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Review of The Crash  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hey! Congrats on winning the 55 Word Story Contest!

This is a WDC Power Reviewers Review!

Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: another great example of how to say a lot with only a few words

*Pencil* Theme: live changes in an instant

*Tiedye4* Speaker(s)/Flow: great use of diction in such short spanse

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone/Mood: chaotic, sirens wailing, death approaches

*Suitheart* What I liked: you get a good guess/glance at a horrific yet heroic scene

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*At those words, Tom tensed, sighed, then went still.

"Look at that smile. If he didn't know before, he did at the end."
does this mean he knew the stroller was there but wasn't sure he missed it OR does this mean he crashed for another reason but is glad he won't necessarily die in vain? OR am I just thinking too much *Pthb*

A few parting comments...
5, this is the type of story I want to write in 55 words

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hope it helps!
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Review of Clackety Clack.  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey! Congrats on winning the 55 Word Story Contest!

This is a WDC Power Reviewers Review!

Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: cute, makes me want/ask for more

*Pencil* Theme: train drain leads trial strain

*Tiedye4* Speaker(s)/Flow: nice use of onomatopoeia

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone/Mood: moving, forward motion, noise, then reality hits

*Suitheart* What I liked: unexpectedness of the train and 'clacking' noise

A few parting comments...
soooo, is he on trial for derailing a train? or does he have a train hobby but fell asleep while on jury duty? I may never know....

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review of Alien Invasion  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hey! Congrats on winning the 55 Word Story Contest!

This is a WDC Power Reviewers Review!

Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: neat to consider aliens being so tiny

*Pencil* Theme: aliens invade!...our backyards, ants and snails beware!

*Tiedye4* Speaker(s)/Flow: pretty good

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone/Mood: foreign/alien, unknown

*Suitheart* What I liked: alien stories are fun

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

(Original quotes will be in black, any changes or suggestions I'll make in blue to make it clear)

*BulletG*he declaimed, driving the imperial standard into the turf. That might have been sufficient to claim yet another planet
hard to tell if the commander is safe on a ship somewhere or if he met the same demise as the others in the fox terrier's tummy

A few parting comments...
4, bit ambiguous

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey!

Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: this is cute, and could be perceived in at least a couple different ways

*Tiedye4* Speaker(s)/Flow: flows well for a nonet, I like this style

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone/Mood: youthful, helpful, hopeful (a little 'are [they] what you wanted?')

*Suitheart* What I liked: the simplicity and image of a 4 yr old bringing flowers

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*I heard and
acted.
Gone!
bit of a cliff hanger/ambiguity; is this purposeful? if not maybe:
"No you say?
I see.
Gone!"

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Review of My... Sweetheart  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: cute and sweet, though being the freest of freestyles it's a little hard to read

*Pencil* Storyline: two lovers that can't/aren't/won't be together

*Tiedye4* Characters:two lovers

*Home* Setting:any where, any time

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone:love lost, maybe never found

*Telephone* Dialogue:monologue, one speaker?

*Suitheart* What I liked: the speakers love for the other, no matter what
Even if you don’t marry me
You are my loving Valentine,
My heart is yours, forever be
I know your heart is mine.

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

(Original quotes will be in black, any changes or suggestions I'll make in blue to make it clear)

*BulletG*I might not want to marry you too
Maybe age, maybe timing, whatever may be,
And I won't feel sometimes blue
I promise, it’s a guarantee.
I might not want to marry you too
Maybe age, maybe timing, whatever may be,
And I won't feel sometimes blue
I promise, it’s a guarantee.

the double 'maybe's throws me off, consider rewrite

*BulletB*Even if you don’t marry me
You are my loving Valentine,
My heart is yours, forever be
I know your heart is mine.

I know your heart's forever mine.

A few parting comments...
on a second read through, it reads a little easier; still not huge fan of 2nd stanza though and it's odd you gave a 'word count' instead of a line count

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review of Four  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Congrats on being featured in this weeks Action/Adventure newsletter!

Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: starts off as a progressive, lazy grasshopper vs. the busy ant anecdote turns into a 'what's ours is ours and we'll murder you to take it'

*Pencil* Storyline: two couples are cast out for reasons unknown, the village that shunned them dies off in the winter; the couples finish off the survivors and claim the land for their own

*Tiedye4* Characters:the four, the village, then the remaining 5 skeletons

*Home* Setting: village in a third world country....

