I am reviewing this as part of the 23 in 11 Writing Challenge. Your entry is right before mine, so here goes:
My First Impression:Well, ok, then! I had to shake my head, as I've known one or two people like Mitch. It is almost "meme" worthy, blaming Auto Correct for everything. I felt sorry for Tess, and I'm sure that I would have responded in silence as well, although I'm sure there would be a "boil-over" point in the not to distant future.
My Favorite Part: I had to chuckle when the store owner told him that he was going the wrong way entirely! Tess must have felt justified, although she doesn't say anything, that stare must have spoke volumes.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts: I hope that your flash fiction does well in the contest. Good luck! I enjoyed reading your little story.
I saw "New Idea" posted on the Newsfeed. Curiosity getting the better of me, I thought I'd check it out.
My First Impression: Ho-boy! This is not what I was figuring it to be. Your story leaves me with a lot of questions and not very many answers. I'm shaking my head at the antics.
My Favorite Part: The thought of "rent a casket" made me laugh. This sounds like high school or early college thinking for sure.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:Flash fiction is incredibly easy to read and digest. It does leave a lot of questions, but it is enjoyable. Thank you for sharing, and I'm glad that you won the contest with your entry. I will have to check out this flash fiction genre.
I can totally relate to having blah days, but wanting to do something in spite of it. You bring up an interesting point of view. We all manage to fail at some point or other; I believe it's part of being a member of the human race. We can have our moments of "ah ha!" but mostly we just live day to day, minute by minute in some cases.
I like that you make being a "loser" not such a stigma. I don't think that any of us have a right to sit in judgment and declare someone a "winner" or a "loser".
I want to try this salad as soon as possible. The ingredients are wonderful, and why not shake things up a bit? You've done so, and it looks delicious. I'm going to have to follow your recipes more often, as I am a recipe collector myself.
Thank you for sharing this tasty morsel and I look forward to finding more of your goodies in the future.
What a perfect poem to display your faith and understanding of God. You followed the prompt and the syllables read perfectly and smoothly from line to line. It is true, that walking by faith is not an easy feat. Sometimes it would be easier to just "go with the flow" and not have the struggles. But in the end, I believe that it all shall be worth it. I get the feeling from your writing that you agree.
Thank you for sharing your faith. These lines may be simple in form, but they pack quite the punch.
I saw where you posted this in the Newsfeed today (9/21) so I had to check it out.
My First Impression:OMG! This is quite the "tongue in cheek" poem about falling in love in a Walmart shopping line. Your title and descriptive are spot on! I was thinking that this would have played well in a Larry the Cable Guy special...
My Favorite Part:The last stanza had me laughing out loud. "by time or the discovery/that we are closely blood-related" Who knew that Walmart could be the place of inspiration for poetry?
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:I saw no mechanical or grammatical issues with your writing. Just pure unadulterated hilarity. I plan on checking your port out for more treasures in the future. Thanks so very much for sharing!
My First Impression:This is definitely a different take on all of the word searches I've seen so far for the celebration. Genre seems to be the call word in several of the contests as well. It is good that you highlighted them.
My Favorite Part:I love word searches, and of course I had to do this one as well. It is an easy puzzle to solve for the most part.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:I had to reset the puzzle once, as it would not let me highlight "military", but it turns out that there is a space in front of the word that needed to be highlighted in order to finish the puzzle. Other than that, well done! Thank you for sharing.
My First Impression:This is a wonderful way to celebrate WdC's twenty-third birthday. I followed the prompt as well, so I am seeing new puzzles all over the place.
My Favorite Part:Word Searches are my favorite kind of puzzle, and this one is entertaining. The words you chose are indicative of a party going full tilt.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:Thank you for posting it in the Newsfeed, for this is where I found it, and then of course, completed it. You fulfilled your prompt entry excellently. Thank you for sharing.
My First Impression:I read your Newsfeed post, and I like the "Sermon in the Mirror" reference. Sometimes we just need to take a closer look in that mirror. And sometimes I tend to shy away from mine
My Favorite Part:I just like the "sing song" bounce of this poem. The words are encouraging, and also ask questions of me that give me pause to reflect.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:I've made a copy of this poem for my personal meditation, and I've also made a copy for my youngest daughter who is a Christian, has a young family, and sometimes just needs a spiritual hug. I hope that is ok. Please let me know if you'd rather I didn't. Thank you for sharing! Blessings Always.
