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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "May 12. 2018
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Fairy* Hi ridinghood! I am happy to review your piece in "I Write 2018"! What an interesting prompt. I like tarot cards too! *Smile*

The theme about body and motherhood has wisdom. The first line drew me in and the image of the older other still able to rock her daughter is beautiful and touched my heart. *Thumbsup* I enjoyed reading the weave aloud and engaging in its vibration of comforting strength. The references to Goddesses adds to the idea of the power we have as woman not matter the body type.

The line about "maybellined to be a queen" made me smile and the rhyme added to the read and flow!
Awesome! *Smile* The old fashioned "vibe" of the words really worked for me!

It was neat to see this free form style...as one does not often see epistles. Your rendition is well composed with a meaningful message from mother to daughter. It is relevant to pass on wisdom like this.

Thanks for sharing your vision and message so eloquently and vividly. *Starstruck* Lovely read.

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Review of TRES DIAMANTES  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Sun* Hey Joy! I enjoyed diamantes so was thrilled to see this show up at the Read and Review page. *Delight*

*Sun*This was a pleasure to read with your astute and clear comparisons. The contrast of Fear and Freedom makes sense. The vivid image of rock and feather of the natural world drew me in. The word "please" was a puzzlement.

*Sun*Your use of alliteration, assonance and consonance was a treat and assisted the flow and made for a delightful read. The words you chose for fear were well chosen as they felt heavy.

*Star*Well concieved and composed using the correct format. Thanks for sharing your gift.

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Review of NaPoWriMo 2018  
for entry "April 28 - Thor
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Delight*Hi Carly! I am happy to review your piece from 'I Write 2018'.

*Hammer* You have really caught the essence of this hero in your short quatrain. *Hammer* The form is well composed and I felt a strong vibe in the chosen words that hinted at Thor's power. Your use of consonance is suggestive of a hard quality as well.

I enjoyed reading it aloud and the repeated sound elements in line three. The use of capital letters added to the drama and largeness of Thor. *Smile*

The rhyme and syllable count of the lines is right on for the form. Great job! *Salute*

Thanks for sharing your vision of Thor and good luck in the Daily Poem Contest! *Star*

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Review of The Dance Of Dis  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Salute*Wow! This alliterative title was fascinating and I am glad you gave the definition of "Dis"as it seems there is another. I like that it is a mythical place and God *Star* as it made me curious and evoked a rather happy tone.

The poem was a pleasure to read aloud and the scene was vivid. I could imagine the dancing! The rhyme and non patterned rhythm was effective and made a bit of a lyrical soundscape for the dark theme. *Delight*

I thinked you could simplify and shorten one line by dropping "answered" and use "said". The enjambment where you repeat "place" is effective.

I had fun reading this romp in the moonlight. Thanks for sharing your poetic vision. *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Silly Food Sonnet  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Flowery* Hi Maryann! I am so happy you popped into the Daily Poem and took up the difficult challenge. YOu did a brilliant job on not using the letter "a" in a sonnet. LOL The topic is unique and the tone is happy and light. IT was fun to imagine the picnic and goodies. I liked the rocking food song and the notion of food bringing folks together. *Delight*

I think "lot's" needs to be "lots" to show plural. Likely a typo. *Wink*

The format is well composed and has an emotional aspect! Good job! *Star* An no "a" s! *Shock2* Thanks for sharing your creativity.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review of Shoes  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Heel* Hi Dogpack! Thanks so much for playing with my prompt in "The Daily Poem! *Heart*

*Horseshoe* Oh wow! What a lovely poem about this parade horse. I loved the line about nerves to match his shoes! *Thumbsup*

I was drawn right in from the first clip clop and could picture the horse and rider. I like that we find out for sure at the end he is a parade horse. The theme of the shoe is carried through out the piece.

The 4 line verses with ending couplet is well composed with fine rhyme and flow. The image is so vivid and the honouring of the steed is evident. Wonderful and heartfelt expression in which I could sense the pride. *Starstruck*

Thanks for your gift and praise of the horse and the vitalness of *Horseshoe*s! *Wink*

Good luck in the contest.
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Review of Starbucks  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Delight* Hey Maryann! Happy Day! I just found another cool acrostic I have not reviewed yet. The picture of you and hubby is gorgeous! *Laugh*


*Coffeebl* You really capture the "love" for coffee and atmosphere of Starbucks. I like the comparison to "Kitchen coffee" and get a sense that the vibes of being in the shop and its comraderie make it more of a treat. I had to smile at "coffee lingo" as I know very little about that language, not being a coffee lover!

