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Review of Paraguay Rocks  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Earth* Hi Neva! Yay! Your poem on Paraguay is wonderful. Good fix on adding a verse too! *Salute* It adds a fun vibe.

*Earth*I love acrostics and enjoyed reading your tribute to Paraguay. You chose key features to show her wonders. I know how tough it is to do this when you have to use the letters to begin. It was coherent to read. I love the added myth references as I have not looked at this aspect. *Smile*

*Earth* I see as you added the last verse, you use "landlocked" theme twice. The second instance is perfect. I wonder in a future edit, if a different adjective could be used in line 2 just for a different image. *Wink*

*Star* Thanks for entering this charming vision of Paraguay!

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*Balloonp**Confettib*Happy New Year Amamda! Yay on your entry into I WRITE 2018! *Thumbsup* Thanks for reviewing my entry!

*Confettib*You really kept me guessing what on earth the watcher in the story was prediciting and I like how you build up the scene. When you added the bit about "every year" I got a sense of how old he must be. Wonder if he was an angel. *Smile* I had to laugh at what they always failed at! Good one!

*Confettib*The jovial setting is clear from the opening line and drew me into the piece and set up the mystery with the man's ominous thought. I like it evoked me to begin to think of terrible things like doom and gloom.

*Confettib* You showed vividly the concern and seriousness of this character and the long sentence style was effective in the telling as it gave it heavy and slow pace considering this was a celebratory setting. I was really into his mood. I loved the image in the last line! *Thumbsup* I like how he really is convinced that everyone will fail again. I hope someone will make him happy this year! It is along time to be watching humanity. *Sad*

One little glitch, I think "sadden" should be "saddened".

Thanks for sharing your flash story with a twist on New Year party! *Star*

Keep the ink flowing and write on!

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Review of Poetry Sustains  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP* Happy New year and Anniversary month Fyn! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Smile*I was intrigued with your title and had to peek in! I so admire that you can create the mirror. I imagine it takes time and planning. My muse would stomp her feet in impatience. *Wink*
The concept of the title is evocative as well and your poem shows the struggle but the joy of poetic life.

*Fire*The images are vivid and I like the child and the skiing on words. Wow! Comparing to Tennyson's lady is effective too. I can really feel the tone here.

*Fire* I enjoyed reading aloud and pondering your evocative and well conceived expression! Thanks for sharing your potent vision. *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP* Happy New Year coming Wordsmitty! I hope you had a great anniversary month. December rocks as so many cool folks joined in DEC. LOL I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Quill*Though I do not blog much, I do read some and always enjoy your newsletter. It looks professional and has an organized and appealing layout. I like the way you encourage bloggers and also invite others to share their ideas here as writers. *Salute*

*Delight*Wow! I never thought about blogs being like the way of cataloguing now. Interesting editorial and I learned that you could manage blog items into categories. Cool. Thanks for the tips. *Smile*

Thanks for all the links and featuring new bloggers too. I am sure they appreciate it. I keep passing on this link so folks can find you! *Wink* I see again the 30 Day Blogging event is up and I.... shudder away. Prompts challenge me. *Shock* Maybe one day...!

Meantime, thanks for all you do for the Blogging and WDC Community! Enjoy yet another year of bliss here at WDC. *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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for entry "Flowing Waters
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy New Year Ken! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Fairy* I dove into your Daily Poem book and found this piece of inspiration. The metaphor of the rock and erosion is very effective image for taking one's time and to keep on going! Reminds me of the turtle and rabbit race. LOL

*Fairy2* The rondeau form is a brilliant choice for the theme as it gives you the ability to emphasize the main point by repeating it, which mimics water's effect on rock. *Thumbsup*

*Fairy3*It is so fun to read with its flowing pace and fluid soundscape. I notice the rhyme in the second verse is not abba. I wondered if it was jsut the way of the rondeau nature.

*Star*I enjoyed this visionary bit of wisdom!

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Literacy  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Elicia! I am back with another review just for you!*Delight* I found this title and thought it was a unique one for a poem so here I am. I never thought of writing about literacy. I can tell from the expression that you do indeed have a love for it!

