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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lou. *Delight* I really enjoyed your story and could so imagine the relationship situation between dad and daughter. *Smile* You did a good job showing the father's memories and hesitancy about getting a pet! The descriptions were detailed and the dialogue carried the story well.

The plot was coherent and I like the addition of specifics in the search, where you even add what the search suggested! *Laugh* Key words also let us know that the father really wants his daughter to get the dog..in spite of his no! It felt realistic. *Thumbsup* He is a softy.

The first person narration is effective and consistently carried throughout the piece.
The line "I can do a Google search and it should tell me where they live," seemed off due to the tense unless you mean him to be saying this in the conversation. Otherwise it is a disconnected inner thought...when other times you used past tense. *Wink* Just a tweak needed maybe.

The last line had a nice twist in that he has to wait a bit for her return and it is a charming picture of them snuggling. Lovely vision.

Thanks for sharing this heartfelt expression. I am glad the dog found a home. *Star*

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Shamrock* Hail Joy! *Gold* Springing Into Fantasy at Power Raid and could not resist this lively expression I found on the newsfeed! *Delight*

*Fairy2*How delightful to read and visualize this vivid image of the leprechaun! It was comical and well crafted in the limerick form. I enjoyed the interesting language that fit the theme and folklore as well as being dramatic. eg Icky, wiz, blahs. I loved "sophic vision" as a description and I can just see this picture. Each verse leads to the next and the wise advice is clear and it's reason at the end had me laughing. *Laugh*

Each verse followed the limerick format and the words create an appealing soundscape as I read it aloud. The tongue twist of "imps flimsy wings" and the well chosen rhymes make it fun to read and adds to its overall flow. *Thumbsup* Good job rhyming with "magical", a tough one and it works.

Thanks for sharing an entertaining and light hearted poem, to help celebrate St. Patrick's Day!*Starstruck*

Keep on writing on! *Star*

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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
*Delight* Hi Alan. I saw this story on the "WDC Powers Review Me List 2--ON HIATUS so here I am to review it. I am here with a reader's persective. *Smile* I was really taken with the character and you did a great job of describing him with visual elements and especially with his tone and voice as narrator. It was consistent and sounded like a young person.

The short chapters make sense as he seems to speak about a number of experiences in a journal- like manner as if unsure how he should approach writing. It is personal and takes me right into his world. You make it clear from the start that he is interested in language and writing and I like he develops his opinions on language and spelling.

I really felt for him as he is different and seems like an outsider, yet handles his condition creatively and expresses honestly. He appears to have great observations skills.

Speaking of which there are quite a few spelling errors and lack of punctuation is some sentence structures. As I read, I got the idea that the mispellings were on purpose as if to show the boy really wrote the work, a part of how you show his personality and skill. I like his intelligence and interest in books and how curious he is about words and how people are.

If it is intentional, you may want to make a footnote about it, as some authors might not read on once they notice, or want to point out so many errors like"becaues" or "boreing". LOL The first one is hilarious as so many kids get it wrong. *Laugh* You may want to remove the rating stars. *Wink*

The writing seems natural and free flowing as a boy talks. The descriptions of the older characters are vivid and they feel natural and real as people. I had to laugh at the speaker's telling us when there is a pun! Brilliant! *Smile*

I really enjoyed the vision you created and could picture this lad in this entertaining piece. Thanks for sharing this unique expression. *Starstruck*

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Review of Bangaround  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Delight* HI fivesixer. The title to this poem is appealing so I had to read.*Smile*

The free style poem carries that vibration that the title speaks of and I can so see inside the poet's head. You show confusion very vividly and the notion of bashing oneself. It keeps one stuck! Even name calling with "troll" fits and gives a sense of personality. Good play on word sound there too. *Smile* Line 13 gave me pause and I pondered. Great effect.

