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Review of Empty  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What I liked: This was excellent. I liked reading it because I could relate on a level on it. To feel lonely and desperate is a terrible feeling. It makes one suicidal at times. I am glad that you had chosen to choose life over death. The part with holding the gun at the head was intense and suspenseful.

Corrections: it was fine

Other comments: Great job. The emotions were relayed well.

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Review of Behind Words  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This short story poem was interesting. Thank goodness she did not commit suicide. It shows that one's life should not be revolved around one person. It was a great poem with a strong meaning to not leave everything you have behind. It was written well, and it was bitter sweet.

Good job.

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Review of Depression  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
What I liked: The topic was something that I could relate to. Depression is hard to cure and seems like a labyrinth with no way for escape. I do not know why things in life never are as good as they seem. But, I do know that there is hope in every situation. Although things are bleak, there has to be a solution. If not now, it takes time. I know everyone can give that advice, but being with an amazing friend can help your morale.

Corrections: It was written well.

Other comments: Great job. I hope it all works out.

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Review of Sun Versus Moon  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What I liked: I enjoyed reading this greatly. It was like ying and yang, black and white. They adore each other, though they can never meet. Unrequited love in a sense...The moon has loyalty to the stars as the sun to the rainbow. I liked the comparisons a lot.

Corrections: It was written well.

Other comments: Keep up the great work!

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Review of What If...  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What I liked: This was good because it asked "What would you do if you were in this situation?" It makes people think of whether they would coward away in fear or take a stand to fight for what you believe in. This is an interesting piece. I enjoyed reading it. It is not everyday that someone writes about this.

Corrections: Would you consider yourself a hierarchy? or maybe try: Would you consider yourself better than everybody else? It is just that the words Would you consider yourself with high aspects? does not sound right. I know that you mean would you look at yourself differently like higher standards than other people.

Other comments: Good job.

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Review of Wandering Star  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I liked this because it shows how a star can be all on its own, but there is hope. I liked the line "The hunger rises in your soul, you have always wanted so much more". It is true because we never know what we want until we are left in a desperate situation. This poem shows that even if you feel down that there is hope wth the rising moon. I enjoyed reading this, and your words were flavorful.

Great job.

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Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I think that this was a creative idea. It gives people a chance to comment. Also, you get to see a lot of other viewpoints on one single word. I think it was awesome. Nature's natural organic recycle process- someone wrote. I thought that was somewhat comical but true. We all live and then die, the circle of life. Whether our deaths are natural or from murder, that is a different story.

Great job.

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Review of What Matters  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What I liked: This poem made me think. It is about leaving a legacy to the world. You would want to be known as someone important if anything, when you are gone. Relationships come and pass, but you do not want your spirit to. However, you worry that you are nothing special and would be easily forgotten. At the end of the poem, I had assumed that your friend who you were venting to had died because you wrote death were is your sting, you can only live forever. I assumed this meant that this person will always be in your memory.

Corrections: Death were is your sting is not grammatically correct. Maybe, try:
Death is your final sting
You can only live forever in me

Other comments: I also realized that this poem could have been you having a conversation with yourself.

Great job!

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Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
What I liked: Strong and emotional for good reasons. No one should conceal the love he has for a child. I agree with you that he should feel ashamed. Feel something for causing his own son's death. It is not a little matter. Does anyone have the strength to admit they are wrong? Children first....wives second especially if they do not realize the significance of the sons.

Correction: How could you sleep while his son fell into an eternal sleep? He did not even know his father cared because of your evil ways.

Other comments: good job.

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Review of Learn to Love  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What I liked: This had a very positive theme of love. It is to love yourself before trying to love somebody else. I liked the different aspects of it: feet, hands, eyes, ears, and to love thy neighbor as thyself. My favorite line is the last one: Learn to love yourself, because someone has always loved you. It is true. Despite the hard times that one has, there has to be at least one human being on Earth that loves you.

Corrections: I would suggest spacing out the lines between each item:
Learn to love your feet
because even if they are rough and strange
they can run swiftly to carry good news
and protect your loved ones

Learn to love your smile
because even the most crooked teeth can say “I love you”
and unwittingly light up the loneliest heart

This would make it easier on the eyes for the reader to see the poem.

Other comments: Great job.

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Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What I liked: I liked the whole thing. Especially since it was on the right hand side of the page, it caught my eye. The whole transition from dark and doom to light was fascinating. The idea that a soul can have a hole in the middle of it, disappear, and then reappear is interesting. At the end, I enjoyed when you saw the light. The terrible strife that had occured had vanished into a new day. I think that is ironic since only a few moments before in the poem you were in hell. It is an excellent thing at the end to have escaped the horrid place that could have been all in your mind but not in real life.

Corrections: But all is now made anew

Other comments: Great job!

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Review of Silent Rain  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What I liked: This was very good. I liked the last part when the realization hit you of what had just occured. This is sad to have lost a love. "My heart died with her" was a heartwrenching line. At first, I thought the person was going to have a heartattack when he clutched his heart so quickly. Luckily, it was not that. However, the pain must be terrible.

Corrections: Trying to forget.........to give more emphasis to what you just said.

And I know what that sound is.

What was the point?

Other comments: Great job. I enjoyed reading it and can relate to hurting over someone who is no longer involved in your life.

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Review of SWEPT AWAY  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I thoroughly enjoyed reading ths. It was written well. A lot of imagery is described. I liked the part of chasing sensuality and precious memories not being erased. To be lost in the moment with the one you adore has to be the best feeling ever. Desire, passion, hope, lust, and love are described here. The first line caught my attention: swept away on passion's sea...
This poem was creative.

