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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun*Hail Naveed!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


Wow! You wrote a very intelligent well thought out article about this theme of the roice of Capitalism as you understand it. Your observations are clear and seem to bear out your opinions. The ending line is so true as we have freedom of our points of view and not every one is as consciuosly aware of long term effects.

I like that at the end you bring up the technologies of the age, for as beneficial as some are, the addictive nature of them and the negative power they can exert, as you say, may destroy human connection and individualism.

I found your premise tying Capitalism and Indsutrialisation to be sound and the queries you make are thought provoking as you make connections as to how capitalism has a big influence that is subtle in some cases, and controlling without folks being aware. It is a scarey thought and ahs some merit. The concept of "slavery" is interesting as well.

The arguement makes good points and I feel you have researched and thought about the theme to come up with your conclusions. I like the idea that "owning an Iphone is not the key to happiness". Yet try to take one away from a kid in class! *Facepalm* I think happiness is inside us, we make it, and it can come from giving and receiving together in a contributive way. *Heart*

I really admire your clear ideas and the way you think about these world issues. You have a wisdom and knack for seeing through what many do not see yet. Thank you for sharing your observations and inspiring thought in this well written piece! *Starstruck*




*Sun*Highest regards and Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
*Sun*Hail Naveeed}*Balloonp*
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


Whoah! This tale kept me reading! I like the title as a name for a movie.

The fear and imagaination of Morty after watching a horror movie at night is so well described. Teh setting is clear and the problem that Morty now makes ordinary sounds mean something somber and its reason is set from the start. I like how you show him trying to overcome his fear and make him brave, even at the when he rams the shadow. His overreaction is priceless as you emphasize that in the bolded letters. *Thumbsup*

In "he heard foot prints, suddenly" I would drop suddenly as redundant.

What would "proudly" Look like when he says he will act like in the movies. The adverb does not give me a clear visual. *Smile*

I am not sure the mom would call him "numskull."
A typo in "We flicked.." should be "He". I wonder why he wouldn't have kept the light on in the first place. LOL
Look for where you could tighten up places with less words.
eg> "as he got up to open the lights. We flicked the switch " might be simplified to " he got up and flicked on the lights to see..." *Wink* Maybe.

*Sun*The story moves quickly with intensity as you take Monty and us into the dark to solve the mystery. The twist at the end is brilliant. And we guess the mom is trying to make a point, or the kid does see her that way. Does fiction become reality? *Wink* Priceless!

I had fun reading this and you certainly make a strong case against showing horror flicks to young kids! Some are more sensitive than others. Thanks for sharing your imagination. *Star*

*Sun*Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*
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Review of Hope  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Sun*Happy Birthday Naveed!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Sun*The title is interesting as in the story hope is destroyed. It is evocative.

*Sun*I imagine it is difficult to write a complete story is so few words! Wow! The first line drew me in with its two contrasting vivid images and flow. The idea of birth at the same moment as death is rivetting. I see the name hope as a symbol too as a child born is a positive step for the future even in these circumstances. The outcome in your story is that much more sad for the "hopeful" parents and people.

*Sun*The second line has repeated words (bombs, hope) and I think in a short piece, variety is more potent. The word "righteous" is evocative but does not really give me a vivid picture of who you mean. The idea that the "righeous' are not the same as the hopeful is bleak as we usually think of righeous as being the good guys.
I am not sure how you could tweak it for clarity in such a short prompt.

*Sun*I like reading the story aloud as it has a pleasing sound element of the long 'O" which echos a moaning sound, illustrative of the atmosphere you are building. The verbs "rained" and "obliterated" are avid and stirs up my imagination of what that would look like. Well done!

Thanks for sharing your Tweek! *Star*

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Sun*Hail Gemini Gem! *Delight*
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Sun*The title is evocative and I can imagine all the ways mirrors reflect depending on our Point of view of ourselves. *Wink* Your glyph at the bottom is so true and a wise addition to this piece. The theme is so relevant to today as well. The idea of beauty so many get from others's opinions and collective unconscious. We need to wake up to our own beauty.

