|Hello, John Glover !
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I think this is a great start to what could could turn into an amazing story! I love science and medical stuff, and I think (with my limited knowledge of anything related to medicine) that you did well with it.
Suggestions for Improvement:
First off, you may want to space out your paragraphs a little bit. All the text is kind of squished together, and it makes it difficult to read.
Second, I don't really feel like I know enough about Dr. Samson. I know about his parents, his job, and his eating and exercising habits, but that's pretty much all. I'd like to know more about who he is as a person.
Third, the story seems to be moving a bit too fast. For example, this part: "It was determined that he had suffered a stroke as a result of a blockage in his left ventricle. Surgery was set for the following Tuesday. Dr. Samson recovered almost two weeks later." tripped me up a little. It went right from scheduling the surgery to him recovering from it.
There are a few parts like that, as well as the chapter itself. There was a lot of action, but not much introduction.
Lastly, the transition from the second to last paragraph and the last paragraph was pretty abrupt. I had to read it a few times before I realized that we were back to the present moment.
What I liked:
I really like the idea that even though Dr. Samson suffered a stroke, and his personality and decision making skills suffered because of it, he was still trying to make good choices. Even though overdosing his patients might not seem "good", exactly, it might just be for the sake of future patients. So he's doing something bad, but (perhaps) with good intentions.
With a little work, I think this will be really great. I'm enjoying it already! I hope to see the next part of this soon!
Please keep in mind that all suggestions are only suggestions, and you know what's best for your story.