*Bookstack2*I really like the metaphor of a stream and a world to illustrate literacy. The free style flow fits your personal feeling and opinion of the topic and I like the fanciful ideal vibe. The verse about the different characters and how you invite them all in is cool! I like the alliteration in the action of verse 2 as I can really imagine that image of the writer. *Thumbsup*

*Bookstack3* In verse 3, I think that the word "your fantasy" should be "my fantasy" in keeping with the personal I voice. *Wink*
In verse 1, line two seems odd. You say "endless words" and then "never end". I don't think the last two words add anything and seem out of place to me. *Confused* Unless you are referring to the stream never ending. Then you need to add "that never ends" and that would make more sense.
In the last verse, I felt that the word "where" would suit better than "that creations". Maybe.

*Star*This poem was fun to ponder and I can relate to that sense of escapism into creativity that brings joy of expression! Thanks for sharing your vision and gift. *Heart*

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Review of A House Elf  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Fairy* Oh my gosh! I love that I found this tribute to house elves. How original! I imagine it is based from Harry Potter but perhaps there are house elves everywhere. *Laugh*

*Fairy*You really make a convincing case for the house elf, doomed to a miserable routine. Your comparison to Cinderella is a brilliant one. Their lives are worse than that!!

*Fairy*The last line is a pointing finger for sure!! Good appeal!

*Fairy3* I like the free verse style here as it suits the emotional tone as you tell the tale of woe and guilt trip those who treat them badly asking questions to make them think. Quoting the golden rule of do unto others is a good ploy! *Thumbsup*

*Fairy*I thought house elves were also magic so asking what they can do that other's can't might not be the best rationale to convince them to give them some freedom. *Wink* I could be wrong. Maybe these houselves are not magic like in Harry Potter.

*Star* In any case, this is an entertaining read with a strong voice of rebellion to create a change. Thanks for sharing your creativity! I enjoyed it! Oh yes, This might fit children's genre too! They might relate their lives as they live by adult rules. LOL

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Review of Fairydust  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hey dragon! *Fairy* I could not resist your fairydust and it seems I am on a roll as I have been finding fairy poems everywhere. LOL

*Fairy2*Your acrostic is well composed and I like how you downplay the key letters by not capitalizing them as we usually do. It illustrates your idea of invisibility. Brilliant! *Smile* It is perfect for children's fantasy too with its simple language and the voice that speaks directly to them to engage them. The verbs were well chosen to describe fairy action. The idea of dust falling like rain is easy to imagine.

*Fairy2*You have given the essence of the magic and the contrast of the notion of being "drenched" and that we can't see it is cool! It calls forth our faith in magic. *Wink*
It is easy to read and the punctuation is so effective for pause as the whole poem flowing down is actually one sentence. *Thumbsup*

*Star*Thanks for enchanting us who believe with your vision! *Heart*

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for entry "Come Away with me
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*Heart* Hi Purpleprincess! Back down memory lane and found this wonderfully romantic poem! It really fit the prompt too. The title is evocative and it calls to the imagination to dream about where one might go..physically or fancifully! *Laugh*

*Heart*Your use of rhyming couplets is effective and is fun to read. The rhyme is consistent though the rhythm is more a free flow. The words are well chosen for theme and the way they sound together in instances of assonance and consonance. I especially like lines 5 and 7 for this.

*Heart* The imagery is vivid and I can imagine the atmosphere and loving tone. It is almost magical. I like the idea of singing and dancing on the shore and can enter the vision quite readily with my own details. *Thumbsup*
I think you only need one banner as it makes the page long. *Wink*

*Heart*Thanks for sharing your romantic revery! Keep on dreaming and write as you go on into the new year adventures!

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Review of As One  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Quill* I was drawn to the title and the native theme as I too have native blood though way back in French Canada! I like to write in this area as well especially as the earth walk is so important and the early people still KNOW this. Thanks for sharing a bit of your heritage in this caring way.

*Quill*You have really captured the essence of the knowledge that we are one with the earth and weave in the language and belief of the native culture. The free verse style suits the work as you weave the dream with strong imagery that calls us to listen. The repeated refrain line is so effective at emphasizing the message and ending with a repeated first verse brings us back round to what we need to do.

*Quill* It was heartfelt in tone and calming to read. Your use of some poetic conventions made for a pleasing soundscape to read aloud. The punctuation served the read well too. Well done.

