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Review of Time Away  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Thaddeus! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* I was drawn to the title and its luring message. I thought of taking time away from it all! Your poem gives wise advice on the best way to live that makes sense. My favourite is listen to learn, count the stars, and of course, smiled at the "papers and pens", so vital for a writer. LOL I like the second verse especially in terms of advice for teens! *Thumbsup*

*Balloong* The quatrains are well composed with effective rhyme and flow. It was fun to read. I noticed that the first verse lines are not all consistent 8 syllable counts as in the rest of the verses.*Wink*

*Balloony* The repeated sections in each verse added to the speed of flow and gave the piece the feel of a wisdom reflection.

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your vision and experience in this inspirational verse.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Artemis Quill! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*I was drawn by your title as it sounds like a delightful place. The form is one I have actually heard of and have created. LOL It is quite a challenge.

*Balloonb*The poem has a vivid image and the idea of "chatter on its face" is unique. You conveyed the happiness of the stream and the feeling of the poet as he was drawn into its beauty.

*Balloonp* You did a good job of creating the form. Its rhyme scheme is consistent and the chosen words like "ambling" and "bubbling" are vivid. I noticed that some lines are nine syllables instead of them all being "8". It did not take me out of the read, just a technical note. Line three you could drop the word "his" to fix it. Lines 7 and 8 are also 9 syllables I think. You might say "so tranqil" in line 8.*Smile*

*Balloong* I felt the word "projected" was rather unpoetic. *Wink* I think a period at the end of the first line would be more apt as the second line is a complete thought on its own.

*Star*I liked entering your vision. Thanks for sharing your craft and Happy Anniversary. *Balloonr*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Caerlynn! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Tree* Oh, I am a tree hugger and love trees so was so happy to find your poem! The idea of trees talking is so cool and I think they do speak in their own way...if we would listen to the vibe! *Fairy*

*Balloonr*The simplicity of the free style poem mirrors the simple call of nature and I enjoyed entering into your dream as you ponder what a tree would say. Your ideas are relevant and the queries you make to us are evocative and ones we might want to consider. *Thumbsup*

*Balloong*The flow is not regular and yet I like the impact of short abrupt lines line "if you must eat" and "upon my limb". You really capture the importance of trees in this expression. *Heart*

*Quill* I wondered about the comma after "say" in the last verse as really it goes with the "Is" in the last line. You might even use a colon after "is" and put what the tree says there in italics for the punch line that sums up your whole piece so brilliantly. *Delight*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your love for trees in this heart felt poem! *Treefall*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Loving Thoughts  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Balloonp* Happy Party Time Timothy! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you, fellow Power reviewer! *Delight*


*Balloonp* What a sweet title that reveals your theme, fitting your short expression. I could imagine the scene in the simple words that portray the poet in his element.
I liked the idea of thinking of love on a spring day as it suggests new beginnings and hopeful dreams.

*Balloonr* The short four line poem has a lovely flow with clear rhyme. I enjoy the sing song effect when I read it aloud. The repeated word in the short phrases in the first three lines really works. You lead us into a relaxed state and then bring us to the mind pondering. Very effective.

*Balloonp*Some use of repeated sounds like "b" and "s" works to create a pleasing sound scape as I read aloud as well. Good job!

*Star*Thanks for sharing your vision and craft! I enjoyed entering that world.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Little pleasures  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Balloonp*Happy Party Time Soh! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonr* I was drawn to the delightful title that had me pondering all the little things we could derive pleasure from...that children do so easily! *Heart*

*Balloongo* It is a delight to read this short episode which showed well the magic of children. The theme of the "eyelash" was cute and I even recall that bit of magic though had not heard of it in a long while! I liked the absolute faith and potency of Mia in commanding the situation! By the way, you spell Maya in two ways in the story. *Wink*

*Balloonr* The dialogue was effective to reveal the story and emotional sense. Watch the use of too many "ly" adjectives. Not sure what you would use instead and they did not throw me out of the vision. The first paragraph "suddenly" is not really needed because we feel the sense of immediacy already with Mia's excited tone. And what would "eagerly" look like as Mia waited? *Wink*
In the second paragraph, instead of "and" you could use "as she.."

*Laugh* The wish at the end was so... perfect! It fit with a child's desires.

*Star* I had fun entering into this lovely vision. Thanks for sharing the pleasure of the child's world. And Happy Anniversary! *Cake*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC just in time for WDC 18th Anniversary! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*Your title intrigued me, so good choice! *Wink*

*Balloong*Your free style poem was captivating too. I enjoyed the language and vivid images you created along with its message. I laughed at the last line. *Smile* The personification of vegetables and the content is unique.

