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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for putting this up Mrs Battywyn. This is the first time I have ever undertaken the OctoPrep challenge and already I can see the usefulness of this challenge. I just wish I had discovered WDC and this years ago! Thanks again for creating and taking the time to make this for us here on WDC!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like this. For a first upload, this opening chapter is finely crafted. I do like to read and enjoy epic fantasy books with magic galore. This seems to have the potential to develop into one of those. You don't often see females as the main protagonists in a novel, novella, short story etc. But that isn't the case here. Addie as I'll call her, seems to be rather quiet and slightly shy, yet seems to have a quiet strength emanating from her very core.

I hope to see her character develop as the novel goes on. I checked your profile and I see you have more than one chapter uploaded here on WDC. That is fantastic, as I love to read long fantasy epics on a quiet afternoon. The beginnings of world building in this chapter are evident for the reader to glimpse, with little details interspersed with the plotline.

Reading about the plot and character arcs is going to be an experience I look forward to very much.

Thanks for writing, creating and uploading this on WDC for us all to read.

Asha xxx
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was absolutely fantastic! I was laughing throughout the whole story. Poor Kyle, after encountering the wizard and rather hairy, mouthful of fangs creature acted as any normal human would.

With complete panic and feeling rather bewildered. I'd probably faint from shock! I couldn't see any errors or grammatical mistakes. Micheal the Wizard reminds me of another fantastic sorcerer I once read about - Belgarath.

I personally think Micheal is a younger and much more comedic version. He seems rather unflappable and able to keep a clear head in circumstances he found himself in.

Again, thanks for a laugh!

Asha xxx
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I don't have to worry about grey hairs that much, I'm only 37! Sill having silver and grey bits running through your hair shows you've lived life and can give amazing advice to pesky youngsters such as myself! Even bacon sammie eating brits like me!

Asha xxx
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Review of Death's Laundry  
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow this is a good one! Meeting Death in a Laundromat. Was your Grim Reaper inspired by the one from the great works of Terry Pratchett? I really liked the way you made Death here seem like a person who is just doing his laundry. The part which really made me laugh:

Grim wearing hot pink robes due to an underwear mishap by a previous user of the particulat machine he chose to use.

Thanks for such a fantastic laugh!

Asha xxx
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I was looking for stuff to review and came across this. What a find it was. Character charts are a good way for an aspiring author like me to at least, hopefully in my case, create some characters that can grow with time.

I'll be putting this item in my favourites list, plus checking out your portfolio to see if you have any more articles such as this. You've gained yourself a new fan!

Asha xxx
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Review of Unrest  
Rated: E | (4.0)
THis is quite good from what I've managed to read of it. But the paragraphs are showing up as being too bunched together for me to read. For a first upload here on WDC, this is rather well written so far. If you ever space out the paragraphs, let me know. I'll definitely reread this. It has potential!

Asha xxx
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This article was rather informative. Thanks for posting this. It was a rather interesting read and raised some very interesting, yet good points. I should put in here that Anne McCaffrey, one of my favourite writers now passed from this world, does have a few female protagonists in her books. I've also come across an epic fantasy set in a world similar to India if I recall correctly.

But seriously, reading about characters from other backgrounds or with a disability would be fantastic! Thanks for posting such a wonderful article!

Asha xxx
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I was so awed and humbled after I read this. I remember watching the events of this on television all those years ago. This lovely and heartfelt poem is a wonderful way to remember those who helped others survive during that horrible time.

Thanks for sharing this with us today. By posting this, they'll be remembered by us all here on WDC.

Asha xxx
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is brillantly thought out. I couldn't stop laughing as I read through this. If you ever turned this into a proper show and brought this to England, my autistic niece and nephew would love this very much! This is a rather fantstic way to teach children one of the traditional stories from childhood. Was there also a lesson in this piece?

Thanks again for posting this and making me smile today!

Asha xxx
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Review of still here  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thanks for sharing part of your life history with us here on WDC and POSTING it. I don't have Sturge-Webber Syndrome, but I do have epilepsy. I take anti-convulsants too. From reading this it seems you have a very strong will and vibrant personality. Nothing seems to stop you. You keep going. A lesson I have had to learn recently after having a seizure for the first time in nearly four years. Thanks for teaching me this most valuable lesson. Like you, I'll now keep on going. After all, my goal of writing my first novel won't accomplish itself now will it?

XD

I have given 5 stars for the wonderful lesson you've passed onto me.

Thank you.
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Review of An Ordinary Stone  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
For a short story this is rather good. I hope this is the full story as I found this to be well crafted and thought out. You've obviously done world-building for this and it shows in the little details sprinkled throughout the entirety of the story.

Does this story have influence from Greek legends as I recognize the name of the female protagonist. I couldn't see any obvious errors. Thanks for creating and uploading such an enjoyable story. I can see this a young adult fantasy book. ? Do you have plans to extend this at all?
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Review of Success  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like this short, yet fantastic piece you've written here. I didn't go to college or as it is known over here University to gain a degree, I had to help my dad and stepmum feed the younger kids as we never had much money! I do have some qualifications yet ended up in a dead end job that I still do to this very day, sigh.

