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Review of My Shadow  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ryan G.,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'My Shadow'

Title:When I first saw the title, I thought of the old song... Me and My Shadow... OK, I admit, I'm old.

Description: Excellent description. I find it very hard to write them some days.

Contents:Your metaphor is excellent. I found myself thinking as I read. Pondering your thoughts in light of my life. I'm sure it can be difficult for some to understand. Those souls aren't in the right place to understand.

Thumbs up: I love how you used the light to validate the shadow. Excellent concept.

Conventions:First sentence there is a typo, dream needs an'S'

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lindsay,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Colors in the Garden'

Title:Since it's still cold and dreary today, I decided to open your piece for a bit of color and spring.

Description: Very true, a rose isn't always red, and a poem isn't always read based upon its description. But an enticing description will attract readers to your poem like a bee to a beautiful flower.

Contents: You've created a five line poem with an A,B,B,A,B rhyme scheme. The meter is slightly choppy. When I was reading it, I started thinking about what the colors of the roses could mean. If you were working on that angle, friendship for the yellow, grace/ sweetness for the pink, but as I read on, the brown rose said it all.


Conventions:I didn't notice any errors in grammar

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ignis,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Troubled Soul, A Beautiful Exchange'

Title:I like the opposites found within your title.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:To me, your poem has an almost frantic feel to it. I could feel the desperation, the futility within the pleas. It flows well, and builds with intensity. Then the calm, the quiet conclusion.

Thumbs up:'Doubts, fears, frustrations.
Poisons to the mind.
Crippling.' These three lines remind me so much of my son and his work experiences.

Conventions:The only thing I would suggest, you have "mind" in the second and fourth line. You could leave the second mind out if you wished. Then the fourth line would be 'Scenarios flashes past.'

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Winter  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi JersyBoy,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Winter'

Title:Your title is a great fit for your poem.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. That's the whole point of the description!

Contents:First- I love the way your poem just flows from start to finish. I don't know if it is a specific form, or just heart-felt, but it is moving.
You've captured a moment in time, given it life and emotion. What more could a poet want?

Thumbs up: I really love the way your poem flows and grows as the realization of how much this person really means and their purpose in your life.


Conventions: I didn't notice any errors in grammatical conventions.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi JenRG,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'A Firefighter Thank You'

Title:Your title perfectly fits your poem.

Description: Personally, I'd read your poem because it was for your dad, while others may just keep on looking for something to read. Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:Your poem is a personal thank you for your father. Lucky man to have a child that loves and respects him so much.

Thumbs up:I think any thing we write for those we love are special,and will always be held in a special part of the heart.

Conventions:Each set of lines forms a couplet, except for the second pair.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Diamondwriter,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Sunlight in an Empty Room'

Title:Interesting title, especially special since it's been so cloud today.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:As I read, I found my thoughts moving through trying to figure out what the purpose of such a delightful description was leading up to. One beam of light, giver of life, an expression of warmth and comfort succinctly observed and presented as a gift on a cold and dreary day. Thank you for sharing.

Thumbs up:
"Empty heart of mine; receive the sunlight that is so freely given. Accept the peace that can be found in this sunlight that pours through the windows of time and surrounds my heart, my very longings with warmth and the true colors of this life." Tied up neatly, all you need is a bow. What a wonderful gift.

Conventions:No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi GiGi,

Happy Second WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Light and Salvation'

Title:Interesting title,

Description: You've enticed a specific part the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. I'm sure some will by pass this piece due to its nature and their personal beliefs.

Contents:Your testimony has left me feeling all warm and fuzzy, and I mean that in the most positive way. Your faith will continue to be tested, but the willingness and loving heart will always find comfort in his holy words.

Thumbs up:For sharing your testimony, keep on keepin' on.