It was an interesting read with simple words and the style gave it a dramatic flow. I wondered at the word "uncompatible" as it is generally spelled "incompatible". The idea that we are incompatible within ourselves is brilliant reflection. *Thumbsup*

I really enjoyed entering into your unique vision. Thanks for sharing your gift. *Starstruck*

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Review of Scream!  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Ameila! Thanks for sharing this amazing expression which I found at "Review Me List for WDC Power -ON HIATUS! *Delight*

Wow! Your voice here is strong with a potent emotional content. I could really enter the experience and hear the two voices interacting. The situation is dramatic with a sense of trauma that is heart breaking.

I noticed a few minor typos:

In verse, the first "you're" needs to be "your" and in verse 5 "your" needs to "you're" for "you are". *Wink*

I like the use of the I voice in both cases I wonder why you used "us" in the second last line?
Is it letting us know that it is not just the one person in the family that thinks like this?

I see you began to separate the voices on the right in italics and the left without. Did you intend that? If you use {i} and then {/i} after the last word you want to put in italics, you can have the left side stay plain. You need to do this each time. eg.
{i} at the start{/i} gives you at the start. *Wink*

The conversation is well composed and shows exactly how each of the speakers felt and how lost in the anger they both were. So realistic! *Starstruck* I felt sad.

Thanks for sharing this vivid vision and your gift. *Thumbsup*



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Review of The truth  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloony*Welcome to WDC Gagan ! *Delight* I am happy to review to celebrate you and share my perspective as a reader. *Bookopen*

*Smile* This was fun to read and I like the premise of the play/script. The dialogue reminded me of how wise teachers say little and keep questioning. The tone and character of the two speakers was clear to me as they spoke. Good job!

I noticed a missing word in " I getting a feeling". You need the word "am". *Wink* Also a quick edit will show where punctuation is missing. Being consistent is key for this matter. *Smile*
Words like "dont' and Its" need apostrophes. "don't", "it's". Drop the "s" in 'Yours friend's name" near the end. A typo I think. *Smile*
In the hypnotise part--- i should be capital and "can't", also "hypnotized" should be "hypnotize". *Wink*

I like the idea of each one being the most important person... as one does have to take care and love themselves. His reaction about girls really fit the focus of the boy!

I like the mystical and the mystery here. It feels like there is a uselessness of life for the boy. I got the idea that he entered the room which could be a metaohor for after"death". You get me to ponder! Thanks for sharing your vision. *Star* Good read!

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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Review of Poe's Empty Grave  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Delight*Wow! Hooves, this is ominous in tone and so fits both the prompt and the poet! Brilliant how you captured Poe's life and writings in this creative expression. How terrific to get the symbolism of the girl, the dagger and raven applied to Lenore and Poe. *Salute*The short lines give an abrupt sense and the format is appealing with its rise and fall.

Your word choice is effective and concise to give meaning and brevity. Key word references to Poe's world are well chosen and meaningful for your message. It was lovely to read aloud as your use of assonance and consonance and placing of words created a strong soundscape, evoking response and building on a dark theme.

I am impressed and fell right into your vision and stunning craft! *Starstruck* Poe would be proud and honoured. Well deserved win in the contest.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Balloony*Welcome to WDC sfttarget ! *Delight* I am happy to review to celebrate you and share my perspective as a reader. *Bookopen*

I enjoyed how you developed the theme of the title on red heads and the story held my interest. Your first line made me curious as to what "it" was so I had to read on! I liked the memory sequence that set the story and the descriptions of the encounters were vivid. You did a great job making her the center of his attention and your last sequence was effective and leaves us to our imagination. *Salute*

I could really imagine the meeting from his observation of his and her reactions. I really liked the memory of the father's words too-- a nice throwback to the opening scene. *Star*

As a reader there were a few places that struck me that could be improved. See what you think.

*Burstr*The second paragraph I think could use tweaking as it feels awkward in structure. I would be more specific at the start. Make the age direct..eg. 40! In the second line could be more straigthforward in flow: My longings for the sweet heroine, long forgotten, rose when...." or something like that. Also, I wanted to know more about how they met and who she was.

