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This page is set up beautifully. Your goals and intentions for the group and all activities are clear. I am glad to be a part of this group, and I hope that will continue to be a popular forum. I look forward to seeing the new group badge once it is created. Best wishes for you and this awesome group! Also sending a donation for the group.

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Review of What If  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts: It seems to me that you've just free wrote this piece of prose. You ask interesting questions, and always the "what if" question is put out there.

*PenB* My favorite part: The first line - sometimes movin on is the hardest thing to do.

*PenR* Some suggestions are: These are only my suggestions, so feel free to use or discard as you see fit *Smile*. Perhaps going back and write it without the misspelled words. If you are trying to capture the feeling of "local color" language, perhaps using a footnote to explain why you've written as such.

*PenG* Overall: Lots of questions you pose. I would love to read more, and to see if you have come up with answers to these questions. I did enjoy reading your prose.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

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Review of The Bitter Truth  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts: Reviewing one's life and the deeds done throughout one's life is more significant than one's death. An interesting and thought provoking idea that you've written.

*PenB* My favorite part: The last line is the clincher: The Lord would not be pleased by the coming of such a soul. Nicely worded in your writing.

*PenR* Some suggestions are:Spending life without obeyed The Lord - perhaps: Spending life having never obeyed the Lord, or Spending life without obeying The Lord. My suggestion only.

*PenG* Overall: Your poetry brings up age old questions, and you do your best to give answers to these tough questions.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

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Review of GRIEVED  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts:The anger and despair are prevalent in your writing. Also a plea for understanding of why this has happened. I don't know if this was taken from your personal life, but it hard to comprehend such a grief as you've described here.

*PenB* My favorite part: "We prayed...we were never honored"

*PenR* Some suggestions are:The line All to no one; all to no neighbor; all to no caring friend is a bit hard for me to understand what you are trying to say. I am stumbling on this line only. The other phrase is nu-numbered questions. Other than that, an incredible read.

*PenG* Overall: A very sorrowful work. The pain and difficulty of the event is a hard topic to explain, but your detailed writing gives graphic imagery to the words uttered.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression: Cute characters you have here, and I also like how you give them nicknames as well. I can picture this as a picture book, but also as a cartoon for children.

*Cake2* Other thoughts:I like that there is action, and that you tried to write in the "voice" of the characters that are speaking.

*Cake3* Some suggestions:I'd really like to see more of this story. I think you've got a great start here. I am very curious to see where this goes. As it is a children's story, I am not really worried about anything super "dark" happening. Maybe a fright or two!

*Cake* Overall: You have a good imagination, and I think you are onto something here. I really would love to see you add to it, and I would love to see this gang of friends do really well for you *Smile*


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression:I did not see that ending coming. A wild twist to be sure. The title interested me, and I was hooked as soon as I started reading your story.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: This is an engaging story, and I am curious as to the back story of Becky. For some reason, she is more than she seems in this story (of course it could be my imagination working over time).

*Cake3* Some suggestions:I saw no typos or grammar issues with your story. It was well thought out and executed, and had a great twist at the end.

*Cake* Overall:I am glad to have read your story. Keep up the great work *Smile*


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Review of Amanda  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression:You definitely have the horror down pat! My head is spinning with the few words you have written. Was this really a suicide? Who knew that the main character always complimented the victim about her hair? Just a few words, and the mind is blown!

*Cake2* Other thoughts:This is a story that begs to be continued (at least in my opinion). You captured the imagination and refuse to let go throughout the writing.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: I am sure this was written with a length limit for a contest, but other than the length, I saw nothing to suggest to improve. Very M. Knight Shyamalan-like!

*Cake* Overall:Build up is great, and you give just enough information that leaves the reader begging for more. Great Job!


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Review of A Mother's Wisdom  
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression:LOL...I know it is cliche`, but sometimes a mother does know what she is talking about.