Great job.

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Review of time heals.  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I understand that completely. I am going through that write now. To be able to vent on paper is a good thing. However, how do we really move on? This is still a problem that we face: to just be able to let go. I agree that because of the mistake you should feel something, but to feel it for this long......It does not seem worth it. The situation of a person having to go through a difficult time mentally is shown. Hopefully, answers will become clearer as the time passes.

Good job.
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Review of Missing you  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.5)
What I liked: This was a sad poem. I can relate to it because I lost my best friend too. It is really hard to go through and completely understandable if you cry. To part from a friendship is the hardest thing to get over. So many positive memories and now no longer friends.....It hurts a lot. I can see where you are coming from.

Corrections: It was written well.It flowed nicely.

Other comments: Great job.

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Review of Dreams  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I relate to that because it is as if bliss is but a dream. Reality is not what it seems. A person who means the most to you can disappear in the next moment. It is hard to get through when the person's face is in your mind. You just want to be with this person. Desire combined with desperation can drive you crazy. I know how you feel.
Overall, good job.

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Review of Roots or Freedom  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
What I liked: This poem makes me think. I thought this poem was about a bird who could not fly. Yet, it was his only dream that he wanted to pursue...to have something he knew he could not have. As I read on, I changed what I thought the poem was about. Now, a boy who was having internal struggles could not make his dreams come true. No matter what, he wanted this dream to become his reality. I liked how at the end of the story you showed his demise in a peaceful manner.
"He could not see his future. He wanted not his past. The bonds that held him to the earth Have claimed his life at last"- nicely worded

Corrections: I do not have any to mention.

Other comments: Great job.

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Review of I Want To Kiss  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
That was very sad. I can see how it is to be lonely and not have anyone as you walk past the same couple everyday. Yet, there will be someone. There has to be. Pain can lead to our demise, but if we stick together we can defeat it. The beauty of affection is something I long for as well. Alone at night, under the covers, might as well stay there...I would too. It is because it is our safe haven where no one can tell us what to do. I understand you. Hope must be here somewhere. We cannot stand alone.
I am here if you feel lonely. just send an email or chat. Id be happy to respond. Talking and writing really release some pressure.

Good job.

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Review of My Fighting Angel  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked the concept of him being your angel. I liked the description for him: north star, guider, and savior. You spelled the word life wrong. (you wrote lofe) I loved that he can do that to you. He is the one who makes you feel the best you ever did. As for song wise, the chorus is too long to be sung to more poetic than song like. The verses are appropriate length. I loved the last part: He saved me. He made me. My fighting angel.

Overall, great job.

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Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked this because it shows what happens in this day and age. People go behind their friends' backs. I love the last line, forgive me for he knows not what he does. It makes me think of when Jesus asked God to forgive the Jews for they did not know that they killed the most powerful man/God on the earth. They had no idea how distraught and a mess the world would be. Yes, if we forgive much more would be brighter than looked down upon.

Great job.

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Review of Deception  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What I liked: I see each emotion and can match it. I relate to the idea of uncontrollably shaking due to the past memories afflicting you. It is as if you could taste the flavor of it on your tongue. Something that never goes away no matter how hard you try...yet, there will be hope somewhere

Corrections: it is fine

Other comments: good job.

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Review of your ship  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
In affiliation with Dream Team HQ  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I find this story to be just the beginning. I am sure that as soon as it has more people adding, the storyline will be more than interesting. A pirate story is not something we find this day and age, except for Pirates of the Caribbean. Which I think is an awesome series......I mean to say that not every author picks up a pen and mutters "pirate! perfect idea!" Good creativity.

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Review of 216  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: E | (4.0)
What I liked: I see how you can portray feelings in an intense way. This is a good way to vent. Also, it describes what you are going through with no real sense of fake or real. It has to be scary. The idea that you can trap someone's mind for years and years is cool. I know that might sound odd, but I mean that the concept of it is intriguing. It must be tortorous to hear voices. I am curious whether the voices are from the past and people you know or if it just random. It probably will lead to beyond insanity.

Corrections: It is fine.

Other comments: Good job. I liked the part when you said you can conjure demons. It is a good poem, and if this is about you I hope you will be okay and see the light. I'm here to talk if you need it.

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Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I liked this because it shows all of the aspects of a person who just needs to have someone, even if it cannot be admitted. The part that I liked the best was "You’re too young to be so broken, so desolate, so alone, so…empty.
You’re too beautiful to wear that frown. How beautiful you are, with tears running down your face, and the pain dripping onto the floor. How beautiful you will be when you find your way again.How beautiful you’ll be when you smile again" It really got through to me how someone that is not depressed can tell one who is that there he/she is beautiful no matter how many scars are on his/her body. I also liked the wonder that is you because it really shows that he/she is unique and should not bury what he/she has to offer.

Great job. *Smile*

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Review of Inside Us  
Review by Mysterious Wolf
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
What I liked: I liked how there will be no outcasts and how you will take comfort in the night. It makes me think of a vampire whose eyes adjust to the nighttime. Also, a wolf may howl at the moon. I get these notions from the line: out we come into the unknown. The line: comfort in the clouds is sweet and reveals a little bit of rest and relaxation in the night. This poem does leave room for interpretation. Many interesting things occur at night.

Corrections: "Becomes mine" as if to show you took the essence with you and sounds better; We belong. (add a period) No longer outcasts, We will no longer be last. (to show who you are talking about : we)

Other comments: Good job.

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