I'm honored to read and review "An Ordinary Stone"
Title: Your title works well with the work that you've posted.
Description:Your description gives a great hint about what's to come. It gives a little information and a tease to peak your interest.
Contents:This is 'part' of a larger work. You've created a world, and started to reveal what's to come. Hera's character seems well developed. The reader learns of her quest to learn from Nridi. So far in the story, the readers will see her as a friend and mentor to Hera.
A minor character so far, is Drosvu. As a suitor, you can tell he's very immature and high on himself. At this point, his character is defined, but not developed fully. I'm sure he'll have a larger role further into the story.
Questions arise, but I know you can't give more information out at this point in time. I do feel like you've created a solid beginning to your story.
Conventions:I would suggest you go back an proof read your draft. One suggestion a brilliant teacher taught me, go backwards. Start at the end and read each sentence from the bottom up. It sounds weird, but our mind reads what we think we've written. If your looking for grammatical errors, starting from the bottom does focus your mind more than reading from the beginning.
woollen cloak- woolen
“Yes yes lady.” (Yes, yes, lady.)
“right-e-oh then.” (Capital R)
the inhabitance (Inhabitants)
rope ladder hung down
the cold wet slim (slime) on her feet.
“Just enjoy your tea.” Said the old woman as she got to work ladling fish stew into two bowls. This isn't a sentence.She waved he hand over one and it began to stem. typo- her hand.... steam
state contentless awareness content - contentless would be more like agitated
than forteen years old- fourteen
what she thought, was a pretty face- no comma needed
emerald-blue robes embroiled - emerald- blue - Emerald is a green, were the robes green and blue? embroidered
There are a few more rough patches.I'm sure once you sit down and proof read again, you'll catch them all
Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.