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for entry "A Lifetime
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Snow3* Hi Tinker! I am happy to review your item in "I Write in 2018!" Whew! We are almost done the activity! Good work! *Salute*

*Snow2* I enjoyed reading and reflecting on your vision of a lifetime. The images are vivid and the message is wise, directing the reader as to how to best spend time. You incorporated several units of time and my favourite was the "blink" and the "sprint". *Smile*

*Snow5* The flow was pleasing to read aloud and the lines 2, 3 and 4 rather mimicked the lengths of time in their structure and speed. Well done! *Thumbsup* "Long marathon" had a pleasing sound too. I liked your use of "whatever time granted" as it enhances the idea of not knowing how long we have..and adds a meaningful "present moment" to think about. *Thumbsup*

*Snow2*Interesting use of "complete" with "rest". It gave me pause. I get the idea that each day one will have nothing to regret or left undone just in case.

*Snow5* The choice of free style fit the tone and concept and was clear in its intent and message. Thanks for the reminder of how precious time is. *Starstruck*

Happy Happy December and Holidays!*Candycaneb*
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Review of Balancing Act  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Sun*HI Ken! Here I am with another review for your winning pack in "WDC- Wonder Deluxe Carnival. *Delight*

*Sun* As an astrologer I could not resist this one! You really captured the essence of Libra with vivid details in a celebratory tone that pays tribute to the sign's qualities. *Thumbsup* The title is fitting too as Libras do spend time sitting on the fence to consider all angles and look to balance elements. The glyph shows the scales of the Goddess Maat who judges the heart of a soul.

*Moon* The quatrains are well composed and fun to read and I enjoy how you intersperse them with couplets in italics to add the poets commentary on how the aspects occur to him. Brilliant and so entertaining to the end.*Smile* The question about belief draws the reader in and it is cool when you notice how it fits you. It can be amazing at times, even though there are lots of variables in a natal chart that can make every LIbra a bit different. *Wink* The political commment was cool too...Law and justice don't mesh! I had to smile at a good reason to give up tv.

*Star*The piece was easy to read for flow and the rhymes were effective. The use of words like "zenith" and "harvest" is awesome to denote the time of year. I like how it focusses on the positive traits of the sign as it is a tribute piece. LOL

The plural for Libra in "Libras" as "Libra's" is possessive in "that Libra's embody". *Wink* I like the french phrase! Perfect.

*Sun*I enjoyed your summation in the last verse and your positive comment in the couplet at the end. Entertaining creation and well researched.

*Starstruck*Thank for sharing your Libran vision and craft! You rock!

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Review of Humble Pi  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight*Hi Ken! I am here finally with reviews from your winning package in the "WDC- Wonder Deluxe Carnival! It is great to visit your port again. I found this mathematical treasure and thought the title was brilliant.

*Calc*You have a gift for composing fine quatrains filled with details on the subject matter. You really know your facts and wove the tribute poem effectively. The rhyme scheme is consistent and the chosen words interesting. The vocabulary suited the math concept and it was fun to read aloud. Your use of consonance and assonance added to the pleasure of the read.

*Calc*It was fun to read phrases like "physics to statistics" and the i in "tires that you ride on"! Wonderfully vivid. *Thumbsup*

*Quill*Though the syllable count is not even, it flowed well. The only line I found hard to get into a flow with the rest of the poem was line 2 in the last verse.*Wink*

*Calc*The poem has a celebratory vibe as you reveal the importance of pi in everyday life, even if we do not know it. I had to smile at the last line too! Awesome creation.*Star*

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft as well as educating us about pi! *Laugh*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Balloony*Hiya Hooves! *Delight* I am happy to review to you as part of Princess Megan Rose 17 Years 's winning bid for our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group package at "The Four Seasons Auction!

*Cat*The title is appealing and drew my curiosity. I can so see the kitty on the ledge hiding. Cool! You paint a vivid picture of the first view of snow and the personification of the cat is well done.