*Burstr*Also, "beautiful" is an overused and not very descripive word and what did it have to do with getting out of the car. Maybe say how he reacted when he saw her step out of the car or.." *Wink* I liked the descriptions but was confused when you say he looked into her eyes the first time...as earlier the story said they had met a few times already. I get the idea of the reaction though as the energy vibe was different.

*Burstr*The last line in paragraph 3 struck me too. It could be refined a bit as you use "and" a lot. Tighten it up like " She exuded an aura of confidence and...." what else did the aura hold for him? *Smile*

*Burstr*I have heard it is stronger to use active rather than passive voice in the telling..eg not "was permitted". Be direct like "She let me hold her hand.."*Smile* Watch for other instances.

Thanks for sharing your wonderful romantic vision. And for allowing me to enter your world. Take what is helpful to you and leave the rest. I appreciate your expression. *Starstruck*

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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for entry "Rearranged
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Delight*Hiya Ken! Hey I lucked out *Shamrock* and found this on the I Write 2018! *Delight* I had a good time reading your walk down memory lane and it made me laugh when you spoke of the changing hair, parking lot, costco and BM!*Shock* *Laugh* Brilliant! Your voice is personal, conversational, honest and appealling.

*Shamrock*quatrain was a dramatic read with a strong voice and the varying rhythm added to the overall feel of the atmosphere and lively vibe. I notice your rhythm count was not the same in each verse (by syllable count) but felt the freer flow was effective when I read aloud. I liked the contrast of the "disco crowd" with the "costco crowd". Repeating the word was a great choice. Your use of assonance and consonance was effective and noticeable in the oral reading. *Smile*

*Shamrock*The concept at the end was a wonderful point of view and that many things get rearranged as time goes on is a truth set in a comical way. We do need to laugh at life. *Thumbsup* References to past memories were vivid and serve your message.

*Shamrock*I think you need an apostrophe in "times passage" and I was thrown a bit by the word "sung" without an auxiliary verb. It may be poetic lisence and does make the line a bit long if you add the extra. *Wink*
I felt you could drop the repeat of "sung" in the next line for flow and to shorten the line. Do you need a comma after "Of course"?

*Starstruck* This was an entertaining response to the prompt, sharing personal experiences, to which many can relate! Thanks for sharing your gift.

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Review of Broken People  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya T.L.Finch!

Your title caught my interest and evokes a number of possible images of broken people or homeless. Good choice.

I enjoyed reading your poem aloud with its sing song rhythm and consistent rhyme scheme. You paint an evocative picture of the street life that the guitarist encounters. It touches the heart.
The notion of "actors" made me think of the entertaining type of actor. Nice contrast.

The tone is effective and the lack of punctuation really works for dramatic effect and pace. *Thumbsup*

Your compositions has a consistent construction within the verses though I did notice a few lines which did not seem to fit the beat perfectly. eg. if you are using 8/7/8/7 as in the first verse. eg. "LA's sunset strip" and "that cut your heart in two". It did not throw me out of the read though the second example felt off. I know music can have some variety. *Wink*

You have created a real gem here. Thanks for this vision and commentary. I liked to sing it though I do not know the tune! *Starstruck*

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Review of Chinese Checkers  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight*Hi Carly! I found this intriguing poem in the I Write 2018! What a unique topic for a poem and the free style suits the drama of the game. The variety of line lengths is effective and I had a sense of intensity as you painted such a vivid picture of the players involved in the game. I like how you begin with the idea of a childhood game for fun in contrast with the higher stakes competition. Well done.

*Fairy* It was pleasure to read aloud. I wondered whether a natural punctuation might be good for pause for effect, yet it is a choice. I notice a period after "grace" in line one and don't think you need it as the line leads into the next one. *Wink* I wonder if you need the word "quiet" with "contemplation" as to me the latter word suggests a quietness.

