Thank you for submitting your poem to “Inspirations.” You have written a piece with strong emotion. The writer is reaching out, hoping that someone will listen…will respond…will lend an understanding ear. But it seems pretty unlikely that it will happen. Rather it seems like the reader is placing blame on the writer for “every mistake, every flaw, every sin, every break, every mood.” The repetition of your central message gives strength to it.
I would prefer “All (that) is left for me now” instead of “all what is left…”
The overall narrative was a bit difficult for me to follow…it seemed a bit scattered. (Though I’m thinking that was your intention.)
Good job Sean! Keep on writing.