I found this in the Read & Review portal. Even though it's been a while (2009), the truth written here is still relevant today. I enjoyed reading about God's willing sacrifice, His Son, so that we have the hope of eternal life. Thank you for sharing this vital truth in a wonderful poem.
An interesting retrospective. Giving way to pride, in order to secure one's mate? Some may find it easy, but it seems that the writer is finding this a difficult task. Pride is hard to overcome at times. Living with the consequences of that choice might be equally as hard. This was written 16 years ago. Was it a prompt, or an actual dilemma? I hope if it was a dilemma, that it was figured out.
I found this in the Read & Review, and haven't read your work in a while. Thanks for sharing.
I like the style of this poem. It is always cool when a new poem is "born". Lyrics just make it flow easier, in my opinion. Was this done as a prompt? Thank you for sharing this with the community. I found it in the Read & Review port. I hope to find more of your work soon.
This is a sweet poem. I like how you've given the Quill such a noble character. I could see other writing instruments being not so noble, and like you said "being a blabbermouth", spewing any and all things. I enjoyed the personality you gave the Quill, and I thought it a wonderful writing. Thank you for sharing this, even being 9 years old.
Wow! What an interesting POV. It does make a difference in one's life to acknowledge God. Now I would ask what you think about a relationship with Him, rather than just acknowledgment? I really like this writing, and have fan'd it. It give me a lot to "chew" on, for sure!
I came across this poem in the Read & Review section. Now I want to read about the Jester. This poem is quite sad; there is a lot of feeling of "what if" or "why me", that really doesn't get answered, but one feels there is a deeper meaning. The ending of the poem gives a little bit of hope, with the son carrying on the father's legacy, so that he is remembered after he is gone. I get the feeling he entertained sick children, and some of them don't survive their illnesses. This caught me in my "feels", as about 27 years ago, my youngest had kidney cancer, and there were people who came around whose job was to make them smile. Fortunately, my daughter did survive her illness. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Dear elizjohn,
I see that you wrote this using a prompt. I like the way you put the prompt words in bold text. I do the same when I am using prompt words. You paint a vivid picture of the way the moon hangs in the sky at night. I also like the way that you phrase the moon as a new beginning. I can see it in my mind's eye. I found your writing in the Read Review port. Thank you for sharing it. I saw no grammatical errors. It is well done. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
I get the feeling from your poem and its description that you feel "out of place". I'm not sure if this is in reference to a church, or just a community of people, but it sounds like you didn't get the support that you needed from them. That is a hard betrayal to come back from. I like the font that you used. It makes the poem stand out. I also like the minimal use of punctuation. This poem hit me in the "feels", and I am sorry that you feel this way, if indeed it is based on real life, and not just a prompt. I saw no grammar issues, spelling-wise. I could only suggest that centering it might make it "pop" more, but that is just my opinion. It is well written. I have fan'd this poem, and I hope to read more from you in the future. Keep up the good work.
Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope that you find what you need here in this community of writers. Years ago, I lived in Italy when my then-husband was stationed there. Learning to communicate was hard, and I had it easier, as many people knew English. Some of the shopkeepers were helpful, but it did take quite a while before I was able to half-way converse with the locals. You explain the difficulty extremely well, and it's not fair that you have to "learn all over again" because of the language barrier. I hope you continue your writing journey here. Keep up the great job! You express yourself quite well.
Now, you've done it...I am hungry! I can see the transitions of winter to winter with cherry blossoms and cherries ripening. I also love the idea of a cherry pie, warm out of the oven, and topped with ice cream! Then of course, winter comes again with the promise of spring and so the cycle repeats again. I lived not too far from Traverse City, Michigan, and had access to lots of cherries. My mom would also make Cherry Dumplings in the fall (again with vanilla ice cream)...heaven!
It's been a couple of years since you've written this. Was it for a prompt? I also liked the note feature, where you describe the type of poem that you've written. That was informative, and appreciated. Thank you so much for sharing this writing. I found it on the Read & Review portal. Keep up the great job.
I enjoyed reading your poem, which I found in the Read & Review portal. I see in my mind's eye the leaves fluttering, still attached to the trees, rustling in the breeze. I see clouds like cotton candy floating lazily in the sky. This is a restful and quiet poem. No grammar issues noted. I look forward to reading more of your work. I am giving a 5 rating, and am "fanning you". Keep up the great wok.