*Fairy2*You did a great job with the prompt parameters and I marvel at your skill here. I think the idea of this as an Olympic activity is so cool. I have not played in a long time and it brings back memories.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your vivid vision of this "sport"! I had fun entering into the fray!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Hi Mac1! *Fairy*


*Delight* What a wonderful vision of life. I like the short lines and direct tone of your free style poem. The images are vivid in a to the point fashion. I had to laugh at the "opinion", "minion" line. I remember in English class test where it asked to give our opinion on a poem and then I go it wrong and it was not waht it was about. Well, some poetic interpretations one might not get until one has more experience than a teen has! LOL Did they not know what the words "your opinion" mean? *Facepalm*

I did notice verse one was only three lines, but as it is a free form poem it did not detract from the read! *Wink* I was pondering on the second last line. "Lest not anyone"..should it be "let not anyone" or "lest anyone close"? *Confused* Could be a typo.

I like how you weave the busy life moments with the "me" reflection time and how the experience you shared proved the lesson! Great wisdom to inspire us! *Star*

I enjoyed entering into your lively vision! Thanks for sharing your craft. *Starstruck*



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Review of "Waiting"  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Delight* Welcome to WDC Netty!


*Smile* Your poem has a lovely reflective tone that emulates waiting. I was drawn to the image in the first lines. The repeating of "waiting" is emphatic though in verse 4 you use it twice.

I get the sense of waiting for the divine as you use the universal elements that we often watch in awe. The strong faith and patience is vivid in the piece. *Star*

A few places felt off when I read aloud:

Line 3: "learn of me" at the end I did not get.

In verse 4 it feels like there are two lines put together and it was bit confusing to read. The word "capture" needs to be "captured" and the idea of "mind being minddful of his waiting return" threw me out of the poem. Also in verse 5 the secodn line does not make sense to me. Do you need a comma in the last line? Again, it is like two sentences put together. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your vision. It captures the moment and would really be stronger with a few tweaks. *Starstruck*

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Review of Terminal Insomnia  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*Delight* Hi Neva! Oh my gosh! This is too cool. I just came across it when I clicked Read and Review and could not resist. I like the movie and song that your poem parodies! The idea of applying it to writing is brilliant and you paint a vivid picture of the writer whose muse keeps active night hours! *Laugh* I can so relate.

The structure is well composed and I could sing along. It has a country aura and I think using the "in" words for "ing" helps create that vibe! *Thumbsup*

I noticed a typo in the colon at the end of the song. *Wink* Should "putin'" have two "t"s?

The flow was pleasing and your rhymes were well conceived. I liked the odd "nefarious" with "scenarios" too. That is a tough one to rhyme. I wondered about the word "brake"---is it a play on words like you want to put the brake on writing, or should it be "break"? *Confused*

I loved the image of the Tut's tomb and it made me laugh! Wonderful concept! Your imagery, like the light on the ceiling, is so clear and makes the vision come alive!

Your parody just rocked! Thanks for sharing this bit of fun. It made my day! *Starstruck* I will have this tune in my head now!

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Review of Internal Path  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight*Welcome to WDC! freedom and nature

Your title fits with the reflective nature and theme of the poem. The questions you use illustrate what goes on in a mind discovering and considering how to find its own path. *Smile* I like the way you use rhyme and the metaphor of reaching the sky and that not to move ahead is a kind of death. Profound!

I would not use the word "perhaps" as it feels weak and not defining in 4th line. You could even change it to a question or a wonder. That word also takes away a direct effect in line 2. Just say "or wrath." We know it would be a concern as you are already asking the question. Also drop "possibly" as it slows down the pace. I think when we are breaking free it is bound that some will not appreciate us. *Wink*

I enjoyed the reflective tone and your vision gives something to ponder. Thanks for sharing your gift here at WDC. Take what fits your heart and leave the rest! *Star*

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Review of Writing I  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight*Hi Fyn! This title is intriguing and the poem itself is evocative. I looked up the meaning of the word "damp" as it confused me at first, got my attention. *Wink* I knew it meant "wet" yet I like its use as verb or noun here. I always learn some word Wizardry from you.