*Coffeep*The ideas given for each key letter tell the relevant ones that make the place special for you and other coffee drinkers. It is fun to read with its happy tone and good word choice. Repeating the word coffee now and then was effective as emphasis. The brown font was a good choice to represent coffee! *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your experience with Starbucks. It looks like you had fun in Seattle. *Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Heel* Hey Maryann! Happy 16th!! *Wink* Thanks for taking up my prompt at "The Daily Poem! *Heart*

Wow! Amazing how you got the double acrostic. *Thumbsup* I have yet to get that to work!
I like the way you show how shoes can make us feel and even lift our spirits...you have to be a shoe lover though. LOL My favourite line is the last one as your choice os shoes to mention cover a wide range. The play on he word "soul" is brilliant and the message reveals that shoes are indeed loved!*Smile*

Good luck in the contest! *Candy2*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Delight*Hi Christopher Nagle!

Wow! This commentary is amazing in its scope and detailed information that supports your view point. I really enjoyed how you travel though history in cultures with examples of racial considerations. Your research is deep and the scope in time from Nazi, Jews, Japanese, Maori etc. is fine tuned. Interesting how the Jewish culture kept a certain separation. IT was interesting to hear the difference in Australia and New Zealand maori as well. I cannot claim to understand all the connections and do appreciate some of what you say. I can hear your tone and even frustration at political plays around the issue and its varied meaning.

You give me something to think about as I never considered these Holidays like Columbus day or Australia day in terms of what it might mean to aborigines...I mean how would they celebrate? It would be nice if folks let the past go and we could all see ourselves as human, equal and wanting to work for peace on this planet. Your last part is evocative and makes a bold statement.

The peice is well written in a complex style that takes time and thought to read. It is coherent and covers so many different aspects, it will take further study to get it's full meaning. I did like learning new information. *Smile*

Time for some common sense and end to labelling and separation, I think.

Thanks for sharing your vibrant expression with its deep potent point of view and message. *Starstruck*

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Review of Little Writings  
for entry "The Milky Way Sonnet
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Starp* Oh, I love stargazing so this fanciful poem is appealing. I always enjoy your simple whimsical imagination and vision. You see the world with a positive child like eye! *Heart* Children would love this expression as well as they could relate to the language.

You make the starry night magical and capture the image with its movement in a vivid way. The sonnet is a perfect choice for the way you have raised the emotional view of the cosmos. Well composed and fun to read! *Star* Inviting the reader to witness it is a wonderful notion too.

Thanks for sharing your gift! *Fire* Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY 16th WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY Maryann *Heart* "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP*


Wow! I like your take on the prompt and the idea that writing became the legacy of a loved one. *Star*

It was pleasant to read your quatrains and sad at first to be drawn into the passing of the author. Your rhyme was well done as it can be hard to get 4 lines to rhyme! *Smile* The image of a "novel stampede" is brilliant and being captured on video brought in the modern tech of memory. *Star*

The rhythm was not even in each verse yet it did not detract from the heart felt message.One word I think you could leave out is the word "quickly" as it does not add to the line. You already say "lightning speed" which gives us the picture vividly.*Wink*

The use of red font highlighted the prompt of bleeding heart. The positive connotation at the end gives inspiration. *Thumbsup* Thanks for sharing your craft and vision!

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Taking a trip down memory lane into GOT territory to find something I have not reviewed! This dreamy poem caught my eye so I can have respite from winter storm in spring. *Smile*

I enjoy the light whimsical vibe of your poetic flow. The images fit with the theme of fantasy and dream time that the relaxed, warm atmosphere on the beach can evoke. I want to go there. *Sun*

The quatrains are well composed with effective rhyme and pleasant flow when I read it aloud. The sound combinations of your words are effective and I like the bit of personification. *Thumbsup*

One place I felt a bit long was the last line and I wondered if you needed the word "on". Would it mean the same thing to say "dream's the beach"? *Think* Just musing on it. I can take or leave the "a" before "princess". *Wink*
I think "carefree" is one word. I went and checked to make sure. LOL

*Star*Thanks for this light hearted poem that added to our GOT successes. *SwordL* Keep on shining as the *Star* you are.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY 16th WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY *Starstruck* Maryann *Heart* FROM me and "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP*


*Flowerv* Wow! I found something that I have not reviewed. How did I miss this bright and cheerful cnote shop, late for Easter but in time for spring! *Laugh*

The intro to the shop is happy and I love your poem that vibrates the energy of spring magic! It has a happy tone and lyrical rhyme, its simplicity childlike and so like spring beginnings. *Rabbit2*

The varied selection of cnotes allows for use in many occasions...with spring like colours and greetings. Using bugsbunny is so comical and appropriate. Flowers and friendship and messages of happy springtime and good day greetings are lovely to recieve.

I like the playful rabbit and turtle co-operative cnote and the kitty is so sweet! *Heart* Having two that blink are great for Premium to use as well. *Thumbsup*This will definitely go in my favourites now I have found it!