Ouch. This poem hit me in the feels. I understand the pain of 3 steps forward and 5 steps back. I hope that this feeling of despair will forge a new toughness in you, and that you will be able to move forward. It will take courage, and I wish you well in your journey. Peace, and blessings to you.
LOL!! What an adorable poem! It was bouncy and hit me just right. I hope that this gets consideration for winning Writer's Cramp. I guess words do make a difference. LOL. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to reading more of your work soon. I saw no grammar issues. A very cutesy poem.
I love how you show your love for Bella. She was a good companion, and I know you miss her even after all this time. I like the bouncy feel of the poem and it's aaaaaaa rhyme scheme, hence, the mono-rhyme name. LOL. It's been a while since you wrote this and I found it in the Read & Review portal. Thanks for sharing.
This puzzle was interesting and fun to complete. Pencil and Pencil Sharpener were put together on the same line, which was hard to find at first. I enjoyed this, and I'm glad that you posted this puzzle. Thank you for sharing.
I am a fan of Twilight. Call it a guilty pleasure...it can be cheesy sometimes, and cringy at times as well, but it is a "Young Adult" series. Whatcha gonna do? I like how you like lay out the reasons why you like the different characters. I like Rosalie's back story, and can understand her stand-offish attitude and dislike of Bella's choice to become a vampire. That backstory surprised me most of all. And I agree with you about Carlisle. He would make an awesome "Dad".
Thank you for sharing this. It is has been 16 years since you've written this, but it still tracks for a "nerd" like me. LOL.
I believe I've had that sandwich at one time or another. LOL. I can picture it clearly in my mind's eye through your descriptions. And yes, food does taste better outside. Love picnics myself. It's been a while since you've written this, and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.
I see a duality here. One, the play is finished, and the applause over. It's time to start a new play. The other side, life, which I guess could be considered a play, is finished. Breath has left, is no more. This got me to thinking, perhaps harder than it was meant. Thank you for sharing!
Wow. Simple, but not simplistic. To recognize that death is just part of life's circle, but doesn't mean the end. I enjoyed this poem, and will miss the encouragement and the friendship. This is very much appropriate.
Welcome to Writing.com! I hope you are finding your way around this wonderful community. I found your writing in the Read & Review portal, and I've enjoyed reading it. I've not thought about the relegating the moon as a "she", although I've heard the term "moon goddess" in stories. The way you describe the different attributes of the moon shows careful thought and intent. I love the way you end your writing about "not being alone". This is a great point of view.
I hope to read more of your work in the future. Well done!
My First Impression: I have to be honest, this writing got me to thinking. I've never thought of vultures in this way. Creatures just trying to survive, feed their young, and go about their business as they were intended to do. My usual thought is, as you first hinted, is disgust. What awful creatures.
My Favorite Part: But they have their own ways, and the right to live as any other animal. I particularly liked the way that you say that we all one day will pass from this earth, like the unfortunate animal that was their meal. Maybe not as bluntly, but still, we shall pass. An odd, but comforting statement. We all have a purpose.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts: I wanted to welcome you to Writing.Com. I hope you find the freedom to write as you will, and that you will find this a rewarding community. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
This story makes me not want to ask the question "Can anything else go wrong?" Acck. I know it has been a while since you've written this, but was it a prompt (I hope) or something that actually happened? (Feeling like this might be the answer )
Things happen, and people are not always thoughtful about it. It's a shame. Thanks for writing and sharing.
I really enjoyed this puzzle. The words were fun, and I thank you for your descriptions in the intro page. Some of these words were new to me, like "medstones" . Very inventive. Thank you for sharing this puzzle.
Quite the hook. Now I have all kinds of questions that beg to be answered. 500 words aren't enough. Was this a prompt? It reminds me of a dialog challenge. I know that you wrote this twenty years ago, and I found it on the Read & Review prompt. I would read more of this story if it was ever developed. Thanks for sharing
To be so young and carefree again. I like your abb rhyme scheme here. Even being sad to go home, but wanting to go out and be adventurous the next day. The joys of youth. Thank you for sharing this. I found it in the Read & Review portal.
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