*Cake2* Other thoughts:It smacks of real life. What 16 year old doesn't fight with his mom? And who doesn't or didn't have a friend in high school that wasn't quite "right"? I am very glad that Matt is just a typical teenager, and that the story didn't go down the "dark" path, as that could have happened just as easily.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: No grammar or typo issues. Well thought out and executed, and I can suggest nothing for improvement.

*Cake* Overall: This is a great story. I think that it has the potential to become a longer story, along the themes that you have outlined here. (Good vs. Evil) I enjoyed reading this story as well, and I've liked everything I've seen today.


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Review of Reality  
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression:WOW! Did not see that ending coming. I was hooked from the beginning, and you did an excellent job of keeping my interest.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: I still am saying What? to myself. It was like a dream. And to the narrator, it probably goes back and forth from a dream to a nightmare.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: No grammar issues or typos in your writing. The tension building is excellent. The ending came out of nowhere, and fits wonderfully with the rest of the story. The ending question leaves the reader just as perplexed as the teller of the story.

*Cake* Overall: A great job! You can pack a lot of punch with so few words. I enjoyed reading this story as well. I am liking your stories, and will be going on to the next one *Smile*


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Review of Falling in Love  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression:A chance meeting, an "oops" moment, and then the discovery of yet another complication. An excellent idea. Short, sweet and to the point.

*Cake2* Other thoughts:I saw no typos in your writing. I did stumble a little bit over the opening sentence. I got what you were trying to write: She looked and then she "looked". I would have liked to have seen it a little smoother, but that is only my opinion.

*Cake3* Some suggestions:I notice that you said you like to write short stories. There are a lot of short stories that have the makings of being longer ones without sacrificing the essence of the story itself. I believe that this is one of them. (Besides, a gal can dream, right?)

*Cake* Overall: You have a way of capturing the imagination with just a few words. I enjoyed reading your work, and will be looking through your folder for other stories to enjoy.


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for sharing!

*Skier* You paint the story vividly with your words. I can imagine the mountain's POV and the skiers who are disrespectful of the power of that mountain.

*Skier2* I can see the scene clearly in my mind. Skiers trying to outrace the "stampede" of snow and how their hearts must be racing and pounding, not knowing if this is to be their last day on earth.

*Skiboots* I also imagine the mountains happiness at the skier's survival, and then also the realization on just how fragile human life is. That the mountain recognizes that finishes off the poem nicely.

Well thought out and executed. I enjoyed reading your work *Smile*

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am helping to judge the contest NEWBIES ARE THE JUDGES

Thank you for sharing your entry:

*Gavel*How this made me feel: I like the positive outlook of your poem. It is a reminder to be grateful, not just at this time of year, but always.

*Gavel* What I liked: I liked the rhyming scheme you used. It is an AABB format, and it flowed pretty well.

*Gavel* What I questioned: I didn't really question anything, but curious as to the phrase of winning battles "without defeat". The form was fairly smooth.

*Gavel* Overall: Thank you for sharing your poem. And thank you again for the reminder to always be thankful.

sincerely,
amy

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression:The buttons do remind me of the Badge Buttons that you see on occasion.

*Penr* How I feel about this:They are very colorful, and you have several for different occasions. These are priced very reasonably. You have done a cool thing here! I found you listed on the Reviewer's Raid list for this month.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have:I like how you've spent some time and effort here, and I like that you can preview before buying. I saw no typos or grammar issues with your little shop. I couldn't think of anything to make it better unless you are going to make different badges...

*PenR* Overall:Colorful, well priced, different occasions...you have a wonderful assortment. I wish you well with your little shop, and I hope to see it advertised once in a while *Smile*. Keep up the great work.


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression:Happy New Year Already! I like the concept of this auction, and you've really gone all out for it.

