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Review of Kevin 1967-1983  
Review by Being Diane
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Why did I pick this piece to review? I wonder why people are taking their lives so soon but after I started reading it I felt so thankful that this didn't happen to me because I was born in the generation where this was the norm. I graduated in 1972. You can only imagine how wild are bunch was. I felt so sorry for the fact you lost your friend. I lost many. I've now got a drug addict son. He's been in prison more times that I can count. He stole from the Christian camp I worked for and it made me want to commit sucide! What you wrote really brought the drug life come alive. Have you thought about writing a book? If it helped one person it would be worth the world. I live in the south. We took about 45 mushrooms and cooked them down into a quart of Kool-Aid. I drunk
a large coffee cup full!!! I stayed awake for 3 days.

Did the title fit? Yes.


Content: Wonderful, very detailed. Keep writing!






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed.
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Review by Being Diane
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Why did I pick this piece to review?
Because I am interested in gun control. I don't have to agree or disagree on the subject you wrote about only to give you an honest opinion about your writing.


Did the title fit?
Yes, very much so.

Content: Great. I know that some newspapers only allow you to write so many words but you really got your point across in what small numbers of words you had to use. You brought in outside items which draws you into the reading. I would like to see something with more opinion.

Write on!






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Review of Relationships  
Review by Being Diane
Rated: E | (4.5)
Why did I pick this piece to review? Because I believe in relationships but I think they are so hard to make work. Sometimes people, even your family doesn't want you to be able to have sucess in your friendships. I like what you wrote because it made me stop and think about how hard it is to try and make relationships work. What I do is not tell people what I am going to do and go by what they do. If they don't think I'm worth it I used to worry about it and now I don't. You did a great job in people this together and pretty much said the same thing I would.



Did the title fit? Yes and I wonder why friendships have to be so hard to maintain.


Content: Great job. There was one mistake word down near the end but it was good it wasnt a worry.






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Review of A Day on the Farm  
Review by Being Diane
In affiliation with The Brainstormers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Why did I pick this piece to review? Because I've been on many farms while living in the south and I love the book Animal Farm. This is really good, with a little more description it would be perfect. I do love the conversation between the chickens. So funny and so believeable.



Did the title fit? Very much so.


Content: I would put a little more content in it to give it something for people to see. Like the shape of the coop. Was there any grass at all growing. How far from the farmer's house? Was there a tree trunk the farmer could use to give the idea of how he was chopping
the heads off? Why was he doing so many in one day? A big Sunday dinner on the ground.





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Review by Being Diane
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Why did I pick this piece to review? I know like the song by Dionne Warwick sung, "What the world needs now is love sweet love...it's the only thing that there's just to little of! You are a very bright individual and your writing is supreme. Your writing is so perfect I would send this in to one of the contests or look for a magazine which might publish it. It brings in every thought and backs it up with your opinion on how this existence in our world.

Did the title fit? Very much so.


Content: Supreme. It doesn't get any better than this essay. It is great writing. Don't
quit!





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Review of Tomorrow  
Review by Being Diane
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Why did I pick this piece to review? Even though it has been since 1972 since I graduated I remember thinking exactly what you wrote. This is great because at a very young age you are writing what the world experiences in school. You wonder where the time went while you are wishing you were 16, then wishing for 18, and then 21!



Did the title fit? Very much so. PERFECT!


Content: Surprising even though your poem was very short it really touch the human heart.

Extra: I'm 57, don't waste time on relationships that don't work. Keep writing don't let anything get in your way. Buy every book you can on writing and read every genre' you can get your hands on....you have time and it is short!






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Review of Lazy Summer  
Review by Being Diane
In affiliation with The Brainstormers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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What made me what to review this piece: Because I know how creative you must be in order to write in this way. I've tried it and found it hard but very rewarding.



How it made me feel: It made me feel like going out in the sunshine and laying
in my cool grass cover in order to put myself at peace in this fast pace life.
Content: Wonderful. Just right.

Mistakes:
I saw no mistakes but I look more for content.


Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review of Magic Garden  
Review by Being Diane
In affiliation with The Brainstormers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is absolutly beautiful. I love the color and the way you have incorporated the great items of the Native American People of which I am a part of and you should if you don't already make c-notes for us to send. I like the story page and have begun to put things on there but don't know if it's quite what they're looking for and your picture takes the guess work out of story telling.
Keep doing the art work. WONDERFUL!
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Review of Without Hope  
Review by Being Diane
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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What made me what to review this piece: I've felt that way before but never took the time to express it. You did a great job expresses your most intimate feelings about the give a way..something I've experience from a Father. I felt overwhelming sorrow when you chose the place to spend the night. Good job linking them together.



How it made me feel:Very sad because life is like this.



Content: Great but I would love to see a short story.


Mistakes: I judge more on content. Great



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review by Being Diane
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


I stopped by for the contest and decided to look around and to my delightful surprise I found this piece of writing. Great. I even tried this myself and decided writing outside my regular genres can only help me in showing myself how I can expand my talent. What you wrote really took some imagination unless you come by it naturally.



It held my attention so well. I didn't get borned and just love the great writing.


Content: Great keep it up!


Mistakes: . None that mattered.



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review of The Fog  
Review by Being Diane
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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What made me what made me review this piece: Just found it advertised on the side of the page and decided to read it and I'm glad I did because it really was good. I enjoyed the story and it flowed so easily. I did see around the first paragraph where you ended the sentence with "TO"

How it made me feel:
Sad but good in knowing there is life after death. I've spent many times in the cemetaries.



Content:Great, really believeable!


Mistakes Just the one I mentioned. Just delete the word to and audience fits right in.



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review by Being Diane
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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What made me what to review this piece: Just dropping by to see the new prompt
and what to my surprise was this wonderful piece of writing/wonderful to see a group of books wrote on this secret

How it made me feel:Like a little child again digging for China. You did a great job bringing back the memory of a child!



Content: Great wouldn't change a thing!

Mistakes: None



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review by Being Diane
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoy reviewing as much as I like writing on writing.com. I've been a member for quite some time now and the more I write reviews the more I can see how my own writing needs to improve and a big plus is I am getting more experience as a writer. The biggest plus is getting to read different genre' in writing sometimes something I wouldn't necessary go out and buy to read. I find the longer I do this the more ground I cover in the world whether it is fantasy, fiction, non-fiction it is always a pleasure to review.

Thanks as always for the gift points. I share them with others that I review and to groups who award members who can't afford memberships. I''ve had to ask for help before and I've never been turned down.

Diane
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Review by Being Diane
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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What made me what to review this piece: I belong to the summer writer's group and decided to drop by and read after posting my BLOG entry on the site. It seems like when that happens there just so happens to be something I've picked out of the writings is exactly what I needed to read. This inspired me to take up some painting and fix my beautiful front porch up to sit on during the summer nights as the Bob White whistles back at me. I would like you to read something I wrote about sitting on the front porch. I will send you a link.



How it made me feel: Of times gone by at a slower pace. I left Detroit the day I graduated to move to the south to sit on the front porch and get used to the slower pace of life. Needless to say I think Detroit followed me here.



Content: Wonderful. When something sparks memories of the past it makes people happy. That's good writing. Have you read, Cold Sassy Tree?


Mistakes: None at all---great work.



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review of HATRED  
Review by Being Diane
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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What made me what to review this piece: I was checking out the newsletter and came across this and it is a controverial topic. I have heard some of the most hateful things said of gays and my psychairtrist is gay. He saved my life many times and in my opinion he should have been given the same rightso as married people. If God is love we are suppose to show our love for them as well as others. I believe everyone is praying to the same God they just don't k!now it



How it made me feel:
Very sad and angry also because a lot this bulleying is caused by this and no one deserves it.


Content: Great


Mistakes:none



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review by Being Diane
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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What made me what to review this piece: I really wasn't looking for something to read and came across the newsletter and what to my surprise while I in my nightgo. wn and my husband in his herchief...not reindeers but a wonderful short story about the dying of the muse. This my dear is what I call talent--it read so smoothly nothing about it was amature.