Brilliant personification of the mirror and her point of view of Mary. Through its vision you reveal in detail the setting and Mary's attitude to herself. I like how you add bits about how wonderful Mary can be, eg. the knowing good furniture, and her love of dogs, and that she looks fine if she only saw it. Through the mirror I was drawn to feel what the mirror felt as she tried to show Mary her best. Her idea of potions, witch's spells not being so helpful shows her wisdom and knowing from the past, yet her hope that something would work for Mary was kind.

The sadder tone was broken up by comic relief in the cute little dog scene. What fun! It provided a profound contrast. The mirror shows what is and the dog accepts! LOL If only we could all just Be happy, beauty would shine.

The solution to Mary's issue was a lovely idea that the mirror hopes is enough. Changing one's perception has the most power. So one hopes the spell does not wear off. I enjoyed her exeuberance at the end, that mirrored the dog antics before. *Thumbsup*

Thanks for your creative way of bringing attention to this issue. I enjoyed the read and mirror point of view. You did well with the italics where she thought to herself and the jibe about cheap mirrors and the circus mirrors were suggestive! Really show a bit of her own frustration. Her view may mirror anyone who lives with people who are concerned aobut this and down on themselves. If only folks knew how it affects others who love them as they are. *Heart* Well conceived thought provoking expression! *Starstruck*

It has been a pleasure to do a port raid for you. I had fun and was entertained by the wonderful creations from your world. Keep on shedding the light of fun and wisdom! Thanks for sharing your unique gifts.

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun*Happy Birthday Naveed! *Balloonb*
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


Wow! This poem has an evocative title and the words create a stark image. Brilliant hook!

This struck me as a heart-felt and amazing poem with a potent message and point of view that is so relevant. The rhyming couplets are effectively composed and each one reveals a commentary on an aspect of the horrors of the world and how, though we may hear of them and show concern in a moment, we soon go back to our normal world. You really show the essence of how apathetic many have become. Your comments on the "eloquence" and false promises are moving and have a ring of truth in many cases. Sad.

I did notice that the syllable rhythms of the couplets were not all the same so the flow varied. It did create a dramatic effect and did not slow my read.

It was a pleasure to read , though the theme reveals the unpleasant.
The vocabulary was well chosen and thematic and your rhymes were excellent. Interesting words like "hoax" with "blokes" and "next" with "perplexed" are awesome. I so appreciate the time that went into creating this coherent flow and commentary. It is well conceived and your voice is solid, evoking a response of sadness mixed with anger that we are still not getting that we are in this together. *Thumbsup*

I was impressed with this clear opinion piece with its excellent vocabulary, vivid imagery and convincing tone. You make a persuasive case and contribute a wake up call for those who will listen. I admire you word wizardry and concern for the world. *Starstruck*
Thanks for sharing your vision. I do like that idea of the claw of apathy. It really fits. Brilliant. *Smile*

*Sun*Highest regards and Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Review of Fashion Universe  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun*Hail Don Two!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


This title is so interesting and made me curious, especially as it is in the fashion genre. As I read I thought it was an original concept and could just imagine him wearing this amazing suit. He will really stand out!

Your free form poem suits the content and theme and really paints a vivid picture of the man in the store being convinced to buy this strange suit. The way you describe the salesman is brilliant. The comparing his smile with"Piano keys", (ew slick) and the scientific description was hilarious in verse 3! *Laugh* Well done! As soon as he took him to the back of the store..he was like he cued in to a potential customer for these sales. LOL

The verse with the description of the suit of space where you weave in all the elements of space is amazing and I am sure took some time to get it to flow with nice sound elements and coherence. I don;t know if you need the adverb "succinctly". What does that sound like if it was to be more vivid? I think "replied" works. *Wink*

His jubilation at how he looked in the suit was well shown as well.
He really wants to get attention, though at first was not into it.It is as if once he had it on, it was magical. I like how you wove the tailoring language into the shopping trip as well. eg. the measure tape, salesman, alterations, etc.

