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Review of Inspiration  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing.

I believe every writer experiences that. The chasing, the pleading, the searching for that oft-elusive creature called inspiration, can be frustrating at times.

I enjoyed reading your poem. It flowed smoothly, and I saw no grammatical issues with your writing. My favorite lines are: "if you would only come back to me, my words would again have a home."

As always, a pleasure to read.
amy

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Review of Inevitably  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this inspired poem.

I liked the format you used. The repeating of the word Inevitably gives the tone for your writing. One day or another, given enough time, we will experience all that you have written (and most I have).

I also like the way the last stanza is written, and how it can be a "moral of the story". The flow of your poem is smooth. I saw no typos or grammar issues here. Well thought out and executed.

I enjoyed reading your work, and I look forward to more enjoyable reads.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Her Dreams  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you make yourself at home here. If you have any questions, there is tons of resources and friendly people to help you on your way. Thank you for sharing this story.

*Penr*I liked the voice of the story. It runs from kindergarten to adulthood in a flash. I wanted to smack the kindergarten teacher upside the head for trying to quash the dreams of a child. That teacher is definitely in the wrong profession. I also liked how you wrote in the voice of the child, using a child's pronunciation.

*Penr*The last line of the story was my favorite: hard work CAN make dreams come true. I find this especially appropriate in writing.

*Penr*I noticed you didn't close your parentheses after the college teacher's statement. Other than that, I didn't notice anything else.

I enjoyed reading this very much, and look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Great Job!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of If I Died Today  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing such a thought-provoking poem.

My first impression is this is a poem about abuse - perhaps leading to a suicide. It is a disturbing poem, but it grips the reader from beginning to end.

I found no typos or grammar issues. The repeating line casts a chilling feel to the poem itself.
It is an interesting format, with the repeating line and the rhyming verses after.

Well thought out and executed. I am glad to have read this and given the opportunity to review. I look forward to reading more of your work.

sincerely,
amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This has been fun. I've completed 10 days now, and I'd love to join your group. It has been a nice discipline, and the prompts are thought-provoking as well as fun. I appreciate the time taken to put a group like this together. As always, WdC has a great community, and fun things to do!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Unraveling OZ  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Tornado*What a twist on the story "The Wonderful Wizard of Oz." As I read the story, I could see the story I know and how the twisting of the tale might be. It's a bit scary to see the twisting, and now I'm not sure which tale is right *Facepalm*.
*Tornado* I saw no typos or grammar issues with this little story. I also like how you called it a prophecy in this piece. "and they got the whole story wrong" is my favorite line.

Very well done. I look forward to reading more of your work.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Dream poem 23  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this poem. I especially like how you've described the format you are using, and the details (explanations)of that format. Very well done.

I like how you go from dream to nightmare to relief that it was only a dream. The words you chose not only fit the format, but were vivid as well. I saw no grammar or typo issues here.

An excellent job. Keep up the good work!

sincerely,
amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very nice story. It has a great lesson as well. Concentrate on what is before you and what you have accomplished, instead of worrying about things that you have no control of.

The dragonfly picture added at the end of the story finished it off nicely. Well thought out and executed. I saw no grammar or typo issues to distract from the thoughts you presented.

Nicely done. I appreciate you taking the time to share this life lesson.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of "Thank You RAOK"  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
So many people have been honored with an upgrade to help keep their writing dreams alive. It is wonderful to see all of those who have written in to say "thank you" to this caring community. I am happy to be part of this community. The words of thanks listed here is a tribute to what Writing.Com is all about. Keeping the dream alive.

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amy

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#1300305 by Maryann - House Martell
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a wonderful group. There are so many people and so many activities that help fund this group. I have been honored with an upgraded membership, and I find that this is such a caring community. It is great that the community is helpful to one another, and RAOK is doing a fantastic job!

sincerely,
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Review of A way away!  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Thank you for sharing your poem.

The title of the poem caught my eye. I also appreciate the background you gave in the description area.

I can feel the congestion in your words. Trying to find room to move and breathe in a city that is so crowded. I can also feel the excitement in your tone, as you talk about the wonder of this city.
You don't use punctuation, and that helps with the feeling of clutter you find in such a huge place. It works for this poem. I spotted no grammar issues in this writing.

