LOL!!! Loved this. What a great comedy poem. I loved the rhythm and flow, the rhyme consistent. It had you right there with them all and loved the payback. It certainly brings about some good Christmas Cheer.
Oh I loved this. Beautifully written and takes you on a dreamy ride. I love the ebb and flow, the rhyming throughout.
May I suggest when you use this font, which is gorgeous, that perhaps you make it a few sizes bigger just for ease for people to read.
Hope to see more of your work here. You have a real talent for verse.
Wow, this is a very well written and complex piece. It turns your imagination on and has you reading it through a couple of times.
There is also a lot of emotion revealed and lived.
I enjoyed the read. Keep moving forward and best of luck.
Nice work here. Really enjoyed the ebb and flow of your poem. The reader can clearly envision the morning arising in your description, what you are looking for, what you seek. It is not over the top or long winded which keeps the reader glued to what you are relaying.
This was very nicely written. Packed a mountain of emotion in a short, direct way. You had me feeling for Ethan from the first and Amelia at the last.
Such a beautiful but sad love story. If only.......
Nicely written piece. I like the easy read and simplicity of the story but it is packed with emotion and thoughts that the reader easily feels and can identify with.
Your descriptions are simple but direct and telling without the need for overuse of description. I feel the sadness, the emptiness and the loss. It is all there.
Well done.
Love this!!! How could you not love a girl who wears converse. I love that you have brought this crush to life and how you tell of a long term tale of those we love in secret yet they never seem to see us.
Well written, nice flow, nice rhythm, keeping it moving with the pattern you have set.
Nicely written poem. Short and sweet but packs a punch with emotion and thoughts rushing through. You haven't overwritten this which keeps it to a nice easy read while still understanding the message within.
Well done.
I really enjoyed your piece. Particularly like the third line about desire and motivation escaping the container. Great visual reference.
Also relate to the second last line being as I am a newbie writer myself and I do have to push myself to keep going, keep trying and chasing those end results.
Love this Tee. I feel exactly the same. I’ve only been here a short time myself but have felt so welcome and supported already.
You have been one of those who have just been amazing to me and I thank you so very much for all of your support and encouragement.
Beautifully written. I know a review should be more than those 2 words, but honestly, I can't think of anything other to say. I feel those two words say enough. Well done.
I very much enjoyed this. I too wrote a short letter to myself from the future to my ten year old self, and while I did get some great feedback I found it difficult to write, not emotionally just writing a letter to myself.
I really liked how you did this. Yours is more like a story than mine was. Nice work.
I really enjoyed reading this. I myself have been having a lot of reflective thoughts about my parents when I was growing up and this sits so well. Of course they never have all the answers, and yet as a child we sure do think and believe they do. That must be a heavy burden to bare at times.
This was a nice simple read but with a deep meaning under the surface. Well written. Hope you write more.
What a fun story, a delightful read that keeps the reader engaged with the fun simplicity of the story.
Love the Nude Snow White and the innocence of childhood. Nicely written, no errors that I could see. Just a great little tale and beauty of a family being able to spend the day together.
Nicely written. I feel most people would understand the sentiment and emotion of your poem. Simply written but gets the story across very well. I love the last paragraph that you rise from places that once buried you and yes wearing those medals should make us feel proud when we've come back from the brink of hell.
An interesting read, well written, keeps the reader engaged, nice level of suspense and engagement between the characters. Nice level of description, not too over the top but enough to clearly have the reader understand the buck's different appearance and their communication.
This is not overly my genre that I usually read but enjoyed this entry.
Nicely written poem filled with emotion. I especially like the last verse, I think a lot of people can relate.
It clearly comes across from a pain endured and the healing process beginning.
Hope to see more of your work.
Wow!! This story has bought back so many memories in the way you described the cool group, wearing the uniform as short as you can get away with, being way down the back so you could sneak a ciggie on lunch break. It was like being back in high school in a flash.
I've been recently remembering a friend of mine, she was quite strange really, her mother and father were strange and her upbringing quite different and heavily controlled. She used to get bullied relentlessly and at times I would be caught in the crossfire simply because I hung around with her.
To be honest, I'm surprised she didn't kill herself from it all. But I am pleased to say, in my day at school suicide did not really exist. I only ever remember one girl doing it. She threw herself in front of a train. It was horrible, but apart from that, suicide was not a thing, thank goodness.
Today there is just way too much of it and personally social media is to blame and lack of the good old traditional family time spend together and values. So very different.
Great read, glad I pressed Read and Review tonight.
Me again. I really love how simple your stories are to read but always hold such depth and bring out emotion, making the reader feel for both the mother who can see the tragedy unfold and the uncle knowing what he felt was right, both suffering loss but in a different way.
You don't always need a lot of fancy descriptive words to tell a story and I find sometimes people get too drawn into that style of writing and although cleverly worded, sometimes takes away from what the writer is really trying to convey.
Loved this short tale. Really well written. Simple but powerful in it's description. I loved how you connected an old house aging away to humans as well. So neatly tied together and so true. I often look at old dilapitated houses and wonder what they think and how they feel if they could. What stories they could tell.
I really enjoyed reading your poem. It is raw emotion on the page. Simple to read but not simple in the feelings shared. I love poetry that rhymes as well and you did this beautifully. Very nicely written.
Well done, hope to see more of your work.
Brightest Blessings
Amare Jane
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