|This is a very unique piece. I like that it leads the reader through such a varied and interesting range of images.
Arranged in the way it is now, the length of the lines, combined with the myriad of imagery, make the poem a bit overwhelming. It might be more palatable broken up into shorter lines, so each image could be focused upon more easily as the poem is read.
There are two small spelling errors. In line 2, "rapterous" should be "rapturous" and near the end, "it's" should be "its" instead.
Overall, a very interesting read.