*Starstruck* I was moved by this eloquent tribute to the earth! *Earth* Let's hope the vision and message catches on as time goes on. For it is time.

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Review of Linguistic Stew  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy New Year Dave, fellow December WDCer! *Wink* I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

Oh wow! This is a delightful read and the unique theme is brilliant for the form. I loved "noun Fricasse". Perfect. *Thumbsup* It is a very imaginative image. I got that the "spiced" could refer to adjectives or adverbs. The imagery of the cooking up a story or poem is vivid.

*Pot* The first line was fun to read and a puzzlement as we are expecting food so where would a Thesaurus fit it. The soundscape of that line is appealing. I notice you use the word "taste" twice in this short verse. I wonder if the first instance could be something more expansive to include all the senses rather that just taste. (like savour if you drop "in"). Just an idea. The second instance is perfect. *Smile*

*Star*The epulaeryu form is well constructed and yummy! The title is appealing and I can think of linguine! *Laugh* Thanks for sharing your genius! I so appreciate this vision!

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Fun & Frolic  
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy day krysha! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

*Fairy* I love fairies so I could not resist a peek in here! *Wink* You have captured the essence of fairy magic and I like the use of the symbolic "blue moon" as a backdrop and the lovely image of the dust trail! *Thumbsup*

*Fairy2* I enjoyed the voice that is speaking to the read calling us into the fey realm. I wondered what "It" was in the first verse. I assume you mean the meadow but you used a plural form for "meadows" and a singular for "it". *Wink* Or it could be the moon as their home. *Confused*

*Fairy*The free verse suits the fanciful theme. It was fun to read! Thanks for honouring fairy kind! *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*Happy Day Bubblegumjones! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star* I could not resist checking up on Dr. Seuss. I love his crazy and ingenious way with words. I see you did not mention "The LORAX" which is one of my favourite for its environmental message. *Wink*

*Burstgr*I enjoyed reading your article and it was interesting about POE as well though your intro seems to be more about him. *Confused* I liked the facts you chsoe to include and I had known he had written political cartoons....which unless we lived in the era, we might not have known. Glad you mentioned the one about Hilter. *Thumbsup* I like the story about the bet! *Laugh*

*Burstr* The article was well organized and easy to follow. The list of questions is extraordinary and one might wonder about them as some of the books are quite nonsensical and fun. Kids do enjoy them and they can have strange sense of the ridiculous as well. He made it an art form. *Star*

*Star*This page of revelations does make for great triva!! Thanks for sharing as I am sure many folks do not know the depth of this author!

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Sacred Oak Tree  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Rhoswen! *Tree* I love trees and how sacred they are. There is nothing like standing near a tree and feeling its vibration! Tree hugging is fun. I like how you write this poem as a dialogue with the oak. It reminds me of a retreat I did where we were to meditate on certain questions in each direction and element. I wrote a lot of poem messages. The retreat ended with a sweat lodge and wow! Powerful!

*Treefall3*Using the Oak as the wise one is a wonderful choice as it has that symbolism. The poem is simple as nature itself with clear query. I like how you turn the question at the end...the important query about how we see our self. I would love to know the reflection that the tree gave back.

*Star* The repetition of the name emphasizes the importance of the tree and the personifcation is well done. It was easy to read with a simple effective rhyme. The idea of a "silent cry" is evocative as I think of the tree hearing beyond the words. *Thumbsup* Thanks for sharing this simple inspirational piece. I enjoyed entering into the vision.

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Review of My new career  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp*Hi textual! Thanks for celebrating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's 10th Anniversary with your participation in "Musings and Memories! *Delight*

*Bookopen* Wow! this experience about asking what we want from life is so universal and it is cool how the universe plays to give us chances to reflect.

The tone is personal and I like how you describe a book scout. I have never heard of that job. Intriguing. The style has a variety of line lengths and I think you use some commas where a period might be better for a breath and clearing up run on sentences.

*Quill*This line was awkward to read first time out. "my failed work for somebody else career..." I think it could be simplified with an edit to include the second part .."never a good job.."

