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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice poem. It should teach people how to stand their ground from the lure of temptation no matter what is offered to them, Even a kingdom
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Review of Agnes  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
An intriguing opening which has certainly given the reader a sense of mystery about our housekeeper and whether she’s all that she seems. I look forward to seeing more of this
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
This looks like a very promising start. You’ve set the main protagonist up quite well with his intentions. Readers will immediately warm to his sympathetic nature and desire to protect people. They will root for him and want to see him succeed. One topic you could explore for further chapters could be how he reacts if a rescue goes wrong.

Keep writing
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (5.0)
Aww that was a very touching sonnet to read. I’m not massive on love and romance but I can respect it for those who are. Your wife is very lucky to have you in her life just as much as you are to be in hers. The words of the sonnet were very strong and had deep meaning so well done
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was a fun little poem to read. It should give the reader a reminder that all life matters. It also made me feel sympathy for the man and mouse while it made me hate the woman which is good because you’ve made the reader care about the characters involved. The wife reminded me of Mrs Robinson from Gumball as she took pleasure in being mean too.
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I enjoyed this short story quite a lot

Your character description was my most favourite part. They were well explained and defined and I felt I could identify a colour to each of them. That you explained it through some form of TV advert only made it better

The main focus of the story was good too. The little guy feeling under appreciated and ending up in a sticky situation flowed naturally

I hope we’ll see more of these characters in other stories as it definitely has potential
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Review of Piano Personified  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Daniel I felt it was only fair that I review one of your works after asking you to do mine so I chose this one. I quite enjoyed this as it displayed emotions and feelings quite well and reminded us all just how powerful music can be in emotion. I warmed to the character of Frank easily and related to his sympathetic nature quite well. You did a good job with this piece
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great piece to remind everyone not feeling great that you matter. You should add this one to it: I have my rights.
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
A good piece that really talked from the heart. I could empathise with the emotional pain the protagonist was feeling.
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
That was an interesting piece to read. You clearly worked hard on the research so I believed you knew what you were saying. I also enjoyed the opening visualisation as it was a good hook to keep reading
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Review of Fun Morning  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
It’s amazing what a small child can get up to. Wouldn’t want to be that parent. Good read
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Review of Moon Wish  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
That would be a fun thing to do. A good read
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Review of Retirement  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (5.0)
I feel the same way. It’s so frustrating
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Review of Dragon Hands  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really liked this story. You incorporated the twist in the deal very well.
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Review of Jim's Work  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
I did not expect that ending. You took me by surprise. It was nice for an owner to remember those good times
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (5.0)
Brilliant poem. I love ones that I can sing along to easily and this was one of them. Would have loved to have seen Elvis in the flesh
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (5.0)
You have hit the nail right on the head. I don’t listen to a thing the media says anymore. If they told me the sky was blue then I’m saying it’s green. The worst thing is too many people just follow it like sheep because they don’t want to rock the boat. Perfect summary
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
That was a very nice story to read. I liked how the focus was on trying to make a young one happy and the family dilemma has a lot of potential. We don’t meet the current queen here but I already hate her and that’s promising. Hopefully we’ll see more of this soon
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
The best thing about this story was the emotional pull. It was well written and expressed in a way that the reader can understand. I don’t like Coffee but I understand how important it is to others
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Review of Click  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Well that escalated quickly but I’m glad that Horace got some comeuppance and it was a good story. Stealing identities would make anyone feel awful
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love this story. It really digs at the complexities of family life and that’s even more true when Wizardry is involved
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Review of The Fates  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very good story. I felt the tension as he got closer to the brush and noise went down. Leaves me intrigued to see what becomes of him

And that routine at the start isn’t boring, I’d give anything to go back to that now
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Review of BACK TO SCHOOL  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Did not expect that ending at all. I enjoyed reading this story. It felt like a school as the children had clearly defined traits e.g a bully. Good read
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Review by Alextrax52
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
A very good story. It felt solid and the suspense built up at a decent pace. I also liked some of the lines between the siblings such as their different attitudes to research, that made me smile

My biggest issue was it sometimes felt a bit robotic to read. Try using “I’m sure” instead of “I am sure” for example and it will feeling quicker and more free flowing to the reader. It also felt odd seeing “that lighthouse” all the time. I think it should always be “the lighthouse”

Overall though it was a decent piece to read
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Review of April Fool's Day  
Review by Alextrax52
Rated: E | (4.0)
It might be short but I enjoyed the jokes you put in there
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