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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice poem. It should teach people how to stand their ground from the lure of temptation no matter what is offered to them, Even a kingdom
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Review of Agnes  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
An intriguing opening which has certainly given the reader a sense of mystery about our housekeeper and whether she’s all that she seems. I look forward to seeing more of this
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
This looks like a very promising start. You’ve set the main protagonist up quite well with his intentions. Readers will immediately warm to his sympathetic nature and desire to protect people. They will root for him and want to see him succeed. One topic you could explore for further chapters could be how he reacts if a rescue goes wrong.

Keep writing
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (5.0)
Aww that was a very touching sonnet to read. I’m not massive on love and romance but I can respect it for those who are. Your wife is very lucky to have you in her life just as much as you are to be in hers. The words of the sonnet were very strong and had deep meaning so well done
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great piece to remind everyone not feeling great that you matter. You should add this one to it: I have my rights.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
That was an interesting piece to read. You clearly worked hard on the research so I believed you knew what you were saying. I also enjoyed the opening visualisation as it was a good hook to keep reading
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Review of Fun Morning  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
It’s amazing what a small child can get up to. Wouldn’t want to be that parent. Good read
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Review of Moon Wish  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
That would be a fun thing to do. A good read
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Review of Retirement  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (5.0)
I feel the same way. It’s so frustrating
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Review of Jim's Work  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
I did not expect that ending. You took me by surprise. It was nice for an owner to remember those good times
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was a very nice story to read. I liked how the focus was on trying to make a young one happy and the family dilemma has a lot of potential. We don’t meet the current queen here but I already hate her and that’s promising. Hopefully we’ll see more of this soon
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
The best thing about this story was the emotional pull. It was well written and expressed in a way that the reader can understand. I don’t like Coffee but I understand how important it is to others
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Review of The Wizard's Wife  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love this story. It really digs at the complexities of family life and that’s even more true when Wizardry is involved
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Review of The Fates  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very good story. I felt the tension as he got closer to the brush and noise went down. Leaves me intrigued to see what becomes of him

And that routine at the start isn’t boring, I’d give anything to go back to that now
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Review of BACK TO SCHOOL  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Did not expect that ending at all. I enjoyed reading this story. It felt like a school as the children had clearly defined traits e.g a bully. Good read
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
A very good story. It felt solid and the suspense built up at a decent pace. I also liked some of the lines between the siblings such as their different attitudes to research, that made me smile

My biggest issue was it sometimes felt a bit robotic to read. Try using “I’m sure” instead of “I am sure” for example and it will feeling quicker and more free flowing to the reader. It also felt odd seeing “that lighthouse” all the time. I think it should always be “the lighthouse”

Overall though it was a decent piece to read
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Review of Painful Recovery  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (3.5)
A promising start. I can’t wait to see what becomes of him and how he beats the addiction
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Review of The Sleeper  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Enjoyed it. I was rooting for her to get her reward
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Review of Grave Diggers  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Got a bit of a chill reading this as I always do when the subject of death is explored. I noticed you said divvied up, do you mean divided up instead? Other than that I enjoyed reading it
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That was funny. I could cut the tension with a knife when they argued. I’d love to see them as an old married couple
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow that was such an emotional and heart wrenching piece but it portrayed a message more valuable than most: children are for life not just when their born. I enjoyed this a lot.
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Review of The Uninvited Hat  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A very good story. I could feel the chill in the air when he realised it was no ordinary hat. The line where you described his nose like a rotten pear had me in stitches. An enjoyable read overall
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Review of In The Forest  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
A really well written story. I was almost terrified when I read that the bear was standing up arm’s raised. I did not expect what happened after that. I felt like I was in the story and that’s what makes good stories to me
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I enjoyed that a lot. I felt that the build up was really good and there’s a good moral in that looks aren’t everything. Great work
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Review of Teenage Angst  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a really promising start. I enjoy the old “obsession of a dream ruins lives” storyline. Perfectly written and structured too. Keep it up
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