*Smile*I like the idea of questioning oneself and getting different answers. I think eventually if one is still enough and authentic, an energy will arise as to what the next step is, even if not a defined role. We are more than what we do. Writing can be part of everything. *Wink*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your journey of self unfoldment. Every choice leads to another awareness, so there really is wrongness. When we have more clarity, we move another step, each time clearing up blocks along the way to knowing. *Smile* Keep writing and keep conversing with your being!

*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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Review of Ireland  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Rhoswen! *Flowerr* You have captured the essence of Ireland with vivid description of both its physical features and its magical lore. I have always wanted to go to Ireland and love its music and poetry! It was fun to read a tribute to your family heritage. I liked the image of the "castles guarding the culture" and the lively picture of leprechauns and the Blarney stone. References to Irish myths add authenticity for sure.

*Shamrock* The end reads like a blessing and has a feel of the Irish magic.

*rainbow**Rainbowr* The poem has 4 line verses in a free style without rhyme. Your use of some instances of assonance and consonance like repeated "c", "l" and "s" sounds adds to pleasing soundscape to read aloud. *Thumbsup*
I think some regular punctuation like commas would assist the read as you use periods anyway. It would be consistent. *Wink*

*Fairy*It is interesting yoyu begin as if you are speaking to Ireland itself and then in the last verse you could be talking to the reader unless you are wishing Ireland the blessing. As you use the word "you" there too. *Confused* To be consistent you can change the first word to "the" maybe. if you mean the last verse to be a blessing on readers from the Irish! *Wink*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your love of Ireland and your father's culture.
Keep on kissing the blarney stone as you write on into the new year!

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Review of Him  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


Wow! You have really captured the life of this character through the eyes of the plant. Your use of personification is terrific and I could really feel what the plant was feeling about this man's life. The picture of a lonely somewhat depressive person is so clear from your vivid detailed descriptions. His caring and hope for the plant shows another layer of his being. The voice of the plant is consistent and potent. *Salute*

I could follow the story with ease and like how you describe the tv etc. with terms as the plant would not knwo what to call them. It makes the observing voice believeable. Your story evokes the reader to feel for the character and hope along with the plant. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your evocative and vivid, creative expression! Wonderful picture.

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Review of lists of names  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC purple rose! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Fairy*I was intrigued by the title of your piece and wow! This is quite an interesting list of names. I was curious as to why you made the list and it might be cool to add a little note about your intent or rationale! *Smile* Did you research them or save them as you came across them? Are you possibly going to use them in stories or as babies names? Inquiring minds want to know. *Laugh*

*Fairy* I've never heard of Bloo, Kais, Jex, Kin or Palm and can't imagine naming someone "Latin". I like Jex as a different name.*Smile* It is a really cool collection. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of My Life's Musings  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp**Holly1*Happy Holidays Jeannie! Thanks for celebrating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's 10th Anniversary with your participation in "Musings and Memories! *Delight*


*Ornament1r*Wow! Thank you so much for sharing your personal memories. I was drawn right into the experiences of your life and can imagine the power and love it took to go through the ups and downs, especially with losses so early in life. I can't imagine losing a mom so young but my dad was ill for most of my growing up, so change and trauma, as you say can be part of all lives. I was very moved by your expression. It was really inspiring to witness how life unfolds and when folks keep choosing to find the light in it all. *Heart*

*Ornament1r*
I noticed a few typos:
"to ever scary movie", should have "every".
"theater's" should be plural "theatres".
"these sad time" I think meant "this sad time."

In "High school life I got .." >>During High school>> might be more grammatical.
I think you are missing the word "I" in "Found other..."
This was a little wierd to read.."Another addition to our animals".... maybe something like "our farm", or re word it to : "We also have two new donkeys.." or something like that. *Wink*

*Ornament1r* I liked the episodes you chose to illustrate your theme. I never liked scarey movies so never read King, and I think I was the one who figured Santa was not real quite young, as the oldest of 6. I think I was 5 or so and had too many questions. LOL Your farm sounds like a fun place to be!

*Starstruck* Thanks for your inspirational memories, certainly treasures that put life in perspective and a testament to the human heart and spirit. *Heart*
*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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*Balloonp*Happy Holidays Queen Owl! Thanks for celebrating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's 10th Anniversary with your participation in "Musings and Memories! *Delight*

*Ornament1r* Wow! What a memory! The idea that the kids could keep the secret for so long is amazing. I wondered why you all thought you would get a whipping when it was rather an accident.

