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#4437718

Review of The Sailboat

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Rated: E

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Welcome to WDC Ceredir! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Wow! I enjoyed reading your free style poem where you lure me onto the sea on the sailboat. I was drawn in by your vivid image of the storm in the first verse! Well done.

You captured the experience of the boat being caught in the storm with clear imagery. I could imagine the boat bobbing, oars, hull from your detailed description. It also evoked the idea of the determined boatsmen struggling to make it home.

Words like "bobs:, "plunge" and "creaking" and "all tumult to defy" all help create the pictures. Super! The last verse leaves us to wonder the outcome.

The 4 line verses were pleasant to read aloud for its consistent rhyme and flow. It had a sing song effect as if bobbing on the waves. The choice of vocabulary suits the theme and created an appealing soundscape for reading aloud.

For example the 'K& c" sounds in verse three. etc.

Whew! I hope they make it. Thanks for sharing this vivid vision and craft. I really entered into the storyline and enjoyed the read.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4437628

Review of In Your Eyes

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Rated: E

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Happy Party Time Lady Leo and Welcome to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

What a sweet idea to write to your sister. I am the eldest of 6 so I can relate to this heartfelt poem.

You express with a caring voice and such pride in your sister's being herself. The tone is upbeat as you speak directly to her and share your pride, wisdom, and hope for her in her life. I really relate to your sentiments in verse 4 and heartwarming when you can see yourself in her. I think youngest sisters do hold special place in older sister's hearts. LOL The last verse is so reassuring, as we all like to know someone will have our backs.

The poem is well composed with a smooth rhythm and consistent rhyme so it was pleasant to read out loud. The language is simple and direct and the contrasts of youth and old soul, innocence and cruel, are effective in your message as you express what you observe in her and from your experience of life.

I think your sister would love to receive this! Thanks for sharing so authentically your vision.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4437331

Review of WDC Come Celebrate 18 !

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Yay! Thanks for playing in "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!" ! I am popping in with a short review!

Wow! This is a wonderful acrostic with a celebratory vibe! I loved the idea of "Cosmic..Journey!" Well said.

Your acrostic is well constructed and I like your key word choices, like "literists", "cosmic", and "engaging". References to key elements of WDC like Rising Stars, contests, writing, art and talents are well woven into the poem so it gives tribute to our site.

The decorations on the page give it a party flair too. The image of a sunburst is really cool as I see WDC has radiated on the web for this many years as a milestone! Good choice.

I see the last part of your acrostic is the number 18 but the phrase you use works with out having to use the numbers as a key with a note beside it. That would be a challenge.

Thanks so much for sharing your joy of WDC in this forum and with our community. And it is your first time at our party, so imagine what you will see in the coming years as you add your flair to the site! It is authors like you who make all the difference!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4437305

Review of Pelican Cove

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Rated: ASR

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HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

Happy Party Time Than Pence! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I had enjoyed your Lobster poem so I am jumping into Pelican Cove!

Another delightful read that kept my attention right to the end. I like the western theme and it is comical to think of the birds dressed up in cowboy hats. LOL The idea of them helping found the site is original...or is there really a myth? You create quite a vivid picture of the event that apparently is carried on in a later time. Your last line was awesome and again I had to laugh.

The poem seems to be written in rhyming couplets though two verses have four lines put together. Is there a reason for this? It flowed off the tongue smoothly as I read it aloud and some of your rhymes were cool, like "sticks" with "transfixed", "birds and turds", founders and flounders" (really funny idea! so apt.) The images were so clear. I could imagine the dive bombing and the waddling through town dressed up. "feathered horses" too funny! Brilliant conception.

Not all the lines had even rhythm count and it did not detract from the read. I was entertained by the story line.

Thanks for sharing your talent and this comical tale. I had fun!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4437287

Review of Cathedral

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Rated: E

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Happy Party Time SWPOET! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Oh how delightful a concept about trees being like a cathedral! I love it as I am a tree hugger! Your poem really has a deep, meaningful message and the contrast with how man uses, destroys and yet have awe for them. I think it is because nature totally accepts us and receives us without judgement. Who else really does that? But the creator of all.
This is brilliantly conceived.

The free style serves the theme and reflective tone of the piece. The repetition of the second line at the end is effective for emphasis and completing the circle. The consonance of the "c" sound in the poem is effective as well. The alliterative "w" and hard "d" sounds add to the appealing soundscape as well. "beneath, feels, and trees" does as well. Without rhyme these devices bring so much to the overall effect and flow of the work.

