This story, written by cdcraftee was an entry in the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" and I believe that it has been underestimated but reading and interpreting is somewhat subjective I'll be the first to admit.
I really liked the descriptive writing - listed in genre as drama - I thought it could also have been in the sci-fi genre as well. However, that may be the way I interpreted the direction the story appeared to be taking.
An interesting end to the story which left me thinking that the story had more to offer i.e. it could be extended past a Flash Fiction offering to a full short story. Well Done!
A co-winner at the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" written by QueenNormaJean lostthewishbone - who is becoming a regular winner! Congratulations Y'know, I thought it was a stunt to get out of paying the bill, but that isn't what it ended up as' - but I laughed at the audacity of the tale! Well told!
"Bo' Town" written by dragonwoman was co-winner at the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge" - and deservedly so! Great characters - all with the right lingo' in the dialogue and nice mystery presented as the twist in the tale for the finale! Very pleasing as always and my reward for the day as a reviewer
I really found this free-verse poem, "Existing" - beautiful. Written by Newbie, Charlie the Human - this item is something for all to enjoy! It is simply an example of genuine experience put down on paper. It's authentic and abundant with the experiences of the writer - and a life-lived!
Won't I leave ink and graphite? And turn to dust and breathe?
Is it not magic to leave remnants of essence lying around so a stranger may know
that this place is not untouched?
"More Than Man" is written by a Newbie to WDC - Fae - and has a genre category of sci-fi/spiritual.
What I liked
I thought the 113 word intro/synopsis was very good. A smooth read without jarring errors of grammar or punctuation.
What I think for ongoing development
Why not try this as a short story of 1000- 2000 first? That way, you garner real interest and can re-upload newer versions as the story is developed? I believe that reviewers would be more inclined to review short stories of 1000 - 1500 words when you put it up in public forums for reviews. Good luck - it's looking interesting!
"[Two Haiku Regarding Obesity]" by Newbie-just-a-few-days-ago - Anusol - technically correct - but I hope the writer is wrong - at least about the first Haiku - I am on a diet until Christmas 5 kg in 5 weeks!
What I liked
The technical correctness of the 2 Haiku's
What I think could improve it
Simply - the appearance on the page.. I'd choose green - centred with a little motif top and bottom. An attractive page can engender more interest in the choice a reviewer makes, I believe - to review a piece of writing.
"Pre-Interview Chat with SARS-CoV-2" written by Newbie, Thanatos Lopes - who doesn't indicate that it might be in the comedy genre, but I did think it was kind of funny... - however even with the worst of COVID' behind us (well, in Australia at least...) I don't know if the world is quite ready to laugh it all off.
I hate spiders too... instant death to them if I see them in my house! However, I agree with the writer - there is still a degree of fascination which accompanies the fear... but I would rather see any spider big or small on the internet where I can exit asap
I think this needs some punctuation - either a colon: or semi-colan;
They amaze me some are poisonous and others are harmless
"Going Under" by Newbie, Kay Was quite a clever piece because I believed that the person was self-harming in the bathtub ... but in under 100 words (Flash Fiction) I've come to understand a completely different intention - and I'm glad to say - a better outcome.
not sure about this word
I feel my lungs loose air, it's such a bare to stay afloat
A very imaginative and clever piece of writing - perhaps it could be the beginning of something more?
"A moment of meditation" by K.HBey is one of many in their port ~ it was a gorgeous array for me to choose from! The writer has listed the genre as ~ Inspirational! And indeed - it was. An example of free verse, I believe, although I am still learning about things, and can only attribute merit on the basis of the way that the verse made consider it - but I can tell that the writer was greatly inspired.
Very imaginative QueenNormaJean lostthewishbone I was convinced it was a bad dream! ... until I read the last line ... & then I wondered “Did I read that right?” Yes, it seems that I did! So... who’s crazy? Well told & Congratulations on your Win at the Daily Flash Fiction!
Well, we in Victoria, Australia know how that feels... online Zoom classes and grocery shopping only (Chemists, Dr's were the exceptions) All other shops Closed! Only allowed to travel 5km from where you lived... only 1 person from the household allowed to shop for the day. It has been like a prison sentence without the crime done! ... Easing up now - slightly but still have to wear masks everywhere.
My son teaches at Uni - and I hear similar stories from him... it must be odd - but yes, its great to be still employed! Have a good week! AJBurchell-DownUnder OOPS! I just realised that this is a review - Oh well ...so be it! Nice Photo!
I thought of this as a truly sad story and I remember buying encyclopaedias for my children to augment their studies - and then along came *Windows 95 and *Google, making our poor library of encyclopaedias obsolete.
A wonderful, if sad tale ... I'm reminded of Hans Christian Anderson and stories like 'The Little Match Girl'. So, well told - and its true, a good story doesn't necessarily need a happy ending.
I enjoyed the development of the story "Remembrance" by dragonwoman who has written a mystery Remembrance Day story. It's absolutely lovely - and has a very stirring finish! The accompanying picture to the story is just right, too.
I think this should be mind's [inner] ear...
In my mine’s ear [first line]
QueenNormaJean lostthewishbone has written an Excellent piece of Flash Fiction! The art of this genre is to get a superb twist in the tale. Well, that’s the ultimate goal. I can honestly say that she’s nailed it! I’m writing this RV on my iPhone so it may look a little weird...Good pace & no mistakes! Well Done!
"Final Test" written a couple of days ago for Flash Fiction by dragonwoman Of course, I love a good witch story (no pun intended...)
Harry Potter gave Magic some prominance but the genre was here before and will be around long after the last re-run on TV. Those' who can deliver a magic tale, like this writer, will undoubtedly have readers queuing up for more, and magic will never go out of fashion!
A well plotted piece of Flash Fiction - with a winsome flourish to complete the whole thing.
As it looks now - so it didn't show up as bold, as intended
"The Night Of The Uprising" by dragonwoman is a good'un! - I really liked the opening lines to the story - which gave it a very contemporary look - very 'new novelist' - style. An excellent lead up where the story all comes together with actually, quite a scary discovery! I can't help believe - just a little' - in curses.
Written for the No Dialogue Contest and I think that this story must have been a serious contender! Well written throughout - flawless deliver, infact. I really did enjoy the story!