Conventions:The only thing I would suggest is putting the scripture in quotation marks.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Let's Count!  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi lilypad,

Happy Second WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Let's Count"

Title:I chose this title because I just purchased my grandson's first alphabet book. It just seemed the perfect thing to look at. (Probably totally unrelated, but that's the reasoning in my head)

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work. You've tempted me, so I'll ask... How did your piece do in the contest?

Contents:Your poem is so cute. It truly touches my heart and a perfect poem for little ones to learn to have fun with counting and learn something new.

Thumbs up:There are three different lights that brighten our lives:
the Sun and the moon and the countless stars thrive.

Conventions:One thing I would suggest, since you started with two lines for each number, you'd continue that pattern as you continue to count.

I'd have someone read your poem cold to you. When someone else reads it, they don't cold they have to go with what's really written. You'll hear where they stumble and if the flow is as smooth as you'd like.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of My Heart and Soul  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Fen Fen,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'My Heart and Soul'

Title:Just looking at the title, I thought it was going to be a love poem. Interesting twist.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: You've written a rhyming, quatrain form poem. The meter and flow work well.

You relate a situation that breaks my heart, one of loneliness and abuse. The idea of breaking the spirit of another brings forth memories that long to remain covered.

Thumbs up:Without giving too much information you've allowed the reader to create their own scene in their mind's eye. This is a poem that I'd love to see what other people 'read into it'.

Conventions:You have forgotten, in consecutive lines, it may be too close?

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of unititled  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Sean,

Happy First WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Untitled'

Title:It really needs a title.

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:You've created a poem about walking with your love, a couple of lines pulled me out of the reading and there were a couple of line breaks that seemed to be off.

Thumbs up:On this cold, wet winter day, a walk on the beach with my honey sounds simply divine.

Conventions:
* capital letters at the beginning of lines
* you've used 'and' a whole lot! Some of them are unnecessary.
* Capital 'I' for the pronoun I.
* Line 3- stop at the word before 'and' line break there.
* a lot is two words
* we're young
* feet turn to miles. (left the image of very large feet in my head)


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi cad,

Happy first WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'A Song Called Run Away Here Comes the Lyrics'

Title:'Run Away' works well with your lyrics

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:Your lyrics are indeed a love story about running away from the one who loves. It is a nice start. I'd suggest going back and revising your piece.

Conventions:Its like we never new each other>>Its should be it's, new should be knew
tell we meet each thantell should be until, meet should be met, than should be then
something sparked in us its likeus should be the end of the line, 'it's like' should be on the next line
it was love at first sight,but than you ran away far away from me then you ran away (comma) far away from me
you ran away far away from mecomma
but you dinit have to run away far away from medidn't
oh yes u ran away from me.oh yes, (comma)


You said you was to good for me but I couldn'tyou were too good for me, (comma)I couldn't let you go
you go so I chased you down and you Start this line with So I chased you down--watch your line breaks
said to me babe I have to go, but you dinit have to run away far away from me
oh yes you dinit have to run away far away from me didn't and comma after the first away

You have a nice start, it just needs some polish. With that, maybe you can get some interaction with your campfire.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Learning Through  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Freebee,

Happy WDC Anniversary! Congrats on your first anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Learning Through'

Title: Your title says a lot for those who listen. We should always learn through what ever experiences come our way.

Description: You've given the membership of WDC an idea of what you're poem is going to be about. That is what a good description is supposed to do.

Contents:Depression and anxiety can cause so many issues with people. The ability to get up and learn from what you've gone through is so important. With depression, realizing that you have to learn the skill necessary to recognize what is happening, controlling it, moving past it is so important. But some need more help learning those skills.

Thumbs up:
'From wishes for fitness and a place I'm now freed
That Need for a right body did make me bleed' When I look at any magazine or model, I wonder what we're doing to people. So much is expected.... I want to be a size 0 like so and so... but my body will always be a 10-12-14. Acceptance of who I am, acceptance that size 0 isn't the norm, is really hard in our times.

