|A decent piece of work. It conveys the general melancholy feeling of the person who has just gone out of work.
A few minor suggestions;
1)"beginning not to care"
Full stop after 'care'.
2)"feeling I'm gona drown"
It could be phrased better.
Maybe a hyphen;
*Feeling-I'm gonna drown.
Maybe a semicolon;
*Feeling; I'm gonna drown.
You could use a good old 'like'
*Feeling like I'm gonna drown.
3)"Pressures pushing me down"
It doesn't read very smoothly.
It could be done like;
*All the pressures pushing me down
*The pressures pushing me down.
4)"Oh no, I'm face down"
The general astonishment or surprise or distraught feeling could be better conveyed if you used an exclamation mark;
*Oh no! I'm face down,
5)"Family, finances and life's unstable. "
I believe the flow of this line would be smoother if you added a semicolon instead of and;
*Family, finances; life's unstable.
6)Full stop after 'table'.
In the end, I would like to say that all of my suggestions are just that; suggestions. You do not have to feel obligated to follow them because it is your poem after all. You have a lot of potential. Great work.