Story : A tale of people stuck in a bar as a storm catches them off gaurd. The stories narrated by people to kill time are ramdom in nature,which is what one would expect in a random group of people.
Likes : The sprinkle of ghost in between makes the read interesting.
Suggestions : As a story may be some event or may be some history of ghost can be added so that the ending will make it seem a little more complete.
Story : A letter to yourself describing the struggles, dreams and what you are looking for in life. It's clear from the content that it is written from heart and is encouraging to read as you showcase the desire to succeed and your belief in yourself
Likes : Liked the part which describes that healing takes time, isn't it something we so often forget that wounds need time to heal and there is no magic bullet for it.
Story :A tale of going back to an ex who never cared and what realisation dawns on her . The emotions in story are presented very well, clearly showcasing that when we love we really can become blond to what other person is doing.The name too fits the story really well.
Likes : The ending where she says she still loves him,but adds the realisation to it .This is something a lot of us fail to do in real life.
Story :A detailed description of the scene where children are getting ready to get back to school after the summer break.Its a well observed description , including details of how the groups behave.
Characters : Like how the young boy and girl groups have been distinguished based on the group behaviour
Please note that the review is my personal opinion and you can choose to ignore any thing you do not agree with .
I am reviewing this as part of I write 2021.
Poem : Poem Around the word Deciduous, it brings out the the beauty of lush green trees and wilderness. Breathing fresh air in a lush green forest can be refreshing,something that most of the city dwellers never experience i guess.
Likes : Branches heading towards heaven, can be related to the heavenly feeling that one can feel in the wilderness.
Story :story of a unique or evolved host welcoming a guest into her house.The story is presented really well keeping the reader guessing and engaged all through. The details of the house included makes it good read. But the ending does leave somethings to readers imaginations.
Likes : Liked the way the statue was described with the surprise added with it.
Story : An inspirational essay of how we can be inspired by not only others but overaleves too. It is a well written essay bringing out a very important issue in today's where we end up comparing overaleves continuously to others on the social media, which can sometimes become very daunting.
Likes : Liked the concept of self inspiration, something we hardly think of.
Story :A special experience of the character on the valetine day. It's a good message the story is try to provide , It's ok if we are not with someone special on a valentine's day.
Likes : The fact that the message in the bottle was gender neutral was a good thinking.
Suggestions :
bottle with a gold lid....may be golden lid would be better, unless you mean it's actually of gold.
over and over several times...the words several times can be removed I felt.
Story :An essay trying to convey a way or method to cope with all the madness around.
Likes and Dislikes :
At a time when the generation is fighting one of its biggest challenge, may be the advice to make things effort less and simple is what we need
Suggestions
May be this sentence can be rephrased
At time it consciously becomes
At times it becomes difficult to be effortlessly consciously....
The item can be expanded further as it feels the concept of effortless might need a little more explanation to get it right
Thank you for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it.
Story :The story of a young girl discovering a harsh the truth that helps her understand herself a lot better, but is the cost of the truth worth it.The story has been presented beautifully. The reader can feel the sea of emotions that Nira is drowning in.
Likes and Dislikes : Liked the positive note thr story ends in, gives it a kind of closure to everything that has been said in the story.
Please note that the review is my personal opinion and you can choose to ignore any thing you do not agree with
Story : Story of a boy being mistreated in his own house and his dreams for happiness.
Characters :The young boy is shown as someone feeling helpless and unhappy , but still has dreams and hopes to be happy which he creates in his imagination.
Suggestions : The story has a lot of potential and I think can be extended into a longer story. Describe the fellings of the boy more in detail so that reader can feel more connected to him.
Please note that the review is my personal opinion and you can choose to ignore any thing you do not agree with
Poem :A poem about a relationship and a lot of unsaid issues which the poet is sure will never get resolved.
Some relationships have problems which never get resolved and end up being a pain point for ever.
Characters : The poem surely brings out the struggle of the character in the relationship really well.
Story : A talr about birth and traning of a new thunder dragon. The story is kept interesting all along and keeps the reader engaged.
Characters : the characters have been built well, with the main character skyee being shown as someone with a strong character as needed for the story.
Suggestions : The story needs a little to make it even better then what it is.
Add spaces at appropriate places like around conversations ,to make it easier to read.
The narration goes from past tense to present in between like here
ds.” The child then asks,
Story : Revolves around the dinner a couple is having together at a restaurant. Overall it felt the story concentrated a lot on the dining place, and did not give any indication as to why did he feel the way he did about Miranda.May be I got it wrong, am not sure.
Characters : The male is depicted showing a continuous dislike towards the place and its food. The mood is mostly been set to be in sync with negative end the story has.
Suggestions :
This line has punctuation missing
He knew Miranda was thinking she shouldn’t have ordered the Eggs Benedict but that she couldn’t resist the ring quinoa english muffins had to it.
I feel "The Cloying" can start with a new sentence.
, no, more accurately, couldn’t get drunk, the cloying .
Story : A women waiting for her date, almost sure that he is not coming.The ending leaves a little bit to the readers imagination whether did he really come .
Characters and scene : The only character is presented very well with the description of the scene brining out her emotions really well.
Suggestions : Nothing to suggest, just that this can be made into a longer story by starting from the time he asked for the date.
Have we all not been there,the feeling of not being good enough for some one .
Thanks for sharing the item, enjoyed reading it.
Please note that the review is my personal opinion and you can choose to ignore any thing you do not agree with . I am reviewing this as a part of I write 2021
Story : A funny story of a dove and Bee disliking a pigeon's voice.
Characters : The short descriptions of the characters are true to their actual behavior thus making the item more interesting.
Suggestions : Just one small typo.
It's you're voice! : I guess you meant It's your voice!
Please note that the review is my personal opinion and you can choose to ignore any thing you do not agree with
Story : The story is very relatable and flows easily. Heart breaks and disappointments and friends to help us sail through it, are something most of would have gone through. Characters :
Characters are portrayed well and they stay true to their role till the end with none of them actually interested in the game itself but more in making sure matt is fine.
Suggestions :
Nothing much in the way of grammar or punctuation, with respect to the story if you do plan to expand it to a longer version sometime maybe a little description of the characters themselves might be done
That is a well written poem for the image prompt. Liked the part where you mentioned hiding things underneath, it so true for such an image we never know what is it hiding.
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