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: sad, despondent, vengeful

*Telephone* Dialogue: a big middle finger to the survivors

*Suitheart* What I liked: survival instinct of the Four, plus reversal of gender roles, women were the hunters, like lions

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

(Original quotes will be in black, any changes or suggestions I'll make in blue to make it clear)

*BulletG*They just went about their own business;
They just went about their own business;
avoid use of extraneous words, clutters the story

*BulletB*The Villagers' number dwindled to twelve.
usually you see "numbers" when speaking of a population, but I like the singular because the number is so small

*BulletR*Elder Villager and explained,

"Fuck You."
not much of an 'explanation' more like a 'declaration'

A few parting comments...
just sucks that the Four aren't much better than the village because they could have easily ruled over the 5 and still used their skills as opposed to just killing them off....

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review of Love Song  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: i no poetry expert but I like it!

*Pencil* Storyline: love story from meet and greet til death parts them

*Tiedye4* Characters: two love birds

*Home* Setting: anywhere in the world

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone:loving, reminiscent, dramatic

*Suitheart* What I liked:
Then do whispers divine and exalted give light
To the life that we share and the love that one knows

In the gloaming we're naked, our hearts we reveal.

we do fight
To return to the days of our youth when the rose
Of our love first did bloom and before it took flight.

A few parting comments...
looks like a perfect first attempt at poetry! good job

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review of Ariadne's Thread  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: i wouldn't say you're bad, this poem just has an abstract theme, or at least a theme/subject I know nothing about

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: not sure...figured Ariadne had something to do with Greek myths and a quick google confirmed this, so I'll say the tone is "odyssey-like"

A few parting comments...
don't know much about her specific tale but being the daughter of Minos her world was probably pretty dark, with a little hope and truth thrown in, classic Greek tragedy

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review of Trinity  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: oooo, i like it

*Pencil* Storyline: comparison of foul and how their spiritual natures are comparable to 'us' (assuming human lovers)

*Tiedye4* Characters: sparrows, ravens, swans, and the illusive 'us'

*Home* Setting: on a lake, in the air, anywhere

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: spiritual, avian, loving

*Suitheart* What I liked:the theme of birds and three's

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*These three:
like us.
this to me sets the whole precedent of what came before, all the descriptions are allegory's for the speakers love?

*BulletB*Sparrows
Flit the high void.
so their love lasts/survives anything? even bottomless pits!

*BulletR*Ravens conjure rainbows.
i'm rusty on my raven knowledge but they feed a lot off worms right? which come out after heavy rains...like rainbows....maybe? anyways I take this to mean their love again stands the test of time and weathers any storm

*BulletV*Swans allude love lifelong.
i do know swans mate for life, fairly self explanatory, very nice

A few parting comments...
really cute, hope a guy writes poetry like this for me one day

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!


*Reading* Initial hook: seat belts, to fine, or not to fine

*Pencil* Theme: seat belts should be a choice and a God given right to ignore!

*Tiedye4* Speaker(s)/Flow: pretty straight forward, headers were and interesting choice for such a short piece

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone/Mood:annoyed, anti-government, pro-choice

*Suitheart* What I liked: the personal account and strong opinion

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG* if you truly do own yourself, what gives the government the right to decide what safety precautions you chose to participate in, if any at all? ...As an adult I should be the one that decided all matters involving my life. The government should not be able to enforce laws which govern how I decide to control my body,
never thought of it like this...but then that makes me question suicide attempts, those result in forced psychiatric care, curious what your views on that are

*BulletB*This is the same argument I have for all things concerning self-ownership, and is the same argument I have for the drug war, income taxes, prostitution, property rights and every other assault against a sovereign individual that the government commits on a daily basis.
wholly agree about the drugs and prostitution, not educated enough to comment on taxes and property rights, though I know some people who feel just as strongly as you

*BulletR*I do this simply to waste as much of the states time and resources as I can. I will go to court even if I know that I have no chance of winning, I feel it's the responsibility of every person to do the same. If everyone was to do this, the system would collapse under its own weight...and this would be a good thing!
ha! interesting, very interesting....or the government would pour more money into the 'justice' system and we'd have as many courthouses as we do churches ;-P

*BulletV*In my closing I pounded the table a few times (always a good ploy to show your outrage)
hahaha, did you really?!

*Bullet* After commenting that since there were no other witnesses, she would have no other choice but to rule in my favor.
awesome! ...but didn't you still have to pay the speeding ticket?

A few parting comments...
most comedic retelling of an everyday inconvenience.

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: thoroughly enjoy a good 55 word story, suspense, wonder, and conclusion in fewer words than a quick prayer

*Pencil* Storyline: lady on street corner, what's she waiting for?