This was fun to read and visualise. Thanks for sharing your unique vision.*Starstruck*

*Sun*Highest regards and Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*
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Review of They Don't Exist  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun*Hail Gemini Gem!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


Wow! What a great concept for a story that dogs don't exist. I had fun reading the fantasy story and liked that Honey stayed with investigation and interest in dogs.

The story was a pleasant and engaging read as I enter the world of these twins, each with their own interests and personalities. Honey is the main character and is shown vividly through her thoughts and actions. I like how the teacher knew she was a daydreamer and we get to see her from his point of view as well. Her interest in dogs is vivid and a center theme to the story and I have to agree with her when she thought it wasn't quite right that there were none. It made me feel like maybe she was in tune with a time when and whre they were real.

It was cool that she had an kindred spirit in the witch and it made her feel less alone in her "oddness". There conversation was natural and showed her reticence and Edith's practical knowing and experience. I liked Honey's shock at the book abour care. *Thumbsup* Great clue for what was to come. And the solution the witch cam up with was so precious! What a great "job" that would be!*Laugh* The build up of tension as the parents have a meeting and then a serious sounding talk is effective and the idea of an "opportunity" (to match her sister's acceptance at Uni), makes the task seem important.
It contrasts in a wonderful way with the joy and fun of the ending! *Thumbsup*

The descriptions were detailed in a well mixed narrative and dialogue. The voice was consistent and the weave flowed quite well.

I would watch adverbs as less descriptive..."madly", I don't think you need "Suddenly" near the end as when you say "jumped up" it gives us the idea that all is moving quickly...there is a puppy! LOL

In the second last paragraph, you say she "scooped up" the puppy and in the next line you have him "running at her heels" almost at the same time.

I wondered about the line "This alarmed Honey" as in the next dialogue bit you have her thinking in her head so we know she is concerned. I think to not repeat the idea you could almost leave that line out. "serious...then right into the dialogue about
"what could I have done?. *Wink* maybe.

I had so much fun imagining this story and enjoyed the setting that reminded me of Harry Potter. The concept of what makes a mythical beast was cool. I laughed when "unicorns are so..common" there. *Wink* Thanks for sharing your vision and love of dogs! *Star*

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Review of Celebration!  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Sun*Hail Angus!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Delight*I was scanning Satire genre and saw your title. I thought it was a unique one for the genre and it made me curious. *Smile*
The theme of the story, made clear in the first paragraphs, made the title so relevant and humourous too.

The party atmosphere is well shown in dialogue and description of the setting. The concept of reveling for a defeat rather than a successful political event is different and when you list all the things that are over with the "decimation" of the kingdom, it makes sense. You did a brilliant job of satirizing Trump and his reign, comparing him to a dictator.(little seeds of truth may be seen) I like the exaggeration bits and laughed at the "any world" jibe! LOL

The weeping little girl is a wonderful symbol as well as her tears are for the idea of a Wall of separation. The innocence of children would think this sad as less judgemental as some adults.

The deacription is vivid and the dialogue added a personal touch and added drama, allowing for the reveler to add the famous quote at the end. *Thumbsup*

This was entertaining satiric piece and harms none, in the way of freedom of speech and seeing the foibles of man, systems and our perspectives. Thanks for sharing your vision to try to add some light and fun to the world. *Starstruck*

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Sun*Hail GK!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


I found your satirical title and it made me think of times in life when we get off kilter with the rest of the world and the idea of a tuxedo cat in you tag line sounded fun.

I had to laugh at the realism in the first verse. I have had cats! The image is so clear and you set up your affection and dedication to the cat. *Heart*

This was fun to read with its lively vibe and clear voice. It seems like a free style form as not all of the lines are same length for a specific rhythm though you begin with a lovely flow and rhyme secheme. I wondered why in the latter verses you gave up the rhyme. I think consistency here would add to the flow and soundscape. *Wink* I see you have the last two words in the last two verses rhyme so you seemed to change the pattern. *Smile*

Your imagery is vivid and the rhymes in verse 2 are unique and interesting. The question to the cat is sweet and shows the significance of the cat in your life. I love the description "mini-mammalian", alliterative and brilliant!

