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for entry "* Estranged...
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*Sun* Happy Summer ruwth! I am happy to review your contest entry for "I Write in 2019!"

*Delight* I admire those who can write stories and kudos to those who can write a story in a few words! Wow! The title is evocative and draws attention and my curiosity as well as gives a clue to the theme. Good choice. *Thumbsup*

*Fairy2*Gosh! In 75 words (yep, I counted!) you portrayed this experience of estrangement so vividly. I could feel Teedy's sadness at the beginning, her hope when she got the letter and her disappointment at the end. There was a finality to it with the chosen end words. I felt the door close and now hope that Teedy will just move on and realize that her sister has her own road and may realize the loss eventually.

It was interesting that the sister sent a note near her birthday...as now she is the one who made a contact. *Think* It shows she knows her sister might still care *Heart* and not able to deal with her own stuff yet. And it can give Teedy the knowledge that her sister is still out there.

*Quill*I enjoyed the read even with the long sentence structures. It seems realistic as a situation too! Thanks for sharing this clear vision in so few words. *Star*

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Review of Photographs  
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*Delight* Welcome to WDC! I am happy to review to celebrate you! *Star*

Your poem reveals a vivid image! I could imagine the poet looking through the photos... a fine symbol of the memory of a life. Your descriptions of each photo a clear and alive and it is easy to gage the emotional tone. *Thumbsup*

You did a great job of drawing me into the reflection through time and the ending was dramatic and showed even in death the two were so in love. What a fine tribute to this couple. *Heart*

The free style was a perfect choice and it was a pleasure to read and muse as the poet does, as he lingers over the photos. There are some effective uses of assonance, consonance and the bit of rhyme. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. *Starstruck*

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Hi Tim Chiu! I caught your poem on the Read and Review and happy to review to celebrate you! *Delight*

I enjoyed reading your verses aloud for they flowed smoothly with fine rhyme and effective sound combinations. I liked the constrasting thoughts and emotions you convey as you consider love and lost love. The idea of the inner child being able to see past it all is lovely.*Thumbsup*

The one thing I noticed is that you begin and end the poem with the "I" voice and in the middle you speak to us with "you". The second verse threw me out a bit though the imagery is vivid with the ship and the commentary is potent. Is it the same I who has the eagle eye? I feel it would be more coherent if you continued to use the I and My. eg. My emotions become... etc. *Wink* maybe.

I like the reflective tone in the middle with its wisdom and the ideas of the "treasure chest" and inner child. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your vision that inspires one to ponder and to consider the power of forgiveness. *Star*

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Review of Moths  
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*Treepine*Greetings! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest! *Delight* Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

Wow! You observe lots of images in this haiku poem and I could imagine them. The last line is potent imagery and I enjoyed the soundscape of the piece.

Haiku compares only two contrasting images and has an aha turning point for the reader to make a discovery. I think you could use the campire and the moths as contrast and leave the peepers for another poem.

As a three line poem the picture you capture is amazing with the music image and dancing moths. Thanks for honouring Issa with your entry. *Star*

Good luck in the contest! *Shamrock*

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for entry "Bumble Bee
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*Treepine*Greetings! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest! *Delight* Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

*Bee*What a lovely image of the bumblebee. I liked the action word "drilling" as it gives an interesting strong image! *Smile* The turn of phrase "so deeply the wood" is unique and evocative.

*Bee*Your haiku has the traditional format though you do not need capital letters.
I like the contrast of the bee flying and the sound of buzzing.

*Bee* Haiku compares two images and has an aha turning point. I did not feel that strongly here.
I wonder if you needed to use the verb "flying" as you have a verb in the next line. *Wink*

*Star* Thanks for this wonderful picture of the bumblebee in the woods! Good luck in the contest! *Shamrock*

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for entry "Orb's Web
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*Treepine*Greetings! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest! *Delight* Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

*Spider* I like the comparison of the dew and rainbows. I could make the connection to the light catching the dew and creating rainbows. Lovely cut line and aha moment. I find that part of haiku always a challenge! *Salute*

*Spider*The one glitch for me is the word 'Orb". I assume in means spider and in haiku the image is usually real rather than something vague that we may have to guess at. To me orb means circle so "orb's web is a bit confusing. *Wink*

*Spider* The haiku form and intent is well done. I would leave off the capital letters as few are used in haiku.