*Star* I am not sure of the Pi significator in the poem but the creation had a potent feel and point of view to it! Interesting and something for me to ponder. *Thumbsup* Thanks for sharing your unique vision.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Surprise!  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Happy party days Genipher! I am happy to review your item from "I Write 2018"! *Fairy*

*Balloon**Cake*What a hilarious stunt played by your main character! I like how you portray her as really innocent and believing in the event and her audacity as asking for Mb's, a place to stay etc! I laughed aloud at her paying with cake and the part about the beardand not looking eighteen! *slaugh* The character is well shown..so curious, exciteable, distracted by everything
and straightforward in speaking!

*Cakeb* It was fun to read the dialogue only story and it was easy to follow along with the speakers. Including real names of WDC authors and how they were involved was perfect in relaying the story and making it possible for us to think that she really thought it would be a real party.*Thumbsup*

*Cake* I appreciate the creativity especially the magic cake, and the sci fi time element! The explanation of how they were to be unfindable and how she did it was so cool! *Thumbsup* You brought in quite a few elements, themes of WDC life.

*Star* Thanks for sharing your vision, which was entertaining and delightful to read. Clear voices, energy and interaction that was coherent. I could just imagine it! Write on!!
Good luck in the contest too! *Shamrock*

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Review of Stinker  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp*Hey Amay! Happy Party days! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you as it popped up on the Random Reads today! *Delight*


*Cake* What an alluring title that made me curious. I thought of skunks right away but the term can be used for many things. LOL I see you chose a totally perfect theme and yep, the thought makes me want to hold my nose. Good one!

*Balloonp* I have not heard of an Aquarian poem so thanks for the note about it. You did a great job and the topic suits the form especially with its vivid expression of emotion. *Shock2*

Wonderfully vivid, I could totally imagine the sight and smell and the reaction of the poet in these short line verses that take us from the beginning to the end of the episode. *Thumbsup* One can tell this is an experience you are familiar with and many moms and dads will laugh! Even the explitives and words the poet says are true to life. Punctuation was used to advantage here as well.

I had to laugh at the third line in the last verse...as you leave us hanging and I can just imagine. Not again or false alarm. Tricky baby! *Laugh*

*Star*I had such fun entering into your vision. Thanks for sharing your craft! Keep on writing and have fun at the party this week!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Patrick, just in time for our 18th Birthday Party Bash! I see you have been participating! *Salute* I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*I found your reflective peice on the READ a NEWBIE and the title appealed to me as I think life does give us lots of choices..and growing awareness of which serve us is the journey. LOL

*Balloonb* I appreciated the authentic voice as you share your personal experience and the item fits well under the genre categories you chose. I had to smile at the tag line as that is a hard thing to put a life in a nutshell. *Laugh*

*Balloong*Wow! You really have condensed the lifetime into this conscise personal monologue. You share wisdom that is applicable to many of us, and reveal your purpose to be an inspiration by example. I like the idea of perfection you have. Many of us get caught up in right and wrong. *Thumbsup* The flow was easy to follow and points shared in a coherent way with some lovely phrasings. It is a very well thought out reflection that engages the reader and had me pondering my own journey. *Salute*

*Balloonv* A few notices: Minor things to consider:

*Quill*I think you need a comma after the first line to join it to the phrase in the second line or as it is so long and the first line is a potent factual beginning. Perhaps drop "one where" and begin with "Normalcy". Also it is abit wordy to read: eg. "sometimes" and "at times" draws away from potency. Be direct..Maybe just "or overshadowed" "and even Indescribable" instead of 'and at times". Just a thought.

*Quill*In the second last paragraph, I believe that "please" and "eminate" need to be "pleases" and "eminates" to match the singular "a manner which",

*Quill* I notice a few missing commas where you use some phrases.

*Starstruck* This is truly inspirational sharing that can shed light to those stuck in places you have been. Thanks for the kindess in sharing your vision.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Misty James, just in time for teh 18th Birthday Bash! Check out the Party Central Tab on the left! *Wink* I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp*I was drawn to to the title as I have friends who are avid gardners and back home we had a huge garden for vegetables. It is an activity of love and persistence and so relevant as a theme!

*Balloonp* Your short paragraph is easy to follow as you detail the process of gardening from start to finish is a summative fashion. I liked the beginning line with its information and the indtroduction of a true gardner in the next line. I would like to have seen perhaps more detail and yet you have given the total picture.

