|I really like how you've italicized specific words within the first few paragraphs. This gives the reader the ability to see the irony and frustration in the situation.
"Several times we'd had to pull off the road to allow one of the massive road trains to trundle by. Road trains being a truck towing four or more trailers, they're not something you bicker about when it comes to sharing the road. You get the hell out of their way." This is possibly my favorite part of this whole piece. It's absolutely hilarious. I know exactly how you feel. When I pass a coal truck (and there are a LOT of them in KY) I shudder in abject terror
The sixth paragraph, describing the state of the "tennis court" and "swimming pool" really is a great example of your talent for describing setting and scene flawlessly. I can absolutely SEE the poor state of these "amenities."
The passage, "I suspected it may once have been the main dwelling, but now it gazed forlornly across fields of dry grass at the newer house, which was a larger version of the same sorry architecture," is a perfectly executed example of personification. Nice job!
Again, this sentence, "We trudged morosely from room to room, dragging our luggage behind us as we investigated the place," is a publish-worthy example of "show don't tell." I can see you both, in my mind, heads lowered, shuffling sadly from room to equally shabby room.
Here, "I went back inside, heading for the bathroom and found a dozen or so fat green frogs in the bath tub and on the floor. There were spiders in almost every corner of the house, the water in the bathroom taps was brown, and there were cockroaches in some of the kitchen cupboards. I was not a happy bride." I shivered when I read this portion. You're voice gives such a sense of reality, I'm almost afraid to go into my own bathroom. I half expect to find frogs and spiders
You could not have come up with a better, or more beautiful, final sentence. It sums up both the miserable experience you had, as well as the optimistic spirit you seem to have. I really enjoyed this.