*Cat* It was fun to read aloud and follow the kitty's actions. While the rhythm was free style the rhyme scheme was effective. I thought the only unpoetic kind of words that threw me out were "unexpected", eventually and "remarkably". I think it might sound better without those words. *Wink* Just a thought. They do make for a flowy sound.

*Cat*I could really get into the kitty's head and the felt the warmth of the home. I was glad the cat did not go out and playing with the dog sounded fun for her.

*Star*Thanks for sharing this charming picture that captures the heart of the matter. *Wink*

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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Review of Street Music  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Balloony*Hiya Hooves! *Delight* I am happy to review to you as part of Princess Megan Rose 17 Years 's winning bid for our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group package at "The Four Seasons Auction!

*Dog1* What a neat idea for a poem. I could so visualize the sweeper with the hyper dog! *Thumbsup* The quatrain was fun to read with its effective rhyme scheme and had the feel of a lyric. The tone is uplifting as well and your vision of the pair being "debonair" is a striking comparison to how we normally see a street and strays. Brilliant and original tribute! *Starstruck*

*Dog1*You really chose some interesting and vivid words to rhyme. I enjoyed the read.

*Dog1* The one part that felt off was the first line as it did not really connect to the second. Took me awhile to get it. *Wink* I wanted to change "seemed" to a more direct verb "was" for clarity.

*Star*Thanks for the entertaining vision. You have a great imagaination.

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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Review of Trash Island  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Earth*Hi Genipher! I am happy to review your entry in the 'I Write in 2018" activity. *Delight*

*Earth*The title is appealing as it paints a picture and made me curious. I could imagine a pile of garbage with all of its different aspects include how it might smell! Yuck! *Laugh* It made me ponder about the environmental questions. It was a cool surprise when I read the piece that the idea of trash island was actually positive. Neat! *Thumbsup* Even more curious now as to how that would work. LOL

*Earth*The short piece of writing gives a really interesting and unique prompt for a story and gives a challenge to the imagination. The Bermuda triangle element gives a potential author lots of room for the wierd or wonderful to occur.

*Earth* The composition was easy to follow and provided enough scope the who, what and where elements of a potential story line. The question at the end is directive in intent with the words "survive" and "alternate dimension". It could indicate a sci fi, paranormal, fantasy, adventure in terms of genre possibilities. The sky is the limit! Good job. *Star*

*Smile*Thanks for sharing your visionary idea.

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for entry "Marie Of Romania
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Tiara* Hi Megan Rose! "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group is touring our Around the World Ports and I found this lovely essay on Princess Marie! You did a really good job of highlighting who she was and her bio. I had not idea she was actually more powerful that the king, yet I imagine it does happen at times that the woman have stronger skills. I admire how she adapted to the foreign land. *Smile*

*Tiara* It was easy to read the essay and it flowed in a coherent manner. I sensed a tone of admiration for this person as well. The choice of topic and vocabulary represented the country effectively! *Star* Thanks for sharing your vision and adding to our collection of World items.

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Review of Dawn Breaking  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Balloony*Hiya Quest-YELLOW-Thanks Schnujo ! *Delight* I am happy to review to celebrate you. This is part of your package in the "SuperPower Animals Auction for Charity! Thanks for your generosity.

*Fairy* Wow! This is a wonderfully vivid picture and appealed to my muse. With a potent tone and clear descriptive images it was easy to enter your vision.


The free style suit the theme and emotional content and it was a pleasant read in its flow and imagery. The image of the palms swishing and dark "molested" by the air is brilliant and original. I could imagine the sapling and the "jeweled net" was appealing. *Thumbsup* I was charmed by the weave and the comparison.

I think the word "unbelievable" is not as poetic as some of your other descriptives....not as real. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your gift and vision. I enjoyed your world. *Starstruck*


Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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for entry "Black Moonlight
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Witch* Hiya Tinker. I am happy to review your poem for "I Write 2018"! *Delight*

*Moon* I enjoyed the theme and your images are vivid enough for me to easily enter the vision of the night and witching hour!

