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Review of What I hath lost.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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An interesting letter set between a lofty king and a lowly maid. I like how you've written in the language of the day. The maid's final question is thought-provoking. I would dare say a bit bold too, considering who she is writing to. But grief and fear of the unknown can make for emboldened actions.

I enjoyed reading from beginning to end. Thank you for sharing, and I look forward to reading more of your work again soon.

sincerely,
amy

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for sharing your paper. My first impression is that it is well thought out and presented. I saw no typos or grammar issues with your writing. You ask intelligent questions, and marvel at the species we call human. You also marvel at the different depths of the emotion we call love.

Your piece is thought-provoking. I enjoyed reading it from beginning to end. I like the questions you pose, and they are definitely food for thought. I also enjoyed the quote at the beginning of your writing. Well done!

Welcome to Writing.com. I hope you make yourself at home. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Mother  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


Thank you for sharing your poem.

I enjoyed reading your poem on motherhood. It is a powerful image of the one woman that means so much in our individual lives.

A few suggestions for you to consider:
2nd line..."but does not fears" -change fears to fear.
4th line..."her child future" - change child to child's
5th line..."Who heel" - change heel to heal.
7th line..."Who shy" - change who to who's.
8th line..."But always try - change to either "But always tries" or
"But always will try"

These are my opinions only, this is your work. I hope you will continue to write, and submit your work. I look forward to reading more in the future! Again Welcome to Writing.com! I hope you enjoy your time here.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Beaten  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Thank you for sharing your work.

A heart-wrenching topic. I could picture the scene vividly in my mind. I still feel chill bumps after having read your story. But in the end you give a powerful insight, in order to survive, you have to first realize you are a person of worth. An excellent message.

A suggestion - "But your not, you are..." - change the word to "you're".

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Again, Welcome to Writing.com. I hope you enjoy your stay here *Smile*

sincerely,
amy

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome to Writing.com! I hope you are enjoying your time here. Thank you for sharing your work.

The comparison of the narrator to a bubble is awesome. Afraid to go higher for fear of bursting, but not wanting to stay low. Afraid of being happy, but also of being hurt. Vivid imagery here.

A couple of suggestions: (but remember, they are my opinions - this is your writing) "if I go to high" - change the word "to" to "too" as in "too high". Also, the sentence "But i can't find...anything" is a run on sentence. Try breaking that sentence up into two or three sentences for clarity, and allowing the reader to take a breath.

An interesting writing - I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Keep up the great job! And again, Welcome to Writing.com *Smile*

sincerely,
amy

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Review of You  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home! The folks here are encouraging and friendly, so don't be afraid to ask questions, and just jump right in!

Thank you for sharing your poem.

I like the style of your poem. It reminds me of someone beckoning their lover to come to them. I see you didn't use punctuation, except to separate a thought on a line.

A couple of suggestions (remember, this is your poem. Any suggestions can be taken or left):

*PenR* Unless you mean the reader to take a breath, the comma on the fourth line "nothing ,but" doesn't seem necessary.
*Penr* spacing after the comma on line 6.

I like the earnestness of your poem. Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more of your work soon. From one newbie to another - Welcome again!

sincerely,
amy

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love reading your entries...sometimes you floor me with your $10 words...but that just means I have to go to Dictionary.com (A place I love to be anyway)!

You have a knack for making me laugh and smile and sometimes both. Your "Toadie" entry was definitely one for the laughter side!

As always, my friend - an awesome job!

sincerely,
amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing your poem.

I like that you explained the type of poem you were writing, and the definition of the format for it. (I always like not having to look that stuff up!)

Your answer to the reason the universe exists is love. Nothing else matters if there isn't love. An interesting poetic style to answer this question. I liked reading your poem. I saw no grammar issues or typos in your writing. It is a simple and sweet poem, that gives an answer to a question that everyone has asked at one time or another.

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this "tongue-in-cheek" lesson in poetic form.

I had to chuckle at the antics of the teacher trying to teach a lesson in wording questions to someone who really "had to go" to the bathroom. A bit sadistic on the part of the teacher, but funny to read.

I also like the ending, "who knows?" More than likely the lesson went right out of the student's mind after finding relief.

I saw no typos or grammar issues in the writing. It was enjoyable to read, and I look forward to reading more of your work soon.

sincerely,
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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this short story.

The title caught my eye. And I like how you described the prompt and what you were to use in the story. One suggestion: perhaps highlight the prompt words, so as to make it easier to spot for the judges.

A cute little story about a very active little boy. (Reminds me of my grandson!) I could picture the scenes as you wrote them. I spotted no typos or grammar issues in this piece. Nicely done.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Death, Stay Away  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Thank you for sharing this poem.

*Penr*My first impression: the narrator is pleading with Death to stay away "just a little longer" until the things he's planned are completed.

*Penr*I also notice that the narrator isn't asking Death to "go away completely", but to just give a little breathing room. The inevitability that death would come, and that the narrator would willingly submit at that time was a powerful statement to me.

*Penr*I noticed no typos or grammatical "thingys" to distract from the poem. The rhythm and rhyme were well done. Good thought was put into this poetry.

*Penr*An interesting read. Not a favorite topic, but nonetheless, I enjoyed reading it. Thought-provoking work you've written.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of I Need Coffee  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Thank you for sharing.