*Ornament1r*The story was easy to follow and the dialogue was well done. I noticed a few tense glitches like in "Trying to be as much help as I can be", "can" should be "could". And in " It was knocked down" should be "had been". *Wink*

*Ornament1r*I liked the drama hook of the first line, though the fate of the dog is given away before you tell the details of the story. I wonder about leaving off after "bantay". then continue with "That dog loved to watch us..trip." Then add a note like, "That day, we were bored inside the house...etc." to connect it more effectively. Just a thought.

*Ornament1r* It is so cool that you thought to write about it now. I am sure lots of things in childhood never come to light. Thanks for sharing your memory. *Star*


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Review of Christmas '83  
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*Balloonp*Merry Christmas Nomad! Thanks for celebrating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's 10th Anniversary with your participation in "Musings and Memories! *Delight*


*Ornament1r*Wow! I so enjoyed this childhood story and entered into the vision with ease. I could feel the excitment of Christmas and felt sad at grandpa's passing. It is heartwarming that you have cherished the gift still and it is a memory that is wonderful to remember. Grandpa's are so special. *Heart*

*Ornament1r* The story was coherent and easy to follow with lots of active vocabulary and strong images. I had to smile at the map of Santa's route. Cute! The word "bene" needs to be "been" though. *Wink* The narrative I voice was consistent and tone was emotional and suited each incident.

*Starstruck* This was fun to read and very inspiring as the magic has continued in your life today! Thanks for sharing your vision and experience. *Heart*



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Review of Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC and Merry Christmas! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Ornament1r*Wow! You ask some serious questions in this philosophical piece and It is a great awareness to know that negative thoughts can colour our world. The voice is clear in its depressive tone as the mind seeks to comprehend. I think we can relate to it.

I notice the need for an apostrophe in "what's" and a question mark after "come too?" The word "too" needs to be "to". *Wink*

I like how you end with the question about us being part of the problem... as I see our positive mind can also effect the world. We can be too easily drawn into the negative of the mainstream. That we can see the effect gives me hope that or awareness can uplift us to create or choose a different manner.

I enjoyed this expression as it gives something to ponder. I find that expressing the dark often empties us to then consider something lighter. Thanks for the wise reflection.*Star*

*Fairy*I keep trying to be the one who breaks molds and choose to be happy. Makes me wierd I guess, but I will risk it. *Laugh*

Peace of the season and keep writing on! *Delight*

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Review of My Secret Name  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Holly1* Peace of the Season Snow. I was flitting around on the Read and Review and guess who showed up? *Delight* Thanks for sharing this little poem about your name. I like the idea of it being your secret as if sacred to you. The image in the last line is profound and I can so relate to it as our souls are limitless! *Smile*

I wondered about the word "of" in the second verse. It puzzles me. It makes more sense with out it or with the word "as" but maybe I am missing something. *Confused* It was interesting that snow descends "through" to get to earth. The imagery and meaning of the name is evocative and deep!

Thanks for sharing an insight into you! *Starstruck**Snow5*

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Review of Never Forgive You  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Alex and Merry Christmas! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


I found this title on the Read and Review page and the title had a strong vibe. The first paragraph of your piece read like a poem or lyric as I heard the rhyme and flow. The second part has more off rhyme words.

I wondered if putting in on the page in a poetic format would make it clear to readers that it is meant as a song or poem.

eg. Perhaps in verses like this:
"I'll never forgive you, after all you have done
You've treated me so wrong, you're clearly not the one." etc.

It has a strong message of how the writer feels and his hope some day to follow the Lord's advice. The voice has a reality to it. The comparison to a "comedy show" is vivid! *Thumbsup* Wow!

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your powerful expression! Keep on letting it flow! *Quill*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Holly1* Merry Christmas Tinker! I'm just popping in to say I enjoyed your entry in the Daily Poem Contest! Brilliant to use a Tanka to tell the Christmas story in a nut shell! *Thumbsup* It was an interesting choice. Using the future tense in the middle and end of the piece is evocative too. How "long ago" "a king will be born" is something to ponder.

The use of consonance with the "w" "g" and "sh" as well as the assonance of Long "a" and "o" creates a pleasing soundscape to read aloud too. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your vision! *Starstruck*

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