You captured the writer in a vivid way and the active verb "grasping" gives me a picture of trying to catch the illusory bits in the "kaleidoscope". The imagery is unique and the vocabulary well chosen to convey the moment. The word "bleeding" adds to the visual drama. *Thumbsup* The use of punctuation gave an interesting flow as I read it aloud.

Thanks for sharing your unique and potent vision. *Starstruck*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight*Hi Crow! I enjoyed the positive vision of the form of woman and how you weave in qualities like strength, frailty and fascination. It is a lovely reflection of the cover picture I noticed.

It reads like a prose form with its description and reflective tone. Some sentences are not complete but rather phrases that would seem to follow the idea in lines before. eg. line 2 etc. Wondering it that is a part of the prose style. I am used to reading full sentences. *Wink*ad s
I did enjoy the soundscape of the flow as I read aloud as you made good use of consonance and assonance. *Salute*

I noticed you used the word "beautiful" twice and wonder if using variety would be more potent in this short piece to expand on what "beautiful" would be like as it is a general term.

The elevated picture of womanhood is clear in vibe and you leave us to ponder what the "much more"! *Smile* Thanks for sharing this gentle vision.*Star*


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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Fairy* Hey Hooves! So happy I get to review you for I Write 2018! *Delight*

I enjoyed the trek back to Connemara Coast. The response to the prompt is truly evocative and original. *Thumbsup* The title really appealed to me with its haunting vibe and image. Good choice.

The form was well constructed and flowed well. It was a pleasure to read it aloud as your use of alliteration, assonance and consonance with rhyme. The short lines were effective. It was awesome how you have rhymes the same in the first line of the first three verses. Each one has a potent and active image using personification. Well done! *Thumbsup*

The poem paints a clear picture and I could imagine the bells and sunset. The symbol of demons and the aura of grief is clear. Your ending shares a wisdom that sometimes behind the cloud is a lesson of sorts. This was beautiful to read.

Thanks for sharing your original vision that evokes the heart and makes me ponder. *Starstruck*

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Review of The White Raven  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Delight* Hi Ken! Wow! This poem is captivating and I was drawn into the vision. It really speaks to the prompt in an effective and vivid expression.

I enjoyed reading it aloud with its pleasing soundscape and flow. I like the intensity rising in verse 4 and the symbolic raven. Verse 5 concept appealed to me..the notion of our fantasies not seeing reality.

I really liked "hollow echoes" and the word "throes" and the image of crossed threshold as well and the song of "pain's relief". Wow!

I was wondering about the comma before "now lost" but I am not a pro on commas. Does "its" here refer to the raven's"?

I am inspired and impressed as usual by your word wizardry. This vision has strong aura and vivid imagery that touches the heart. *Starstruck*

Thanks for sharing your gift and entering the contest. This rocks!

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Review of Pull the Trigger  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Fairy* Hi BSbyBS.

Wow! This is a gripping tale with a sad twist at the end. I was drawn into the story as you set up a mystery that made me curious. You create intensity and I could feel for Michael. I am still in the dark as to the motivation for the kidnapping and who killed the guy. *Smile*

To make it easier to read on the page, you could use a line space between each person's dialogue. The conversation was well done to show feelings and tell the story. I like how you used italics to show his inner thoughts. I like the image of "said it like an oath".

The title is appealing and drew my attention as it has a strong vibe in its image, a clue to some action in the story. *Thumbsup*

I found the word "quickly" twice and not sure that you really need these adverbs. esp. in "The reply came quickly." In fact, this line is passive language and could be edited out. *Smile*

A dramatic end that indicates to me that the kidnapper had nothing to live for either. Intriguing.
Awesome read that kept my attention. *Star*

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. It is a challenge to write a whole story in few words! *Starstruck*

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Review of Shalom  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight*Hey Jeff! I am happy to review to celebrate you! *Smile*

*Fire*I always loved the sound and concept of Shalom so I was drawn to the title. *Smile* I like how you blend the dark and light theme for the contest beginning with the upbeat concepts and then the images of "fractured" and "broken". The idea of a "positive investment" is brilliant definition. You do not use the actual word "Shalom" but I think the words in verse one and the reference definition in second verse refers to the word. I did want to add the word to the second verse for clarity but it may not be necessary. *Smile*

*Fire*The free verse suits the reflective tone and style as you consider the concept and suggestion of what the world needs to do. In the last verse I felt the need for some punctuation to delineate whether line 3 reads with line 2 or line 4. *Wink* The rest of the poem was easy to follow in flow and meaning.

