressive mind vividly. The idea that the voices were not enough, leading to "cut and cry" is so sad. It was inspiring to have a happier ending as many poems concerning this issue end the other way. *Smile* It gives hope to others...and shows that asking help is a first step that can lead to a solution.

*Star* I enjoyed reading the four line voices aloud and while you use no rhyme your use of assonance and consonance makes for a pleasing soundscape.


*Quill*A few little glitches that popped out for me:

It felt like the word "depressions" in verse 2 needs to be Depression's as in Depression is just.... and maybe a comma after "voices" before "they".

I am not sure why there is a capital letter on "laughed". I think a comma would serve better after "my soul" as you use "and" to connect with the next line. *Wink*

I think your poem captures the sad tone of the original song, from an even darker place. The power of one's own voice and intention to live is a vital theme. Well done.

Thanks for sharing your vision and reminding me of this song! *Delight*

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Review of I Write In 2020  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Gingerbread* Hi Carly. Yummmy! I get to review your Christmas poem from the "I Write in 2020" Forum. *Delight*

*Gingerbread* The image in the first line charmed me as I visualized the Gingerbread (assume cookie} dancing with fancy outfit. The personification of the the cookie is a delight! It was easy to enter into the vivid vision of the Christmas as your images touch sight, sound and scent of the season. *Star*

Something that kept coming up to me: I did get stuck in line one... should gingerbread be plural to go with dance, or should the verb be dances. Of course, gingerbread itself could be a bunch. Maybe add the word cookie, or Gingerbread men. *Think*

*Ornament1r* The cool image of perching chocolate and the verb "swoons" are effective. The poem flowed well and was pleasing to read aloud. Instances of assonance and consonance woven into free verse create a wonderful soundscape. Punctuation was used to effect and the lines have a coherent flow as you take me from experience to experience of the holiday. The atmosphere is so warm and inviting. I like how you wove the meaning of the season into the last line. *Sun*

*Starstruck*Thank you for sharing this delightful picture of Christmas in July. I loved this. Good luck in the contest.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Welcome to WDC Experiment! Congratulations on posting your first item! I hope you will do a bio block soon to get your flair out there.

*Bug* I was drawn to the title as it made me curious and sounded philosophical. I enjoyed reading your reflection on the your encounter with a fly. I think the natural world has a lot of messages and provides a way into our own inner world if we take the moment.

*Butterflyr* I liked the style of the monologue and entered into the reverie with ease. Great job describing the fly's eye with "kaleidoscopic". Your personification of the fly by having it think about you was brilliantly done. We can take ourselves so seriously so I like the idea of you being a passerby in the life of the fly. It reminds me that we are indeed one and connected to all!

*Quill* In line 4 I think the word "what inspired" should be "that inspired." *Wink*

*Star* Thanks for sharing this thoughtful expression which also inspired me to ponder as well. Cool!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy 11th celticsea! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Butterflyr* What a delightful lyrical tale for children! I loved the theme of friendship between the two characters. Your personification through dialogue is amazing. I could really sense Jack's concern and lack of hope and Slinky's determination to uplift his friend. The problem was believeable and the solution was a wonderful surprise.

*Butterflyg* I laughed at the line about getting "my Boing back" and the drama of "soon slinky sprang....bee" Wonderful action. LOL Your use of alliteration and the rhyme in the couplets made for pleasant read aloud. The pace and emotional tone was effective and the flow was easy. It really suits a child's poem and I think children could relate to the sadness of broken toys. Also the lesson that a friend can be there in troubled times is inspiring and gives hope. *Heart*

*Star*I had lots of fun entering into this entertaining tale! What a gift you have. Thanks for sharing your vision and great use of the prompt words from which this sprang. *Delight*

*Heart* Thanks for all you be and do at WDC to make the space shine over the years! Hope you have many more fun and fulfilling times here. *Balloonp* *Cupcakev*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Kiwis on WDC!  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy 10th elle! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Balloonp*Wow! Here is another cool and unique activity in your vast collection.. a space for fellow kiwis! I have seen a British Group, though I am not sure how active it is. LOL
It is interesting to see the membership list of those who are from NZ too. Using phrases from the language is a delightful aspect to the page.

*Balloong*Your page is bright and inviting. I love your beautiful thematic signatures too. *Heart* I like your motivation being that there was an Aussie group. Does it still exist? I do not recall it. It must be rewarding too find WDC authors in your area...as you may be able to contact them and share common interests, cultural issues etc. I like how you allow for reviewing each other as well.

*Balloongo* It is cool to add where they are from specifically and that we non members can see that part. *Smile* I would love to visit some day.

*Star* Thanks for creating another nurturing contribution to WDC and sharing your country and culture. *Heart*


Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of CLASH!  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy 10th anniversary Elle! *Shock* Seems like only yesterday we met! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Swordl* It is just like you to take on challenges and run wonderful events like Quills and this Clash! Thank you for all you be and do to make WDC so special.

*Swordr*The theme is clear and is a great way to hone characterisation. Not allowing fan fiction underlines this skill development. The activity is well explained and I like the look of the page. Red and Black are appealing for the theme too. Dropnotes are convenient for details and helps streamline the page. I had to smile when the rules say it is ok to kill an opponent but ask nicely before brutalizing them. *Smile*

*Star* The due times and dates are clearly bolded so we can't miss it.

*Quill* I am intrigued by the Curse prompt too. It gave me the idea of the covid quarantine...only worse. I would not want to be stuck in my mind with my worst fears. *Shock* Brilliant and inspired idea to stir the muses. *Thumbsup*

Incentives, gifts and final prizes are generous and it sounds like a fun if challenging event. Thanks for keeping it going and inspiring authors to hone their skills in a creative way. *starstuck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Fairy*Wow! What a creative way to rewrite a fairy tale and add a punch! The Clerihew form suits the comical theme and I see that it has a political vibe from your genre selection. *Thumbsup* The title is brilliant play too. You really turned the table on the old witch and Gretel's change of character. mmm. Change can be...good. *Facepalm* lol ONe hopes the new witch will be of higher vibe. I like the word convert and it adds another inner rhyme to the piece.

*Fairy2* The form is well composed in its 4 lines, steady rhyme scheme and makes fun of a famous person..at least in the fairy tale world! The lines and meter are not regular as the form requires and flow rather well aloud. The second line was a bit of mouth full and the word "she" is used a lot. LOL I think not using punctuation works too.

*Star* Brothers Grimm, move over! Thanks for sharing this rather dark yet humourous rendition of Hansel and Gretel. What happened to Hansel? *Wink*


Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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