*Star* I enjoyed entering your vision in this minimalist haiku poem. Great tribute to Issa!

Good luck in the contest! *Shamrock*

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Review of My Bedfellow  
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*Treepine*Greetings! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest! *Delight* Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

*Bug*I so relate to your image of mosquito although I can hear them farther away than my ear especially at night! LOL I like how you address the mosquito as if you are speaking to it in the first line. *Thumbsup* I am sure Issa would agree.

*Bug* I did wonder if the second line could be less of a sentence as you use one in line one so that it flows like a phrase, line one and two together. Even dropping "it is" would work. I have found it is sometimes easier to get a clear flow with less syllables too. *Smile* We are so used to the strict 5-7-5 format.

*Bug*Thanks for honouring the insect clan in the way of Issa!

Good luck in the contest! *Shamrock*

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Review of Yellowjackets  
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*Treepine*Greetings! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest! *Delight* Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

*Bee* Ouch! I can certainly enter into your vivid account of this encounter with bees. Your haiku follows traditional syllable count, has a vivid nature image and caught my attention.

*Bee* The first two lines present the situation. I might have had the ouch in the last line for effect and for us to imagine what happened as haiku usually has an aha moment. The haiku could have just had the mowing the grass and yellowjackets in the last line...as the readers could then enter in and discover what may have happened when you mowed the nest. *Smile*

*Bee*The last line does give a contrast and yet I would assume it happened after the jellowjackets bite. So in that case it takes us out of the ONE moment that haiku generally observes. *Wink* Still, you give the cure for the bites. I learned something.

*Bee*Wonderful choice for an insect haiku and tribute to Issa! I had fun playing in your vision.*Star*

Good luck in the contest! *Shamrock*

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*Delight**Quill* Hi Tatsuyakemi! Thanks for your entry into our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group mini challenge. *Star*

*Quill*It was interesting to learn some of the beliefs and customs of the Ainu people. I do not know much about this culture. The passing of the string is sweet. I wonder what it meant. Was it for luck?

*Quill* In the last line "deads" should be "dead". I think you made a typo. *Wink*
In the ritual of the bears line, did you mean that they killed the bears to send them back to the original world? I would break the line into two lines. eg. They sent them back..." I wonder why they did this.

*Smile* I would love to know more details about the Ainu.

*Quill* It is interesting too that in most ancient cultures Nature plays the divine role. I think we need to get back to looking after the Great Mother Earth. *Heart*

*Quill* Thanks for sharing this cool information.

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*Delight*{size"4} Happy Solstice Jeannie and thanks for entering into our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group writing challenge! *Salute*

*Quill* I enjoyed reading your tribute to indigenous culture in your area! It was interesting to learn about the names of places. I did not know that "rice" was one of their verbs. There is a Rice lake near by here too and I believe it was Ojibwe country at one time. *Wink*

*Smile*I like how you add details about cultural foods and customs as it adds an educational aspect. Sharing your own experiences gives the essay authenticity and reality. I didn't know they had such spice food. *Think* Your commentary makes me want to visit the museums there. I love history.

*Sun* The essay was easy to read and follow with a nice mix of story and fact.

The beginning of your 4th paragraph threw me a bit as it seems disconnected. A quick edit to something like...
I celebrate Indigenous People Day by....turning on...to watch...dancing. I found out that..."*Wink*

Also, the paragraph about food also talked abour music and the line was long. I know you were bound by the Word count but I can see adding more details about the music in its own paragraph.

*Star* I had fun and learned a lot from your piece! Thanks for sharing.

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*Delight* Happy Summer Solstice Lisa! Thanks for entering our Power Writing challenge! *Sun*

*Quill* Wow! It is so cool that you have so many real memories of your native heritage and ancestry. This is a lovely memoire piece and I like how you added information of early native culture that helps explain how your grandmother and first nations feel about the land. *Heart*

*Quill* I notice a few commas that I think should be periods. eg. after "tribe" and " hard life". I don't think you need "but" before "just not as dark as". *Wink* We have some native ancestry way back as we are French Canadian. My dad and my sister got that fabulous dark hair too!