*Star*I enjoyed the philosophical aspect of your vision. It gives me something to ponder. Thanks for sharing your understanding and inspiration for the world.

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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Review of Helping Links  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Balloony*Hiya Maryann! *Delight* I am happy to review to celebrate you fulfill "a very Wodehouse Challenge as well. *Wink*

*Computer* Wow! This is a splendid looking page of links to help WDC authors as they find their way through a variety of elements like using links, reviewing, writing, posting items etc. I like how you include video links about how to use WDC and one where one can practice using the bitem links so they can gain confidence. *Smile*

I think there are some brand new ones you can add by Cinnamon Fringe as well. "WDC Video Help Desk

*Computer* It is a wonderful resource by "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group and other authors and shows the group's desire to teach others, having it open to all. *Heart* Your intro is colourful and friendly in tone with a brief statement of intent and an invitation to check out the items. I like that the links are available to free membership folks as well.

Thanks for sharing this communtity minded resource. *Star*

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Review of Circus Circuits  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloony* Hiya a sunflower in Texas ! *Delight* I am happy to review to celebrate you and fulfill my computer "a very Wodehouse Challenge as well! *Wink*

*Computer* The alliterative title and image is appealing and so fits your theme.
I like the idea of comparing a mind to a computer and how the mind works, trying to make out computer tech! The line about"lines of light" is brilliant description too. *Star*

Your description of your mind is fanciful and clear with vivid imagery. It was delightful to read aloud with your use of consonance, assonance and rhyme. and the puzzlement in the last lines is evocative! It made me smile as I see that the mind with all its complexity keeps going where a computer can crash and also I thought of how busy a mind can be at night when we try to sleep (another way to crash)! *Laugh* Genius!

Thanks for sharing this unique and well conceived vision! *Starstruck*

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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Review of MY ADDICTION  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloony*Hiya M C Gutpa! *Delight* I am happy to review to celebrate you and fulfill my Wodehouse Challenge too! *Bookopen*

*Computer* Wow! I like the positive viewpoint of being an internet addict and I can so see how using a computer can be a benefit! *Smile*

*Computer*The poem is fun to read and well composed with its rhyme and rhythm. I really liked how you begin with a question and then..answer honestly without denial! As if you want to say "why fight it? LOL It sets us up for your point of view.

You repeat the same idea in the second verse first line and I wonder who you were agreeing with as you alread told us you had the addiction. Is this just for emphasis? *Confused* It seemed repetitive although read with the second it defines what it means. Just pondering. *Wink*

In verse 3, I think "in night" needs to be "at night". *Wink*

I liked the last verse and smiled at the last line.. as many have this idea and yet it is all in how you use the net, I think. *Smile* Thanks for sharing this upbeat expression that inspires us to stop judging our addiction. *Laugh**Star*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Hail Girl with a heartbeat! Thanks for celebrating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's 10th Anniversary with your participation in "Musings and Memories! *Delight*

*Confettib*Oh this is a precious piece for your memoires. The authentic message is shown vividly in instances you describe in the story. I like how you weave and find the connections between your early life and now. Wonderful insights.

I noticed some minor typos : that "life's" needs to be "lives" in the third sentence. And "parent's" does not need apostrophe for plural form. *Wink*

*Star* It was coherent to read and you kept my attention. The part at the end with your son is heartwarming and I can tell it meant the world to you! Thanks for sharing your life and wisdom. It is so inspirational. *Angel*

*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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