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for entry "Dissidence
Review by Angel
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like this Hunter's moon. I think it looks great the way you've laid it out. Good luck in the competition.


Snowdrops in Spring

Angel

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for entry "Jesus, Reign.
Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jay, it just goes to show you don't have to have many words to tell a complete life story. Brilliant.


Surprisingly an Owl
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Review by Angel
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Ruwth, for people who've never experienced deliverance ministry done properly it can be a strange thing. I've experienced it several times in my life and I've always come out stronger the other side. I don't claim to completely understand it but I know it works. You've described it so we'll, with two people feeling their way through an experience neither of them are expecting, well done on explaining a very misunderstood part of Church life. Thank you for taking the time to write and for sharing this.
Surprisingly an Owl




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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Shopgirl, I like this because it gives just enough without giving it all away. I hope you finish the book because I'd like to read it if you do. If you get it published you know where to find me, please let me know. I've enjoyed doing this course alongside you, are you going to do the last part of the course, the Screenplay part. I might redo my first Chapter or try another chapter I haven't written yet. I'm still trying to finish the SP version of Chapter 27, I developed an eye infection and it affected my eyesight so I couldn't look at screens for very long so I'm way behind on this one. Well Done.

Sharon

Surprisingly an Owl







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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Shopgirl, I'm sure these weeks are getting shorter by the minute lol. I love your synopsis, I will pop along to the vignette later as I have yet another appointment. I am intrigued though, you are very good at hooking me into this story, so well done.

Surprisingly an Owl
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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Celtic Snow, isn't memory something we take for granted until something reminds us that it is fluid and no matter how hard we try to hold onto things they fade. I love your poem, you describe this so well, even those we love who are no longer with us eventually fade, we don't forget they were there, but their faces or certain things about them. It's heartbreaking and there's nothing we can do. When I was young, about 19 I lost all my short-term memory, I was unable to learn anything new. I had to have brain surgery, it was successful, however, it gave me a deep awareness of my memory and how fragile it is. It's also a powerful thing too, how we can remember things or people by certain things we see or smell, like the Cherry Blossom Tree, it triggers a memory that nothing else can. Such a powerful poem, it touched me because of my own experiences, thank you for sharing this.

Surprisingly an Owl


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Review by Angel
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Angus, I just knew I had to read this. I love it, so funny. Just a small question. Any takers yet?

Surprisingly an Owl
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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Shopgirl, I'm loving this story, I'm so intrigued by the subplot that's going on and I'm drawn to Tyler as a CC. I like that you slipped in about him being tongue-tied when around Catriona, a little foreshadowing there perhaps. I actually copied and pasted this bit to put here, not to keep, but to show it had an impact on me 'When he was studying for what he thought would be a teaching career, his professors had told him to be prepared for a lifetime of questions. No student will ever learn if they don’t ask questions. You won’t always have the answers, but that is fine. There are others who will be glad to tell you what you need to know. It will be up to you to recognize that situation when it arises.' I thought they were such wise words and so useful in our real lives. I often say to people 'There you go you learned something new, it's good to learn something new every day'. Men especially are bad at asking for help and you've portrayed Tyler as this strong and very capable man who becomes introverted and angry because he's found something he can't deal with when the answer was in front of him all the time; ask for help! Men eh lol. I think you nailed this, well done.

Surprisingly an Owl


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Review of PE#3 Shopgirl  
Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Shopgirl, I like yours better than mine especially the last one (no 5.). I struggled with this exercise because there were so many ways to answer it that it bamboozled my brain. You did it well by keeping it short and concise.

Angel
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Review of The Box  
Review by Angel
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Dragon Woman, I loved this story, I didn't know what to expect. I knew there was going to be a twist but I was not expecting that. Very cool and very creepy. Well done

Surprisingly an Owl



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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi May Flowers, I'm sorry for the delay in my review but life just got in the way. Firstly, I was intrigued by the book you took the first chapter from so thank you for that, I may well look that one up... I thoroughly enjoyed your take on Kindred's point of view vignettes. I loved the imagery you showed such as ' Fog ghosts danced on the surface of the waters in an unearthly ballet' and the foreshadowing 'You will understand why I chose the code name of "Kindred" when you are in the presence of King Merlin and Queen Millicent." But it was the final statement that he was playing over and over again in his mind. "The future of our two kingdoms hangs in the balance. Do not fail in this quest.".