The only word that sticks out is that long adverb in the middle, yet I do not know what you could use to get across that words do not do the unexplainable justice. LOL

Thanks for sharing your potent vision and craft. It is a real tribute to trees and inspires us to ponder!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4437279

Review of #BlackScreen

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Happy Party Time Carol! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I love limericks and this is a fine model of the form. The topic is unique and unexpected, which made your title of interest.

The limerick is fun to read and made me laugh. You create a vivid image of the problem with computers in writing. I liked the rhymes and the notions of "shooter" and "suitor" and "cosmic blandness". Excellent and original!

I did note that the lines in the form did not all follow a consistent pattern like 9,9,6,6,9. or 8,8,5,5,8. You begin with 9 ( you could make it ten by adding "a" before "computer" so it flows better) Lines 2 and 5 are 10 anyway in the first verse. The shorter lines should be the same count.
In verse 2 you have the 9, 9, 7,7 and then again a 10! You likely know this..but just is case. LOL
Now while this element is not exact, it did not throw me out the enjoyable read and humour of the theme. It is quite entertaining and I thing when using more complex words it would be a challenge to get it to fit the form. The laugh is the thing.

Brilliantly conceived with a pleasing soundscape and flow when I read aloud. I am impressed as I do not do these well.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4437273

Review of Africa! Africa!

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Rated: E

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Happy Party Time Pony Tale! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Wow! I enjoyed reading your vivid vision of Africa in this quatrain like poem. I like the refrain that reminds me of a lyric and it gives the impression of the poet's appreciation of Africa.
Each verse portrays a detailed description of an aspect of this country and it was easy to feel and see the landscape so lovingling expressed.

The weave was an absolute pleasure to read aloud that I couldn't help read it a number of times. Beautifully rendered with effective rhyme and flow. The keen use of assonance and consonance created the soundscape that enhances the flow and sense appeal. eg. the "p" in the last verse, inner rhyme and 'g' in third verse, h in second verse and lots of 's". Awesome composition.

It feels like you know the landscape intimately and are able to take us with you. The personification in the last verse and other places is perfect! Images like the "sky's liasons" and
"night pounces" are evocative.

Thank you so much for sharing this sacred vision and your excellent crafting. It is a wonderful tribute to Africa.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4437074

Review of Through the Eyes of A Child

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Rated: E

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Happy Party Time pretty35! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Wow! This is a sad and moving story that expresses the tragedy of a abuse child. Your vividly capture the situation and what might go on in a child's mind during this experience with her mother. I like how you include the notion of mental escape, as it is a valid one. How else could one endure?

The voice of the child, told from her point of view is potent, and I know that the adult poet has put words that the child at the time would not have known perhaps. Even "Mentally escape" may not be a child expression. To give her the voice is powerful. The contrast of the beauty in her dream and the real life is so vividly described.

You capture her hopelessness in the metaphor of swimming with no where to go and not lighthouse. Brilliant metaphor for the situation. Her puzzled queries echo through the piece even from the first "what did I do now?". So sad that the pill bottle will be the legacy! The hope that her action will wake people up makes me wonder how many others thought this. I like the significance of the 8. I would take out the word "guess" and keep the statement bold and direct here.

In the last line I notice a typo "lie" should be "like" I think. The narrative is coherent and easy to follow with a intense vibration that prompts our emotional response. Well done!

Thanks for sharing such a heart wrenching vision of a reality, often hidden.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436803

Review of One Way Ticket

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Heya Jeff! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I missed this round of the contest I think ... the picture is dark and familiar anyway and your poem picked up the idea of the ferryman! I remember the myth. LOL Your title is excellent for the theme and punch line at the end too. It made me smile after the dark image you portrayed earlier in the poem. Wierd me!

Your etheree is well composed and flows coherently. I think it is a challenge to do! Your rhymes were thematic as well as true rhymes. You did use "sea" and "undersea"....not sure if repeating is the best, yet in this case it works well. It does provide a contrast as the boat is above on the sea and the...deathly ones from under now that I study deeper.

I was drawn into the flow with the first lines...reading aloud is a delight with the "s" and "d" alliterative quality. The consonance of d and b produced harsh tones that fit the atmsophere. The first word is like an inviation or soft command...and then we realize the direction. LOL Well written.

Your etheree fit the prompt in a tradtional way and the fact that the girl is looking back made your last line even more potent. She may be hoping to go back. Thanks for the vision. I think I will go back to the happy party now!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436796

Review of Light

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Rated: 13+

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Hiya Sophy! Happy Party Time! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you!

The title drew me in as we are all light and I was curious! I enjoy cinquains and forgot there was a mirror one. It is interesting how many forms do have mirror aspects. LOL
I think the concept works well with the theme of light..as I think of reflection.