*Penr* How I feel about this:I'm glad that you have all the packages for the different animals covered, and I wish you well on the contest. I hope you reach your goal for the gps, and it looks as though there will be some great prizes to be won.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have:I saw no grammar issues or typos in your writing. The rules are clear and concise, and easy to understand. I like how you give a shout out to your donors, and you can tell a lot of thought and effort has gone into creating this contest.

*PenR* Overall:I wish you well in the contest, and I hope there is a lot of participation and activity. I also like that you've been advertising it regularly. I also hope that this will work out well enough that you will be able to host this contest or something similar every year *Smile*


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression:This is a pretty popular site! I like the way you have it set up, and the rules are clear and concise. I like the prompts, the way you have past winners noted, and also a shout out to donors. The prizes are awesome, and it makes me want to try my hand at writing "dark" stuff! LOL

*Penr* How I feel about this:You have a well thought out program here. The way you've written things out and have it set up shows the thought and effort put into this contest.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have:I honestly don't have any suggestions to add to this...I am sure you've gotten plenty and have used them or not depending on what they were...It is a great template for those who wish to do a writing contest of their own!

*PenR* Overall:A great job here. I also like that you give an alternative for those who like your contest, but not the "dark" part. That is very thoughtful of you. An awesome contest, and I am sure I throw something darkly written in the mix at some point. *Smile*


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression: A lot of information. A pretty good start to your story. I'm a little confused about where this is going, time travel? Alternate universe? I guess I will have to keep up with this to find out *Smile*.

*Penr* How I feel about this: I like the details that you give, and I can picture the young lady clearly in my mind. I am anxious to see where your story will go.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I spotted no typos or grammar issues. The story felt a little jumpy, but I am sure that it will settle down as you continue it. I say "jumpy" as it seems you are putting a lot of information up front and going from one thought to another without a smooth transition. But I am sure that will come, as you spend more time on your story. I enjoyed reading your work, and look forward to reading it as you press on. Keep up the great start you have here...

*PenR* Overall: I am looking forward to more of your work. I expect to see more of your writing as time goes by.


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell


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Review of send me back  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression: An interesting idea, to go back into time to make things right. While on the surface may seem like an excellent idea, may open up another can of worms entirely.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: You seem anxious to right the wrongs of the past. To show things as they truly were (or are).

*Cake3* Some suggestions: I saw that you only used punctuation at the end of the poem. I would have liked to see it centered to see how the flow would be affected. This is only my opinion, and you may take it as you will. I saw no typos or grammar issues with your free style poetry.

*Cake* Overall:This is a thought provoking writing. I am glad to have read it, and will look forward to more of your work in the future.


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression: A wonderful and thoughtful tribute to one's father. I enjoyed reading about the memories that each piece of furniture that your father made brought to life.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: You paint wonderful scenes with your words. My father also spent a lot of time crafting furniture in his wood shop, so this writing also connected with my own memories as well.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: Once again, I spotted no typos or grammar issues with your writing. Each detail was well written.

*Cake* Overall:Wonderful, evocative writing. Beautiful memories. I am so glad that I read your tribute. Great Job!


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression: An interesting poem. I like the question at the end of the writing. At first I was tempted to envy the evergreen, like the narrator did.

*Cake2* Other thoughts: As I continued reading, I wondered if the evergreen tree was a metaphor for someone who seems to have it all together, but in reality doesn't.

*Cake3* Some suggestions:I spotted no typos or grammar issues with your writing. I liked the color of the poem, as it just brought it that much more focus on the evergreen.

*Cake* Overall: Thought provoking writing. It was enjoyable and easy to read. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.


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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*



Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts: I can hear the pleading in the voice of the narrator. The agony of hoping someone doesn't wait too long before opening their eyes.

*PenB* My favorite part:"The angels cry for your missed opportunities" is my favorite line in the poem. It is heart felt, and paints a vivid picture.

