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Review of Dilemma  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very nice. A poem I guess talking about life and time. I like
"How can a story
None understood
Express the passion
Fire has for wood?"
Especially.


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Review of Clarion Cry  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I understand more than anybody on here actually what you're going through my mom is nuckinngfutts. You you convey how I feel perfectly thank you


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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (3.0)
First off, I think you.meant inner rage? Change code to law and if it's not part of your body of work then leave your self opinions for the comments
I'm only saying this cause I try contests all the time and I think I have a shot. That would not win. Im open to critical reviews too. It would be appreciated


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Review of Goin' Fishing  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
Don't lie! You been drinking like a fish. I've never caught one. What's the biggest you ever caught?


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Review of After Dawn  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very well written. The loneliness is a gift and curse. I observe the world better. Its comfortable to me now since I see how ugly people can be.


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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.5)
Ah I laughed when you started with Wal mart. Starts out with reminding us of a classic saying. describes the world perfectly. I only gave it 4.5 bc of you starring out with something said so many times. As strong as it is.


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Review of Night Song  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (3.0)
So thats what goes on at night. Im a dark faery


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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (3.0)
Ok ok you getting it. Thats a some cool s***. Just too quick
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Review of Poetry  
for entry "The Master of Me
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
Keep on writing. Word play is a must. Broaden that vocabulary so you can clearly tell me what you want to say.


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Review of Silent Hero  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like it. Not complex. Simple precise to the point. The words are easy but I think that's how it should be. Poetry shouldn't be complicated. The only change I would make if it were mine is the "thank you, thank you, thank you" part. That's too repetitive. Why not "thank you and thanks again". That's all. Have a wonderful night.


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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
Vivid, I could see what you were saying. You painted a perfect picture. The words flowed and I didn't have t reread to catch up on anything I missed. You really miss that home and I can feel it.
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was excellent. I'm not a fan of lengthy poetry. I get bored and stop reading it, due to how they usually drags. But I read on. Mainly because the son and dad relationship. Good holiday piece.
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was excellent. I'm not a fan of lengthy poetry. I get bored and stop reading it, due to how they usually drags. But I read on. Mainly because the son and dad relationship. Good holiday piece.
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Review of You Had.  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (3.0)
Your word choice is to simple. You're just rambling. This is your chance to throw in some wit. Look this over and read it again. Emotionless and broken is mundane. I've heard it. Tell me more about how great he was in detail. Then when he flipped, tell me how horrible he was in detail. And one more thing(I'm guessing you're some chick talkin' 'bout some dude.) Don't start out anything with you had a big nose. The way you describe him tells me he wasn't special so you didn't write anything special.
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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It's hard to write a happy poem. I can once in a while but lets be honest the best things in writing are weird, scary, dark and deep. As I read your free verse I'm able to conjure a scene to every other line. I find it chaotic and unorganized but I like it. I prefer crooked picture frames and catercornered. I hope I spelled that write. You make me worried about you. Which is good that is real emotion I feel for you. Tell me you're alive. Peace.


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Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
I hope to see my testimonial pop up.
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Review of Depression  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked that. I could easily put a rhythm to it. In fact I just did. I got a website where I upload all my music recordings. It would be awesome to get your permission to record as a song and let me post with name on it of course and I will give you the link to go to hear it.

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Review of Here's to You  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (5.0)
You did good. I think he got the message.
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Review of Simple Tale  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (4.0)
Ok, very imaginative and it has meanng; you wrote it for your daughter. And I can't critcize you for it being girly cause it's supposed to be. I also like the last line in the second stanza: "...who has your name too", I felt like you were reading to me. You could build on it if you wanted. I just didn't like the last stanza
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Review of Little Girl  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
OMG!!! That was brave. I felt it in my heart. I gotta be honest with you. The rhyming was perfect. Great words! I wish I wrote it.
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Review of forget  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
i have my secrets
i have regrets
but i'll tell you one thing
you will never forget

unlike my hopeless hopes
forgotten dreams
and painful memories
tearing at my seems

why must i hold on
when there is nothing to grab
there is nothing you can hurt (GREAT!)
when there is nothing left to stab

time goes by
with out even a sound
i will keep searching
until there's nothing to find (You don't got to rhyme all the time)

i have told you of my past (Speak to your reader)
and it seemed to make it better
but that feeling doesn't last
so now i begin my letter

to those that know
all my secrets and regrets
i only hope and dream now
that they will never forget



I AM BY NO MEANS TAKING YOUR WORK. THIS IS JUST THE BEST WAY TO TELL YOU WHAT I THINK.
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Review of Field of Snow  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Very well written I enjoyed reading that. And thanks for the poetry lesson on Rondel form
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Review of As You Wish  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Erotic dances of the shadows,
scattered about by candlelight.
Lightning strikes to break the darkness.
I shook in fright and tried to hide.

Hollow footsteps fall on stone.
The door opens with angry nails scratching noise.
My eyes take in the looming figure.
Shivers follow his deep voice.

And oh, his offer, sheer temptation.
Daring me to surrender my all.
How the realms of passion lure me,
ever closer, a siren’s call.

He asks me three times, wickedly.
My answer draws a deadly kiss.
And when my life flows far away,
he whispers gently “As you wish…”

I really liked it.Dark and sexy how you submit
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Review of Husk  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like it. Im still trying to figure out the message. I'm guessing its a political piece. We as individuals rarely achieve who we really want to be.
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Review of Crimson Moon  
Review by Mr. Jones
Rated: E | (2.5)
I like the way it's presented and the idea. I wish you used better words and maybe even type it in Ye Olde English form.
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