Aw! This is so romantic a vision and I could enter right into the dream. The dashes that split the lines in each verse really work for pause and drama. Good call. The enjambents there were effective too. The imagery of the dancing light and the touching in verse two are vibrant ones. Wow.

The mirror cinquain form is well composed and the pictures both occur in the lighted space. A nice comparison of the light playing and then the poet playing on the sleeper. Brilliant! The punctuation served the read well and I was not thrown out by any glitch.

Thanks for sharing this lovely vision and your craft. I enjoyed my visit very much.
Keep on shining at WDC with your unique flair!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436788

Review of Meta/Paradox

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Yay Jeff! Happy Party Time! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you!

Wow! This is so fascinating and well conceived.. I love it!! The title lured me first as it is so different. So good call as now I got to see your genius.

Your tanka is well composed with exacting defining images in words! Taking each of those lines as a first line in the free verse poem is brilliant. Your expansion on the meaning of each brief thought was enlightening and filled with engaging imagery. The idea of card game and "bete noir" is amazing. I so agree with that last comment. I study Haiku and it is more than just syllable count. LOL {and the desceptively so..is right on!)

The poem was pleasing to read aloud with its effective uses of poetic techniques. eg. "indelibly entwined", "nuanced structure". I liked reading it aloud a few times! The first three lines of the last verse really appealed to me too in content and poem form.

Your tanka rocked in its conciseness and concluding line! This is going on my favs.
Thanks so much for sharing your crafting here. One can learn alot from your explanation that does not sound dry but flowing in a warm and rich fashion. Impressive piece.

Light on the path as you write on! Keep shining as you continue to bring your flair to WDC!
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#4436772

Review of Animated Cnotes

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Yay! Happy PARTY Time Leger! I am popping in with a short review to celebrate you!

Wow! This animated shop is one I have not seen or passed by, likely because I am not Premium and thought I could not use them. And I do know they can only be sent to Premium authors. Still I missed out sending the two promotion stars! I am sure some folks who were promoted may have been Premium. LOL Those are so celebratory!

The opening banner is brilliant and inviting with its flair! You have a good variety of messages with illustrative glyphs. It is handy as the basic ones like thank you, happy birthday and friendship are ones most may look for! I like the little book worm! The Dream one is magical and is awesome for inspiration of the muse. The firefly in the jar is fab!

The cost is reasonable for animated notes and I like that the message in on the picture and the cnote is blank.

I am glad I found this and will put it on my favourites. Thanks for all the inventive contributions over the years! Keep on shining!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436688

Review of Consulting My Muse

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Rated: E

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Hiya Snow! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you at 'I Write in 2018'!

Wow! This is an amazing expression and the theme really appealed to me. The title establishes the theme directly.

Your composition of the La Tuin is well conceived. Using the word "ode" as one of your rhymes is cool and gave me a feeling of old world. I like the words you found to rhyme with it too! The syllable count and strange ryhme pattern is intact, though I see you use the same word "mode" a couple of times. It does work with your theme and it is a challenge to create this form. I struggled with it myself.

I appreciated reading it aloud with its inspirational aura and tribute to the divine as muse! The problem of choosing theme and writer's block are apt examples that writer's can relate to, and revealing your answer gives us all hope. Seek higher!

Thanks for sharing your vision and execution of this unique form! A lovely tribute to Baha'u'llah. Good Luck in the contest.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436683

Review of Fyndorian's Desk

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Rated: E

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Happy Party Time fyn! I am partying with a review to celebrate you!

This title of your folder is awesome and so fitting for the theme of a writer's tomes presenting within! The banner with the old desk rocks! What a treasure. I love desks! Can't have enough of them even if only need one! LOL

I appreciate that you also wrote a poem to headline your folder. It makes visiting so inviting and is an appropriate way to signal what we will find in the folder. In it you express what writing means to you in an eloquent and heartfelt way. Your imagery is vivid and the significance of writing is shown to be paramount. The image you create at the end of what would happen without writing is moving and potent! I had to smile. I can relate in a way as I can really let a lot of stuff go when I express it out on the page! Saving grace at times.

The free style suits the theme and flows well when I read aloud. Your voice is strong and authentic. The idea that an old desk inspires is wonderful and I can relate to that too. Muses are everywhere..and the vibe around a desk can spark magic.

The folder is well organized and I like the collections of poetry in folders by year written! Titles like Beribboned Hutch and The Locked Cabinet are appealing and creative. What fun!