I found your poem in the random Read & Review
My First Impression:Looking at an evening sky is always a wonder. It is especially grand when you can get away from the lights of the city and just see the vastness of space.
My Favorite Part:I like that you named the type of poetry form and provided a link that describes the form used. It is quite helpful, and also inspires me to check out different forms of poetry. I didn't realize that there were so many!
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:I found nothing of note in grammar/mechanical usage. I see that this was a contest entry for something a while back. I'm assuming the bolded words are words from a prompt. I'm glad to have read this, and I hope to read more of your work in the future.
After reading your work, My impressions are these:You are a glutton for punishment... And I mean that in a good way! Just looking at the different prompts that you've come up with for the Writer's Cramp...it boggles my little mind, for sure!
My Favorite Part(s) Some of your prompts crack me up - like your latest one "23 Cows Are Missing"...Wherever did you come up with that? It really doesn't matter, but it was a hoot all the same. Some of them are quite challenging as well, as "Things you didn't see" being the first and last line of story/poem.
Suggestions/Questions:I like that you used a larger font for ease of reading. I enjoyed checking out your prompts, and I will have to try to come by the Writer's Cramp more often.
Happy WdC Anniversary, and thanks for sharing and all of the encouragement.
Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you find yourself at home here, and allow your creativity to shine. I found your poem under the "read a newbie" tab.
My First Impression:Your writing draws comparisons - yourself to an empty bottle, but also to the vast ocean.
You want to be happy and free like the ocean, but also recognize that the ocean isn't always "sunny".
My Favorite Part:You make a good argument - as bottles can be recycled and used again, can we not also be reused or given another chance at life? I believe that people do deserve a second chance.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:I like the questions you pose in your poem. I would just recommend a little larger font for those who have older eyes. I'm glad that I found your poem, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
My First Impression:I love the picture prompt of your poem. It just has a calming effect: the blueish moon over a large, calm body of water.
My Favorite Part:I like the format of the poem, that you referenced: the Nonet Poem. Thank you for sharing your writing.
My Suggestions/Final Thoughts:Other than font size, I think this is well done. I like centering of poetry, and I also like the lack of punctuation. I just like my reading fonts a little larger as my eyes get tired easily. This is really good.
I found this on the random Read/Review port.
My Thoughts:This gives me Edgar Allen Poe's "The Bells" kind of vibes, where instead of bells, there are screams.
My Favorite Part:This poem drags you into the poor man's mind - unable to escape the screams that torment day and night endlessly. Then, for an unspecified amount of time - all was silent, and he found that he was begging for the screams to begin again. That it was a comfort to him, gives a horrific feeling to your writing.
My Suggestions:other than the size of the font, which would just make it easier on my tired eyes, I found nothing. It may be a while before I get this out of my head. It was written a dozen years ago - do you remember if it was a contest? Thank you for sharing this. It would make for a good Halloween-style horror writing contest. Just my opinion. Thanks for sharing!
My Thoughts:While I agree mostly with your introduction, I would use caution with a blanket statement of "little value" being placed on non-Christian forms of meditation. Value of mediation is in the eyes of the one meditating. However, as a Christian, I do understand your point of view.
My Favorite Part:I like how you separate the different aspects of mediation in your article.
Final Thoughts:I looked up the definition of mediation and found that your writing coincided with
the definition given. I wasn't for sure, as my initial thought on mediation was more about centering oneself and to put aside distractions.
The definition I found below:
Spiritual meditation is an experience that takes you to the depths of who you are. You, as your real self, stripped of all the perceptions you had about yourself until that point in your life. In the process, you experience joy and peace. A feeling of love and light warms up your being.
After reading your work, My impressions are these:I like poetry and often participate in the forum Express it in 8.
My Favorite Part(s)The picture fits the title. The writing captures the feeling as well. It is disjointed - surreal. Waking up from this dream might cause a weird sensation of not being totally awake. Your description of the dream fits the prompt exactly.
Final Thoughts:I like the font that you used, as well as the size. Thank you so much for sharing.
After reading your work, My impressions are these:
My Favorite Part(s)You describe a wonderful day. Your words paint a picture that I can see in my mind's eye. I love little fairs like these where you can buy most anything. I also loved the atmosphere: busy and music floating all around. I also like the transitioning from day to evening. The statement about the homeless person just fits in as well. This is an authentic look in a person's day, in my opinion.
Suggestions/Questions:What kind of dog is Lucy? I could picture a Corgi in your story, but that is just me. I love the font that you used in your writing. Thank you for sharing your "perfect day".