In the poem you address the cat with the voice ..eg. you, you are..etc. yet in the last verse you go to the third person. To be consistent and add potency it is usual to have the same voice throughout. You could simply add: "you, my sharp...love me..." *Wink* for a quick fix.

The notion of two tone and tuxedo is really cool and made me think the cat was black and white. The comparison to a bowling pin is fascinating too.

Thanks for sharing your tribute to your cat's better fashion sense and your appreciation for this companion. *Star* Well worth tweaking. *Wink*

*Sun*Highest regards and Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Sun*Hail Sookdeo!
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Oh wow! I love watching herons and even today one flew with its long legs stretched out and wings spread, fright over my car as I drove! So It is co cool to find this poem! *Smile*

The poem has a heart-felt sentiment as the poet learns a lesson from the heron.I was drawn into the image and comparison of the one troubled and the heron showing up every day trusting that he is cared for. You words are well chosen and and line 2-3 in verse two is marvelous> "..proceed...seed. The promise at the end is brilliant and touching. A fine blend of the two souls.

The verses resemble quatrains with balanced with consistent rhyme scheme and a 10 syllable count per line. I did notice a couple of lines off: in the blue font verse 3. Lines 1 and 3 were longer. You mention them in your tag line but I am not familiar with continental sonnet and could not find a link.
I am not sure if you meant them to be as the verse itself in emphasized in colour so it may have special meaning. I am not sure I get it just yet. *Smile* It was good to read aloud as you have some effective poetic techniques at play: rhyme, alliteration, repetition of some letters that create an interesting soundscape and assist the flow. My favourite is the second verse. Wonderful flow, vivid image and good enjambent with "proceed". Inner rhyme worked well here too. I liked the picture in the first verse too and its metaphor or the mirror and puddle as a connection to the pond of the heron. *Thumbsup*

You really captured my attention and gave food for thought in this inspirational and hopeful sonnet. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. I admire the effort and time it would take to create the form conherently with it's deep message. *Starstruck* I enjoy meditating with Nature's creatures..it truly is a school if we but see and hear.

*Sun*Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Sun*Hail StephB.
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Sun**Delight*Wow! I was so intrigued by your title as it evoked a strong sound and image that I could imagine dragon wars. Wonderful hook!

*Fire*The energy vibration of the poem is potent and the pace was fast. You really used your form, style and wordings to create the atmosphere of battle and the flight of dragon. Repeating words effectively mimicked speed and sound effects and added to the drama of the scene.

*Sun*The use of poetic devices like alliteration, repeated consonant and vowel sounds was excellent and made the read exciting and fun. Harsh sounds like the "d", "c" and 'g" contrast the softer and longer sounds of "er", "th", "f" and "w" to help create vivid sound. I am always fascinated by how this is done so expertly. I appreciate the effort to conceive the right stuff! *Thumbsup*

*Dragon* The picture is brought to life by the sound as much as by the vivid images. Short lines and phrases create the beat and stops to mimic movements of warriors, and dragons and punctuation served the dramatic read. Well done.

Whew! Thanks for sharing this energetic vision and crafting. I loved it! *Starstruck* Yummy to read.

*Sun*Highest regards and Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Sun*Hail Life lessons!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Star*You have a wonderful gift with descriptive images! I was drawn to this evocative title that flowed off the tongue and sparked my imagination. Your image of the moon/starry night is enchanting It is delicious to read aloud as well. Your use of assonance, consonance, alliteration devices are so effective. Words with short "i", "s", "f" sprinkled through the poem helped create a pleasing soundscape as in "flickering tinsel kissing" and "in gracefully leaving a glimmer". I could read this over and over! Wow!

I so appreciated the the choice of words and images. The idea of "silver's playground" and the simile of the silver spoon are so creative.

Your verses are balanced with consistent rhyme and rhythm. The only line that had an extra syllable was line 2 and it could be fixed by using "kiss" for "kissing". It keeps it active too. The two shorter lines in verse 2 add emphasis and a bit of magic. Good choice. *Thumbsup* I thought maybe the use of "over" twice in verse 2 might be tweaked. I am not sure how you would change it. It does describe the image well.