I hope you are enjoying your stay with us at Writing.Com. Feel free to make yourself at home, and check out all of the activities and contests and information that is here. Don't be afraid to ask questions, as the folks here are encouraging and helpful. Again, Welcome!

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Kaali!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this poem. And Welcome to Writing.Com. I hope you are enjoying your stay here. Make yourself right at home. Check out all of the activities and contests and info here. Lots of resources and friendly folks to help!

I enjoyed reading your poem. Vivid words and imagery in your piece. I picture a volcano as a background setting for this poem. I like the idea of death and rebirth in your words.

I found no typos or grammar issues to distract from the flow of your work. Nicely done. And I like the last line about destroying the "demons of negativity."

I hope to read more of your work in the future! Keep up the great job.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of The little life!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*BalloonB* Thank you for sharing this poem. I hope you are enjoying yourself here at Writing.com. If you have any questions, you have only to ask.

*Balloong*This is indeed short, but interesting life of a peasant family. The lowest class citizen, the last to get anything. Life is all about survival. A family sold - whether it is to starvation or slavery, it is a sad tale. Crack in the household - Like a crack breaks up a house, so does being a peasant breaks into family life. Broken walls have become barriers. -like broken walls, poverty and starvation are barriers to the family's lives, imprisoning them as no bars can do.

*BalloonY* A well written poem. I saw no grammar or typos in the execution of this poem. I enjoyed reading it, and had to think about it. I hope I wasn't too far off the mark.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Selfies  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Wow...I guess taking "selfies" can be hazardous to your health, and life, as the case may be.

Interesting story and perspective. Thank you for sharing this item. The voice of the narrator is a bit abrupt, with just a tiny bit of sarcasm thrown in for good measure. A bit condescending, but I think that was what you were trying to accomplish.

Couple of suggestions (my opinion only...take for what is worth)..."in the Zoo", perhaps change to "at the Zoo")
Also "I didn't took selfies" perhaps change to "I didn't take selfies" Other than that, I didn't see too much grammar or typo issues.

Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you enjoy your stay and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!

sincerely,
amy

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am totally in love with this paper. The title caught my attention, especially since I am not a computer whiz. Very cute use of "SLICK" anagram. I also like how you listed M & M's as optional, but not coffee.

You wrote in a nice and neat manner. Step by Step that is easy to follow. I noticed no typos or grammar issues with your piece. It flows smoothly and is easy to understand. This makes it a great resource for newbies as well as not-so newbies, alike.

Thank you for sharing this information. Great Job! If possible, would love to add this paper to the forum "Please Help Me" if it isn't already.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of It's Everywhere  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this my friend!

*Sun* You are correct! We all wear labels, and mental illness is one of the ones that some of us wear. We are everyday individuals just trying to live our lives. It is a shame that society judges us. And it is sad that these labels can keep us from getting to know some really wonderful people.

*Sun* The title caught my attention. As I read, I was gripped by the truths you share in your work. I like how you centered your work, so as to keep the focus on what you are saying.

*Sun*You didn't use ending punctuation. It didn't detract from your words. I saw no typos or grammar issues with your poem.

*Sun* Well done! I enjoy reading your work. You have remarkable insight. Keep Writing my friend!

sincerely,
amy

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In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome to Writing.Com! I see that you've just recently joined our family. I am excited to see that you've already begun entering contests. Awesome! I found your entry on the "Read A Newbie" page, and here is my review of your piece.

*Penr* I'm not sure of who your "Devil" is at the DMV (they may all be) , but you've described him with vivid detail and imagination. I also noticed that you've highlighted certain words, which must be the inclusions necessary to the contest.

*PenB* I can picture the old clerk in my mind. Any government office has sluggish lines, as I'm sure you know. Amazing detail in your free form poem. I saw no typos or grammar issues to distract from the "hell" you describe.

*PenG* Nicely written. I hope you do well in this contest. If you have any questions, don't be afraid to ask. The folks here are friendly, and encouraging. From one Newbie to another: Welcome! Good Luck on your entry. Keep Writing!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Construction  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Penr* Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you are making yourself to home here at the site. Thank you for sharing your work.

*Penr* Simple format for this free-style poem. No typos or grammar issues to detract from the flow of the poem. I like the centering and spacing of your words. You use no punctuation, but that doesn't take away from the flow.

