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This free verse was a delight to read aloud and envision, a fine response to the prompt photograph. It appeals to my senses as I imagine the scene. Your descriptions are vivid, the vocabulary thematic and well chosen to create the marvel of the picture. Cool to find so many words to describe orange! 
I think a comma or semi-colon after "tangerine" might be good to connect to the next phrase on the poem. Also, a comma after "Illumination" in the last verse as the that lines follow on that one..your use of gerunds keep a flowing imagery, which I like, but it makes no direct verb and subject as a complete sentence.
Thanks for sharing your soft mystical vision of the lake and shore at sunset.I can breath it in as it is so relaxing and enchanting. 
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I was impressed with this Kloang poem. I have never heard of it and wow, it is a bit complex to get the rhyme scheme and make a coherent message. I am not sure I could get one so admire that you did it! 
The writing is coherent and easy to follow and the coloured or bolded parts are effective for emphasis. The big pink letter words are even poetic.
Wow! I really got inside the head of this dragon and his voice is consistent to the end. It was humourous how he wished for a knight to come and put him out of his misery. An astute observation of how the times are so different now. "rescuing clod" made me laugh.
Well deserving of its accolades.
I appreciated the image in the title as it evoked a peace and calm. It is illustrated in the poem as well. I like the contrast of the chaos below the surface. Blue is a cooling colour too. Well done.
The free verse is a good choice and your image of the "blue sheet" in the first verse caught my attention. The flow of the second line felt like movement. The second line of second verse was lovely to read as well. The use of gerund form adds a pleasing aspect to the soundscape.
The last verse seems to break from the images before as it gets more personal as to how the blue effects the poet..to calm the inner termoil. I wondered about the "these shades". does it refer to the calming and the turbulent qualities of the blue waters.
Brilliant notion. Lovely work.
Oh my gosh! You have painted a very sorrowful hopeless picture of our oceans as they are affected by pollution. 
The sadder part is that some of your images are so true and others while they seem predictive may not be far from the truth is we keep on going on the way we are. 
The first line sets the tone and idea that somehow, while obviously there is a reason, without our influence, there would not be. Point taken.
I was really impressed with your Blitz poem that I could read very quickly without a hitch in flow. The phrases made sense and the repetitions really do add to the flow and soundscape of the poem. The two ending lines say it all and is such a relevant element as we see in the news the effect of plastic on sea life like turtles and how there are groups and technologies now trying to turn back the plastic tide effect. The blitz is very well thought out to get this fact to the end. 
I wondered if "Existing" should be "exist" as in the line before it you use "exist".
"Rivers are trashbins" and "Death is coming" struck me as well. So many vital ideas you have woven so neatly into this blitz.
It was a delight to read for its form and your extra instances of alliteration, as well as assonance and consonance really rocked the soundscape as I read aloud. eg. "c" in "can't be consumed", "creatures, cry, etc. "poison, plastic" the "s" sounds, hard sounds like "d" in "dying by destroying" Wonderful! I felt the reproach in the prophetic aura as well and the passion about the topic. 
You wake us up to the issue in a potent expression, the short phrases and images we cannot miss as if they drown us till we cannot help but see and feel your vision. It has a dark tone with little hope in sight. Perhaps the truth so vivid will inspire change. 
The title is intriguing and really relates to the character and the ending of the tale. I so enjoyed reading it and the mystery for him and then for the people the next day, like an ongoing unsolvable mystery. I like that the wise librarian smiled, knowing what the book meant. Brilliant notion about his book too. 
The first line sets the character and the second line is potent to read aloud!
You really showed who Chad was through narration and his inner thoughts and actions. It was easy to read and follow the story in a coherent manner and it was like entering a book where you want to know what would happen.
The use of anaphora here is brilliant choice and serves to emphasize that "he" is a person, the child is the subject and rather gives a shout out to us to LOOK at him. It adds a flow to the free verse. 