Thanks so much for sharing your gift of words here at WDC through the years. This folder is a spectacular testimony to your magic!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436676

Review of Poem For Our Site

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Rated: E

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Yay Maryann! Thanks for being the first to enter "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!" ! Here I am with a short review of your bit of magic!

WOW! Your acrostic poem has a celebratory vibe and the page is so decorative. The poem is well composed and I so admire how you not only have the key letters at the start of each line, but also at the end! That is a challenge to do and keep a coherent flow. Great job!

Your poem has captured the essence of WDC in a few short lines and I am happy to see the word "magic" as WDC is filled with authors' musings! Expression is surely the magic in us all. To have a place to post our gifts in a caring space and develop friendships with like minded others is also magical and something to tribute as you do in your last line!

I enjoyed reading your well conceived acrostic with its positive tone and vision of WDC in a nutshell! Thanks for your participation and love of WDC.

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436612

Review of Happy 18th Writing.com!

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Rated: E

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Yay Jim! Thanks for playing in "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!" ! I am popping in with a short review!

Wow! What a brilliant tribute to WDC. I love the originality of the voice and speech pattern in the acrostic format. The way you included the number 18 as part of the key words is amazing. I was wondering how to do that myself and you made it make sense.

Your composition is excellent and you even made the lines rhyme! Quite a feat really! "heard and third". Your ideas just popped. I appreciate how you got personal with the sharing. eg. your jokes and being here 8 years etc. Leave it to you to figure our the math.
I would have maybe say YAY at the last line for more energy vibe then Yeah... but maybe it means the same. LOL

Honouring the creators was a nice touch and your second line rocked. I had to laugh as I could also hear the connotation, "that's right" too! Good one!

I really enjoyed your entertaining and heartfelt acrostic! Way to rock it! I am so glad you came by. Good luck in the contest! It will be a tough one to judge. LOL

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436577

Review of Angel-Witch Bingo!

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Rated: 13+

Hiya Webwitch! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I love the delightful name of the Bingo, with the contrast of angel and witch. Co-operative leadership leads the way!

The game page is simply laid out and easy to read. The introduction is inviting and I like the witch cat host!

I appreciate the way you use different fonts and colours to break up parts of the instructions as it makes it easy to focus, especially as you have lots of details. The rules are clear and I like that it is easy for everyone to play, especially with so many writing and reviewing tasks this week. Nice for a break!

Thank you for creating and continue to provide entertaining contributions that build community and bring fun for all! Happy Party Days!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436562

Review of Texas Cow Patties

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Hiya Kenzie! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Ok! I was still wandering your port for your anniversary and had to check this vivid image in your title. I am familiar with cow patties so I laughed to think about a recipe to make them. LOL And I take that TEXAS patties are special. A comic attractive title.

Your narrative little story of your experience with the original patties and how you came across a recipe is delightful! It seems fated!

Wow! The recipe looks absolutely scrumptious and it was unexpected as thought it would be hamburgers! Great surprise! I love chocolate chips and never thought of putting corn flakes into anything!

*ballonb* The recipe is well laid out and easy to follow. Thanks for adding the temperature as it is lower than I usually do with cookies. I wonder approximately how many cookies one recipe makes.

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#4436549

Review of Radio and Vinyl Respect (17 Lines)

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Happy Party time Thing! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Wow! What an original and evocative title for a poem that tributes Aretha Franklin! Brilliant! Interesting fact about the date of Aretha and Elvis' death being on same day, same month.

This is a very unique free style composition with a voice dreaming of the past...yours and the deaths of american idols. The records are a potent symbol and the notion of the "needle stuck in the past, turning imagination in place" is a brilliant line.

You capture the essence of a memory in a vivid description of scent and sound. I like your style. Thanks for sharing your tribute and memory in this way. The call of fall is symbolic too. Good job!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436533

Review of 18 IN EIGHTEEN

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Happy Party Time Carol! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

Congratulations on you Quill Nomination for this complex and relevant contest activity. The page is attractive and laid out in an organized way with subtitles and use of colour to highlight and add flair.

The rules are clear and detailed and I like how you have unique titles like "how does this work?" and "You may.." It is very professional in its tone and elements. Giving the judging criteria and how to post and reminders not to edit once posting are notions very useful to know.

The prompt is clearly given in several ways and adding some ideas from Max is so enlightening to keep potential players on track. I was happy to see that poetry is part of the fare so the contest can include poets as well.

I notice you say authors can do multiple entries as long as we pay the fee. Does that mean one can do two poems, or a poem and a story..eg a variety of items. or refers to genres?

Having entrants gift an entry fee with part of it going to RAOK is a great contribution to WDC, fulfilling one intent about seeing that everyone can be here! It is cool that some will go for prizes and even the judges will get a gift. I like that enveryone can be included for their efforts.