*bat* It was a pleasure to read aloud with its wonderful soundscape. Assonance, consonance and alliteration tools are well chosen. I really liked "gossamer ghosts" and the motion of "merges" is effective. I can also imagine the wispy clouds crossing the moon. LOL

*Ghost* The form of tanka is well composed and the topic is a unique one for the form. It was fun to read with its imaginative picture.

*Jackolantern* Thanks for sharing your clear vision and craft.

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for entry "Beyond
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Fairy2* Hi Tinker! I am happy to review your poem in the I Write in 2018 challenge! Isn't it fun to do these 24 syllable poems? You shine! *Star*

*Burstr* The title was intriguing and I like the idea of the enigma of the theme labyrinth..it could go beyond to the unknown! Brilliant!

*Burstg* My imagination was inspired by the word "golden labyrinth"! Good hook! The contrast of imagination and madness is interesting and valid too. The verb "threatens" adds potency to your image. I like how evocative your concept is as you leave room for the reader to add their own vision. *Thumbsup* Deep stuff.

*Delight*I had a thought of the mind being a labyrinth as well with its many facets.
Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. I enjoyed entering your labyrinth. *Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight*Hi Carly! I am happy to review your poem for the I Write in 2018 Challenge!*Smile*

*Fairy* Wow! I enjoyed reading this weave aloud as the soundscape was interesting and the ideas appealing. I would like a place where these essences abound. The free style suits the theme and content and I like how you do use a bit of rhyme and alliteration in a free way.

I thought maybe you could drop one and in the second last line as you use one in each of three lines in a row and it makes it a bit run on!.*Wink* The image words "frolics" and "flirts" are mravelous and the heavy words of "unencumbered" etc really give a sense of that feeling! Nice contrast with lighter feeling words! *Thumbsup*

I notice a couple of periods. I wonder about using punctuation consistently or even not at all. *Wink*

I like the idealism of this place of dreams. Lovely response to the prompt! *Star*

Thanks for sharing your vision! Keep writing on! *Quill*

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Review of WRITING DOT COM  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Cake* Ahoy! Thanks for entering the "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest! to celebrate WDC's 18th Birthday! *Balloonp*

I enjoyed your acrostic with its clear format and treasure of WDC qualities noted in each key letter of the relevant key words. Well done! *Salute*

The tone is positive in its tribute with some appealing vocabulary and images like "opulant oasis" and "treasured traditions". You really capture a broad view of what WDC entails. It was fun to read aloud with its effective alliteration! *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your vibrant vision and craft! I loved it.*Balloong*

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Review of Writing Dot Com  
Review by eyestar~
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Cake* Ahoy! Thanks for entering the "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest! to celebrate WDC's 18th Birthday! *Balloonp*

I enjoyed your acrostic with its invitational tone. The idea of addressing people to come on in and discover WDC fare is so unique and you make it sound fun to join! *Star* The short lines and imperative invites of what to do is well conceived!

The key words are relevant and the energy vibe is celebratory and positive in its tribute to our home site. I smiled at "our corner of the net"! Wonderful read.

Thanks for sharing your vibrant vision and craft! *Balloong*

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Review of Birthday Wish  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Ahoy! Thanks for celebrating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's 10th Anniversary with your participation in "Musings and Memories! *Delight*

What a thoughtful tribute to WDC and their creators! I like how you included SM and SMS and the idea of WDC as an author's home. You create a picture of authors, their purpose, hopes and queries and how this site has been so influencial in allaying fears and supporting writers. *Thumbsup*

The acrostic key words are relevant and the concept of wish fits with the the theme of author's hopes for a venue to share! *Cool* The only glitch for me was the over use of "selves" in varying forms, though could add to rhyme. *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your unique vision! *Balloonp*

*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Jeff! I am Happy to review this for I Write in 2018 Challenge!*Delight*

I really enjoyed reading this flash story. I thought the wisdom of the father was so sweet and you did a great job with the unexpected twist there. *Thumbsup* It was not the reponse one would expect. I laughed at the comment about the ladder! Talk about aiding the rebellion! Cool!