The story flowed well and matched with the original story also. There were a couple of issues with the tenses in the third vignette but they are easily rectified and I have to say I found that the hardest part, to change the point of view when using dialogue that's already present. I think overall you did an excellent job in showing who Kindred is, well done.


Surprisingly an Owl


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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I love this poem, it's a mixture of the facts of the volcanic eruption with the belief system of those who are indigenous to the area. It reminded me of one I wrote about Pompeii. I have a fascination with volcanoes, as you pointed out they are both creative and destructive. The damage they cause and the loss of life are devastating for those who live under their shadow, but without them, we wouldn't have the land we live on. They are the force that builds new land and they attract people from across the world to study them, or just admire the spectacle. Nature at it's most powerful is incredible but more often destructive sadly causing loss of lives and homes.
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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Magical Joey, my heart went out to you in this poem. I would have thrown my arms around you had you walked through the doors of the Church I attend, as would so many others. How sad that people have become invisible in a place where if Jesus had been there He would have stopped the whole service to talk to people. He would have reached out His hand to all who walked through His door. I pray that if this is your reality that you find a Church where you are welcome just as you are not as people either expect you to be. I have been in this position, I understand and it shouldn't happen, I pray that, as I said, if this is about you personally then my hope is you find somewhere warmer to celebrate Jesus.

I love the poem because it speaks of just how you feel and describes it so well, being that shrinking flower, the odd one out, the unloved, unwanted. The inner turmoil came through clearly in the line 'I cannot fight to put myself at the centre of attention', this because you shouldn't have to fight and the thought of doing that is just too much. Even going through the doors was a battle and it felt lost before it began. Well done for putting this across so clearly.

Surprisingly an Owl






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Review by Angel
In affiliation with CLOSED - Mental Health Writers...  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Jules, I loved this. I could see all this craziness in my mind at the mall and in cars but you took it to a great new level with Korea, I almost hoped it would work, then remembered it wasn't real. Drat, my imagination ran away with me again. This was a great start to my day, so much fun, thanks for writing it.

Surprisingly an Owl


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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Zeke, you've reviewed so much of my work that I wanted to drop by and have a look at your portfolio.

I love this poem, firstly because I love trees and as soon as I read the first two lines I knew what the words were describing. Old trees are amazing, you have to wonder what stories they could tell if they could talk. I loved the lines about its stateliness and grandeur. I could visualise this great old tree standing alone and yet monopolising the landscape for all to see and wonder at. Thank you for this beautiful poem and for lighting up my day. It's been a sad one for me and this reminded me that there is always a mark that we can leave behind. I lost a friend and she left a mark on many people's lives, just like the tree.


Surprisingly an Owl

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Review by Angel
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Prosperous Snow, I really get your frustration with robots on the other end of the phone. We have them here in the UK too, they make you want to scream at times. I'm pleased that you got what you needed in the end but I understand how it drives people mad. Also, as you pointed out, why do you have to give your information twice when you do get to speak to an actual living person. You've got to wonder who they have working for these people sometimes. Thanks for sharing.




Surprisingly an Owl
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Review by Angel
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Ruwth, I have to say this really interested me because this is something I already do. In my case, it's because I'm on a low income so the blanket comes out and I wear a jumper. It saves me a fair bit on electricity and this has to benefit the world in general, the less electricity we use the better it must be. I'd never heard of this day and considering I live in the UK I would have thought it would have drifted over here, so I was intrigued, I think I'll pop along to the sites you've given and take a look, so thank you for the detailed info. I enjoyed your enthusiasm on the subject too.

Angel *Angelic*
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Review of Doggie Spa Day  
Review by Angel
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi there Hooves, thank you for sharing this, I have to say it was a reminder to my past. My dad tried to give my dear little Yorkshire Terrier a bath. He got wind of it and disappeared into his basket (the equivalent of a carrier today). My dad wasn't going to put his hands in there so he got a broom handle and slid it down the side of him to edge him out. He took a bite out of the broom handle and so we left him there. Next time my dad made sure to close the door before running the water.