*CoffeeBl* The title of your story caught my eye. As a coffee lover, I shudder at the thought of going without a cup of coffee. Also, having to go to the hospital for blood draws is never fun. When you combine the two, disaster could easily ensue.

*CoffeeBl*I like how you described going about your day. You story was easy to read and flowed well from one scene to the next. I felt a shudder of horror at the "Nurse Rachett" character. Drilling for oil is never a good feeling when trying to find a vein for a blood draw.

*CoffeeBl*The only typo I spotted was a missing punctuation mark after the first sentence. Otherwise, spotless!

*CoffeeBl*The only thing I would have changed was the number of donuts that I would have ordered...I'd have gotten at least three after the trauma of the day *Bigsmile*. An amusing tale!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Wasted Talent  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A wonderful twist to this little story. Definitely didn't see that coming! I laughed when I read the final lines. Perhaps me may have been a starving artist then, but look at his work now!

Your writing was clear and easily readable. I spotted no typos or grammar issues in this amusing little tale.

Thank you for sharing. As always, I enjoyed reading it from beginning to end.

sincerely,
amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
As always, I enjoy your posts. I like how you relate writing to looking into a mirror. Reflection, whether from a mirror or thinking about what to write, or even just general thinking about things is good for the soul (Although there are times that the mirror terrifies me - LOL)
Keep up the great job with your entries. I look forward to more reading and thinking "outside the box"

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Game of Thrones  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
There was quite the participation here...and no wonder why! Most generous points not only for the group, but for the individuals as well, and a Merit Badge to boot! The flags for each of the houses are beautiful. The posts were crazy, and I don't know exactly how many people entered, but you certainly had your hands full with the activity. I am looking forward to next year's event and hope perhaps to get in on the fun!

Overall, and exciting and well done activity. I also liked how you had a survey for any suggestions on how to improve the game.

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amy

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Review of Best Friend  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A fitting tribute to your "fur baby". The poem is centered and in red, which is visually appealing. The rhyme and flow are smooth, and it is a wonderful poem about the love of a pet, and its unconditional love of it's owner.

I spotted no typos or grammar issues in your writing. A brilliantly written poem. As always, keep up the great work. The only thing that would have made it even better is picture of your fur baby.

As always,
amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
Thank you for sharing.

I'm never sure what to make of poems that are supposed to be rated badly. This is a strange poem to me. Full of zombies and zombie lore. It is scary and strange. Zombies are not my thing, but I try to be open minded about different genres. So, it occurs to me that I am to rate it bad for a good review. Perhaps I will figure it out. No typos or grammar issues here. Just a creepy and disturbing read.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Where Evil Dwells  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing your darkly spooky Halloween poem.

I like how you've centered your poem. I also like how you've woven the theme "where evil dwells" throughout your writing. It ties everything together, like an ominous warning.

I saw no typos or grammar issues here. The black wording is appropriate for the "evil" tone you've set. The flow is smooth, and the rhymes well done. You've painted the picture of darkness, and the warning of doom if care not taken. A great job for the Halloween season. I enjoyed your poem from beginning to end.

sincerely,
amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing your poem.

I like how you used "that time of year" throughout your writing. I draws everything together, from football to the holidays.

Descriptive words paint the different scenes you shown. I like the idea of crunching through the fallen leaves. And who doesn't like to cheer at football games? Then the holidays are around the corner and I can picture shopkeepers rubbing their hands at the thought of holiday sales.

Well thought out and executed. I enjoyed reading this from beginning to end. Keep up the good work!

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amy

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing...I immediately caught the Julie Andrew's song style before I finished reading. Nicely done!

I like the coloring of the words. Red is very appropriate for the blood and gore of zombies. Centering it gave it a nice flow, as did the sing-song of the poetry. By far one of my favorite poems, and I'm not really a fan of zombies at all.

An enjoyable read. A great job for sure!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of I'm Great at Math  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
An adorable silly-song style poem. I like how you followed the prompt, and made it into "nothing to do with math" at all. Lots of different things you've added into your poem: thumbs and fruit of all kinds...even asking "nanna" about things! Well done, and a fun read. Good luck in the contest!

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amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG...I love your adventures. You are very descriptive of the places you've traveled. I also like how you use pictures to help convey the feelings of the sights you've seen. I am a little green with envy at how you get to travel. Beautifully written journal! I will definitely check out your adventures from time to time.

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amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Ah, the voice of a young and vibrant love! Very descriptive and captivating is your poem. I enjoyed reading it from beginning to end.

I saw no grammar or typo issues with your writing. The flow is mostly smooth, but the enthusiasm and joy you express in your words more than make up for it.

Nicely Done! I always enjoy reading your work.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Innocent hearts  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wow...a powerful poem. A topic that is long neglected, and for which society as a whole is paying a steep price.

You paint powerful images with your words. The last two lines cap it off perfectly. Hate is such a
time bomb with no warning when it will go off. And children do suffer greatly for it. I applaud your poem, and agree with it completely. Well done!

sincerely,
amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A fitting tribute to your loved one. I hope you find comfort in your memories of the man you knew and loved as father.

Your use of punctuation is sporadic, so I'm not sure if you are using poetic license or not. But it did not detract from the warm and comforting images you've written.

Keep on Writing. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. And a heartfelt Welcome to Writing.com!

sincerely,
amy

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