Conventions: no errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi untitledstill,

Happy WDC Anniversary! Congrats on your first year anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'An Ending Most Fowl'

Title: I probably wouldn't have thought of a title more fitting your piece if I tried for a month of Sundays. Perfect!

Description: You've packed a lot into your description!

Contents:What a wonderful tongue-in-cheek piece. It's very humorous and enjoyable.

Thumbs up:Your last line is perfect!

Conventions:No errors noted in form.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Inside Of Me  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi David Baker,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Inside of Me'

Title:I totally get your title in relation to your poem.

Description:It makes me wonder if this is still a first draft.. dog gone great for a first draft

Contents:Love gone wrong seems to be what I'm stumbling on today. I think you've captured that feeling of loss but not in the mourning type of way. It's more of a realization, or awakening to the reality of 'it's run the course, best to move on' type of mood.

Thumbs up:I'd love to hear the melody to go with this piece.

Conventions:I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of Maybe  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Frank,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Maybe'

Title:Perfect title

Description:Perfect description

Contents:You've captured the emotions and depth of understanding of the inner conflict that goes on within ones self as the realization such a monumental decisions that one makes at the end of a relationship. There is so much internal strife as you weigh the options. Then there is the awareness that yes, the end is probably the best. Followed by the realization that there will always be a connection to that loved one. Not on the same level as before, but there will always be that part of you that that person touched and changed.

Thumbs up:The lyrical nature, you can almost hear the music in the way the words flow.

Conventions:No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review of cNotes  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Itchy Water- Fictionandverse,

I’m honored to read and review 'cNotes' for the February Contests and Quills Power Raid.

Title: cNotes, that's what it is a folder with a whole lot of cNotes

Description: Punch up your description. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:You have an amazing amount of cNotes available for just about any occasion imaginable. Some are very clip-art in style, while others are photographic. Each is unique in style and message.

Thumbs up:Good Luck in the Quill Awards.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ,

I’m honored to review 'More Sentiments from a Southern Soul' for the February Contests and Quills Power Raid.

Title: Great title (from a southerner- not that I'm biased)

Description: You've invited the WdC membership to enter and check out your C-Notes.

Contents:I've looked through the collection of C-notes you've created. Wow. I wish I knew how to pull together such quality images and type. Even with my Ed Tech class behind me, I still stand in awe of what people can do with C-Notes and such.

Thumbs up:Creative use of image and words.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Yellow Witch~ Broken Pencil,

I’m honored to read and review 'Inspiration, Determination, Motivation' for the February Contests and Quills Power Raid.

Title: I can't think of a better title for your C-Note shop.

Description: I like how you've used your description as a continuation of your title with the ... One thing I thought about was changing the 'and' to 'to', either works well. It's your decision.

Contents:You have a variety of C-Notes, the messages are uplifting and supportive. Some are quotes and credit should be given to the original person that said the quote.

Thumbs up: The art and messages would be encouraging to anyone that was hitting a creative wall here on the site. I wish there was some way to get all of the C-Note shops listed kind of like one of the genre pages.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Nixie~returning 2/18,

I’m honored to review 'The Amazing One Stop C-Note Shop' for the February Contests and Quills Power Raid.

Title:That's a long title, but it works for everything you've collected here.

Description: You are so right, I can't think of an occasion where a member of WdC couldn't find a C-Note that they needed.

Contents:You've covered so many different genres of greetings from promotions, to thinking of yous, to welcoming to a new group. The art and photography are amazing. You've really highlighted your talents with your shop.

Thumbs up: Good Luck with your Quill Nomination!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lady of the Myst,

I’m honored to review 'Writing Thoughts 10' for the February Contests and Quills Power Raid.

Title:Interesting title, it makes me wonder why 10?

Description:I didn't realize there was a Writing Thoughts C-note shop, this has been an interesting day. I'll have to check it out.