Thanks for continuing to spread your cheerful vibe! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flowerv* Happy Poetry Month Prosperous Snow!*Delight*

Wow! This is a lovely form that I have never heard of before. I really enjoyed reading your model of the Vahid with its 19 syllable stanzas. The picture of spring on the farm, painted by your words, is vivid with detail.

It has the feel of a haiku type poem with lack of punctuation and contrasting images that are observed and go together to form a whole. I like the personification of the blooms perfuming the air and I know all about grass on septic tanks. *Wink* I live in the country so this is a familiar bit of charm. Now we just watch wild turkeys though. LOL

I like that it is in the present tense though the last verb does not follow that. It seems to jump ahead to the job already done where I was not expecting it yet.

I am prompted now to play a bit.*Laugh* "seeds waiting" Or you could drop the word "that" and continue the thought of " fields need plowing and crops sowing" or
reminding them
there are fields to plow,
crops to sew".

but then maybe you wanted the job to be done, to end the day. *Smile*

Anyhow, the tense just jumped out at me. I may now have to try one of my own. Thanks for letting me play with your work. No offense meant.

Thanks for sharing this interesting form and your gift. I imagine it is a challenge to create.

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Review by eyestar~
Rated: E | (4.5)
*Smile* Hi very thankful! This item popped up on the Read and Review automatic page and yet I think maybe putting it on send email only may be more apt, given this is a lesson from Horizons. *Wink*

It is well done and you seem to know your stuff and the rationale for useage. I even learned something. I did not know that a rhetorical question did not use a question mark! I would thought all questions did. *Shock* Cool!

I might have added a title and what the assignment was just for info and organization. *Smile*

Good job! *Star*
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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Flowerv*Happy Poetry Month Poetry Angel!*Angel*Welcome to WDC!

What a wonderful inspiring expression to celebrate spring and the divine! *Delight*

*Flowerv* I enjoyed the gentle tone and flow of your words. The four line verses had a consistent rhyme scheme that added to the flow and coherence. I did not notice a definite rhythm but the free style suited the theme and high celestial vibe.

In verse one, I would suggest a synonym for "companionship" in line two as you repeat the word quite often in a short space of time. Variety is better at times. *Wink* I am not sure what "sevens" or "settings" refers to. *Confused*

Thanks for sharing your tribute and comparison of Spring to blessings of heaven. *Star*

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Review of Bowl Food  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Poseyv* Happy Poetry Month, Pony Tale!*Poseyb*

*Delight*This is a delightful poem and I had fun reading it like a puzzle. I love the end. Brilliant concept. The title fits the work and serves as a diversion when we discover what the bowl is! *Thumbsup*

The form is well composed according to the details you provided, and I admire the creativity and effort it took to get it right. It is appealing to read aloud with your use of assonance and consonance in the short poem. The excitement of the eaters is evident too!

The 5th and 6th line threw me a bit..I wanted to read them as gerund forms and the main verb and subject are "we chew". Still the image is clear and appeals to the senses.*Wink*

Thanks for sharing this bit of fun! Well done! *Starstruck*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Happy Poetry Month Harry! *Rainbowl**Rainbowr*

Oh Wow! I loved reading this romantic story poem. It really captures the medieval atmosphere and notion of chivalry in a moving way. The characters are vivid and the actions of the Knight as he holds to the old ways is chivalrous and rather sad for the pair of lovers. I like the way he changes in his emotional state along the way and yet holds to his perceived duty. That he does not want her to be harmed is chivalrous.

The names are appealing and the quatrains are well composed. I admire how you set a rhyme scheme with in the narrative poem as I think it is a challenging thing to do. You also did a great job keeping the present tense throughout. The enjambments were used to good effect too. It was a delight to read aloud. *Thumbsup*

The images were clear and events described with detail so I could enter into the journey. I liked the bathing part and have a sense that she wanted to have a rendezvous. *Smile* You really show his chivalrous nature.

I was moved by the story at the end. How sad they will lead lonely lives!

Thanks for sharing this bit of history. I do enjoy historical romance. *Star*

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Review of I'm mad  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI River! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

I could not resist this poem because of its theme! Here we are in April and a snow storm rages outside, getting my car stuck! Ahhhh! Talk about irritating! *Laugh* Your poem suits the mood brilliantly!

Your imagery is vivid and I can see being mad just to write it! I had to laugh at the results of shovelling snow piling up at the door! A kitchen skating rink! LOL

The poem is fun to read with its short rhyming verses with simple language...often used to simplify feeling! I could so identify with the madness caused by winter. Only in Canada..maybe. LOL

Thanks for writing this on behalf of we who.... are so tired of snow! *Starstruck* I could just imagine the insanity of the activity here..a losing battle.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Sun* Happy Poetry Month Ridinghhood!*Delight*

This whimsical poem was a delight to imagine! The notion of holding onto the silver bracelets as a symbol of youth and dreams and magic is appealing.