*Penr* You use simple yet powerful words. It follows your description about self improvement nicely.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Birth and Death  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

Thank you for sharing.

*Pencil* I enjoyed reading your story. It was filled with emotion: excitement, wonder, shock, grief, despair. You certainly filled the range in this short story. Vivid imagery and I could picture the story in my mind as I read it.

*Pencil*I didn't see any typos or grammar issues in this piece. Nothing to detract from the smooth flow of your story. Nicely thought out and executed.

*Pencil*The last sentence struck me the hardest. "A family of the dead." A powerful statement that drives the story home. We can never tell what the future brings.

*Pencil*I see you've just recently joined Writing.Com. Welcome! I hope you enjoy your time here, and that I get a chance to read more of your work in the future. You've got a great start here. Keep Writing! And thanks again for sharing.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Delivery Failure  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Thank you for sharing.
*Pencil* Wow...did not see that ending coming. Nicely done! I enjoyed reading this very much.

*Pencil* I enjoyed reading this little story. I like how you pictured the mom, learning from her son on how to send an email. I also liked how you showed her concentrating so hard to get it right. Nice imagery.

*Pencil* Then BAM! I couldn't believe the ending of the story. It is sad and powerful at the same time. It was also bittersweet that mom continues this ritual every night, and that the failure notice somehow gives her solace.

*Pencil* I see you are fairly new to Writing.Com. Welcome. I hope to read more of your work in the future.

sincerely,
amy

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In affiliation with Jane Austen Group  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Well written and thought out. You certainly are knowledgeable about all things Jane. I like the trivia you put into the newsletter, and I can read your enthusiasm throughout the writing. Your pictures are certainly eye appealing as well. I appreciate that you take the time out of your busy schedule (both here at WdC and at home) to bring us these tidbits. It is much appreciated.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Tobin Goes To Bed  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Ball* Thank you for sharing this cute little story. I could picture it clearly in my head. Kind of reminds me of putting my grandson to bed (or trying to, at least). It took a little time, but Mommy and Daddy finally got Tobin to bed. It is an adorable little story.

*Ball*The dialog was smooth and life-like. It is cute how you wrote as Tobin in the dialog. I saw no typos or grammar issues in this story. Nothing to distract from the flow.

*Ball*Overall, an excellent story. You took a lot of care and effort into presenting it, and the work shows. You've done a great job for this little children's story, and I wouldn't mind reading it to my grandson. Great Job!

sincerely
amy

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Review of Game of life  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Interesting read. Thank you for sharing!

*Penr* I like the way you think about what you wrote. It is an interesting observation, and my favorite part is the last phrase: "and I hope I don't run out of quarters."

*Penr* I'm not sure of the writing style...if this is meant to be a long winded ramble, or how you are using {or not using}capital lettering and punctuation.

*Penr* It is a great theme...and I hope you continue to write and improve your work. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

I also notice you are fairly new to the site! Welcome to Writing.com. I hope you enjoy yourself here. If you have any questions, there are a lot of folks here who are very encouraging and helpful. Again, from one newbie to another, Welcome!

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Thank You WDC  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Cool beans! I love the bright colors and the centering. Very cheerful and upbeat. Rhyme and flow are smooth and flow right off the tongue. I am happy that you have found a place to call home. (It's mine, too) I like the last line of your poem best: "This is were I'm supposed to be". This is a free form poem since you don't use punctuation (I believe) - it adds to the upbeat feel.

sincerely,
amy

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Review of Blue  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*PoseyB* Thank you for letting me take a peak into your folder. There is no doubt about the love you have for the color blue. I like the different ways that you describe what the color blue means to you, and what you equate the color blue with. Very eye appealing. I like how you've centered the poem and the two different colors of blue that you use in the wording.

*PoseyB*I like how you've set your folder up: awards, things that need more reviews and things that are works in progress. You've done a wonderful job with this folder. Even the titles of the different folders are in blue.

*PoseyB* I saw no grammatical issues or typos in your outlines. It is very easy to read and easy on the eyes.

*PoseyB*Overall, and excellent you've done and excellent job. The format, color and set up are superb. Great Job. I look forward to reading your work in the future.



sincerely,
amy

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