|Hi there, and welcome to WdC! I'll start of by saying that I found this piece very interesting. I do not agree with many things mentioned, but it is a point of view of a dying man, and this could be one of the scenarios. That we shall never know.
I also would like to point out a few things in hopes of helping you out with writing things similar to this in the future.
"An old man lies on his death bed; and while laying there in the complete silence of the room. There appears an angel with wings of white and the garb of one that doesn't have much money." - The use of the semicolon in this sentence is not accurate, and the period is not necessary. I would change it to something like "An old man lies on his death bed. While laying there in the complete silence of the room, there appears an angel with wings of white and the garb of one that doesn't have much money". If you want to take your professional language a step farther, I would use "does not" in place of "doesn't" and try to avoid all other contractions.
You repeatedly use " its' " in your passage. The apostrophe at the end is unnecessary as "its" without an apostrophe expresses possession in itself.
If you just work on the grammar, spelling, and overall layout of the passage, it has good potential. :)