This is a stellar creation and I see you have some awesome entries. I will be back to play! Thanks for dreaming this up and hosting the contest for us, and Raok.

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#4436530

Review of Potato Chip Cookies? Of Course!

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hiya Kenzie! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I could not resist the title of this recipe as it sounded like an odd use for potato chips! It is intriguing and the question mark would be the reaction of most of us on hearing the idea! I wonder who thought of it.

The narrative sets up the recipe with a personal reflection and how baking is a great family activity and the recipe is an easy one for quick entertaining purposes.

The recipe is easy to follow with detailed directions. The base of the recipe is made up of regular on hand items and makes use of old potatoe chips, which one crushes up. I still can't imagine it. LOL I like how you add an alternative type of chip by sharing a friend's trial with corn chips. That would be a different taste.

I guess the only way to know is to try it out. Not that I have chips too often. Thanks for sharing this oddity. I will pass it on to some family who may like to give it a go. Kids will love it I am sure. Even the idea will be something to talk about.

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#4436511

Review of Winter's Whispering Wheels (13 Lines)

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

Happy Party Time Thing! I am here with a review to celebrate you!

I could not resist the alliterative title and was thrilled when I saw the piece was about your dog and cows!

The imagery is so vivid and amazing and the alliterative phrases fill the air as I read it aloud. A lovely piece to read. You portray waiting for spring in a way that appeals to the senses and the words weave a spell. I could imagine the dog movements and the cows going home for the night. I appreciate the contrast of the quiet with the train disruption and the allusion to people's lives in comparison to the simple truth of nature and her creatures.

The dream at the end is captivating! I do wonder if animals wait too. LOL Thanks for sharing this wonderful alliterative marvel. I had fun!

Light on the path as you write on!!

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#4436507

Review of At the Seabeach

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Happy Party Time Maryann! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

WOW! This la Tuin Poem is amazing! And its theme is so timely at the end of summer. You always have a knack for themes. I like the combo of nature and a child on the beach! Brilliant looking page too with its colour, glyphs and picture relfecting the theme.

It was pleasant to read aloud and relaxing to enter into this vivid vision of idyllic landscape filled with sights and sounds of summer at the beach. Images were clear and the tone was lively and evoked a sense of fun and light heartedness. So like you!

The form is well composed with the rules intact and some use of assonance and consonance made for a wonderful soundscape. The title relays the main theme of the poem effectively. I liked your personification of waves chasing the child and sensual appeal of your language.

I am so happy in this vision! Thanks for sharing your craft and joy! Way to go in the contest. Yep it is getting to be a challenge. LOL

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436472

Review of She Made an Appearance

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Happy Party Time Maryann! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I love the image you paint here of the sun rise in your envelope quatrain! Great entry into the contest. The bright colour and cover piece reflect the theme brilliantly too and add an aesthetic aura!

The vibrant verbs like "peek", lurk and dare are direct and active. It was pleasant to read aloud with its fine use of repeated letters and sounds like the 'K" and the "ee". You create a vivid contrast between the light and dark elements.

The envelope quatrain form is well composed with its rhyme and flow. I liked the strength is words "dark" and "embark" and the personification of the sun is striking. The change from timid to full power is well captured.

The one glitch for me is two adverbs in the first line... generally adverbs are not as descriptive and poetic as solid descriptions. I think the word "peeked" gives us the idea that she is being slow and careful. Also the word "beautifully" is plain as well. I know you want to make her shine powerfully. What words would relate to the sun's radiance...and I do see you are trying rhyme with the first line. "brilliantly", brightly
radiantly, regally, etc. Just to enhance the vision of her power.

Thanks for sharing your vision of the sun shifts. I enjoyed playing in your world. Thanks for playing with me in the contest too!

Light on the path as you write on!
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#4436446

Review of The Boogeyman

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Welcome to WDC C. YARN Weaver just in time for WDC 18th Anniversary party! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

I love nonet form and your composition is awesome. The title certainly indicates something dark and your poem describes this creature vividly.

The atmosphere is tense as you lead the reader into the vision..like a nightmare. The images fit the creature and it is scarier to think he is talking to his son. The similie "like cold glass" is effective and I do wonder what A 'strange" feeling is. The last line bolded emphasizes the command.

The punctuation assisted the read and flow and the intensity grew to the end. One might expect a BOO! which is reflected in the command LOOK. LOL Creepy!

Thanks for sharing this eerie vision, so clearly in so few words! Great work on the nonet form, which can be a challenge!

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