*Quill*You really capture how, even in your time, natives were judged! So sad.

*Star* Thanks for sharing a part of your heart and the gift of your heritage.

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Review of Kevin Locke  
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Hiya Prosperous Snow! Thanks for taking on this week's Power Challenge! *Delight*


*Quill* It is so cool to find out about this hoop dancer and that his art is dedicated to Baha'u'llah. *Smile* Thanks for the link to his awesome craft.

*Quill* Your poem captures the essence of this artist and I like how you describe his intent and his gifts. "poetry in motion" is right on!

*Quill*The free verse suits the informative nature of the piece. I wonder if the goal quote count be split into two lines just for the look of a poem on the page. Cool idea to add a quote.

Thanks for sharing your vision and gift. *Star*

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*Delight*Welcome to WDC becca! I am happy to review to celebrate you! *Smile*

*Fairy* Wow! You really express this behaviour very potently. The notion of someone feeling the need to be all things to all people can be a common one until we wake to the fact that we do not need to gain approval by being always the one to be there. Self care is essential. The metaphor of the glass is brilliant. I recall trying to live by other's expectations and giving it all. Then I learned to say no when my energy was not up for it. Some folks get upset at my no but real friends know that we can't do it all.

*Sun* What if we are the leading ladies of our own life and can choose a yes or no and balance our energies? Boy I can sure relate to your paragraph and feelings though. Thanks for sharing your insights. It is a great way to let it all out. *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your writing. *Heart*

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Review of Drunk at Dusk  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Fairy* Welcome to WDC Prometheus! I am happy to review to celebrate you. *Delight*

*Smile* I love sunsets and your title is wonderfully evocative. Your short couplet poem captures a brilliant description of the sunset in its various phases. *Thumbsup*

*Sun* I enjoyed the image of the gods and the last line is so original in "sinks to the bone." The colour words are well chosen and the flow was effective as I read it aloud. The rhyme scheme is consistent and the last verse has a longer syllable count that the other two verses. It is still a coherent whole.

*Fairy* Thanks for sharing your vivid vision and craft.*Star* Keep on writing and have fun.

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Review of Downhill  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight*Happy June Soldier_Mike! I am happy to pop in with a review for you!


*Snow4* Your title is evocative as after reading your piece I thought of sliding down hill and also of the old saying of it's all down hill from here after a certain AGE! (which I do not buy into at all.) *Laugh* The look of the piece on the page reminds me of a snow hill too. Awesome creation.

*Burstr* The contrast of feeling between the child and the elder is effectively expressed using the natural symbol of snow and the experience of sledding. The first few lines lured me in with the free space and the assonance of your chosen words. The wide open sound of "a". I liked "us" and "rush" too.

*Bursty*It is so true, when parenting is done, we long to be kids again...and be free with grandkids without the "parent type of responsibility". LOL At least, so I have heard. *Laugh*
I enjoyed the philosophical edge to the poem as well as the longing for that old feeling of eternity...

*Star* Thanks for sharing this fine vision that inspires us to ponder. Let's keep playing while we can. *Wink*

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Review of Broken  
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*Star**BalloonB*Welcome to WDC Delora! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Delight*

*Burstp* Wow! This short paragraph has a potent sadness to it as you share your experience with loss. The title is perfect for the theme and feel of the piece.

*Thumbsup* You show the contrast of the happy moment with the stark reality. One can really feel the poet's sadness though the exact nature of the promise and how the child was lost to her is not stated directly. *Star* It made me curious.

*Bursto*I noticed a couple of typos: "iI wake up" and "the biggest a Mommy". I am not sure what this means.

*Star* Thanks for sharing your first item with us. Keep on writing and heal as you go. *Heart*

Keep on Writing!*Smile*

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*Treepine*Greetings! Thank you so much for entering the "Haiku Hunt Contest! *Delight* Here I am with my brief comments on your shining entry.

*Bug* Yay! I love fireflies and stars so I like the way you weave them both into this short poem. I can imagine the brighter night as the flickering fireflies flit about. The image of a spiral is vivid. I will have to observe more closely next time to see if they do spiral up. *Delight*

*Bug* I am not sure you needed to mention summer as I relate to fireflies as a summer creature so it could serve as a kigo.

