Great to read your letter to yourself. Its really nice to see you have so many positive goals for the year. Finding the right job sure takes effort, all the best for that and in the crazy world today, fitness is probably the most ignored asset so its really nice to see that too on your to do list for the year.
Have a great year ahead,and thanks for sharing it.
satish
It is a nice poem,possibly about a person, well to do at some point in her life but has lost everything now.
Just wonder how many of the older people in the world end up like this, ignored by their loved ones.
It was really nice to read how strongly you feel about dance,its really nice to have such a strong connection. Just two suggestions
tap lessons. Very popular in the 40s. .... may be a , would make it better tap lessons,very popular in the 40s.
topped in at a nice bar ..may be would sound better with ..stepped into a nice bar...
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Story: The same event narrated in the versions of two people , and each having a small bit of mystery and suspense. Found it very interesting way of putting it.
Likes : The twist in the end of him imagining his daughter was very well put across. The narration keeps the mystery going till the end .
Suggestions : A few small misses
I shut my eyes again hoping this was a bad dream. : The word it is missing
This sentence can be phrased better i think may be a comma or adding a few more words after reports :
The doctor didn't take his eyes off the reports when he finally
That is interesting tale about a small incident cause of his medical condition.The build up to the climax is nice and the story wraps up well at the end.
It is very well written tale, describing the helplessness we feel when we can do nothing to help some one we love so much. The emotions are brought out well.
That is a well written poem for the prompt. Though its not scary, but does bring out the essence of prompt well.
enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing
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Summary: A story of a prisonare waiting to be hanged in converstation with the sheriff.
Likes : That is very well written and beuatiful use of the prompt. The slight mystery keeps the reader interested till the end to find out what are the two dicussing about and there is also a touch of humour too.
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Story: About a animal recuer, who loves his job and enjoys it,
Overall feel : The story had very wel bought out the feel of the character for the animals and his love for his job. The story portrays the many
difficulties that he encounters maintaing the animals but never does he complain about it . Clearly showing his love for the animals.
Likes : The description of the relationship between the keeper and the crocodile has been portrayes very well. The aligators reactions at various situations have been wonderfully described giving a vivid picture to the reader of what is happening.
Dislikes: None. It is complete story making use of the prompt very well.
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The story has a nice plot, about the brothers misunderstanding sister's boyfriend and injuring him badly. But I felt the story ended rather abruptly with no conclusion.
Points like , What was the attack for? Why was Nicolas misunderstood? Do Nicolas and Ariel get back together again ?, seem to have been left to the reader's imagination.
A few suggestions :
Trevor approached my left as Anthony ran to my right. : Trevor approached me from as Anthony came towards my right
Being larger than he is, I jerked back releasing his hold on my shirt : Being larger than him, I jerked back releasing his hold on my shirt
that was something nothing could beat, especially another woman: Try to rephrase this .
When she left the room I looked around, slightly moving : When she left the room I looked around, moving slightly
I couldn't believe what happened tonight: I couldn't believe what had happened
Despite all that has happened, I was happy to see her : Despite all that had happened, I was happy to see her
I think the story has the potential to become much better with a little more work.
That is Beautifully written essay. Though I do not have any personal experience on becoming a grandparent , I could relate to your narration easily.
The flow of the essay is good and keeps the interest of the reader.
Personally I think every stage of the life has its own share of fun and enjoyment and if we can realize that, the changes could be easier to handle
That is a nice romantic story. The girl's feelings are well described, and its easy for the reader to relate to her.
The ending is nice too, with a positive note for both the guy and the girl.
Just one typo:
unwinding the soft grey : There is a huge space between the words "the" and "soft" .
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Story : A well written story about a guy describing his feelings that he never revealed to his love. The emotions are brought out nicely.
Characters : The character is depicted very well and very believable
Suggestions : I felt the story leaves a lot to the imagination. After building up so much of emotions of the guy regretting not revealing his feelings to her the story does not give why he could not reveal his feelings, why was it their last meeting? Kind of leaves the reader in a blind spot.
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Story :: Very well written, the point of view of a wooden log from birth till he is used as a cross to crucify the lord himself. Keeps the reader interested all along.
Characters : The way wood narrates the story makes it very interesting, always sticking to the characters of the wood.
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Hi,
That is a interesting story with a ending that leaves the reader thinking.
The story could be more effective if you split the content into paragraphs with good spacing. It would make reading more fun.
A few suggestions Her last one. Ever
Her last one,ever.
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