All poets face a blank canvass that must have words painted on to it and you have certainly done that well with this masterpiece of writing that can ring a bell with many readers. We sometimes need a little help which our imagination supplies us with.
Hardly a time piece you can put in your pocket, but whether it's a 100 feet tall or you can wear on your wrist the hands of time always move and no one can stop them but the day when the Lord will come again to claim us all.
Great no fault poem.
A nice piece of writing with no punches pulled as to the whys of breaking up. Just a missing piece of the puzzle that couldn't be found in a romance that has faded and no longer is fulfilling so it was time to say goodbye and part company.
Love is music when it has been put to words otherwise is is like a gong that never rings. So if you have a song in your heart and you let the world hear, then your music is pure love and will remain ever dear.
I have been introduced to a Kyrielle form of poetry and it is so well done that I can find no fault in it.
You seemed to have mastered this art form and thus the 5 stars and a bravo to you. I hope you find your elephant.
This is a poem with a message that I hope gets through to kids who think the wrong thing is the right thing in life.
Many a person who was brought up well went sour when things got tough and hung out with trouble makers.
I have seen it as I was growing up when some kids followed a life of crime only to be put away for life.
Reminds me of a number of poems I wrote about my wife when we first met. You have turned in a poetic masterpiece
however I would have added the final two lines for continuity sake and it would have been perfect.
Loved the story of old times remembered and how the new has replaced them, not the same as the old. Oh well we always have memories that never grow old as long as we keep them, they'll still be fresh and new. Can't fault his poem on any count. Loved it and it brought back memories of my youth with different characters.
You write much with few words that leaves the reader to fill in how the poem affects his life and when you offer in poetry that which can effect many people you have done your job as a poet. A sun rise can be expressed in a thousand words but one word would explain it all. BEAUTIFUL
We are on the same page of letting thoughts take shape regardless of the degree of pain. Poets thrive when they can empty their heads from thoughts that always seem to bother us but once you clean them up an place them on your writing pad they lose all their sting. Great poem and I wouldn't change a thing. It is compelling in it's brevity.
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