I loved this! Thanks for sharing this whimsical vision.*Starstruck*

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Review of Writings for Got  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Sun*Hail Life lessons!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Star**Sun*Wow! I so enjoyed your wonderful romantic poem. The title is an appealing image. It is a delight read with a captivating image of this romantic couple in a medieval setting. The dialogue and language help create that era. The Lord was charming and the maid full of innocence. I like how you have them dream and then contrast it with the drama of the surprise attack. It was sad how they left her.
The last verse shows how she connects to the memory. Such an idealist. *Smile* It suggests that deep down she never really thought it could happen. *Smile*

The verses are balanced with an effective rhyme scheme and flow that was pleasing to read aloud. The syllables were not the same in each line but I was not thrown out by any glitches. The first verse drew me into the scene and was so vivid. I like the way it sounded and could see the romantic girl thinking about how gorgeous her dream love is.

I wondered when she says "not ready" did you mean not ready "when we were taken.." If so I think a period would help connect the two verses. If not, the word "when" does not make sense grammatically in the next verse. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing this brilliant expression and your craft. I fell right into the enchanting vision. *Starstruck*

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Sun*Hail Leger!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


You may ask why I am reviewing a Christmas item in the middle of a hot GOT battle field, but your cnote shop just popped up on my favs on the side bar, and hey I could use some cooling off. I have used these notes for Secret Santa, but not reviewed it. *Shock* I am wondering as I saw you edit, that you may have added a couple of cnotes. If so Yay, if my memory is bad, sorry.

Your shop is christmassy and I like the picture in your door way that is so welcoming. Your introduction is short and directs folks quickly. I like how you can do anonymous as that is important for Secret Santa. The prices are very cheap and really serve the season and purpose as players have a month of gifting and could break the bank. These can serve as extras to left people know a gift is coming. I like using them to put poetry notes in as gifts. *Wink*

You have a variety of styles each with their own message. I like how some of them have a note inside about being from Secret Santa. The addition of the last promisary note is brilliant and I think the one I use often as I like to send my own MB and Ribbon gifts... so this is a cool card for letting them know something will come later. The scene is so precious too. It is my fav on the page. *Heart*

The first card seems new to me and I love the warmth the image exudes, not to mention the sweet treats.
The old fashioned SAnta and Elf cards are unique and so glad to see the elf on the shelf gets a place here. His lively Hello would be fun to recieve. The Peace angel card is vivid and I love the red candy canes with the message of "Sweet treat!" Right in keeping with the season. The gleaming eyed Santa is iconic for you Secret Santa activity as you have a sig with it on. Here we do get to send the twinkle in his eye though and that feels like the magic of Christmas. *Wand*

*Starstruck*Thanks for creating this magical cnote shop and Christmas Activity. It is a thoughtful contribution to the WDC!

*Sun*Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Review of Reflection  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Sun*Hail Maryann!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Sun*Wow! Another wonderfully unique creation.
The mirror glyph on which you have written the poem on reflections is a brilliant idea. The pallindrome suits that picture as well.

The poem is composed well to the form. I can imagine the effort it took to get the words to work backwards and forwards and make sense. I like the uplifting vibe and positive message. The image of joy and that thoughts and reflection can bring inspiration is a wise notion.

The repetitive word of "again" is an effective refrain and suggests the cycle of flow of the aspects of the message on the mirror and adds to the pace. It was fun to read with its pleasing flow. The repeating sound of "ion", "ing" and "l" create a lovely soundscape. I like the idea that the poet has a positive outlook on life and herself.

Minimal punctuation is effective here as less punctuation allows for a seemless mirror reflection of the words, with now pausing. Good choice. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing this uplifting vision and crafting! *Star* I have never done this form so I can learn from you.

*Sun*Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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*Sun*Hail Lady Maryann!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Sun*Yay! I found more of your Harry Potter items and really like what you did with this prompt. It is amazing that you put it on a old looking piece of scroll that might have out of Tom's Diary..so it is a great element that adds to the atmosphere of the piece.