The piece was well written and the situation was a relevant one for teen rebellion. The title really fit the essence of the message too. I did wonder about beginning the piece with the first bit to dialogue to attract curiousity and start with drama rather than describing why the dad would be surprised. I can see that it would be necessary...but maybe placed after a more engaging opening. *Wink*

The dialogue was engaging and revealed story and the relationshipm showing that it was a close one. I think your use of the prompt words was creative too...the idea of a shell here makes sense. *Thumbsup*

It would be so cool if more parents could have this kind of relationship with teens. I like the idea that the responsible girl...could have balance and the dad was open to this. *Heart*

Thanks for sharing your vision!

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Review of The Sailboat  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Ceredir! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


Wow! I enjoyed reading your free style poem where you lure me onto the sea on the sailboat. I was drawn in by your vivid image of the storm in the first verse! Well done.

*Fairy*You captured the experience of the boat being caught in the storm with clear imagery. I could imagine the boat bobbing, oars, hull from your detailed description. It also evoked the idea of the determined boatsmen struggling to make it home. *Smile* Words like "bobs:, "plunge" and "creaking" and "all tumult to defy" all help create the pictures. Super! The last verse leaves us to wonder the outcome.

*Fairy*The 4 line verses were pleasant to read aloud for its consistent rhyme and flow. It had a sing song effect as if bobbing on the waves. The choice of vocabulary suits the theme and created an appealing soundscape for reading aloud. *Thumbsup* For example the 'K& c" sounds in verse three. etc.

*Starstruck* Whew! I hope they make it. Thanks for sharing this vivid vision and craft. I really entered into the storyline and enjoyed the read.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Abby Gayle! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* What a cool variety of cnotes! They cover friendship, thanks, get well, welcome and anniversary! Something for every one! I like you cover picture for the shop..an original glyph interpretation of cnotes... they are like a song! LOL

*balloop* Your introduction is so inviting as it engages us with questions, proposing why we might require a note. Wow! Good to know they are home made. I was wondering if you are the creator. I like that it has the feel of a catchy add with the ideas in the forth line. *Thumbsup* In a nut shell sales!

*Balloonp* The cnotes are vivid with easy to read messages on the pictures. I love the dog one..sharing sticks is hilarious and I know some dogs won't. LOL The WDC anniversary one made me laugh!! Such an expressive rabbit! *Laugh* The Welcome note is sweet and the message about soaring so fits our WDC experience...getting our talents out there! I laughed at HAY and I knwo several folks who would love wolves...just find some one who needs to feel better. *Think*

*Balloong* I had fun reading these notes and they are reasonably priced. I want to send that dog one somewhere.*Delight* I will be adding this to my favourites so I can find it easier. *Heart* Thanks for sharing this cool contribution to WDC! You rock! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of In Your Eyes  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Lady Leo and Welcome to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* What a sweet idea to write to your sister. I am the eldest of 6 so I can relate to this heartfelt poem.

You express with a caring voice and such pride in your sister's being herself. The tone is upbeat as you speak directly to her and share your pride, wisdom, and hope for her in her life. I really relate to your sentiments in verse 4 and heartwarming when you can see yourself in her. *Heart* I think youngest sisters do hold special place in older sister's hearts. LOL The last verse is so reassuring, as we all like to know someone will have our backs.

*Star*The poem is well composed with a smooth rhythm and consistent rhyme so it was pleasant to read out loud. The language is simple and direct and the contrasts of youth and old soul, innocence and cruel, are effective in your message as you express what you observe in her and from your experience of life.

I think your sister would love to receive this! Thanks for sharing so authentically your vision. *Heart*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Raccoon Haiku  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Happy Party time Dominique! I am popping in with a short review! *Delight*


*Balloonp* Wow! I love the sound effect of the title "Raccoon Haiku". *Laugh* How clever to use the scientific name and how you weave interesting facts about raccoons.

