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Review of Fred  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Another story where computers are taking over lol. I love the idea of this GPS-type system deciding for itself where to take them.

I wonder what a future where Gateway has survived would be like. I can just see all those cow-patch boxes travelling around the galaxy.

Using Fred and George in your story was a nice nod to the Harry Potter series.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Well that was a fun read.

I loved the use of Alice in Wonderland in this story, and the ending was great. I also liked the use of personification of the dishes waiting to be cooked.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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That was hilarious *Laugh*

I love the idea of the animals talking. You have a very clever mouse and rabbit there to outwit all the predators.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I can imagine there are a lot of people out there who are thankful this has been cancelled.

Of course this was a HOOves prompt *Laugh* I love your take on the prompt, and this is one Running I'd love to see.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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And I bet you thought you'd gotten rid of me *Laugh*

This was an enjoyable piece of flash fiction. Nice to see the wife one-up her hubby. I loved the last line, and it gave me a chuckle right before bed.

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Review of Bad Days at Work  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I love the message of your senryu. Bad days at work are something that everyone can relate to.

I like the consonance and assonance in your poem as this creates a smooth reading rhythm.

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Review of You Win!  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I liked the build-up of your story, and you have come up with a clever concept. I found the dialogue in middle of the story a little odd, but it did its job of progressing the story.

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Review of Luna  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I like the concept of this short story, though I'm a little surprised that nobody knows what the satellite is programmed to do. I suppose Ralph could be lying to everyone.

You nicely weave the fortune cookie into your story, and it sounds as though it does not bode well for humanity. I also like the way how there is a link between the theme of your story and the name of the dog.

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Review of Violation  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Well that was a little different.

Using the monitor for the initial communication fits in nicely with the theme of your story, although I'm not sure if this supposed to be an alien thing or a Soviet Union thing. I assume the date refers to the early Explorer satellites.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Another clever title to set up your story. I'm gonna find one of these soon where the title is absolutely nothing to do with the story, aren't I? *Laugh*

I like the way the story develops, and the reveal at the end was done well.

There is one minor punctuation issue. In the sentence that starts Sam smiled, “Well the comma should be a period.

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Review of Bike Ride  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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The opening poem does a nice job of setting up your story. I like the idea of not using speech marks in this story. It kind of draws the reader into the story.

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Review of Mother Goose  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I love the nursery rhyme style of your opening of this short story.

The concept of being chased off or told to go eat something else is a recurrent theme in nursery rhymes and children's stories, and your story does a nice job of mirroring this aspect of tales like the Three Billy Goats Gruff and the Three Little Pigs.

Adding in the bit with the goose fussing over her nest was a nice touch. It adds some sass to her character.

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Review of The Mother Ship  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is a really cool flash piece.

I love the theme of the story. I wonder just how many people prior to John stood staring at the sky. I like that your ending brings us full circle.

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Review of Bear in the Woods  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Well, this story was a little different. No sign of any hidden clues to look out for, and no unexpected ending. This is just a nice, simple short story.

I love the idea of your narrator and Ursus Americanus just sitting around chatting and sharing string cheese.

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Review of How Old Are You?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Did nobody ever tell the little one you never ask Grandma how old she is? I did once, and I got a clip round the ear from my mother *Laugh*

But I loved the way Grandma answered Jamie's question.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This was an interesting short story.

I like the opening, and I can certainly imagine the boys arguing over the source of the rhyme. Little boys are always so sure of everything, even if they have nothing to base their opinion on.

You've also done a nice job with the title. It ties in with the ending, and it give the reader a little clue as to what to expect.

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Review of Project Cana  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This was a clever piece of flash fiction.

You've done a great job with the title, which reveals exactly what the story is about. Though I'd be surprised if many people actually catch on to the meaning behind it.

I liked the slow build up, revealing nothing of the purpose of the machine. And the last line is a nice link back to the inspiration for the story.

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Review of Lucky Find  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is an enjoyable little story with a great surprise ending. I never saw it coming. The concept of the dialogue is interesting, and I wonder of this is what actually happens in real life.

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Review of Imaginary Friends  
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I had a couple of imaginary friends when I was growing up. I used to be convinced that my mum loved my best imaginary friend more than she loved me. So one day I made him get on plane to deepest, darkest Peru and was never seen again *Laugh*

I've heard it said that any child who doesn't have an imaginary friend at some point in their lives lacks an imagination. This was a nice ode to all those imaginary friends who are sadly no longer with us. Or are they? Just because we might not think about them any more, does that mean they are not still there?

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Review of I Believe  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really enjoyed this short ghost story. You have a really funny opening, and I love that. I laughed at the way Billy basically told George to jog on.

I also like the way how you complete the circle by ending your story in the same way you start it. I get the feeling this is what every day at school is like for George.

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Review of Build the Ark  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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This is brilliant. It'd score at least 1,000,000 microLenats on the bogosity meter. *Laugh* I wonder how many readers actually realise the bogosity meter is a real thing.

This flash story brings back memories of The Animals Went in Two by Two.

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Review of Do it Right  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Oh my that was hilarious. I think you included just about every term for a thingamablibbit I've ever heard.

Writing comedy is fairly easy in longer stories, but you had me laughing the whole way through your 297 words.

I love the ending to this flash story. It would have been so easy to ease off the humour, but you keep it going.

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Review of Rock Seeds  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I remember pet rocks, although they weren't as popular here in England as they were as America. But rock seeds are a new one on me *Laugh*

This is so something I can see a young child doing, and the ending is great. It kinda reminds me of the Day of the Triffids but with rocks.

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Review of Blending In  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I love the way a lot of your flash pieces give away nothing of the ending, and this ending is great. I love the idea of the travel guide type book your character read before leaving home. This is a really nice touch.

Too often I've heard about the importance of foreshadowing to set your reader up so the ending isn't a complete surprise, but I find there really is noting better than an ending that just comes at you and says this is what the story is about.

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The title is brilliant and does a great job of setting up the story.

You make a unique use of simile. I don't think I've ever heard of birds being compared to punctuation marks.

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