The only little glitch for me was changing the voice, pronoun. You begin with third person in the first two lines. Then say WE and then YOU. The first and second "You" work but where you say "what you have sown" should be "what we have sown" in keeping the the "we" who are the gardeners. and the you is the reader who can come pick. *Wink**Smile* For the same reason "your heart" should be "our" heart as it is "we" who are gardening.

I enjoyed the vision of the bountiful harvest at the end of the work! It takes me back home to when we, as kids, all had tasks to do in the garden and harvest...but wow, great eats!!*Laugh*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your vision and craft at WDC! Keep on writing and reviewing too.


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Review of Happy?  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Maria just in time for our 18th Anniversary Bash! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloonp* I was drawn to the title as it had a question mark and made me curious and prompted me to engage in the question myself. *Smile* I really felt the vibe here and thought that it does sometimes happen that when we compare to others, we come up short! *Think*

I liked the short free style, that suit the content of a reflective nature. Addressing the notion of how to be happy when someone else is..especially if one is the one left behind in a break up, is a relevant theme.

IT was easy to follow the message and punctuation asssited the read. The only confusing part were the first words in the first two lines. I wanted to change 'Is" to "It's" for proper grammar.

Evocative ending as I could hear the sigh! *Thumbsup*

Thanks for sharing your little thought and getting your flair out here in WDC! *Starstruck*
Keep on writing and have fun at the party. You might like "Angel Roulette Wings or "Angel-Witch Bingo -- Game Over! And get reviewing and earn some gift points! *Wink* Check out Party Central Tab on the left!


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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Peterc just in time for WDC 18th Anniversary! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*Wow! I love the philosophical tone of this piece of free style poetry. The theme is evocative and I enjoyed how you weave through interesting thoughts to the conclusion, reflected in the title. I like the idea. *Smile*

*Balloonb* I noticed a typo "universl" missing an "a". *Wink* I like the imagery of the "ring of the universal bell". *Thumbsup*

*Balloonr* The voice of the universal "we" is consistent and the use of query and pondering works well. It was easy to follow the flow coherently. I was a bit distracted by the ALL CAPITALS, which is not a usual useage.

*Balloongo*You need a comma after we in "AS WE, THE SMALL THINGS". The use of bits of inner punctuation helped with the read. I wondered about the noun "things" here. You use it quite a bit...was is meant to be non specific and to indicate our smallness compared to the vast universe? *Think*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your thoughtful reflective poem and allowing me to comment. Keep on writing and enjoy the party this week. *Partyhato*

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC just in time for WDC 18th Birthday Bash! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Balloong* Wow! This is an awesome collection of verses and as it would be hard to comment on them all, this will be a more general review. *Smile*
I enjoyed reading your variety of poems, some free verse and some rhyme, some sad, others uplifting. The tone was evocative and your voice rang authenically! *Thumbsup* I liked the combination of themes where you wane philopsophic, idealistic and where you follow your mind as it weaves through discovery, joy and pain. Even the last one ends on a hopeful note.

The first deep poem engaged me and drew me to read on! Well done!

*Balloong* You could take a couple of the longer ones and put them into their own items...for reviewers. *Wink* Yet I know space in basic membership is limited. *Wink* Keep writing and get reviewing! *Smile*

*Star*Thank you for sharing your heartfelt creations. It is so cool to write the feelings and thoughts of the day..like working out what ever needs to be released. I appreciate the vision.

Light on the path as you write on!
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Review of Kitty Cuisine  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonv* Welcome to WDC just in time for our 18th Anniversary Party Bash! *Delight* I like your handle. *Choco*

*Balloong*Your title was intriguing and evocative that I had to read on! Good choice. I am more a poet and the title made me look! LOL

*Balloongo* Wow! This is so creepy! You grabbed my attention from the first line with the active imagery and I like how you slowly reveal what is going on. It was an unexpected twist when the butcher came in and the horror intensified. The last line was a brilliant ending... you kept the rationale to the end.

*Balloony* Your description was detailed with vivid images and the first person voice was effective and consistent through out. I noticed you repeated "I could tell" close together. I wonder if there is an alterative way to say it the second time...eg. I could see... as you are looking at shadows. *Wink*
Also I am not sure about this but should "was" be "were" in " now was the cats"?

*Starstruck* This was a horrific vision! You might like the contest "SCREAMS!!!! Thanks for sharing your work at WDC! *Salute* Have fun at the festivies.

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Happy Birthday SMS! I found something I have not reviewed! *Delight* I had to dig into your folders. LOL

*Balloong*What a fabulous idea for an in and out and a brilliant way to get WDC some kudos out in the wide world. I am not sure I saw this before, or if I did, forgot to come back. Shame on me! *Smile* The survey part is so accessible.