*Balloonp*I see you have used the 5-7-5 syllable pattern in the 3 line verse and have two images to compare: the masks and nursery. I am not sure this would be technically named a traditional haiku as it is missing a cut line ... but it is so inventive and original. I really enjoyed pondering on it with its clear images of black masks etc. The first line is poetic image for sure! *Thumbsup*

*Quill* I wondered why you used the word "group" with nursery as the idea of a group is inherent in the word and meaning of "nursery". *Wink* I am not sure what else you would put here...it just seemed to mean the same thing. A minor consideration. And drop the capital letter on "The" as haiku only uses it with Proper nouns.

I loved reading the poem aloud as you have done a wonderful job with the soundscape using repeated letter sounds especially "K" and "N". Well conceived! *Thumbsup* The last line provides a synonym or connection to the masked ones in line one.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your rendering of haiku, this evocative vision so appealed to me! Well done.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Yay Sharmelle! Thanks for playing in "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!! I am popping in with a short review! *Delight*


Yippeee! This is a a unique acrostic giving praise for WDC. You even got it to rhyme! That is no small feat! *Salute* The key letters are bright and large on the page so the message of birthday really pops.

*Balloonp* Good job with the format and even getting it to rhyme. I like the way you wove personal experience and hope of growing at WDC. IT is a fine way to tribute. I laughed at the line about being better writer..without a crayon! *Laugh* Brilliant!

I think the word "threw" in lines 11 and 13 should be "through" to have meaning with the next lines. *Wink*

*Balloonp* The message was interesting and highlighted some aspects of WDC that you find awesome, the activities, friendship and writing. I liked line with the I -"I bet it was hard...".
and how you dealt with all the E's and how you show your own participation as a newbie...as a tribute that the site is magnetic and fun! *Thumbsup*

I was confused by your last line as I would have thought..."cannot" would have been "can" if you are asking whether , with so much going on here, do you think we could leave it behind. The way it reads , it sounds like you are asking: do you think we cannot leave you behind? *Wink* Must be a typo. Also it is a question, so a question mark would be good. *Smile*

*Star*Thanks for sharing you vision and jumping into the party mood and contest with flair.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Yay! Thanks for playing in "Eighteen Candles Poetry Contest!! I am popping in with a short review! *Delight*


*Balloonp*Wow! This is a wonderful acrostic with a celebratory vibe! I loved the idea of "Cosmic..Journey!" Well said.

Your acrostic is well constructed and I like your key word choices, like "literists", "cosmic", and "engaging". References to key elements of WDC like Rising Stars, contests, writing, art and talents are well woven into the poem so it gives tribute to our site. *Thumbsup*

The decorations on the page give it a party flair too. The image of a sunburst is really cool as I see WDC has radiated on the web for this many years as a milestone! Good choice.*Smile*

I see the last part of your acrostic is the number 18 but the phrase you use works with out having to use the numbers as a key with a note beside it. That would be a challenge. *Think*

Thanks so much for sharing your joy of WDC in this forum and with our community. And it is your first time at our party, so imagine what you will see in the coming years as you add your flair to the site! It is authors like you who make all the difference! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Shadowfall  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Party time Papadoc! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonr* Guess who popped up on the Random Reads? How lucky can I get...and it is a haiku, a form I so enjoy and continue to study! *Heart* The title, though Haiku tend not to have titles, is evocative and gives a clue to the mystery of your haiku. I know we add titles so we can keep track but I have read that old haiku just were numbered as titles give away the meaning at times. The idea is to have the reader just ponder the poem and find their own conclusions. *Wink* yet it is easier to find with titles around here.

*Balloonr* I enjoyed the flow and image of yours and smiled at the end. The last line gave an alternate consideration to the tripping! It is comical too!