*Bug* A glitch for me would be your overuse of sentence structures. I can see the first two lines connecting and wonder if you tell too much in the last line...as you don't give me the chance to get an aha..and come to a perception myself. Just saying something like "shining stars" at the end would let the read enter into her own pondering. Maybe. *Wink*
I know you are also being true to the old 5-7-5 which can be confining at times.

*Dragonflyb* Still, the scenic image you portray is vivid and complete and the lines are pleasant to read aloud with some effective use of assonance and consonance. *Thumbsup*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your vision in honour of Issa.

Good luck in the contest! *Shamrock* and in the Contest Challenge!! *Bigsmile*

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*Delight* Hey Tinker! I am happy to read your entry as part of "I Write in 2019"! *Carv*

*Carr**Laugh* Oh I totally get the vibe of this experience of car hunting! Ahh!
Sounds like it worked out for the poet. *Smile* You really captured how the person felt about the old car.

*Carb* I had not heard of this form until the Poet's Place email and have not had time to give it a go so it was fun to read your dynamic model of Shoelaces! Interesting names folks give to forms. *Think* It really has a distinct flow with stops and starts and the rhyme scheme is complex. Well planned for effect. Hard to have a rhyme pattern with only 11 lines. LOL the word "way" is all alone. *Wink*

*Carr* I am not sure of the need for a comma after "compromise" as I paused and then it seemed that it woudl naturally flow into the next line. *Confused*

*Carg*I liked the dramatic effect of exclamation mark in the second last line as it showed the charge of emotion quickly.

*Thumbsup* I had so much fun entering into this vision and the effects of this form. Thanks for sharing your craft and vivid expression.

Keep on writing on! I appreciate your website too. Wow! So many forms of poetry you have researched. *Star*

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Hi Jeannie, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon song! *Fire*


*Dragon* Wow! I love how you capture the mythology of this dragon in a poetic fashion, weaving the story facts into a fun to read poem. Thanks for the author's note on this Phillipine dragon as I knew nothing about it. You have a gift for putting real info into poetic form. *Thumbsup*

*Dragon* The poem stanzas are like quatrains with a specific consistent rhyme with a few off rhymes in the mix. The rhythm is not always even but it did not throw me out of the poem when I read it aloud. I appreciate the effort and planning to get the whole story into a structured format. Your details are vivid and made it easy to imagine the tale.
I wondered if you meant to spell "toon" for "tune" . It does mean cartoon. *Smile*
"When he tried to swallow the moon
During an eclipse, but changed his toon'
In these lines I got confused as I was waiting for something after "when". I think it would make more sense if you dropped either "When" or "but". (likely but)
I don't think you needed to have the word "Also" in "Also known". It slows the piece and we know you are speaking of this dragon.

*Dragon* I had fun and learned alot about this myth. Thanks for sharing your awesome vision and craft.
Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Hi turtlemoon-dohi, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon song! *Fire*


*Dragon* Oh Wow! This is such a creative and unique expression with its drawer dragon theme! I enjoyed the mystery and the minute by minute unfolding of the scene. The free verse suits the theme and story very well and I could imagine the girl and the bubble and I loved the personification of the "wee pajama"! *Delight*

*Dragon* The opening of the poem in red font is inviting and charmed me in with its vivid image. I like also the invitation to the reader to continue with their own imagination! I can see you continuing the saga! I would want to hear more. LOL

*Dragon*It was a pleasure to read as your use of assonance, consonance and alliteration is effective and the concept of "worm whisperer" and "renaissance reputation" are brilliant! *Star*
I had fun entering in to your vision!

*Star*Thanks for sharing your marvelous imagination in this poem, which also appealed to mine. *Wink*

Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Hi Pesky Amanda, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon song! *Fire*


*Dragon* It was a delight to read your dragon tale with its pleasing flow and rhyme. I liked the setting as I thought it was original to have a dragon as a "beast of ice and snow" and that he sneezed. *Delight* Unique creation!

*Dragon*I like how your tone makes the poem seem historical and the air of mystery around the dragon. The quatrain like format was a good choice. The rhyme was consistent and while the rhythm was not always even, it did not through me out as a I read aloud.