*Balloonb* The links to the outside sources are helpful to the intent of this article too. I have not checked them out yet but I love the idea of nominating!

*Balloonv*The article is clearly written and organized with bold and colour fonts to emphasize and draw our eye to content. The tone is invitational and engaging. I think this will get a plug today! *Wink*

*Star*Thanks for all you BE and do for all of us and for co creating this stellar
world in the cosmos! *Starstruck* Happy Day!

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Review of BUSINESS ARTICLE  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Happy Party days Abby Gayle! Here I am with a review for you as this popped up on the Random Read page! *Delight*

*Balloonv* The title is straightforward and I like the name of the paper for which you write. I take it was for a contest. I might put contest as one of the genres. I am not sure I would have chosen the title to read...and the content is so cool!

*Balloong* Your ad begins as regular invitation to a book event and drew me in. I laughed at the number of books being a child's estimate and thought it was so cute! A really charming pull to get folks to come. The warning about the spills is priceless too. And sensible. I did notice you ended a line with a preposition "with". *Wink*

*Laugh* The asterix note is brilliant and a fabulous prank! *Salute* You did a great job with the trickery. I was disappointed that I could not attend as it sounded wonderful.

*Star*Thanks for sharing this vision and taking me on a ride!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp*Ahoy Maryann! I am happy to review your delightful monorhyme! *Delight*

*Delight* I love rhyming poems and this was fun to read with its unique three line verses and its joyful vibration! *Star* The images are endearing and I was intrigued what you might write about a crocodile. *Laugh*

*Cake2* Your notions of the "old hat" and the "map" made me laugh. That map idea was brilliant too. I was drawn in by the question in the first line as it made me ponder too... it leads nicely to the theme of so many things to choose from.

*Cupcakev* I did wonder at the second line, unclear about what the brilliant writings are brilliant at? *Confused* I also wonder who "another" is, in verse two.

*Star* The monorhyme form is intact and it tripped merrily along in a celebratory manner with a positive tone. I especially appreciate the "no combat" as it reflects the comraderie of WDC. *Heart*

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing your vision in this 18th year of WDC. I am so glad you jumped in with your special flair! See you in the next round. Get your party dress on! *Heel* Keep the quill moving!

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Review of End of Summer  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp*Ahoy! I am happy to review your wonderful poem in the "I Write in 2018! *Delight*

*Partyhatr*Wow! I loved the image of the doves the notion of comforting in the passing season. Brilliant and moving! *Salute*

*Candler* The free verse suits the theme and nuance of the piece and your use of consonance and assonance was very effective. It was a pleasure to read aloud. I loved the moanful sound of the "o" in the first verse showing the sorrow. The "s" and "e" sounds create a coherent effect as well. mm. "weeping children" is lovely too. The weave was well thought out and evocative. I could really enter into the vision here. *Star*

*Cake* Thanks for sharing your gift and enjoy the 18th Party Bash as you write on!

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Review of Just a Pinch  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight* Hiya GOT Sunspear! I am flitting in with a FLASH review of this intriguing poem. I had to smile at the evocative title, which really suited your theme and drew me to read. Good choice of genre references too! *Thumbsup*

*Crab* This rhyming couplet was a delight to read and you really captured the poet's hopeful lament to decrease the lobster's enemy! *Laugh* I liked the reference to Poseidon and magic! Brilliant! The last line ends on a yummy note with its vivid image. *Thumbsup*

*Fishb*The poem was effective in rhyme and was pleasant to read aloud. Your use of assonance and consonance helped create a wonderful soundscape. Though the rhythm flow was not the same in each couplet, I was not thrown out of the read and was still captivated by the storyline. I was confused by the word "jut" in "just friendly". *Confused*

*Crab* I was drawn into the tale from the first line with its clear image and pleasing sound. IT made me curious to read on to see what these ingredients would be for and I was not disappointed by the imaginative creation that followed. Well conceived! You also taught that that cod are natural enemies of lobsters too!

*Starstruck* I really enjoyed this comical little tale and it struck me that the poet would wish to become the enemy of the lobster...for his benefit...much as the cod. *Laugh*
Thanks for sharing your vision and craft!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Delight* Hiya GOT Sunspear! I am flitting in with a FLASH review of Your birthday contest! Yay! *Balloonp*
Good for you for creating your first contest and celebrating WDC.*Delight*

*Balloonv* I like the simple format and all the details are easy to find and understand. The topic is relevant and the idea that the story can be fact or fiction is cool! *Smile*

*Balloonp*I noticed one glitch: the time you give is not so clear as it does not say PM or AM. Perhaps clarify: Deadline: first round: sept...9:59 PM. or Time Due at Deadline: 9:59 Pm. *Wink* I am glad to see you added the EST/WDC time as a reminder. *Smile*
From my experience, it is always good to bold the time and due date at the end...so it is easy to find quickly.

