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Review of Silent Hero  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like it. Not complex. Simple precise to the point. The words are easy but I think that's how it should be. Poetry shouldn't be complicated. The only change I would make if it were mine is the "thank you, thank you, thank you" part. That's too repetitive. Why not "thank you and thanks again". That's all. Have a wonderful night.


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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
Vivid, I could see what you were saying. You painted a perfect picture. The words flowed and I didn't have t reread to catch up on anything I missed. You really miss that home and I can feel it.
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was excellent. I'm not a fan of lengthy poetry. I get bored and stop reading it, due to how they usually drags. But I read on. Mainly because the son and dad relationship. Good holiday piece.
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was excellent. I'm not a fan of lengthy poetry. I get bored and stop reading it, due to how they usually drags. But I read on. Mainly because the son and dad relationship. Good holiday piece.
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Review of You Had.  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (3.0)
Your word choice is to simple. You're just rambling. This is your chance to throw in some wit. Look this over and read it again. Emotionless and broken is mundane. I've heard it. Tell me more about how great he was in detail. Then when he flipped, tell me how horrible he was in detail. And one more thing(I'm guessing you're some chick talkin' 'bout some dude.) Don't start out anything with you had a big nose. The way you describe him tells me he wasn't special so you didn't write anything special.
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It's hard to write a happy poem. I can once in a while but lets be honest the best things in writing are weird, scary, dark and deep. As I read your free verse I'm able to conjure a scene to every other line. I find it chaotic and unorganized but I like it. I prefer crooked picture frames and catercornered. I hope I spelled that write. You make me worried about you. Which is good that is real emotion I feel for you. Tell me you're alive. Peace.


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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
I hope to see my testimonial pop up.
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Review of Depression  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked that. I could easily put a rhythm to it. In fact I just did. I got a website where I upload all my music recordings. It would be awesome to get your permission to record as a song and let me post with name on it of course and I will give you the link to go to hear it.

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Review of Flying High  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
wow that was heartwarming and cute.
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Review of Here's to You  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
You did good. I think he got the message.
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Review of Simple Tale  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.0)
Ok, very imaginative and it has meanng; you wrote it for your daughter. And I can't critcize you for it being girly cause it's supposed to be. I also like the last line in the second stanza: "...who has your name too", I felt like you were reading to me. You could build on it if you wanted. I just didn't like the last stanza
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Review of Little Girl  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
OMG!!! That was brave. I felt it in my heart. I gotta be honest with you. The rhyming was perfect. Great words! I wish I wrote it.
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Review of forget  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
i have my secrets
i have regrets
but i'll tell you one thing
you will never forget

unlike my hopeless hopes
forgotten dreams
and painful memories
tearing at my seems

why must i hold on
when there is nothing to grab
there is nothing you can hurt (GREAT!)
when there is nothing left to stab

time goes by
with out even a sound
i will keep searching
until there's nothing to find (You don't got to rhyme all the time)

i have told you of my past (Speak to your reader)
and it seemed to make it better
but that feeling doesn't last
so now i begin my letter

to those that know
all my secrets and regrets
i only hope and dream now
that they will never forget



I AM BY NO MEANS TAKING YOUR WORK. THIS IS JUST THE BEST WAY TO TELL YOU WHAT I THINK.
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Review of On the Other Side  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
To be honest with you I think you are rhyming too much. But that's just my personal opinion. I didn't finish it. I got to the third stanza and got a lil' lost and disinterested. It's to epic and innocent for my taste.
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Review of Field of Snow  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Very well written I enjoyed reading that. And thanks for the poetry lesson on Rondel form
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Review of As You Wish  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Erotic dances of the shadows,
scattered about by candlelight.
Lightning strikes to break the darkness.
I shook in fright and tried to hide.

Hollow footsteps fall on stone.
The door opens with angry nails scratching noise.
My eyes take in the looming figure.
Shivers follow his deep voice.

And oh, his offer, sheer temptation.
Daring me to surrender my all.
How the realms of passion lure me,
ever closer, a siren’s call.

He asks me three times, wickedly.
My answer draws a deadly kiss.
And when my life flows far away,
he whispers gently “As you wish…”

I really liked it.Dark and sexy how you submit
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Review of Husk  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like it. Im still trying to figure out the message. I'm guessing its a political piece. We as individuals rarely achieve who we really want to be.
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Review of Crimson Moon  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (2.5)
I like the way it's presented and the idea. I wish you used better words and maybe even type it in Ye Olde English form.
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.0)
The way you feel about life is the way I feel about my generation
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Review of Borrowed Bodies  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Man the second stanza describing the lung cancer freaked me out. So we have cillia in our lungs that smokers burn away gradually? When you say sweepers I guess you mean they're meant to filter out the bad stuff like dust.?


peace
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Review of Music and Writing  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
I get inspired by others. It might be a single word or a line in a song and it just triggers something. Especially if you have writers block. Listen to your favorite band or read your favorite writer.
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Review of The Color of Moon  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
That was good. I was abale to put a rythm to it. I'm a songwriter so If there's a melody in there I'll find. That was a good song


Peace
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.5)
That was good. I don't like coffee that much but I like wolves' though. And I like the the structure of this poem too.
Read me sometime.

Peace
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Review of Moon Sees  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, how straight to the point can ya get? It's so sad. And raw just like I like'em. the poetry I mean.
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.5)
It's sad. It took me a little while to catch on because it's a little complicated. But I felt it after I started making sense out of it.
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