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Review of Last Letter  
Review by Arden
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a really good and strong idea! Very creative. Now, towards the end, there were a lot of punctual and grammatical errors, such as missing commas and even missing words. I love the concept o having this man still feel the same sort of best friend feelings towards this other dead man, even though it has obviously been many many years since his friend died. Keep up the great work!
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Review of The Shooting Star  
Review by Arden
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is amazing. It really pulls the reader in through your use of imagery and emotional detail. I feel like you really captured what it feels like to lose a child. For some constructive criticism, I loved your use of rhyme, though I wouldn't worry too much about it, or stress about what word you will use that captures your emotions and rhymes with the last one. Just let your imagination flow. It was very very good overall, keep it up!
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Review by Arden
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a very very good idea! I love how you tie in the fact that even though the character is "just a baby", he is possibly remembering something of a past life or could just be making things up. I gave you three and 1/2 stars, however, because there are a lot of gramatical errors and some of the ideas within the dream sequence could be elaborated more. Keep up the good work!!!
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Review by Arden
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is very emotional and I can tell it came from the heart. It is very relateable, which makes it easy for the reader to connect to the piece. Well done!
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