The poem is a bit hard to read due to the small script on the banner paper. The hand written script gives authenticity to the theme though. The writing has a consistent rhyme scheme and varied line beats but it did not detract from the message. If you were to edit, being consistent in this area would make it even more potent. *Wink* You have successfully summed up the "diary" story in a few lines. *Salute* Amazing feat. You did a good job with having to change the tense to suit the time line.

I laughed at the rhyme with "Weaseley" That is a tought one, and so fitting for the influence of the diary. I noted only one off rhyme with "Tom" yet the one you use makes the most sense. I liked reading the 3rd line aloud even though you use a long adverb it has a dramatic flow. Reminded me of a mind plotting each step along the way. LOL

I had to smile when you said "good read" in quotes..as it is true but not how it sounds. She liked someone who understood her..but.."LOL Good one!

I enjoyed your creative composition with its original presentation. Thanks for playing in the blog challenge to honour Potter! *Star*

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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*Sun*Hail Lady Maryann!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Sun* Yay! I am happy to find some new treasures to review! Ilove stars so I was drawn to your theme of the Milky way. I like that decorative spinning spiral that attracts my eye. I could get hypnotized. LOL

Your poem was a delight to read with its happy uplifting tone that suggests a wonder at the magics of space. It is well composed in 2 quatrains with a summative couplet. The rhyme scheme is consistent and effective with true rhymes like "twirl" and "whirl" which are my favourites and such vivid verbs to create the imagery. Simple words chosen well to create a pleasing sound as I read it aloud too. Instances of consonance like "t", "m" "w" help create the flow.

The images you create are vivid and I enjoyed the descriptive language like the dancing stars and the last line in verse two. "twirl like glitter" is a brilliant simile too. I could so imagine it.
The "whirlpool" is so cool too. You really have captured the milky way in an imaginative manner.

In verse one I liked the enjambent in line 3 to join with "like glitter". The word "throughout" threw me at first. I know you need to rhyme with "about" and I guess it means throughout the black hole?. so it does work. *Smile*
I see that you are using a wonderful balanced rhythm count of 10 in each line to create consistent format of the quatrain. Nice work!

The mood was light and uplifting with a positive vibe that made me smile. The wonder of a child is what I sense here. Beautiful! *Thumbsup* The invitation in the last line is a great way to engage us to do our own exploration.

Thanks for sharing your bright vision. I had fun.*starstuck* Glad I found your cool new writings. It could also fit in Children's genre. *Wink*

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Wow! This game is awesome and I can see folks are enjoying it so pat yourself on the back! I really like the concept and it puts folks on their toes to be aware what others are posting and self regulating. The rule about you not checking up is priceless. Just like the one about you are on your own and the one that follows it. *Laugh*

The page is simple in black and white and your glyph pictures make a lovely border for a kingdom House. The rules are many and one must read with a fine tooth comb. There is some clarity there and I like how you put things that make me do a double read to be sure. LOL I enjoy the serious tone of the rules mixed with your sense of humour. eg. like "no you can't complain about unfairness."*Laugh*

It is cool that the poetry WC can double (as some poems are short} but your rationale is cute:
post correctly. I also enjoy when you state the obvious in the rule on prompts. (well of course we may not ahve seen the links then so it makes sense, but I still laughed) It felt like a free for all and I imagine folks tumbling all over each other with swords, spears and armor all getting tangled.

You provide a fun, and bit more relaxed way to earn points and people do love a bit of independence. *Thumbsup*

Your categories are varied with the expected poetry and story tasks. It was cool to see the articles and news items for a bit of variety. You have some really interesting prompts there and I appreciate the time it took to create them.

The game is organized chaos and the scrolls are updated regularly enough. Good on you and your forest children! Thanks for creating yet another GOT challenge. You have a gift! *Starstruck*

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*Sun*Wow! Where have you been hiding this treasure? This is truly a unique themed cnote shop! In your simple introduction you reveal your genius and purpose in creating it. *Thumbsup* I like the red fonted title and your friendly tone. I wonder about adding a little Welcome and adding a cover now that we have them if you ever revise this.