But after reading this, it seems that sometimes you have to take a chance in life and just GO FOR IT! I've realized at the age of 37, dreams can still be possible to be brought to life and I just have to take a chance that is offered and go for it. I hope that was the message you tried to put across in this short article. Thanks for making me realize that to obtain what you wish for, chances and hard work can make this possible!

Asha xxx
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I just wanted to ask, is this chapter of your novel inspired by the legends of the Cities of Gold? It seemed like it as I read through this wonderfully crafted chapter. I'm rather interested to see how the reference to the three Oracles will come into play. Perhaps myths and legends from other cultures could be brought in?

Looking forward to more!

Asha xxx
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good poll and rather interesting. Just wanted to say I do my writing in the BATH sometimes. I perch my comp/tablet on top of the laundry basket! I like polls like this, talk about having fun and getting informed all at the same time! Nice one Sophie!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This poem is amazingly well crafted. The images are very clear as the reader goes through the verses of the entire poem. I believe that you've captured the essence of this mystical bird rather well. Plus the legend of the Phoenix is portrayed here very well indeed. I enjoyed reading this immensely.

Good work on that point.
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Review of Monster Mash 2014  
for entry "Tall Tales
Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
Oops, oh dear. That didn't go to plan did it! Scaring the kids, getting a rather HUGE bump on the head. You always know you're in the doghouse if you upset the wifey. Funny as heck, the imagery was great. I could see everything clearly as I read through!

Asha xxx

P.S absolutely spammerific!
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Review of Your NanoCounter  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for this fantastic guide Jeff. I'm glad it is rather simple to use and that it links to the group page where all the NaNo counts for fellow NaNo'ers is available. The way this is set out is fantastic, as I admit I'm not the world's greatest with computer code and languages! Thanks again for creating and posting such a guide.

Asha xxx
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I hope you plan to continue this, I love it and have one word. FANTASTIC! You've certainly done a ton of world building, research and the like. That must have taken ages to do. Are the prince and princess based on Arabic races perhaps? From the way you've described their dress, manner of appearance and speech, influences from Arabic cultures seems rather likely.

I did enjoy the mention of the Titanic, but as an airship. Elisha seems to be rather reluctant to follow in his uncle's footsteps until he catches sight of a kindred spirit in the princess. Plus I find my curiosity has been stirred by the mention of a great Pandemic. If you plan to continue this, then perhaps that can be elaborated on further. I do know that during the time this is set in, the Victorian Era, I think influenza ran rampant, totally decimating the world's population.

Again this is well crafted and please by all means continue.

Asha xxx
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Rated: E | (5.0)
In my on personal opinion, this article should receive 5 stars from all of us WDC members who review this. When I saw this in the list asking for reviews, I thought why not. I am glad I did read this. I love historical articles and found this one rather interesting. I did know of the Seven Wonders of the Ancient World, yet was gratified to be reminded of them.

I didn't know the daily life of a Lighthouse Keeper. I learned something today about those who dedicate their lives to these amazing buildings, also save lives by maintaining them. Thanks for uploading this!

Asha xxx
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Review of My New Business  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey this is fantastic! Full of humour and rhythm with your sentences that keep the reader hooked and reading through the whole article. I love the fact you mentioned the Shire, also the holiness of cows in India! That made me laugh out loud. Coffee shops are the way to earn money. I dwell in England and live near a borough known as Bromley. In the high street alone, there are about 4 coffee shops from different coffee store chains. All of them remain in business. Therefore people will always love and have a need for coffee.

I would love to come and visit your shop in the USA, but I don't even have a passport!

Thanks again for the laughs and good luck with your coffee store!

Asha xxx
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Review of Thoughts on Aging  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
HuntersMoon this is great! I can see the message you've tried to convey here. I'm agreeing with what you've managed to convey in the verses here. When I get to the grey hair stage, with warts, hair in odd places and wrinkles galore, I'm going to grow old DISGRACEFULLY!

One thing though, there seems to be a lot of random characters and numbers here and there.

Now, any vivid hair colour suggestions would be welcome! I don't plan on using hair dye until I reach sixty five though!

Again, nice poem here!

Asha xxx
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Review of Weekly Goals  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a rather good way of encouraging people to set up a goal, no matter how small or large and attempt to complete said goal.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a way to celebrate a birthday! I just wish had found this site in 2000 when I was on the verge of giving up writing altogether. I was 26 back then and full of despair as some of my family teased me rather badly about writing! But I found this site last year and LOVE IT! The birthday celebrations have gone with a bang and I enjoyed what I saw of it. My laptop is being a pain, but hopefully soon it will be fixed and I'll be back online more often!

I can't wait, but will have to, to see what you lot come up with for the 20th birthday celebrations! I hope to have a few novels written by then, published or uploaded here for you all to read! Anyway well done on the events!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm giving you five stars for this. You definitely deserve that much. I just wish I could do more than just leave you a review. To me, this short article shows the true nature of friendship that is possible between two living souls. That one person can be there for another, through thick and thin. You show a deep, intuitive understanding of friendship, I am smiling as I write this review. Well done on such a thought provoking item.

Asha
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