I enjoyed the image of the elder with the soup and the dreamy rainbows. The muse is ever young!
The free flow suits the whimsical content and it was fun to read. I love bracelets myself so I am right there with her. *Laugh*

The vocabulary was thematic and well chosen to create an effective soundscape to be read aloud. I could hear the clink of bracelets and imagine the light captured therein. The consonance and alliteration added to the overall effect of the read. *Star*

Thanks for sharing your fanciful and metaphoric vision. A lot to ponder. *Starstruck*

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC clementkelsey ! *Smile*

*Baseball* Wow! This article was amazing and a delight to read. It was well written and coherent and I enjoyed how you wove your early experience into a life lesson for the future. It is often the case but at times we do not see the depth til years later. The connection between that and the hoped for military life is a wonderful example for your theme.*Thumbsup*

I could visualize the game and the attitude of the senior whose heart was really not in the game. The wisdom that eventually came was solid. To see that it is about team and integrity is a valueable realization and one we need to embrace in the world today.

You make your case with details and a logical rationale that supports your opinion effectively. I think it is a convincing peice with a heart-felt tone and an inspiring vision for you and others.

I admire your honesty and sharing that can be a contribution to others. *Starstruck* Keep on writing and being the star you are!

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Review of Couch Potato  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Flowerv* Happy Poetry Month Fyn! *Delight*

What an interesting prompt poem! The theme of couch potato is revealed vividly as is the annoyance of the poet. *Laugh* I had to laugh at the way you describe the one on the couch watching sports.
The ending was a rational solution, if it works. LOL

The poem form was well composed following the author's notes you gave. I admire your successful effort with this challenge. I like the contrast of the poet 'viewing" him and then waking up to the 'viewer' he becomes. The words "I see!" suggest an emotional response...to him and an awareness of the solution.

I wondered about the tenses in line 3--turned and turn and maybe a synonym to replace one of these for variety.*Wink*

The way you wove those prompt words was imaginative and comical, giving a whole new vision of what a couch potato could look like. Good job!

Thanks for sharing this entertaining vision! *Star* I am sure we can relate to the event!

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Review by eyestar~
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Flowerv* Happy Poetry Month Joy! This little marvel popped up on the read and review page..what a find!! *Bigsmile*

This list of concrete nouns is extensive and a grand unique idea it was to post it! I am sure it is helpful to you but I can see how it can be a quick reference for others. The organization under sub headings is useful and oh boy, can I see a prompt coming on for The Daily Poem Contest! LOL My first one is for tomorrow. Lucky I found this as it inspired me. I like the variety of words. I have never heard of a balalaika or a radiosonde! LOL The list of clothing is extensive and handy. Wow! I like the short list under Other things. *Laugh*

The definition of concrete and abstract noun is convenient too as there may be some who are unsure.

I enjoyed knowing why you created such a list so thanks for the introduction. I agree that the list could go on forever! LOL I may throw some your way! *Laugh* Thanks for thinking of us on your own writing journey.*Star*

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Review of The Stoning  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Delight* Happy Poetry Month! *Flowerb*

What an interesting and historic theme for a poem. Good choice. I like the first person voice as the woman being stoned tells what happened with a confusion and query as to reason for such a brutal punishment. The picture you paint is vivid. *Thumbsup*

The free style suits the theme and emotional content and the repetition of the word "stone" gives it emphasis. I see you are using the present tense, which gives us a bird's eye view. I would check out verse 3 as you change to past tense. *Wink* A quick read will show where the tenses are off.

I think lines one and two in verse two say the same thing. And the second line is passive tense...I would try for consistency of active tense.

This is a sad event and one which has taken place many times in history. It must take a lot though to pick up a rock and heave it at someone.

Thanks for following your muse and sharing this stony hearted vision. *Star*

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Review of Don't Move  
Review by eyestar~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp* HI CJ! Welcome to WDC and thanks for entering into a contest! Way to go!

Oh wow! This Blink entry is too creepy and you left me hanging as to what is in the bed. You certainly evoked a response and struck at my imagination!! Good job!

The short dialogue set up the story line and setting well. And the last words... leave me wondering if she would have moved. The periods at the end were effective for shock and drama!

I noticed a few typos... "Replied" does not need a capital letter and either does "Having" as the phrase follows from replied. Just put a comma after "replied".
Also, I think "get stuck" should be past tense to go with the rest of the story. "got". Could be a typo too.

You really captured this scarey piece in so few words! Keep on writing. *Starstruck*

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