The notion of "somewhere" makes me think that this experience of the child is happening everywhere, more often than we know. The images where the child may be are vivid and I liked the adding what I think are positive alone places like "under the willow" or even "sleeping in grass". That he could be a "mirage" and "deep...forever ....water" are potent conceptions. Wow.
The last line made me even sadder and he seems to give up and be passive as after awhile of being not seen, hope dies. 
The free verse suits the emotional content and theme so you could expand and let the words go where they needed to build the picture to illicit awareness and response. Well done! It was pleasing to read aloud with the anaphora and effective use of some assonance and consonance for the soundscape. I enjoyed pondering the vision.
Some notions that occurred to me:
The last 3 lines say it all and the positive light tone of the poem reflects the atmosphere of our site. This is a brilliant concept and I appreciate the effort to get these key ideas into this format. Limericks are challenging I think. 
I love trees so your title appealed to me and it gave me the vibrational character of this Oak tree. I adore the picture and the lovely little design at the top! The look of the page and centering is attractive. Also I don't know much about the Triquint form... so this is doubly cool to check out. 
I was charmed by your descriptions of the tree as it goes through its life journey. In the first verse I could feel the yearning. What a vivid word and way to personify the youngster. Repeating the 'Y' sound here works well too. 
The third verse has a romantic air, which works for the mature age. 
In the third verse suing the time of day to reflect the aging tree is cool and using decay and insects makes natural sense. I could imagine the old wood, holes, and rotting. The images are those we can all relate to so we can easily enter the vision in such a short poem. 
The form is well composed and you did a great job finding rhymes for three verses. It can be challenge to make sense when you have a set ending rhyme for several verses. The refrain endings are emphatic and I felt the last word of each verse made sense for the age of the tree. It took me a minute to get "Gold" but then I saw the tree hoping for that golden time. The syllable count was spot on and again well done on having it make sense. I find it hard when the last line has to be one syllable and have to rhyme. 
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What a lovely vision! I could feel the sentimental tone of loss as well as the appreciation for the expanse of sky and jungle. Using the natural elements as touch stone for the memory of a lost love was a brilliant and effective notion. The little snail charmed me. When the water just washed it away...it reflected the memory of lost love in the last verse. 
In the first line, I think "seemed" should be "seem" to stay in the present tense of the poem. 
The free verse in two line verse suits the emotion and topic. It is cool how you used the prompt words in this way. I liked the reverie as you sit in the jungle.
I enjoyed your unique expression with its short lines in 4 line verse. It is a free style that fits the creative ideas and the repeated lines are emphatic about the more specific tree and effects on travellers. It added drama to the piece. 
I had a great time reading this and connecting with the appreciation of trees. I wondered if the ghaf has a special significance in the desert.
This piece expresses your notion of friendship with a appreciative tone as you focus on the blessings of having a good friend through thick and thin. I enjoyed the positive voice and how you speak directly to the reader. It sparks us all to consider what friendship means to us. I like pieces that make me ponder. 
The use of the wave metaphor is brilliant as waters can be calm or stormy and the idea that a friend can be an anchor. I like the friendships where you can talk things through even if it involves them too. I liked words like "soothing". "confidence of a conquerer" (nice use of repeated "c" too.), "ripples" LIke "ripples" of support. Cool.
It was a calming, inspiring expression and it flowed in a coherent way. I agree with your concepts about friendship here..they are a blessing. I also think honesty is a great quality for a friend too. Sometimes we need some clarity where we cannot see our own flaw in something, 
Oh my gosh! This is so sad and realistic as a theme. I do not think I would to be an astronaut. I recall watching Apollo 13! It takes some courage to do what they do, much like the early ocean explorers I suppose.
The title asks a question that I think many ask. LOL It does seem to go fast. It drew me to your poem even more when I read your tagline with its interesting notion. 
I was impressed with the 5 line stanzas, which are well balanced in rhythm, beat and rhyme scheme. It reminded me of a quatrain and the extra line and your neat rhyme scheme made it unique.