*Tiedye4* Characters:Victoria, rude bus driver

*Home* Setting:anytown, USA or the world

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone:hurried, curious, waiting

*Telephone* Dialogue:her name is all we need

*Suitheart* What I liked: my imagination went the way of a drug deal or some other illegal transaction...until he pulled up

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review of Fear  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: i never tire of poems regarding emotion

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone:not quite fearful, but not very courageous either

*Suitheart* What I liked: the telling of/about fear from you POV

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

(Original quotes will be in black, any changes or suggestions I'll make in blue to make it clear)

*BulletG*Fear's a thing we don't entail,
fear's the reason we won't fail.
right away i'm stumped; 'entail' didn't seem right, though I could see how it abstractly fit, so I looked it up: entail = involve (something) as a necessary or inevitable part or consequence.
yep yep, I can see us not wanting to entail fear in our lives, but I think sometimes we do, I get what you're saying though

agree, fear of failure is a very real and often beneficial thing


*BulletB*Fear is how we built the world,
fear hopes the place will come unfurled.
never thought about it like that, but yea, I'm sure the cavemen were afraid of life staying hard so that's partially why started inventing things....

I don't get the 2nd line at all though; what 'place'? as in evil creates chaos?

*BulletR*But fear's a funny thing you know,
we feed it, but it never grows.
love this rhyme even if I only half agree, tangibly I guess it doesn't grow but fear is never tangible to begin with and it's easy to think of being more afraid of one thing and less afraid of another, or even to become more afraid of something due to events

*BulletV*It stays the same, it can't expand,
It is limited by our own hand
true true, the more control we have over ourselves, the more we can control our fears

*Bullet*Because it never wants to die,
fear is nothing but a lie.
the most poignant statement; I agree in some senses but not in others, but then it's all in how you look at it, for instance; fear of failure can be a good thing if it drives you...but it can also be a 'lie' in that you pick the wrong major to succeed in because it doesn't fulfill you; all great things for me to think about

A few parting comments...
thanks for urging me to put my emotional thinking cap on *Bigsmile*

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review of My Lancelot  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: cute Ode to Lancelot

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone:dainty, rhythmic, bardic

*Suitheart* What I liked:easy flow, simple to picture

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

(Original quotes will be in black, any changes or suggestions I'll make in blue to make it clear)

*BulletG*Your armour shines like a diamond
Your armour shines like a diamond

*BulletB*Your horse is as white as a cloud
Your horse is as white as a cloud

A few parting comments...
less is more with poetry, look to omit small words/unnecessary articles; sentence grammar can be loosened for the sake of poetic rhythm, unless you meant to follow the syllabic pattern you did

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Reading* Initial hook: what an amazing and inciteful read!

*Pencil* Storyline: story behind a simple piece of furniture yields a fascinatin gpast

*Tiedye4* Characters:several, Nazis, Jews, and others alike

*Home* Setting: WWII, Nazi Germany

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: historic, interesting, slightly profound

*Suitheart* What I liked: the way this read like a journal entry, I assume all of this is true? if not, good job

A few parting comments...
"the girls survived the war, married, and prospered... "/Another hapless twist befell the girls who managed to survive their ordeal,"
I see you're referring to two sets of girls, different families, but it's difficult to maintian who is who and what happened to which families and how they were connected, were they all hidden in the same town or same house?

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Review of My Oxygen  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Reading* Initial hook: very nice tribute to your mother

*Home* Setting: memory, based around the kitchen?

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: reflective, sensory, harmonious, circle of life

*Suitheart* What I liked: you do a decent job of involving the senses of sight and smell

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

(Original quotes will be in black, any changes or suggestions I'll make in blue to make it clear)

*BulletG*Hot tomatoes permeate
this dull kitchen,
salted away, as the red pots soak
in their frothy bath.
go further with the sensory descriptions, through in some touch senses and more smells

*BulletB*Can you imagine?
Beneath the lid, being
that last molecule of air?
don't quite understand this, are you going back to the canned tomatoes? or whatever else your mother use to can?

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: PLEASE tell me this is published somewhere! would have loved to read this in school

*Pencil* Storyline:all the old poetry bards convene in the afterlife to chat payment, food, and dance

*Tiedye4* Characters:several, but not all, the great poets of life past

*Home* Setting:the Bards convention of course

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone:lively, festive, creative, great fun

*Telephone* Dialogue:love how you made each bard who spoke speak in one of their popular tones or remake a popular poem

*Suitheart* What I liked:"a poetry party with ghosts of yore.";
"make a ghoulish goulash beyond belief.";

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*Emcees for The Quill
shout out to WDC Quills?!

