Nice story. Saw a few typos, but I liked it a lot. What really caught me was the way you included so many of your personal thoughts. They were more like opinions of what you thought about certain situations, and added an extra side to your character. Very, very good!
Not bad for such a short story. The sentence where you turn on the headlights and the cemetery entrance is right in front of you is awesome! I didn't expect that.
I did find a few typos:
It is raining heavily and [I'm] fearing the traffic jam, [so] I take a diversion of[f] the main road.
The following sentence is hard to imagine if it's raining so hard:
I chuckle, as I gleefully speed ahead for a mile or two.
The words 'has' doesn't need to be in this sentence. It changes the tense of the sentence:
The rain has eased off but the wind speed has suddenly increased.
It reads better as:
The rain eased off[,] but the wind speed suddenly increased.
Your last sentence is classic! It would easy to continue this story, but don't do it! I end my horror stories the same way. Leave them hanging in the wind...LOL!!!
I must admit I really enjoyed that story, and it even had a happy ending! My mind produced so much imagery and your character descriptions were short and to the point. It was really, really good!
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