What a lovely name for a dog, is that like the song 'Me and you and dog named Boo'? I love the sound of her tenacity and I enjoyed this poem, it made me smile and brought back happy memories, I could also picture her, so cute. Well done and thanks again for sharing.

Angel *Angelic*
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Review of Pants on Fire  
for entry "A Stable Genius
Review by Angel
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi ya Hunter's Moon, I just had to comment on this, as a Brit I can't get my head around this guy and I have to say I just love your poems because you say how I feel so well. Brilliant, as usual.

Angel *Angelic*
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Review of All Of My Peices  
Review by Angel
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Makalia, I have to say that your introduction intrigued me and I wasn't disappointed. I am a Christian and I know that we find ourselves in no different situations than anyone else. I find that it is my faith that gets me through these situations, however, I loved the twist in this, in that she isn't entirely human, she is an Angel on a mission from God. I love stories from an unusual point of view and I have to say this is an unusual point of view, one that I enjoyed, well done and keep writing.

Angel
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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi rjhjr

I have to say I was taken by surprise by this, I had no idea from what point of view it was coming from until it said about perching on my pedestal over the harbour. It brought a huge lump to my throat. I live in the UK and yet it still affected me, I think because I love to read stories from an unusual point of view and this was such a powerful point of view and also showed how helpless everyone was on that day. They couldn't have helped any more than the Statue could because they wouldn't have been allowed in. But this reinforced the helplessness that everyone felt on that day, not only those who were in the city but all those who lived elsewhere and watched it all happen. We all still stand with you on the anniversary of that terrible day. Thank you for sharing this amazing piece.

Angel
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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
I thought I'd pop you in a few GPs. I love this contest but I've been busy with the Rising Stars Programme so haven't taken part in all the things I usually do. Looking forward to taking part again.

Angel
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Review by Angel
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Lostwordsmith, I've wandered over to your Port again to ponder the meaning of life. In my Rising Stars capacity, this is a M2M review and I'm here to
plunder the depths of your writing lol. I have to say I was quite taken by this poem. It was quite simple in its language and its rhyme but very effective in its showing of the story, such as.....
'So beautiful, so wild and free
in a place untouched, still pristine.' it makes me wonder if there are in fact any places where there are so few people living in them that they are undamaged by man. I'm assuming the lady was a mermaid, my only other thought was that they were playing with the waves and the lady you were referring to were the waves. Keep up the good work, you have a gift in writing this sort of poetry for sure. God Bless and well done again.

Sharon (e:Angelic}
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Review by Angel
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Lostwordsmith, I've wandered over to your Port again to ponder the meaning of life. In my Rising Stars capacity, this is a M2M review and I'm here to
plunder lol as I'm doing my M2M reviews, I have to say I was quite taken by this poem. It was quite simple in its language and its rhyme but very effective in its showing of the story, such as.....
'So beautiful, so wild and free
in a place untouched, still pristine.' it makes me wonder if there are in fact any places where there are so few people living in them that
It shows how undamaged by man it is at this point without actually saying it.
I'm assuming the lady was a mermaid, my only other thought was that they were playing with the waves and you were referring to that. Keep up the good work, you have a gift in writing this sort of poetry for sure. God Bless and well done again.

Sharon (e:Angelic}
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Review by Angel
In affiliation with  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Lottie

I have to say I'm impressed by this poem, I suffered from depression as a teenager and I recognised myself here. Even as an adult the feelings are the same but maybe an adult recognises it. A child just experiences it without any comprehension of depression and what it is.

I loved your analogy of children in a barn especially wiping away the tears with straw. Straw is rough and sharp so to me, it spoke of whatever people did it just made it worse. The ending was great because if someone had read this without reading what it was about they would have assumed it was about depression. However, the last verse makes it clear that these are children, not adults who are suffering. I also like your mix of rhyming and non-rhyming lines it reinforces the unsettled feelings of the child in the poem.

There are a few points I would like to make and this is just my opinion. In the fourth verse, 'theres' should be 'there's' and I feel that there is a word missing 'no' between 'there's' and 'need'. In the last verse you have 'chocked', it should be 'choked'.

These are really minor and often typing errors, they by no means detracted from the poem which I really enjoyed, even though the subject was difficult. Well done.

Angel
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