*Balloonr* I see you used the 5-7-5 method of syllables, 3 lines and the topic concerns a natural occurance. *Thumbsup* I think in the best haiku, sentences are not used but rather phrases. Also haiku are observations in the present tense moment, comparing two things. I notice you begin in present and go into past. *Wink* I took a class and it blew my mind at how I was not really doing haiku..but the way we learned in school...which is kind of watered down. LOL

*Balloonr* Still, the overall effect of the poem is expressive and the imagery is vivid. I enjoyed entering into the reflection as I can imagine the shadow spreading out depeending on the light. It would be funny if we tripped on it. LOL

*Balloong* Thanks for sharing this delightful poem. I had fun! *Star*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Pelican Cove  
Review by eyestar~
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Than Pence! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*I had enjoyed your Lobster poem so I am jumping into Pelican Cove! *Laugh*

*Balloon*Another delightful read that kept my attention right to the end. I like the western theme and it is comical to think of the birds dressed up in cowboy hats. LOL The idea of them helping found the site is original...or is there really a myth? *Shock* You create quite a vivid picture of the event that apparently is carried on in a later time. Your last line was awesome and again I had to laugh. *Thumbsup*

*Balloonp* The poem seems to be written in rhyming couplets though two verses have four lines put together. Is there a reason for this? It flowed off the tongue smoothly as I read it aloud and some of your rhymes were cool, like "sticks" with "transfixed", "birds and turds", founders and flounders" (really funny idea! so apt.) The images were so clear. I could imagine the dive bombing and the waddling through town dressed up. "feathered horses" too funny! Brilliant conception. *Star*

Not all the lines had even rhythm count and it did not detract from the read. I was entertained by the story line. *Salute*

*Balloonr*Thanks for sharing your talent and this comical tale. I had fun!

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Eagle Eyed  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Ann Ticipation! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*Wow! I love to watch hawks and have seen more of them here than eagles! The awe inspiration is the same though so I am thrilled to find this poem. Your observations are interesting and I like the originality of sharing them by asking the eagle questions! *Cool*
I wonder if the eagle is an animal totem of yours. I think it is so cool that you saw them in South Africa! How amazing! And yep, I guess even eagles have fears!

*Balloon* It was fun to read the flow of questions in verse form! Your rhymes were effective and the tone of inquiry, curiousity and wonder is quite present. It has a child like vibe.

*Balloonp* I had to laugh when you asked about status..as if he would care.

*Balloonp* I wonder if you need a comma after "soar" in the third verse. I stumbled with the meaning and had to read again. I wonder if there is a more vivid word than "beautiful" and I was puzzled that the beautiful side would not include the power of its claws. I liked the odd wording of "all country side scour"! Good catch to get that word to fit the rhyme though it is a long line. *Wink*

*Balloonp*The flow is not even in each line but it did not detract from the read and my interest in the content. Thanks for sharing this tribute to the eagle as you merit it with intelligence by speaking to it. I loved it! I am inspired to try this kind of poetic reflection as I watch deer all winter. Thanks for the musing.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Cathedral  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time SWPOET! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*Oh how delightful a concept about trees being like a cathedral! I love it as I am a tree hugger! *Heart* Your poem really has a deep, meaningful message and the contrast with how man uses, destroys and yet have awe for them. I think it is because nature totally accepts us and receives us without judgement. Who else really does that? But the creator of all. *Heart*
This is brilliantly conceived.

*Balloon* The free style serves the theme and reflective tone of the piece. The repetition of the second line at the end is effective for emphasis and completing the circle. The consonance of the "c" sound in the poem is effective as well. The alliterative "w" and hard "d" sounds add to the appealing soundscape as well. "beneath, feels, and trees" does as well. Without rhyme these devices bring so much to the overall effect and flow of the work. *Thumbsup*

The only word that sticks out is that long adverb in the middle, yet I do not know what you could use to get across that words do not do the unexplainable justice. LOL

*Starstruck**Tree* Thanks for sharing your potent vision and craft. It is a real tribute to trees and inspires us to ponder!

Light on the path as you write on!
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