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Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow. This is so incredible, and I'm happy I came across the opportunity to read it. Goosebumps, tears, the whole shabang came with reading this piece. I really don't have much to say other than you are clearly incredible and crazy talented, and I'm always grateful for anything I read that move me to a fluttering heart, tears, and goosebumps. So, thank you for writing and sharing. This is an important piece of work.

Take care. *Heart*
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Review of Who Knew  
Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: E | (4.5)
A lovely, simple piece of writing that shares a snippet of personal insight into something I'm sure so many can relate to the pain of.

Keep writing always, love. *Heart**Heart**Heart*
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Review of Winter and Spring  
Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I REALLY love the concept of this story. I'm a sucker for things a little on the darker side. There are some pretty strong fragments here.

"Spring is how the universe puts me in my place."
"The way a cardinals red stands out against the clean white and grays."
"My green feels like envy, queasiness, and disaster."
"His hands ending in a too-smalll 'o' around my neck."

These are all of my favorite lines, I really like how they hit. There does seem to be a small felling of something being missing, or maybe simply a subtle missed opportunity in more refinement. This may be the poet in me, but I think it could potentially be really interesting if you compared aspects to spring with things that are generally, objectively unappealing to bring the reader in more intimately for the distaste of Spring the narrator truly has. I also think there is a possibility something about the overall story would feel more striking if you somehow flowed into a descriptive telling of the narrators murder as opposed to revealing the twist (a great twist) by simply stating it plainly before gently touching on some detail of the event. Again, this could just be the poet in me. But I think this is a really strong piece and has the potential to be even stronger, the story here is heavy and has the ability to really leave the reader enchantingly unsettled with just bit more refinement.

Overall, this was a cool read I enjoyed it very much and love, love the concept behind it. Great job, never stop writing. *Heart* *Heart* *Heart*
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Review of Regret  
Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Of course, I had to look into some more of your poetry after reading that last piece. This is the first one I clicked on, and of course... I love it. I'll admit a trait of my own that I'm not at all fond of and hope to improve, is my lack of attention span when it comes to so many things. Reading, ironically, is one of them. I know I'm about to at the very least really like something, if I can bring myself to push through the first three sentences or lines of something. And with your work, flowing through it requires no effort on my part at all. I don't mean to do too much, seem overly enthusiastic, or make you feel like I'm blowing smoke up your ass. I just get really happy when I read something that I really enjoy lol
Maybe this one is particularly satisfying for me because I can, in a way, relate to the experiences and feelings described in this poem. My experience came to a different close after many years and reading a poem that brings me back to the way things had been a long time ago, in this particular moment of my life especially, means something deliciously bittersweet for me.
You've definitely gained a true fan today :)
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Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is incredibly beautiful, I can't stop reading it. The imagery this poem invokes is incredibly appealing, like a renaissance painting. For lack of the ability to word this in the way I want to... Have you ever seen of heard of the show This Is Us? I hope you have. Your poem takes me through the special feeling this show also incites. A certain... heavy heart filled with a special appreciation and admiration for life and its beauty through all things good and bad. The beauty of how scary life is, the beauty of how the simplest things can make the most impact. This poem seriously makes me want to gain a collection of pearl buttons, just so I can provide significance to them through the eyes of my own children and pass them down. This poem is something I'd want to share with my own children as a tool to emphasize magic in life's passing moments. Really incredible. I'm in love with it, truly.
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Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I loved reading this soooooo much! Many times it's difficult for me to really get into short stories, especially fiction. This, however, was incredibly easy to fall in love with and read with genuine enjoyment. This is something I really could imagine as a whole television series. I can't help but to thank you for sharing such a fun read.
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Review of Held  
Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the raw, deconstructed nature and honesty in your writing. As I was reading this, I felt as though most of the numbered items listed, if not all of them, carried their own life, energy, impact, and potential. I would be really interested in seeing what kind of piece(s) would result, if you sat with and devoted your mind, emotions, and curiosity to each numbered item, one at a time. If not all of them, maybe any one or couple that grab you the tightest when reading. Maybe even explore the internet for words, metaphors, images, etc that your own words inspire you to search for. I think there's a possibility you would be able to find incredible inspiration through your own work and create several refined, thorough, and unique pieces through your already beautiful, raw, deconstructed styled thought pieces. I think a large reason why this thought came to me when reading your work is because it reminds me so much of my own process, after realizing how good it felt to put down my naturally vivid and expressive thoughts on paper, I decided one day to just play around with what was already there and creating more from what was already a wonderful release, was/is such an indescribably satisfying feeling.
Anyways, I love your stuff and I hope you've been enjoying getting accustomed to this site as much as I have. (:
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Review of Sanguine Heart  
Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
So beautiful, so soft, and so fluid. The kind of thing you want to read over and over, getting a clearer image every time.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
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Review by Alana Lenore
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I enjoyed this, a lot! I may have some bias as I have experience in sex work and value those in the industry very much. I'm not at all educated on what this fanfic is based off of, but I was still able to enjoy it. I love that you're creating something that puts escorting in a positive light, I think what I've read so far does a good job at incorporating the fun being a successful escort in a room full of successful men could be. I love Marc and his relationship with both his wife and Joan, I really enjoyed reading something where Joan, a sex worker, has a fun and supportive relationship with a man who has plenty of bells and whistles, if not all of them. I myself am not the most experienced writer, so I'm not sure what words of advice I have to offer. I most certainly can offer encouragement and approval, though. It made me laugh, I thought it was hot, and something to appreciate as someone who has a special connection to adult entertainment.
Sidenote: I really love the decision to keep Joan's physical appearance vague and open ended.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
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