This poem is very sweet. That special someone hopefully was very touched because this really touching. You are obviously very in love it's nice that it shines through your writing. Keep on writing; your super talented!
Absolutely outstanding imagery! I couldn't believe how truly good it was. I went back and read at least five or more times! I personally got the perception of a fantasy land that was created in the mind of the amazing writer. Though it took my a few times to truly find understand the full meaning behind, I still enjoyed it. Keep on writing!
I really like it, but it feels like it runs on for too long. I'm not suggesting you put in punctuation where you don't want it; my suggestion is you trying line breaks. Spacing out the lines makes a better and smoother read. But it was very good so keep on writing!
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