Your selection of cnotes is wonderful in scope. Congratulation notes for contest winners, thanks for judges and donations, even an honourable mention cnote *Smile* are available at very reasonable cost! They present a colourful display as I scroll down, each one with an aesthetically pleasing design and individual message. The cnotes are blank inside so gifters can add their own note or particulars.

I really like the swirling backgrounds of the contest notes and the contribution one really pops with dazzle colours. The gavel on the judging one is a perfect choice. I like the authentic wooden gavel. Rose design and hearts are appealing for generosity and gratitude. Well chosen pictures that any one would like to recieve.

This will be going on my favourites as I can see it being very useful and I can easily pass it on.
Yep, definitely worth sweeping off the cobwebs and letting it shine. *Star* Thanks for your creativity and thoughtfulness.

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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Wow! This limerick chain is very potent in its tone and imagery. Limericks are meant to have humour and call attention and in this case the theme is quite serious and sad as you reveal the life of a young girl in China.

*Sun*I so appreciate the effort and time to weave this limerick chain of 8 verses. Your format follows the limerick style in every verse and you carry the story of this girl in a coherent way til the end. The images of her life and her treatment are so vivid and well shown. It was a good read and the vocabulary fit the theme and created a cohesive soundscape. The rhyme pattern was steady and you used all true rhyme, which can be difficult in a poem this long. The tone, voice and tense was consistent to the end as well. *Thumbsup* Words like "lotus foot" and "fetishist" and "mei lin" and the image of bound feet hint at the culture and background. Well done!

*Sun*The last verse sums up the lesson especially its last line. It points to the ideal in contrast to the reality of that time in China. It invites us also to look to our own judgements in our own time and place. Thanks for the wake up call!

*Sun*The poem evokes a sadness and I feel for the girl and see how the judgement works in conditioned society, right from parents. The poem is a relevant and potent response to the World prompt and well executed..Interesting choice of form. What a gift you have.

Thanks for sharing your detailed vision. You have really done your research too. Thanks for the links. *Starstruck*

*Sun*Highest regards and Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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*Laugh* I caught your title on Read and Review! I like the flow of the words and alliterative sound, not to mention the theme. My friend has a state of the art outhouse on her property not liek the one I am sure you mention here. This reminds me of ones my grandparents had when they were young. It also puts me in mind of an old song about an outhouse. *Laugh* Thanks for the memory. so..your poem is evocative already.

This was fun to read and I could almost sing the words. The ode has a rather sad tone as reflected in the image you convey of abandonement, and disrepair. The poem has two rhyming couplets around a single line, which is interesting. It mostly flows well though the last lines are longer in syllables that the first two. Wonder if that had a purpose or could be tightened to fit a smoother consistent flow. *Wink* Or not.

I appreciated reading it aloud as the soundscape added to the flow and atmosphere of aloneness.
The repeated sound "a" in "stands abandoned", "contemplation" and "dank" draw out the flow.
Vivid verbs like "perched" describing how one sits and "installed" help us see the image.
I liked the inner rhyme in line 4 and again the sound and short phrases mimic "broken" sounds.
It is the trickiest one to read aloud easily for flow in the poem.

I really got a kick out of the last line as you draw us in to the sad situation of the outhouse all forlorn and then I wanted to laugh at the reason. It struck me funny. Yet I can hear an older guy's voice just telling it like it is, with a hint of loss as the new generation is moving ahead.

Brilliant ode and tribute to the outhouse. Thanks for sharing your lyrical vision! *Starstruck*

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*Sun*I just saw this cover picture in your port and remember the very picture from the WWW prompt page. So here I am. I really enjoyed you response to the prompt and could see this woman vividly from your description even I had not seen the picture.

*Sun*Your free verse poem captures an essence of her mood as you describe her small movements with the pebbles and weave her features in with the beach environment so seamlessly. It is very evocative as if she is one with the whole. The personification of the ocean in verse one is unique with it's "humming a grey lullaby". How lovely!

*Thumbsup*The personification of the wind and its rhythm and her "tangles" is vivid as well.