How it made me feel: I had all five senses touched in this story. I loved it.



Content: Great, some surprises.


Mistakes:
None. Keep writing


Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review by Being Diane
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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What made me what to review this piece: I read the othher one and was really impressed. I really think this would make a good book. I would change the over prayer in the second sentence to about prayer or prayer about. Just something simple.

How it made me feel: Good!



Content: Great. I'm ready to read more!


Mistakes: None that I saw.



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review by Being Diane
Rated: E | (5.0)
Are we still going on strong? I've been out of the loop a long time. If I don't get my membership upgraded by June 15....I won't be around. I've been sick and lost my family with cancer within about 6 years. I was the only child, only grandchild, and only niece. I am so lonesome on Sundays. It was my day to visit and give a sunday school lesson.
Diane
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Review of Mother  
Review by Being Diane
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE NEWBIE REVIEWE...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved this! It hasn't been that long since I lost my Mother and this is such a great tribute to Mother's everywhere. Was your Mother able to read this? If so I know she was so proud.
We all think we were right when we were younger and now that we know the truth it becomes kind of funny. My daughter didn't believe in spanking until she became a nanny. She was a very strong-willed child--she told me the other day she would have spanked her everyday if she would have been me.
Keep writing.
Diane
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Review by Being Diane
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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What made me what to review this piece: Of course what usually drives me to read a piece of literature is the title. This one you chose is a good one. The first paragraph held me. I did see a few unnecessary words. Also, like I usually do is use too many commas instead of using short sentences which give your writing a little more precise. Like I

Micheal Warwick was irritable. His day had begun well enough; a light breakfast in the lounge followed by the visitation of a few business acquaintances. He decided to retire to his study. He began going over some necessary papers and calculations. Rifling through a stack of letters, a certain name had caught his attention, and it made a stinking feeling in his throat. He was having a hard time collecting his thoughts which irritated him.

How it made me feel:
Very interested in reading chapter's 1 and 3. The reason for liking it is the simplicity of this man's feelings. You are giving great ideas for a character I want to know more about. I love it when people don't bring alot of characters out right in the beginning of a writing. Good job.


Content: Very good.


Mistakes: Just small ideas in different books which have helped me in my writing. On Writing by Stephen King, How to write a novel in 90 days, I use these with my writings and more. I buy them on eBay and they really help and don't cost much.



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review of Thoughtful Donors  
Review by Being Diane
In affiliation with 30-Day Bloggers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Of course with what I've been through I have to share my points. When I was so down on my luck and I didn't have money for points or time to let my feelings out she help. Strange thing about writing.com I was on here first and she has done leaps and bounds in place of me. I think it's her ability to think outside herself and she forgives others who has hurt her. I'm trying to do this through books. I know when she believes in a group it is well worth giving to so I'm going to do the same. Karma has come to me a million times through this tough life and it always will. This points are dedicated in Gabreilla's life. She would remember be as bediane. Always reminded me to be myself.
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Review of Life (1st poem!)  
Review by Being Diane
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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What made me what to review this piece:
I wanted to see what someone else this ought of the pain of life.. It is so depressing sometimes.


How it made me feel: Very sad because it is so real. I try to think happier thoughts but it's hard when you are depressed.



Content: Great cause win I thought it was going to be over you added other things.


Mistakes: None that I saw.



Don't be discouraged remember writing is about re-writing again and again.
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Review by Being Diane
In affiliation with The Brainstormers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
When will we know for the month of May? This sounds good especially the one about the characters. Seems like it would contain more freedom like a diary, journal, and Blogging. I know Wally Lamb one of my favorite writers does his writing stricky on character development other than plot and other things.
I still look at this as a challenge.
Diane
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Review of Without Time  
Review by Being Diane
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is really great and I am happy you put so much in such few words. I think I need some help with that because, well, being in the south people usually take a long time to say something. It's great you won the prize also. I'm getting back in to writing.com cause I''ve found out if I don't I won't write and writing is my passion.
Diane
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Review by Being Diane
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Should I start in May or start now? I don't know exactly how it works but I'm ready to read and learn.
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