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Honest and critical reviews offered. I look at all components of story-telling: setting, dialogue, characterization, conflict and resolution. I will not generally do a line-by-line edit, though I will point out minor errors. If a piece needs a complete rewrite for grammar and spelling I will tell you so. I do not sugar-coat. I try to be insightful and will offer honest suggestions where I think are necessary.
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Review by jabberwocky
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Was glad to find a free verse poem. Then was Glad to crack up, lol. I was thinking it was quite origional to scribble a poem for an ant. I was thinking, 'He must be a true writer, to be affected by such a little thing, (pun intended) and take to the pen." While obviously it wasn't a poem intended to have a huge imapct, and it dind't, but it thoroughly gave me a giggle. Much appreciated!

There were no errors that I saw.

Oh, and I really liked your title. Catchy.


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Review of Four  
Review by jabberwocky
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
They all led a simple life in harmony, living in rock huts, and existing on game and fruits and berries and roots (and) whatever else they could find.

or you could reformulate this sentence to read as:

They all led a simple life in harmony; living in rock huts and existing on game, fruits, berries, roots and whatever else they could find.

What could Four possibly know about hunting and medicine making that the Great Village had not already discovered for themselves? --- medicine-making

The Villagers numbers dwindled --- The Villagers' numbers

The immediately killed --- They immediately

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this is fantastic! I love the twisted little moral regarding appreciation, prejudice and getting one's just desserts! It was interesting from beginning to end, but with the last paragraph- I literally howled with laughter! This was superbly funny, you have a wicked sense of humor!
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