*PenR* Some suggestions are: Remember this is your work - I only offer these as suggestions. The third line from the end, you've written Iv'e. I think you meant I've. My other suggestion, is in the last line, I would capitalize the "c" in champion, as it is another way of saying "Savior" - a proper name in this case. But it is only a suggestion.

*PenG* Overall: Definitely a heart-felt plea. Good questions are asked, and waiting to be answered. You paint a wonderful picture here: the "indifference", "turning your back". All can be seen as the poem is read. The scenes are alive - from the devil's "smirk" to the plea of "open your eyes" to "I'm waiting for you". I enjoyed reading your poem, and it was quite touching. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Thank you for sharing.

*PenR* My first impression: I am so sorry that your family is in such turmoil. It is hard when family starts fighting, and then posting it on Facebook definitely doesn't help matters at all.

*Penr* How I feel about this: I like that you found your strength in God, and that you cried out to him. Psalm 18:6 says, "In my distress I called to the LORD; I cried to my God for help. From his temple he heard my voice; my cry came before him, into his ears." That can be taken to the bank...when the righteous cry out, God does hear.

*PenR* Some suggestions I have: I'm not sure what exactly you wanted me to review. I would suggest some paragraphing breaks to make it easier to read. I also like the lyrics to the song. I would just add the group/author to the end of it to give credit, or if there is a youtube audio/video to link it in your work.

*PenR* Overall: I enjoy testimonies, and I thank you for giving me the opportunity to read yours. Keep up the good fight. Blessings to you and yours, and prayers for healing within your family unit.


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Review of The Angels Cried  
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Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work.

*Cake* My first impression: It is always heartbreaking to lose a "furbaby" member of the family. You've written some very sweet images that express the love you had for your "Boo".

*Cake2* Other thoughts: I like how you have hope to see him again in Heaven. I like that thought. I have several pets that I would love to see again one day.

*Cake3* Some suggestions: I saw no typos or grammar issues. I like the coloring of the writing. The imagery you've painted with your words is a wonderful tribute to your pet.

*Cake* Overall: I enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for sharing something so close to your heart. *Heart**Dog1*


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I can relate to your story. I have a "special little man" as well. He is my 4 yr old grandson. I live with his mom and dad and him and watch him so his folks can work. We are close, and I love hearing him call to me: Gramma! Gramma! It warms my heart as nothing else can.

Thank you for sharing your story. The flow of it is smooth, and it is easy and enjoyable to read. I saw no typos or grammar issues with your writing.

Grandchildren are such a blessing. I cannot imagine my life without my little man...or as I call him, "my sweetie boy".

As always, a wonderful story.
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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Review of Dear Me  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this letter. I found it clever, and inspiring. Sometimes we need a boot in the backside to get a move on, and what better person than "Moi" or "Me" or "I". I am still chuckling as I write this review.

You point out several things that you would like to do, and that you enjoying good health (at least at the time of this letter). I trust that you still do *Smile*!

I hope that you keep up the good work, and that you will have published the work that you had set out to do, and then some!

I saw no typos or grammar issues in your letter. I enjoyed reading it from beginning to end.

A New Year is fast approaching. I hope that it finds you with a lot of accomplishments and a healthy and productive time.

sincerely,
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Review of Witchdraft  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*



Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home, and enjoy all that WdC has to offer. The people here are a friendly bunch of folks, and don't be afraid to jump right in or ask questions!

I'm reviewing your piece today.

*PenP* My initial thoughts: This is cleverly written. I can see an old crone standing over a boiling cauldron. The potion ingredients are awful...but funny to read. You have a clever turn of phrase *Smile*

*PenB* My favorite part: The last lines are my favorite...Drink up with a smile! LOL

*PenR* Some suggestions are: The rhythm and rhyme is quite catchy. I saw no grammar issues or typos. I had a lot of fun reading this poem.

*PenG* Overall: An excellent poem. It enthralled me from beginning to end. You've done an excellent job here. *Smile*

Thank you for sharing your work, and Keep on Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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