*Balloong* I wondered about adding some emoticons or decor to break up the sections for aesthetic appeal. I used a bunch of balloon glyphs across the top above the title of my little contest. Your use of colour is effective as it highlights and draws the eye to vital information and breaks up the page. I like the centering as well. You could bold and make the Title Bigger font for effect and even bold subtitles like: {b}RULES{/b}.

*Star*Thanks for creating this contribution for WDC and good luck with the first round. Make sure you plug it on the Contest page. *Wink*

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "August 21, 2018
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Delight*Hello again Ridinghood! I am so happy to review your wonderful piece from "I Write in 2018! *Heart* I like how you give references to tarot cards too. *Cool*


*Fairy* The title is evocative and I like how the last line reflects the title with the topic "rapture in line one. Opposites! Well done.

*Fairy*Reading your weave aloud was a pleasure as your use of rhyme, assonance and consonance was very effective. I especially liked the numerous "s" sounds. You created a soundscape of interest and the unexpected. Line 2 and 3 are my favourites. "lie among roses and cosmos"! What an evocative idea! Lines 4 and 5 really reflect a heavier image of weight in the soundscape and flow as well. Delightful to fall into your images. You are a word wizard! *Starstruck*

*Fairy3*I really felt for the poet at the end accepting her fate. The notion of last refrain had me hearing its lonesome echo. Wonderful!

Thanks for sharing your gift and vision. *Heart* Keep on musing with your pen!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight*Hi Prosperous Snow! I am happy to review your poem in the 'I Write in 2018' contest! You are sure flying!

I enjoyed how you responded to the prompt with the idea that each week provides an opportunity for beginnings, tieing in the gratitude and day of reflection. Some do not take that time to just be with all that is. A lovely reminder in your message.

The imagery of the dawn, first day of the week and setting a new goal all focus our attention on the theme. Well done. In a few lines as given by the prompt as well you drew me into this personal experience. The atmosphere of the quiet was vivid too. The idea of "inhale" and "whisper" add to this vision. *Thumbsup* I like the unique rhyme of the two words balancing in the two verses.

I was wondering about the idea of "day of beauty" signifying Sunday as each day has that capacity. I wonder if there was a more meaningful describer, but it is just a thought. LOL

Thanks for sharing this calming moment which inspires me. I like to think that we who take time to meditate add peace to the world especially when all focussed together. Thanks for sharing you! *Starstruck*

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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "July 18, 2018
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Delight* HI ridinghhood! Yay! I am happy to review your piece in "I Write in 2018! I enjoy learning about your Goddess Tarot as I am not familiar with that set. *Wink*

*Moon* The title of the work is evocative and really suit the picture with its theme..edge of road, edge of poverty, edge of nature vs man etc. Your response to the prompt was brilliant and moving as I could feel the intensity of the meeting of the two women.

*Sun* The unique images and words like "ghost particles" and "blazars of edgework" are thought provoking and vivid.
I appreciate the scientific with the personal! *Starstruck* Wonderful free style with clear image and potent message.

Thanks for sharing your engaging vision. I loved it! *Star*

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for entry "24 Syllables: "Azure"
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP*


*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Jay! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

Wow! A poem in 24 syllables Great job! I missed this prompt and I love the colour blue! *Smile*

I so enjoyed the content of your expression and especially the last line. I felt the sense of freedom. The image of the sky and birds on the wing was perfect one to inspire the idea of freedom too. Watching birds gliding in the blue yonder comes to mind. Gulls over water are a favourite as I used to live near a park by a bay and would watch them soar. *Laugh*

This poem captures the flavour of Azure in a vivid picture that was easy to enter. Thanks for sharing your vision. *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP*


*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI celticsea! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

I found this recent piece that had no stars or review so here I am. The topic is timely and the feeling of confusion and query is evident in your weaving. It must be difficult to be dwelling in such times. I like the desireable image at the end...very clear what the poet would like to do...as if what else could one do.

The voice speaking to qualities of America is original and brings to attention the ideals of the country. The poem reflects on relevant questions.

The poem is well composed with an effective rhyme sheme. Good on you for having so many interesting and thematic words with the same end sound! It is not an easy feat! *Salute*

You really make a statement to engage one's thought. Thanks for sharing your commentary and craft.
*Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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