|Very interesting piece, although I wasn't quite sure what the white light at the end was.
The words you use are very descriptive and you draw the reader in so that I could picture myself standing on a figurative stage waiting for the next instant in my life to take place. Well done.
Your grammer however, needs a lot of work. A few spelling errors also.
There is never a space before a comma and after a word. So in the first line it should be: enough, (not enough , before...)
You have done that in lines: 3,5,6,7,8,10,11,13,18,20,21
Also you always capitalize a single I (it's I not i)
20th line mo white...should be "my white..."
So a few smallish errors to fix and the piece would be bang on! Keep up the good work!
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