*Smile*The last verse indeed sums the harmony of the scene and her actions with the word "duet" and indeed the picture prompt has that sense about it. You were able to illustrate it so vibrantly with your well chosen words.

*Sun*The free verses are balanced and the last one word line of each one works well with the previous enjambents. In the first one I thought ending in "in" might be better but it would break you one word line pattern. *Wink* I noticed verse one was shorter but I think it works in free style.

*Sun*It was pleasing to read aloud with its soft reflective tone and soundscape created by good use of some poetic devices like the repeating "w", "b", "d" "s"etc. and phrases like "flowing waves" and "sailor suit" create a smooth flow that mimics waves and winds.

*Starstruck* I wanted to enter this vision and sit on that beach. Your poem appealed to the senses of sound, touch, and sight. Thanks for sharing your craft and gift.

*Sun*Highest regards and Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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*Delight*Oh my gosh. It has been a long time since I have read Shakespeare so this is awesome! The title drew me it with its archaic language and romanticism and it was appealing that it was inspired by Shakespeare.*Heart*

The love poem was well composed and a pleasure to read aloud. The contrast of lost love with the longing still is bittersweet. The style mimics the archaic poetry and I like the phrases like "doth show", "naught but", and "glorious stain" as well as "enthralled" as they add to the overall tone and reflect the high old fashioned style.

The emotional element was vibrant and one can hear the sigh in the voice as well as its clarity of knowing her heart at the end.
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I thought the flow was smooth and well paced. I enjoyed the sounds of the words as I read and was not thrown out of the read, though I notice not all beats are the same in the lines. I am not sure if this is a strict form yet in essence mirrors the style of this great poet.

It is an amazing and heart felt creation and expresses love and pain of love so effectively. The imagery of the mirror, and "winter edge" is vivid and it is easy to enter your vision. Thanks for sharing your gift! It was a treat to be reminded of this lofty style. *Starstruck*

*Sun*Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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*Sun*I was drawn to the inspiring title of this cool cnote shop that supports the beloved Rising Stars. Your introduction shares the artist particulars and the reason for its creation. A lovely gift from Brooke! when you say each note with photograph is as unique as an individual you were not kidding. Each note is elegant, colourful with a specific flower bloom and encouraging adjective on it. Magnificent display is appealing to scroll through. The prices are very reasonable for everyone! *Heart*

The photos feature a brilliant coloured bloom accented with an elegant script in a matching colour. They are highlighted well as the background elements, leaves etc are greyed in. Excellent compostions that anyone would be thrilled to receive.
That the orchid has the word exceptional is right on. I wondered if when picking the descriptive words, the artists looked up meanings of flowers. *Wink* I enjoyed the Perservering one and the Remarkable flower as well. My favs of the moment. LOL

It would be cool if the names of the blooms could be dropnoted in your opening space.

Thanks for contributing this marvelous artistry in a shop for all to enjoy. I am glad that the proceeds serve a good cause too. *Star*

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Review of Scenic C-Notes  
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*Shamrock*I came across this cnote shop with its alliterative title, which indicates the kinds of cnotes you have. It is marvelous that you took these photographs yourself. They are beautiful and appealing! And of Ireland! I would love to go there and here you have some scenic pictures. Wow! I noticed the fascinating magical cover pic and it brought me here.

The photographs are real gems. I fell in love with the cave, an opening to another land was evoked. Dunluce Castle is mystical too and I could see creating my own poetic message to send with it to friends. I liked how you captured the water in Lover's lane and the Irish Cityscape is quaint. These photos can inspire anyone and can be used for anything as there are no specific messages on the notes themselves.
The prices are very reasonable too. *Smile*

Your introduction is short and reveals the source of the pictures and that they are available. I think the shop is worth sprucing up with some colour and a welcome section. Maybe even some decorative emoticons to give it a friendly aesthetic appeal. Only a suggestion as the photos speak for themselves.

What a wonderful way to show off you talent and contribute to WDC in a meaningful and creative way! *Starstruck* Thanks for sharing your gift.

*Sun* Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*

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