*Dragon*I noticed that the first line is a complete sentence so it may deserve a period unless you dropped the "he" in the second line it would complete the first in a diffrent way. eg. "beast, who on villagers....would feast." *Wink*

Adding the word "the" to "As cold nipped...would make the rhythm match the second line in verse 2.

*Star* The warning vibe in the poem is strong and the picture you paint is evocative. Thanks for sharing your vision and craft.

Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Review of Broken Promises  
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Hi huntersmoon, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon song! *Fire*


Wonderful! What a delightful tale about dragons. I like the idea of beginning in the present and regaling of past times of dragon magic. Using italics and plain fonts was helpful in denoting the time change. *Smile*

*Dragon* The poem story is interesting and I liked that elves and dwarves were involved too. *Wink* Your story is coherent and involves all the earth elements as you share the termoil. I really enjoyed the last verse with its repeated refrain that echos through time and still remains a hope and dream: Peace! *Thumbsup*

*Dragon* Your creation has a fine form with a set rhyme scheme and free style rhythm at times. I can appreciate how much effort it must have taken to get the last lines of each verse to rhyme with a second one. eg. "themselves", elves".

*Dragon* The poem celebrates the dragons of myth and history with man and I could imagine the scenery and drama from your clear vivid description. I felt badly for the ruined earth...which is always a casualty of any war! *Sad* The metaphor of the story could relate and mirror to many times in history. Brilliant conception!

*Dragon* I loved the personification of the clouds in the first verse and the name "sky serpents" and it lured me into the poem from the start.

Impressive tale that appealed to my imagination and heart! Thanks for sharing your vision and crafting! *Starstruck*

Keep the quill scribing! *Star* Good luck in the contest.
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Review of Savage Serpent  
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Hi Elle, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your dragon song! *Fire*


*Dragon*Cool! I absolutely love your way of describing so vividly this wild creature! You have a gift! *Star* It was fun to read the free verse with its dynamic flow and effective soundscape. Your use of poetic techniques added to the drama and made it a joy to read.

*Dragon*I liked "heat"/"searing", and the first two lines of verse 2 are delicious to read. I smiled at the ending idea of dirty teeth where you bring home the deadly nature of this magnificent beauty. Brilliant concept.

*Star*Thanks for sharing your unique and potent vision of dragonkind. I could so visualize it.

Keep the quill scribing! *Star*
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Review of Celtic Dragon  
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Hi Carly, thanks for entering "DreamTime Dragon's Poem Contest! Here are my brief comments on your Celtic dragon! *Fire*


*Dragon* I love how you show the magesty and heroism of this "dragon" by using short lines and strong sounding words and some capital letters to describe its facets and magical aspects. *Thumbsup*

*Dragon*The concepts shared are interesting and unique lore. Thanks for sharing the cool information in your notes. *Smile* I like how you weave the beliefs into a coherent poem. The connection to Pendragon is brilliant too.

*Dragon* I wondered about the two lines that begin with "that". The first instance could be changed to "which" and that would also add to the flow with alliterative "W". *Wink*

*Dragon**Star*Wonderful read with a resounding praise of the Celtic Dragon! Thanks for sharing your vision and craft! Good luck in the contest.

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*Delight*Happy Spring Prosperous Snow! I am so happy to review your awesome poem for "I Write 2019!"

Wow! I absolutely enjoyed reading your vivid poem. It made my morning brighter! Your use of imagery is brilliant as you weave these seemingly unconnected prompt words into a cohesive and meaningful message! *Salute* Your metaphor using "matter", "petals" and earth soil is wonderful. I like how you got the word "reaper" and "disguise" to fit with the theme. Very creative thinking. I imagine it took some time to compose this. *Smile*

Phrases like "marble of matter" and "wind of dawn" inspired my imagination! AWEsome notions! The free style poem is a pleasure to read for its flow and soundscape and the joyfulness and faith of the voice shines through. I like the bits of rhyme, alliteration and assonance useage.

The title is so appealing and fits the theme of this inspirational philosophy! Thanks so much for sharing your craft and gift. *Starstruck*

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