My Thoughts:As always, your love of writing shines through. When I look at my poor scribblings, I am humbled.
My Favorite Part:I very much share your enjoyment of "the Writing Place". A place to share encouragement, as you say, "daily hurts to mend", and just to have a haven to release the thoughts that build up. I find a gentle encouragement from your writing. The ease of your rhyme schemes is inspiring - I have to work on mine. The flow of your writing is smooth, and I know that you've had ages to practice...so keep on practicing I shall.
My Suggestions:Dumb question, I know, but where are you located (in general) as I notice that your spelling of certain words is different than mine (example: blest, where I would write blessed). Suggestions? I have none, other than to keep doing what you are doing. You are appreciated greatly.
My Thoughts:Well, you hit the nail on the head, and I absolutely love this. It is brilliant! I hope you get lots of reviews for it. I was curious at your entry title when I posted my entry for the week.
My Favorite Part:I like that you used the exact phrase for your acrostic endeavor. I would have never thought to do that. I also love the spacing and the coloring of the letters you used for this writing. It lends a fun addition for reading. You use different phrases for describing the way acrostics are used: "your tales of joy or of woe". A true description, indeed.
My Suggestions:I have no suggestions at all. No grammar or mechanical issues. It inspires me to be a little more creative with my future acrostic poems. Thank you for sharing your writing. I enjoyed this immensely.
My Thoughts:I think that you did just fine with the prompt. I've read it a couple of times, and it speaks volumes in its simplicity.
My Favorite Part:I like how you talked about the crabs, swooped up by hungry gulls, then compared it to one day yourself being snatched away by time. Leaving no trace, though? I think I would disagree, for you would carry on in people's hearts and memories. I know that I count you as a friend and cheerleader and encourager here, and I know I am not the only one who believes this.
My Final Thoughts:I like how you've centered this poem, and the reading of it has a smooth flow. It is thought provoking, and I am very happy to have read it. If I could "double fan" you, I would. But you will just have to let me give you a five- rating for this piece. Thank you for sharing, my friend! I look forward to reading more of your entries for the PPC4!
My Thoughts:The phrase you wrote: "For all find what they truly seek." really hit home with me. And begs the question, what are we seeking? Truly?
The dwarfs being for themselves also brings to mind the saying in the book of Revelation regarding being "hot or cold" - That picking a side (rightly or wrongly) is better than to be undecided (lukewarm).
My Favorite Part:This verse gives hope where things look hopeless:
"But those, who seek through hopeless days,
so driven by desire
at last in Truth desire may
lead them to The Higher".
Your poetry is an inspiration to me -
I would love to hear this book, as I am a fan of Patrick Stewart; his voice is soothing and he draws one in.
My Suggestions:I have no suggestions - as usual, you have a gift (well practiced) and I am very grateful that you choose to share it.
My Thoughts:I read this story because you advertised it in the Newsfeed. I was curious, and now I am glad that I did read it.
My Favorite Part:The sense of humor was quite dry (pun intended). Brett seems like a "devil may care" type of vampire. I wonder if he was like that before turning? I also got the impression that he is a rake, and doesn't care about anyone but himself. I was surprised that he wasn't "killed" but just relocated, albeit under duress.
I was a little surprised about Detroit being one of the possible banishment areas, but I've heard how rough a town Detroit is in real life.
My Suggestions:I wish that this was a longer story. I would love to know more about the individual characters that I only got a glimpse of here. If you ever decide to enlarge this story, I'm all for reading it! Thank you for sharing.
After seeing your signature, My impressions are these:That isn't too big a threat, I would think, unless one is going to be "done in" by poison or something
My Favorite Part(s)I love the picture of you and your fur baby that was put into your signature graphic. Ruwth did a great job, and you must have been tickled with it.
Suggestions/Questions:Was it a birthday or anniversary present here? It's so cool to have things like that. My purple tiger was modified with my name, and I really enjoy it. I wish I could figure out things like that. Thank you for sharing.
After working out your puzzle, My impressions are these:They definitely have to do with being big. Some of the words I wasn't familiar with, but it didn't stop me from finding them.
My Favorite Part(s)I absolutely love search a word puzzles; they are my favorite. This was an interesting topic, and I don't believe I've seen this topic before in a search a word. Thank you for sharing.
Suggestions/Questions:Was this done with a prompt, or was it just something to do (I get on kicks now and again with word searches of my own). Keep up the good work!