*BulletB*Walt Whitman gave word, "let's have your attention!
It's time to be heard at this yearly convention."
Walts a fav! glad he had a speaking part *Pthb*

*BulletR*I shall flatter each entrant the same.
‘Evaluations? there’s none! Salutations? you’ve won!’
and leave them all dreaming of poetry fame.”
interesting, just who is this non-critical flatter?

*BulletV*they shot me a look
but seemed to accept me as theirs.
On went the clappin’, carousing, toe-tappin’
embracing this twit from upstairs.
fascinating, forgot the narrator was an outsider! love it...

A few parting comments...
4.5 because you fail to mention Plath or Hughes and it would have been nice to have a few newer poets speak up, like Silverstein and Dr. Seuss ;-P

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Please remember that these are just my thoughts, at the end of the day whatever you decide is the right answer!

*Reading* Initial hook: .....this $h*t is crazy.

*Pencil* Storyline: .....ummm, it's about Rams....and their plastic father...and a waiting room with a stupidladywhoneverseemstobeatthedesk

*Tiedye4* Characters: ummmm, rams, the desk lady, ram daddy, and the two narrators...

*Home* Setting: who knows?!

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: random, and rammy

*Telephone* Dialogue:think this whole thing is a bizarre dialogue/text message chat between delightful weirdos

*Suitheart* What I liked:"Unbeknownst to this person, the nice building is made entirely of nice people.";
"You decide to feel in his pockets a little,";
" this was not Hollywood. Slow motion running ensues,"
" like quantum mechanics, is often a little hard to come by)."

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*Have you ever wanted to be stuck in a lift with someone?
good question! if I'm being honest...I think yes....yes there are a couple people that could be fun with ;-P

*BulletB*By that time, I will have adequately garnered the abilities of apparition and transformation of oneself into a baby.
that was the most sane sentence out of that paragraph, you need sleep; oddly enough, I've often daydreamed about knowing someone at the age they are now but I'm toddler age and they help 'raise'/take care of me and what our relationship would be like if that happened after they already knew me as a grown up....ok maybe you aren't so odd after all....

*BulletR*I think I’d like to have my body burnt and turned into a brick.
that possible? I want to burnt and disseminated over the ocean...but a brick? not possible.

*BulletV* in true Hollywood fashion, the producers insisted on a sequel so that they could wring the plotline until it was dry
amen

*Bullet* To your utter astonishment, it has your name on it. And then it hits you: you are the ram.
whoa, mind. blown!

*BulletG*The thing about insomnia; is that it makes for great sunrises.
indeed....

A few parting comments...
last line was probably the best *Pthb*

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Review of "Thank You RAOK"  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
Rated: E | (5.0)
Grateful for this program!
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Review of The Fog Plant  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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*Reading* Initial hook: glad you tagged it as "political" in the genre, I started reading thinking it was about nature/plants; and ended it thinking it was a rant on politicians (and their nature); gave it a 3 because I'm rather neutral when it comes to politics and associated press, also this is a very random versed rant/pouring out of thoughts, not really set to poetic music of sorts, that doesn't mean it's not good, just doesn't warrant a high rating in my view, it's more of a journal entry

*Pencil* Theme: politicians suck

*Tiedye4* Speaker(s)/Flow: slightly choppy, not very organized, not necessarily a bad thing, just requires multiple read throughs

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone/Mood: annoyed, bewildered, confused, not quite hopeful but not giving up either....

*Suitheart* What I liked:"fog for the trees"; as in smoke and mirrors cover the trees, thus we can't see the forest for the trees but now we can't see the trees either...deep.

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*never minding the cautions
the wind forgot to bring.


*BulletB*but when I did they bacame so
passionate;
but when I did they became so
passionate;

*BulletR*If it's true you can't help what you can't see
then they've blurred the line
between the unseen and the make-believe.
really like/enjoy this turn of phrase

*BulletV*and retalliation by verbiose grandeur
and retalliation by verbose grandeur

*Bullet*I never used to mind so much
but when I did they bacame so
passionate;
interesting, what you notice/find when you actually pay attention

*BulletG*By counteracting with silence they will win
true, but then what do you suggest? many people conduct rallys and protests, are you saying that's not enough? what would be 'enough', short of running for office ourselves, but then mightn't we get caught up in all the bribery, craziness, and intrigue of those silly political squabbles and debates? I myself and curious to know and find someone who can beat the system and rise above the rest....without getting assassinated before they can truly make their mark

*BulletB*I remember how it used to be
and how it worked out
so that there was no such worry
when I was a younger man
but that was before
but earlier you said you didn't used to care, in that you weren't really paying attention when you were younger, I'm sure what's happening today is just a new face, same game

A few parting comments...
I am trying to earn 36k to keep my upgrade before 5/15, if you're satisfied with this review please utilize my review request feature. Thanks! Have a great day.