Contents:A beautiful concept for a C-Note. I think I would have used a fountain pen for the pen in the picture. I remember my first journal, and everything I wrote in it, I used a fountain pen. I cried when that pen finally gave up and quit writing.

My sons wrote letters for a contest one year when they were little. My youngest won a very expensive fountain pen. He loves it. It was so funny, that my oldest son wanted a fountain pen for Christmas this year. I couldn't believe it when he opened his gift from his wife. I guess it runs in the jeans (genes) lol, either would work for us.

Thumbs up: I love the quote with your picture, I would make the name a little larger, I can't tell who said it.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Huntersmoon,

I’m honored to review 'American Sacrifice' for the February Contests and Quills Power Raid.

Title:Your title is perfect. I can't think of a better title for your image.

Description: Your description is perfect, there is no doubt about what the member of WdC will feel when he/she sees your image.

Contents:Oh my goodness. When I clicked the link open I was taken back. I was so moved. If this was used as an image for a contest I'm absolutely positive that the entries would be heart rending. The color, composition, oh my, it just takes my breath away. Wow.

Thumbs up: I can't believe how moved I am just looking at this work of art. I'm touched and I do hope you have an outlet to share it with others who have served.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay

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Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi R. J. Moody,

I’m honored to read and review 'An American Modern', for Around WdC in 80 Reviews. Our last stop is Satire Station. Welcome aboard!

Title:Very nice title.

Description:You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:This could be a Toby Keith song. It sounds like something he'd do... kind of like Solo cup. Oh my, what a delightful look into modern American life.

Thumbs up:
Book learnin’ page turnin’ grade earnin’,
would surely be hard on my eyes.... not to mention all of those fill in the bubble tests that show nuthin'

Conventions:No errors noted...


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay
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Review of streets  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi devil dust,

I’m honored to read and review 'streets', for Around WdC in 80 Reviews. Our last stop is Satire Station. Welcome aboard!

Title:Interesting title, I imagine traffic to work would be lighter that what I'm used to.

Description: You've enticed the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents:I really have no idea what it would be like to work second or third shift. Your scenario makes one think of the seedier side of life. I can imagine the frustration of trying to keep the store nice while characters that don't care come in and cause destruction.

Thumbs up:walk through dreams of sunshine... I miss you... I totally get this. We've had so many gray and dreary days. I miss the sunshine too.

Conventions:No errors noted.

One reviewer suggested having someone read your piece out loud to you cold. You'll catch a lot of errors that way. When you hear them, they stand out more than just using your eyes.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay
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Review of Work Harder  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi ,

I’m honored to read and review , for Around WdC in 80 Reviews. Our final stop is Satire Station. Welcome aboard!

Title:Love the title.

Description: Indeed, your description works as well.

Contents:How true, how true. We all endeavor to make this one day something special in hopes of getting a little frisky.

Thumbs up:So on this day when people are working harder to combine,
Let’s hope it doesn’t boost our numbers: our future would unwind.>> I had to laugh, IKEA ran an ad on Valentine's Day a free baby bed for any infant born 9 months from 2/14/13... I bet there will be people trying to cash in on that freebie.

Conventions:No errors noticed.

One reviewer suggested having someone read your piece out loud to you cold. You'll catch a lot of errors that way. When you hear them, they stand out more than just using your eyes.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay
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Review of Sun  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Joy,

I’m honored to read and review 'Sun', for Around WdC in 80 Reviews. Our next station is Mythology Bay. Welcome aboard!

Title:Your title is fitting for your chained tanka.

Description:great entry for Writer's Cramp

Contents: You've created I guess what would be called a chained tanka (since more than one verse is a chained haiku). Your poem flows so easily. There isn't any sign of forcedness with regards to the syllable structure.

Since this is one dreary day, I can honestly say, I miss the sun! Your poem makes me miss it even more!

Thumbs up:

on creation’s palm
you are the fate line of earth

How true, how very true!

Conventions: No errors noted within your poem.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.

Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.

Amay
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