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Review of Dad's Messy Hands  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Reading* Initial hook: super cute, sounds more like a limerick collection than stand alone poem

*Pencil* Storyline: Dad makes some bizarre meal with condiments

*Tiedye4* Characters:dad, jimmy lee and jesse

*Home* Setting: the kitchen

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone:messy, fun, silly

*Suitheart* What I liked:the imagery and fun rhymes

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*He reached into mustard
He reached into the mustard

*BulletB*and the red he was a-knowing.
forced rhyme

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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*Reading* Initial hook: I really like the idea of this contest and can't wait to enter one day!

*Suitheart* What I liked: The 'journey through genres' style and the clear rules

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*#2 - Entries are to have a 4,000 word count, no more.
'There is a 4,000 word limit' or 'Word limit is 4,000'; the way you have it now makes it sound like it has to be 4,000 words

*BulletB*Winners will be posted on or before 10 MAY 2013
I like how you keep the rules updated, too many contests get slack in this area I think.

*BulletR*#5 - I will allow for ONE edit during the open period of the contest.
That's nice of you!

*BulletV*the entrants will be listed and they will spilt 10K GP's.
will split 10K; another interesting development, usually they just roll over until it happens, I like your idea!

*Bullet*Anyone donating over 25,000 GP's will be given a merit badge for "Spring" for Round 61.
You know I never thought about this, most groups don't make it clear that if you give more than once you can get additional badges, smart.

*BulletG*you'll be listed as for that round as well. Every round offers an chance to earn a merit badge.**
listed as for; offers a chance

A few parting comments...
it might be good to have a list of past donors also; 4.5 because of the few typos and lack of image to left of contest name

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Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*Reading* Initial hook: love this because I used to find myself sometimes doing this on bored Friday nights with CraigsList ads, it really was more fun sometimes just talking to people/filtering out/through the desperate to get to the gold

*Pencil* Storyline: bored housewife is chat-cheating on her chunky monkey hubbie

*Tiedye4* Characters: the black widow of cyber space, chunk-monk hub, all those unsuspecting intellectual space men

*Home* Setting: the confines of ones creative mind, and/or cyberspace

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: amused, witty vigilante wreaks havoc on the unsuspecting

*Telephone* Dialogue: not listed but would love to see those chat logs

*Suitheart* What I liked: the relatability, view of the woman as taking advantage of men

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*The costume materialized slowly....slick as hair oil on a gigolo.
what are you describing here exactly? your dark cyber persona? doesn't seem to fit...blue smoke? wraiths? ashes and moss? I'm confused....

A few parting comments...
4.5 because I want more details and is this based on a true story...?

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Review of A Mother's Love  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading* Initial hook: thanks for sharing a painful tale, full of sweetness and sorrow

*Pencil* Storyline: the 3 day life of puppy Lucy and her mom's struggle to let go

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: heartfelt, reflective, thoughtful

*Suitheart* What I liked: the acknowledgement of a 4-legged mothers feelings

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG* Then she proceeded to dare anyone to take that baby out of the basket again.
gotta ask, how did you get Lucy from her?

A few parting comments...
4.5 because neglected to mention how Maddie ended up coping at the end

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Review of Past Due  
Review by A*Monaing*Faith
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Reading* Initial hook: love how you built the suspense in what seems like an erotic fashion, till the end

*Pencil* Storyline: guy gets his freak on at a foreign planets brothel? only he discredits the enormity of his mounting credit

*Tiedye4* Characters: Eddie the miner, 'She' the clawed prostitute, possibly an unknown male that 'growls' at the end

*Home* Setting: brothel on Citron 7

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone: seductive, slightly dangerous (in a good way), then scary for Eddie at the end

*Telephone* Dialogue: fine, like how she's cooing to him

*Suitheart* What I liked: the twist

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*His eyes opened to a situation vastly different from the one he’d imagined.
oooo, very nice ascension up to the unexpected

A few parting comments...
4 because it would have been nice to know who growled about money at the end, the prostitute or someone else

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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